All right, just for the fun of it, here is a little bit about me. Yes, I write HP stories. I do this as a bit of a break while I work on my own fiction. Yes, I think that J.K. Rowling rocks! To put it mildly. And thank you, Ms. Rowling, for letting me play with you toys!
Actually, I don't write YA on my own, which is part of what makes this so fun. It's a diversion, when I don't have to worry about what my characters are doing. Need a cure for writer's block? Borrow some vividly created characters, and plot with plenty of room for footwark!
In my spare time, I'm a starving artist. Once upon a time I ran, played basketball and tennis, and generally had a life. Oh, to have dreams! No, I'm not married, nor do I have any kids. Speaking of elusive dreams...ah well.
Thanks for dropping by, and my best wishes!
LOL! This explains a lot!:
You scored as Sirius. You are most like Sirius! You are generally nice and loyal to those you love.
Sirius 92%
Hermione 58%
Harry 58%
You-Know-Who 33%
Ron 25%
What Harry Potter Character are you
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rotfl! Yes, I liked it! Especially the end--"Not for long!"
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I\'m so glad you liked it! I had a lot of fun with it, especially the end. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
This one begs to be continued. What "mistake" are Fred and George going to assist Hermione into having?
Author's Response: Ooo! Thank you so much for the review! I\'m working on the next chapter right now! I really appreciate your support! Thanks! *rushes to work on next chappie* ~Chloe
LOL!
Author's Response: Well I like to think so.
I almost missed the tie back to "home'. For a while I had thought that Harry was thinking about Hogwarts. Nicely written.
Author's Response: Thanks :) I\'m glad you liked the fic :)
Chris
Yeesh! I'm shaking my head. One er...'Jabberwock' banished! LOL! Thanks!!!
Author's Response: Hehe. Glad you enjoyed the story, and thank you for taking the time to review :)
Chris
Very nicely written. But could you expand the post nightmare past a bit, please?
Author's Response: Well, there\'s still two more chapters to go, as this is a three-part fic. So there\'s still more to come in the way of romance and pain over George\'s death, et cetera. All of that will be after the nightmare/battle. Thanks for the review!!=)
--RP
I dunno about oblivion, but Myrtle definitely didn't want to pass on. This is very well written. Thank you!I look forward to more!
*And you call yourself not an interesting person...:)
Author's Response: yes I do. for a very good reason.....I\'m not.
Thanks!
Yes, I'm glad that I went back to reread. Just what was in that cervice? Hmmm....
Author's Response: It was an idea I was going to originally put it, then changed my mind, then changed it back =) I\'m glad I\'ve got you thinking. Thanks for reading the revision!
All right...
I think you wanted "wracked with sobs."
You might also want to use..."her British Mother"...and "French father"...it might flow better.
Also, "was of small stature" might be the proper phrase.
You are continuing to do a very nice job with this story. :)
So...Dumbledore and McGonagall know who 'Everett' is?
Author's Response: Thanks for the word clarification =) . I wrote the sentence talking about Sohpia\'s parents the way I did on purpose. It\'s supposed to be read kind of choppy, kind of humorous and thoughtful, but maybe that\'s just me =) . I\'m so glad you still like my story! You\'ve followed it with me =D As for your question...the answer is too complicated, haha =) Keep working on it.
Nice way to tie things together. Thank you!
Author's Response: Welcome! =)
I wanted to add that the photo of Dumbledore's Army was an extremely nice touch. It made me smile--and wonder just where some of those members are now.
By the way, the first half dozen reviews for this chapter might count as "review spam", and both the author and reviewers could get into trouble. Thought you would want to know--see the front MNFF page.
Author's Response: I saw that, but a couple were chapter previews from my editors, and there were only about two or three spam, so I don\'t think it\'s that big a deal. But thanks anyway! And I liked the picture touch too =)
I hope that you're encouraged. I really want to see how this comes out! Nice writing!
Author's Response: i hope you see how it comes out too =)
Corundum = Ruby. Nice. What pun? I stared at the sentence for five minutes. Only thing I could think of was "We're not in Kansas..." and that didn't fit.
I like it. You might want to eventually flesh out the detail of their time in the mer-village, the cave, and the trip to the surface. And I'm still curious just exacly what you're going to do with Draco. In anger, suddenly getting his memories (and old personality) back?
Thank you!
Author's Response: Haha I\'ve been meaning to take the \"pun\" part out of there -- m friend just thought it was funny (We\'re in a MER-village for MERlin\'s sake. haha, dumb, I know =) There is a lof of editing I need to do on the fifth chapter, but I wanted it to be up so you guys could read it =) The corundum part...haha I had fun.
I Like how things are beginning to develop. You write a very nice story, it flows very well.
Author's Response: thank you! i love recieving comments on my writing style =) glad you enjoy it!
Heh. After working my way through a few acres of reviews (I'm only jealous), I'll add another comment. :)
It suddenly struck me that the reason that Hermione is so attracted to Everett, is that subconsciously she recognizes him as Harry--and knows that she can trust him. She unconsciously feels safe with him in a world where nothing is safe for her.
To answer one of your early questions, I would have classed this as primarily a mystery, but I'm sure it's too late to change. And you are drawing in the readers.
I think I'd better stop before I crowd the page. Love your story.
Author's Response: I love it when my readers have epiphanies =)
Erm...
1. It's "vial".
2. Owls hunt at night.
I still like how it's going, but Hermione's falling in love awfully fast. Thank you!
Author's Response: that\'s happens sometimes =)
I think that it might make your story seem more professional of you spell out the numers, rather than writing them.
Author's Response: haha yeah, i\'m just lazy. but i\'ll try to go back and fix that if i remember!
Author's Response: fixed! thanks for letting me know that stuff, sometimes i have trouble with my english.
I was waiting for the emerald eyes. And I'm waiting to see if Kip actually does something useful eventually.
Author's Response: Kip is pretty dumb, I have to say. He\'s not there to be useful -- he\'s there to be a moron haha. But something he does, does play a key role to my story...
Why did McGomnagall not inquire about any of his qualifications? Like-whether he could cast a Patronus or not? :)
A suggestion...use words (ten) instead of numbers-"10"
Author's Response: Well...McGonagall is a busy woman... ;)
Haha and the whole number thing, yeah I just kind of type whichever I feel like. Sometimes 10, sometimes ten, depends on my mood. I\'ll try to do more of \"ten\" for ya though.