writing my own story. It's taking forever. I also like to read what others write.
Didn't see that coming. Good chapter.
chapter well done.
You have Snape behaving ambigiously. (one could argue that in his own way he did warn Lupin). Not to mention that you have set up a good mystery.
I found it amusing that most of the people with Remus suddenly 'forgot' he was a werewolf.
Teaser chapter. must have more. 2nd to the last line is cute!
nice to see a big family. As far as Rebekah being related to Lupin, it does offer her additional reasons as to why she hates/or is ambivalant to werewolves.
Hi, Just discovered your new story. Excellant.
I'm impressed. Though I am wondering if Cymone's twitchiness indicates a particular Death Eater.
yes, very sad and tragic beginning. Now waiting for next chapter.
I'm glad you didnt have them find the marauders map. What they did find seems interesting enough. good fun chapter.
My 2 knuts would be put all 7 years into one story mainly because I would guess that people would still need to read year one before reading year 2.
There's only 2reasons why you might want to consider dividing it by year. Reason #1--each year would be a substantially different story each with its own plot and resolution (in addition to an overall plot of the series). The impression I'm getting is that some of the different things that you introduced (like the secret room behind Dumbledores) aren't going to be significant until later years. Reason # 2 would be that you need to take a break from this story and write something else. I think Mugglenet's rules are only one story at a time.
But if you do decide to break it up Im sure I'll have no trouble finging the story.
Author's Response: They wouldn\'t find that anyway. The map is with Fred and George. I have already decided on making it 7. It would be way toooo long for one story. I\'ll just tell people that they need to read 1 before reading 2. Well, this is my main story. I\'ve done one-shots on the side, but this is the one I really care about. You shouldn\'t have trouble finding it.It\'ll be in the AU category, and I will probably add a link to the 2nd story from the first at the end of chaper 33. ~Sara
interesting mystery about the box and the presence of someone that Harry can't see and why is Hedwig so interested in chomping on his fingers.
Author's Response: Err...there is no reason why Hedwig was chomping at Harry\'s fingers. And there was no person, it was just Harry\'s nerves getting the better of him. Thanks! ~Sara
good chapter.
Author's Response: thanks!
fascinating chapter. the description of what Harry saw in the mirror was confusing. I take it to mean that Harry saw his blurry parents for a while the the image would change to powerful Harry who would smirk back at him. That he wouldn't see the two images at the same time. Had to actually look up the meaning of res ipsa loquitor. The thing is not so evident to me. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, that\'s what happened and what he saw. Sorry if it was confusing. I didn\'t want it to be. I\'m glad you understood it. And thank you very much! ~Sara
Goyle?
Author's Response: nope.
my 2cents about animagisus. I thin they can be repeated in that two people could be cats. The just wouldn't like the same. Mcgonagall has markings aroun the eyes like her glasses. Another person could be a different colored cat altogether.
Author's Response: That is very true. But I\'m still going with the wolf and fox. You made a good point.
I find it interesting that Harry didn't see the letters that say this is the mirror of Erised.
Dumbledore's question "Is there anything you wish to tell me about the mirror" seems misplaced. Harry has pretty much told Dumbledore everything he saw in the mirror. Dumbledore should have figured it out (even if I couldn't) that Harry has conflicting desires about what he truly wants. I find it odd that Dumbledore doesn't explain this to Harry.
Author's Response: How would Dumbledore know what Harry sees in the mirror? Yes, the parents would be obvious, but it could be different. Dumbledore is allowed to be curous himself about what his students sees in the mirror, so he asked politely about it and got answers. You make a good point about Dumbledore not explaining the conflicting ideas to Harry, and I think I\'ll go back and re-work that into the last chapter of year 1. Thank you for your input!! It really has been helpful! ~Sara
fascinating chapter, leaving more questions than answers. Like what is the purpose of the room? It can't be to guard secrets as Harry had no problem finding out Lucius'. Or is Harry's discovery unusual?
Also, to be nitpicky, Bella shouldn't have sunken eyes as that was a result of her years of Azkaban. Sirius' eyes were described in a similiar way.
Author's Response: thank you!! it was just a fun addition to the story. but Harry will be back to the room over the years, probably finding out more information. i just thought she already had dark, sunken eyes. but that\'s a good point. i nevver thought of that. ~Sara
good interaction between Harry and Snape. Accomplishes your goals and also makes reader wonder why Snape isn't criticizing the other students after he talks to Harry.
Author's Response: thank you very much!!
Am with your imagination of magical objects. Ilico Res sounds like canon. I have no problem with Snape appearing to much.
Author's Response: that\'s good. i think Snape is a really interesting character. Thank you sooooo much!!! ~Sara
What was I typing? What I was trying to say is that I like your imagination in coming up with original spells.
Author's Response: thank you!!