My name is Sashi, and I'm 15 years old. I've been an avid Harry Potter fan since the beginning, and I've been writing Harry Potter fanfictions for three years. If you recognize my penname, I also have an account on fanfiction.net.
I like this for a beginning, but maybe you should give a little backstory as to how the two fell in love. It seemed really fast to me, but I'm not going to complain. I love the Hermione/Percy ship. and for some reason, everyone always uses Mya in their stories. XD
There are a few grammar errors, but anyone can make those. I like the story so far, but I think you need to slow it down a little. Have them hate each other for awhile before they slowly bond. They can't just become friends overnight! Rome wasn't built in a day! I do like how you describe events, but I think those sort of cute events should be save for later. :3