Well, after a long hiatus, and a lot of life changes I'm back.
I've got one story for sure and possibly more. We'll just see how it goes.
Actually, mugglenet has been taken over by moderators drunk on their own power. Look for me on fanfiction.net under the penname: Sorcerer's Muse. I will be reposting all current stories there as well as any new work.
Elle
There was a lot in this chapter. The guilt over Hesita's death was good. The confrontation with Cho, in both cases, was well done. I get the feeling that the misconception of Harry and Ginny dating will never be corrected. Your Harry and Ginny are perfect together so far, here is hoping that nothing messes them up. What am I saying, no doubt Ginny will be used against him some how, some way.
Finally, he tells the truth. The reactions from all of them were good. Ginny's anger was the best, so many people have her running off to hide, bawling her eyes out. I think she is to strong for that. A point of info for you regarding Hermione. Her birthday is Sept 19th, this is from JKR's offical site. She has also stated, in interviews, and I believe it is on her site that Hermione was almost 12 when she started at Hogwarts. As this is year 6 for her she is now 17 and is of age in the wizarding world. If she wanted too stay, I don't believe her parents would have any way of pulling her out of Hogwarts
Wow, I really like how you had him confessing to Ginny about the possession and asking about Voldemort possessing her. I really am amazed at how much effort and detail you have put into this. I was hooked on chapter one, and now I have to say this is the best fanfic I have ever read.
This was really cool. I think the best thing you did with this chapter was give us some insight into Ron Weasley's mind. That he knows what is going on with Harry is great. I can't wait to see if he starts to needle Harry about it the way Harry did occasionaly about Ron and Hermione.
Bummer, you should have let Neville win. The only better fight would have been Hermione vs. Draco, of course we've seen how that turns out, the girl has a hell of a fight hook. Glad to see Remus is ok. Big mistake by Harry letting Draco know about his efforts as a Legilimens
Ok, Ive done nothing but complement you the whole time, so now I have a question or slight critizisim. Dumbledore has encouraged Harry to share the prophecy with his friends, and must be aware of their loyalty to Harry. I would think he would realize just how much danger they are in and would want to give them a few special lessons also. Maybe you address that later in your story. I'll keep reading to findout.
Perfect, "I've been underestimated before." That has to be one of the best lines I've ever read in any story, not just a fanfic. You just had to know something was going to happen at Diagon Alley. Truthfuly I'm surprised Dumbledore let them go. At the same time, how do you harness teenagers?
I agree, Ginny just won't stand for being pushed away. That conversation in the common room was pretty intense, I thought someone was going to spill more than they should. I do have to ask, how long is it going to take for someone to realize that Draco is like a direct pipeline to his father?
I really liked this chapter a lot. It is good to see that someone else knows the prophecy and that Harry talked to him. I guess I might have thought Lupin would hug Harry in the RoR. He seemed really close to Harry in book three, but maybe I have some of the third movie and third book confused
Again a great chapter. Interesting that you have slitherins in the DA club. Though not surprising since you opened it to the whole school. Draco would go for any number of reasons. To spy would be just one of them
Ginny is absolutly viscious with the way she keeps people in line. Shutting Hermione down like that so quickly was great. I hate to see what Voldemort has done now. can't wait to read your next chapter
That was a good chapter, ron's quip about Harry not needing to go to the hospital after a match was great. The concept that you can't use a replacement player in a match might be wrong. I remeber in one of the books, a few lines about a match that went on for months and they had to keep bringing in replacements. but who reallly knows what the rules are. Personally, I think way to much empahsis is on the Seekers. It is supposed to be a team sport, and in all reality, the rest of the players never have any kind of effect on the final out come.
Wow, we got all the way through a Holiday without an attack. I almost wonder if Voldemort didn't do something on purpose. Perhaps not try to make contact with Harry in order to get him to let his guard down. Any ways great chapter. Hermione joining in on ribbing Harry about his bum was pretty funny.
Groan, why the bleep would he not go to Dumbledore. didn't learn anything from the Ministry, nor did Ginny, nor did Ron. To bad they didn't talk to Hermione. Of course Ginny will now and some kind of a rescue will come. Are you building to the end battle here? Don't think so because the old magic spells have yet to be figured out. Well on to the next chapter
That is a brutal captivity scene. With Harry. I really like the way you use Sirius in the dream sequences. Somehow, I don't think Snape is evil even though he is cursing Harry right now. I guess I will find out pretty quick
Harry fought Voldemort and hurt him excellent. Unfortunately he no know the prophecy, and that Harry can hurt him. That means if he is smart, that he will not underestimate the power Harry has again. Draco is dead, and I have to say it is deserved in this story. I'm not sure if you have Ron's reaction to that death right or not. I honestly think Ron would be capabable of killing Draco without blinking after this last week. Any way's, I am on to your next chapter
A great job with Harry's recovery. The idea that his body is drained of it's Magical reserves is interesting. That he took Voldemort down that low also is amazing. And Two Malfoys dead is great. Unfortunately the one left is the mother, and if she is anything like Molly Weasley, she is going to be beyond viscious
I really like this chapter. We see Ron, gently caring for Ginny, by mentioning the broom situation to his parents. Ginny's utter awe at the broom is magnificent. You have done this a number of times so far, give us an insight into Harry's childhood neglect. Not playing sports or anything like that. This was a few chapters back, but the idea that he hopped to go back to the Hospital as a child so he would get a little attention speaks volumes as to what your vision of his childhood was like. I have spent more than my share of time as a paitent in the hosptial, and I can tell you that no matter how much the nurses like you, and make a special effort for you that in an eight hour shift they will get no more than 20-30 minutes to spend with you. They are just to busy. So, that was an excellent example to use.
Don't worry about the underage drinking. I think that it has to be in the story somewhere, and I'll be surprised if JKR dosn't use it somewhere. Having Harry admit his crush, now that I did not expect you to do in this manner. An excellent use of the twins, there is now doubt the twins would spike the punch
The best moment of this chapter is Harry and Snape. I'm having a hard time with Dumbledore somewhat honoring Draco. War is war, people die during it and no matter what side you are on, you feel your actions are justified. That is not to say Ron would not be affected by having killed Draco, he would. However, the thought that the Order/Ministry/and even the DA should try to be above the other side while extremely noble is, not always going to work. It is possible to fight with honor. Let your opponent surrender if he or she will. But those three groups are fighting for the survival of the world as they know it. They would and should kill whenever neccessary. I think that is the one thing you did with Lupin that was great. He knew going into that battle he would kill Wormtail and he did. The rest of the (good) side needs to fight like that too, or they will lose, even if Harry defeats Voldemort. The one thing I can't figure out in JKR's writing or anyone else who has written a fan fic is why, unless under specific orders not to kill someone by Voldemort, any Death Eater would use any curse other that Avada Kadavera in a fight. I guess I'll finish by saying this is another great chapter.