Ohhhhh so sad! But so lovely, it feels like there is hope for them both.
This chapter is AMAZING! I love the detail of the description of Hermione and Snape together, it's so emotive and really well written, I love it!!
Ooooooooh I love the tension between Hermione and Snape!!! Brilliant! Big bunch of get well flowers for Stormy.
Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh! I know I've already left a review, but I CAN'T HELP IT!!!!! I LOVED it when Snape said 'Don’t be coy.' Oooooooh!!! It made me shiver! And that pygmy puff bit was hilarious! I love the way you've kept Snape so much in character. His comment “Forgive me for not caring to make up part of that parade” was brilliant! Ahhhhhh
Ohhh how lovely! I enjoyed this story so much - you wrote it beautifully! I can't believe it's over! Wonderful job! Your writing is such a joy to read. A few minor typos in the last chapter:
'chatting with them and watching at Severus completed the last of his duty dances'
(i think it should be 'as' not 'at')
'knowing that he had never imagined begin able to say those words aloud'
(it should be 'being')
I loved it when Severus called Hermione Mrs Snape! It was so sweet!
And this bit was wonderful:
“Will you have me as your apprentice?” she asked him.
“In every way you can imagine,” he agreed with a devilish quirk of his lips. Oooooooooooohhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!
This was such an amazing story. You deserve a well-earned break!!
Author's Response: Thanks for catching the typos, my dear; I will correct them. This chapter was actually proofed by four people other than me -- you\'d think we would catch them! I\'m so pleased that you liked the story so much. Thank you for your loyal reading and reviewing.
I loved this chapter and I’m so glad Snape has finally decided to go after Hermione!!
Just a few wee typos.
About a quarter of the way through the chapter, when Hermione was smelling his robes:
‘…she lifted them to her face, breathing deeply of his musky scent.’ (The ‘of’ sounds a bit strange).
And three quarters of the way through the chapter:
‘As Snape regained strength, his mind turned one again to his duties.’ (Did you mean ‘once’ again).
I loved the whole Tonks/Lupin situation! This bit was hilarious:
‘Tonks snorted incredulously. “What Time Turner took you into the Dark Ages, Severus? I don’t know anyone who wants a ‘functional marriage,’ do you?”
Hahahahaaaaa!! I’m glad she stood up to him!!
Just before the end of the chapter, you wrote:
‘Dear God.
What a cursed fool he had been.’
It would have been BRILLIANT if you finished the chapter with these two sentences because it’s a dramatic ending, and because the build up to these two sentences was AMAZING! Also, it seems a bit like Severus decides a little too quickly after this revelation that ‘there were many instructions to be given — there was no more time to waste.’
Great chapter though, it was so well written. And I loved the way you’ve made Hermione so protective of Severus!! Lovely!! Excellent job :o) xxxxxxxxxxx
I love how this story is going.....please please please bring Snape back sooooooon!! I cant' wait for him and Hermione to meet again! I wish you and your husband all the best, I really do hope he is recovering well :)
Author's Response: Hi, qwerty! I think the next meeting between Snape and Hermione will be an emotional one, but it may be in Chapter 20, rather than19. I\'ll make it worth your while, I promise! Hubby is much better; thank you for your kind thoughts.
Wow! That was wonderful! This bit was hilarious:
'The only sensible course of action seemed to be to kiss her again.'
Your Snape is so incredibly sexy. That kiss was amazing. Lucky Hermione.
I did feel quite sorry for Fleur - I think Snape did take her for a bit of a ride. Maybe Fleur and Percy end up together?
Wonderful chapter, I couldn't stop reading.
Author's Response: What a lovely review, Qwerty! Thank you for taking the time to leave your comments. I am SO glad that you liked the line about kissing her again -- and I can never hear enough times that my Snape is incredibly sexy. Bless you!
this is great!! i loved master of enchantment too, I really like how you set the scene, and the personalities of the characters really come through in your writing. I think it's hilarious how everyone keeps inquiring about Snape's sisters!! Brilliant!! Hehehhheeee
This bit was hilarious:
'....the Pygmy Puff held out from his body on the bunny slippers like some sort of bizarre offering.'
Hahahaaaaaaa!! I can imagine Snape doing that!!
It's really clever how you bring in themes from past chapters, like the slippers, pygmy puff, and Neville's worries about meeting Pansy's parents!
I love how Snape's character is developing, and how sweet he is with Stormy! Aww! My favourite line of this chapter was from his flashback with Ted Tonks: '.........tried to imagine loving someone enough to be thinking of nothing else at the moment of death.'
Author's Response: I really liked that bit about Snape and Tonks\' dad, too. Thank you for your somments.
Oh lovely! I adored this bit:
“Will you be Skye’s and Shadow’s and Severus’ dad, too?”
Hahahahaaaa! I'd love to see Severus' face if he was told that Sirius was going to be his new Daddy!!
OOOOOH it gets better and better!
Ohhhhh that last thing Severus said to Hermione made me shudder with longing! He is so incredibly sexy and should definitely come with a health warning. I love the HermioneSeverus build up!!!!
Excellent! I know I've said this before, but it's brilliant how everyone keeps asking after Snape's sisters!! This bit was hilarious:
'Blooming, Minerva, thank you.' !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
OOOOOOOOOOOH fantastic argument between Snape and Hermione!! Your Snape is brilliant
This chapter was excellent. I adored every word of it!! I love the way you’ve kept Snape so much in character. I really enjoyed the way Snape returned Hermione’s comment with “I am no judge of such matters, Sophronia.”
Since reading your story, I am now completely in love with Severus Snape and would like you to arrange for him to stop being a fictional character and become REAL!!!! Then give him my phone number. Thank you.
This bit at the end was hilarious:
1) South Sea Pearl bracelet with platinum clasp: 420 Galleons
(2) Freshwater Pearl bracelet with gold clasp: 10 Galleons
(3) Pissing off one's shrewish and greedy fiancée, causing her to cause a scene in a public place: priceless
Some things money can buy. For everything else, there's Severus Snape.
Hahahahahhhahhahhahahhahhahahaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!
I loved the Sophie and Sirius bit, it was SO well written :o) Oh dear, now I fancy Sirius too….
I can’t wait to see what happens between Snape and Hermione, it’s going to be BRILLIANT!!!!!!
I can’t believe the pace at which you’re updating this, it’s incredible!!! You’ve done an amazing job. Roll on chapter 26!!!!!!!!
This chapter was excellent. I adored every word of it!! I love the way you’ve kept Snape so much in character. I really enjoyed the way Snape returned Hermione’s comment with “I am no judge of such matters, Sophronia.”
Since reading your story, I am now completely in love with Severus Snape and would like you to arrange for him to stop being a fictional character and become REAL!!!! Then give him my phone number. Thank you.
This bit at the end was hilarious:
1) South Sea Pearl bracelet with platinum clasp: 420 Galleons
(2) Freshwater Pearl bracelet with gold clasp: 10 Galleons
(3) Pissing off one's shrewish and greedy fiancée, causing her to cause a scene in a public place: priceless
Some things money can buy. For everything else, there's Severus Snape.
Hahahahahhhahhahhahahhahhahahaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!
I loved the Sophie and Sirius bit, it was SO well written :o) Oh dear, now I fancy Sirius too….
I can’t wait to see what happens between Snape and Hermione, it’s going to be BRILLIANT!!!!!!
I can’t believe the pace at which you’re updating this, it’s incredible!!! You’ve done an amazing job. Roll on chapter 26!!!!!!!!
No way, I prefer it when there's more narrative than dialogue because it really builds up the emotion in the scene. I really liked how long it took for Harry to kiss Ginny, great build up, great story, LOVED it!!!
Author's Response: Awww thank you! :D:D Glad you enjoyed! XX