cool story! there's not really much i can say except... i like it!! update soon, please?!

Author's Response: HI! I'll try to update faster! Thanx for R&Ring!

Well, that's a twist! The vampire, I mean...
Anyway, before I review I wanted to apologize for all that double-posting. I was reading through past reviews and realized that I had double-posted quite a lot. I assure you, it was an accident... Oh and speaking of it, cool I didn't know that in Scottland they used that grammatical form more, but obviously it's fine and normal that you use it so often then, so just ignore my earlier comment!
Okay, onto reviewing... I like Remus "baptism of blood" and how he realizes he can't empathize with everyone, even if they are sort of like him. As usual, this chapter was great! I like how Voldemort's terror really shines through, as does Remus's feelings of inadequecy and guilt at recieving pay, and being a werewolf in general!

Author's Response: Dear Valentinia, Thanks for another great review. Isn\'t it funny how we don\'t feel sorry for the vampires? Although, of course, you met a reasonably sympathetic one in chapter 9, and she will in fact return to the story in the far future. I\'m afraid Remus will never deal with his feelings of inadequacy - and Voldemort is enough to make anyone feel inadequate! Most people can accept that, but Remus is an Arian at heart, and he pays the Arian price. Thank you for all your support, GhV

The seeds of suspicion have been sown! Poor Remus! I like how you include the fact that they suspected him, and how it seems natural from Remus' point of view! I really like it! Also, the reference to the McKinnons is great for people like me who are picky about times, but too lazy to scroll back to the top of the page to check the date! Wonderful chapter!
And yet again, Mary Ellis, it seems you have helped significantly in the writing of thsi chapter, so good job and bravo! I don't know what you helped with specifically, but I enjoyed the whole chapter, so rest assured that I appreciate your contribution!
I'm off to read the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks, Valentinia! There had to be SOME reason why they suspected Remus, didn\'t there? Mary contributed the idea that Remus should at least toy with the idea of exploiting his condition. They are at war, and it must have been a real temptation. See you in the next, GhV

Wow. I love how everyone trusts Peter - why wouldn't they, after all? - when it's been him all along! Poor Remus, too! I like how so many order members are mentioned. It really gives the story a "place" in the canon universe - and, realistically, of course, it could be exactly what happened in Remus' past in canon! I really liked this chapter, as a whole, anyway!
And, as usual, congrats to Mary Ellis and everyone else who helped/inspired this story in any way! This is really a great story!

Author's Response: Dear Valentinia, Thank you so much! One day I\'ll write a Sirius/Dorcas story, but for now you\'ll have to settle for Sirius/Motorbike. Peter is a rat, but it isn\'t going to become much worse before it starts becoming better... Regards, GhV

And we're caught up! I can't wait to find out what happens next! I really liked this chapter! It's so good how Remus never suspects Peter - I hate it when he does, but without there being any reason. Just some ridiculous intuition...
Also, Remus having to relive his memories was very sad, but realistic. It makes sense how he would be plagued by sadness and despair and guilt! Poor guy!
As usual, this chapter was wonderfully written - the reader could really feel Remus' pain!

Author's Response: Dear V, I don\'t plan to give Remus twelve years of unrelenting drear, because that would be out of character, but I do think there were some good reasons why he felt he was an outcast for \"almost the whole\" of his adult life. This is the nadir; I\'ve tried to inject some hope into the last few chapters. Thank you for your input, GhV

How can this be the second to last chapter...? I don't want it to end!
But this was a good chapter. I really like how Ariadne's "gift" to read people is developing and becoming more obvious. Snape is wonderfully IC (I'm not sure if I've mentioned it before...) as is Remus, and all other canon characters really. I like how he sent her the model. Very considerate. Really shows the real Remus!
Great chapter!

Author's Response: Dear V, It is so easy to write Snape. I just appeal to my own inner Severus, with shameful facility. And of course Remus would send a present to the first person in months to treat him kindly. He has nothing else to do, after all. It\'s so nice of you not to want the story to end, but we are racing to the logical conclusion. GhV

What an interesting character Ariadne MacDougal seems to be! And Remus's character is very good, too, and IC! Poor guy, not allowed to follow his heart and teach!
It's a bit odd, how Ariadne and her mother use the whatever-it's-called form of "we're needing" instead of "we need" (as an example) but if it's part of their characters, it really is interesting. If not, I don't think it's a big deal, anyway!
This is a great chapter, and I'm sure the rest of the story will be just as great! So, let me just settle back and read it!

Author's Response: Dear Valentinia, Remus won\'t be teaching during this story. The job market isn\'t too friendly to werewolves. To answer your grammatical question, it is considered correct in Scotland to express modal verbs in the continuous tenses. When you think about it, this is logical. Thanks for taking the trouble to review. There is more of Ariadne to follow. Regards, GhV

Poor Lupin!
But before I comment on this chapter, I would like to point out my diappointment at there not being any "playing house" at all last chapter! *kidding...*
Anyway... great chapter!! I like all of the different characters and how they all fit together and are part of the story in some way, and don't seem unneccessary at all! Plus, Remus is very IC! I hope the trasformation goes ok!
One question... (though I guess this might be cleared up later on...) How old is Remus? And is Harry born yet?
That's all, and a great chapter! Off to read the next!

Author's Response: Dear V, I\'m glad you don\'t think there were unnecessary characters. I had to invite someone to that party, and I like to use canon characters where possible. Remus is now 23 (he was born March 1959) and Harry is two (he was born July 1980). I care about chronology too - I tear my hair out over JKR\'s arithmetic! However, she has never contradicted herself concerning the dates when MWPP were born - it was definitely between September 1958 and August 1959. As to whether the transformation will go well, you\'ll have to wait until chapter 17 to find out. No playing house? They were BUILDING a parlour!! Thanks for your input, GhV

Well, I sure like the Macmillans more too! I agree with the child-raising being... questionable at best... poor Ariadne! It must be awful... everyone so polite... I'd most definately rather be yelled at once in a while!
The characters are developing wonderfully (or rather, their character is being revealed to the reader - they haven't really changed... yet...).
Your portrayal of how Voldemort's name became so taboo is great, too! Can't wait to read the next chapter!

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I love that, like all pureblood families they had a house they expected her to be in, but it was Hufflepuff, not Slytherin! Such a small detail, but such a clever twist!
I also like all the new characters, as well as seeing a few canon characters (like Kinglsey!) I wonder when we'll get back to the present, but I really like the way you've written this backstory of both Remus and Ariadne! Great chapter!
By the way, I think I've figured it out! Ariadne is 16 in the story and Reums is 23, right? :D *yeah... I'm obsessive...*
I hope these reviews don't count as spam, cause I'm really enjoying reading this story and I'd feel really guilty if I didn't give you a review for each brilliant chapter!

Author's Response: Dear V, No, DEFINITELY not spam, because you think of something new to say in each review. I think the mods\' notice concerned people who wrote things that had nothing to do with the story, i.e. there was no evidence they had even read it. I had bad spam last year, with about 50 advertisements from real estate agents, pharmacists and gambling centres. We don\'t know how these people invaded the Harry Potter archives, but it\'s a horrible abuse of the system. I think several of the old families were associated with particular houses - I suspect the Brocklehursts always were in Raveclaw, while the Cornfoots are exclusive to Hufflepuff. Among Ariadne\'s classmates there is one other canon character (in addition to Kingsley) and one who might loosely be considered canon. You will also see four canon adults who serve (brief!) time as DADA teachers. Thanks for your input, GHV