Pretty good. Please update soon! I really like it.

Once again, BRILLIANT!! The only bad thing is................now I have to decide which of your stories will get this years annual Maruadies! LOL. Keep writing. Your awesome!

Author's Response: HA! HA! HA! well well well they will have to fight each other for it then, i suppose. of course, you still have to read the next chapters and, in my opinion, they only get worse and worse. but that's just me.

Good, but it could use a bit of grammer and sentence structure work. Mainly there are quite a few of misplaced commas, and some of the sentences are worded oddly. The only other problem that I see is the constant repetition of some words. Make sure that you use synonyms, especially for actions or names.

Overall I quite enjoyed it and I'm looking forward to reading the next three chapters.

I really liked the Sorting Hat Song, one of the best I've read so far. The plot is coming along nicely, and this seems to be shaping up as good story.

However, the characters are severly OOC. It seems as though Lily and James have had personality transplants! James is supposed to be arrogant and cocky--especially whilst trying to woo said maiden [sorry, I had to quote PotC, lol] and Lily the shy one if either of them must be so, for she seems as though she could be quite confident as well, it most certainly is not in this overly-done why. Another major thing I noticed is her lack of interest in school. She's supposed to be a Hermione type and one fo the best students in her class!

On the subject of James, why is he so accepting and nice with Peter? Obviously he must have some degree of liking for him as he is one of his best friends, but as shown in our glimpse at the Marauders in OotP, it is never outright. As for the relationship between Sirius and James, egads! I understnad having them dislike each other, but in the Ceremony scene, why does James suddenly become so sure of himself? Sure enough that he can say such things to Sirius, when hours ago he was tripping over his own feet?

Lastly, I do believe that Alice and Frank were both of Hufflepuff.

I know these reviews are not the nicest, but I see a lot of potential and that is why I have responded so harshly.

Hmm, as I'm reading I can almost take back what I said about the characters being OOC. Until this point, I didn't like it. However, now that you've "explained" it a bit, by showing what a change the boys make in each other, it rather "works". Good job, and keep up the good work!

What I love that you are doing with this story that many don't, is constantly keeping the actual world they live in standing upon their shoulders, constantly threatening the couple. Often authors just act as though the only obstacles Draco and Hermione would face in a relationship is 'coming out' to their friends--at worst Draco's father--and once they convince everyone to feel acceptance it will all move along swimmingly, when really, it won'y. I like that you are ceasingly reminding the readers of that without fail. Good work!

Mmm, I like it! This is a good first chapter to pull readers in with--especially as Dr/Hr is so overdone--and I think you're going to make an original fic out of a standard idea!

As far as grammar goes, however, I would reccommend reading carefully over completed chapters and look for places where what you say can be confusing to the reader. ex: "Desperately he tried to think up a better plan for executing his task than his current one." The way that this sentence is written, 'one' is modifying 'task' rather than 'plan', which makes it sound as though Draco is searching for a better task, which I am sure was not what you intended. A better way to write it might have been: "Fed up with failure, Draco desperately tried to think of a new plan to complete his assigned task".

Also, consider word choice. Ex: "Her solitary free period was after lunch". Instead of using 'solitary', a better word choice would have been 'single', or even 'sole'. Solitary is usually only preferable when describing something or someone that is alone, rather than a noun of single number.

Overall I thought that it was splendid and I look forward to reading more!

Oooh, again, lovely. There is a discrepiency with what Lily says and her true schedule: Although she tells Madam Pomfrey that she has a class at 8:30, she hasn't received her schedule yet. Then when confronting Sam during Charms, she talks of a fight after lunch rather than breakfast.

Splendid, Splendid. This is definitely going to my favorites!

I love the mask metaphor and the details that you using in describing it!