"Let's go bother Snape!"
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As I hope everyone here does, I love Harry Potter! One of my favorite things has got to be the romances tied into them.
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My favorite characters have to be Ginny and Fred and George. Their exit was so sweet during the fifth book!
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I am an 18 year old girl from Illinois. Not very exciting here. University to study to become a teacher.
awsome story! i can't wait to see it develope more. it's interesting how you've incorporated both worlds, magic and muggle
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're diggin' the reality meets fiction kind of concept. When I first started writing this story, I was afraid ppl wouldn't be into it.
very cute! i really liked how you used the time when harry was in the prefects bath room trying to figure out the egg and used it to show what ron and hermione were doing. though, a bit sadly, it's not true. good fic!
i'm really liking your story so far! i love how you've added a bit of Draco in there too, it's a good twist. i hope to see more of him! keep up the great work and i look forward to the update
awsome story! i love how you use Ginny's point of view and incorporate the diary entries in it too. i can't wait for the next update!
that was an awsome short story! i've never read one like that, it was so clever!
nice story! i really liked how it was in Harry's point of view. you did a great job of not jumping straight into the snogging, some one-shot romance stories tend to that. i loved how Harry and Hermione when on the broomride, that was so sweet. great job!
Author's Response: Thanks so much Jaislin! I hope you continue to like my other stuff! :0)
nice story! i really liked how it was in Harry's point of view. you did a great job of not jumping straight into the snogging, some one-shot romance stories tend to that. i loved how Harry and Hermione when on the broomride, that was so sweet. great job!
great start! i can't wait to find out what happens. man, i hope voldemort doesn't come and get hermione on holiday or something, that would be awful! if you like, check out my story, it's a harry/hermione romance too, entitled "it was a hogsmeade weekend".
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm trying to upload the second chapter but am having problems with the site. I'll try to have it up soon!
I will read your story... I've seen it up and am curious, it sounds good! ... Thanks!
Good start so far, though there are a few suggestions I have: for the dream part, you might want to think about puting it in italics. There are also a few grammer mistakes. If you like, I could edit it for you. If you want to take me up on that offer, just contact me under my auther page thingy.
Otherwise, you have a really good begining, I hope you update soon.
Author's Response: i sure would but i dont know how to italizize i now very stupid but i cant help it!!! the second chapter should be coming there unless they rejected it. thanks contact me again bye!!
what do you mean you're finished posting on this site!? Am I still supposed to continue editing for you? Let me know what's happening, you know my email.
Author's Response: I sent you an email, with an explanination.
Great story! I really enjoyed reading it, you have a talent for writing. It was a bit cliche, but there's nothing you can do about that. I really liked how you didn't have them in love right away, how it all eventually led up to it. Though it was lacking the Harry and Ron factor, I would have liked to read some more about them and what all they think. Over all, an awsome story and I loved reading it!
Hay! I'm so happy you decided to add your fic to this site, I know you'll end up getting awsome reviews for it (and lots of them!)! You still need to tell me about chbc! and i'm not waiting until forever! lol, good luck with the story ;)
Author's Response: hehe, thanks hun! :-) i'll definitely tell you about chbc REALLY REALLY soon... i need to finish up my slideshow with the pics that i FINALLY got... *sighes in happiness* ooh, they're awesome. maybe we'll ditch you-know-what again on Sunday and hang and talk... hmmm... i'll bring the pics for sure, one way or the other. cya sunday! ~K
Good start so far, though there are a few things I would like to point out.
Be careful of your paragraphs. There are some that are spaced differently from others, and then there are some that should be spaced but aren't.
Also, watch out where you put commons, there are a few places I noticed that should have one, and others that shouldn't.
One more thing, I saw that you had paragraphs that were just kind of there, and weren't needed.
You can contact me from my contact link if you have any questions. Other then that, I think this story has definate potential, and I can't wait to see where it goes! -Jaislin
Author's Response: Thanks, I noticed that my paragraphs are a complete mess. I was just in such a hurry to get it on here..... ; ) Thanks for reviewing; and keep checking back. My first 3 chapters or so are rubbish, but me and my friend wrote the middle like a year ago. In my opinion, when you get there it's pretty sweet! P.S. Thanks for pointing out things. I really enjoy reading ideas and suggestions.