Important Announcement
Due to major changes in my life, I will not be able to submit anymore stories in the near future. I have several unfinished stories that I would love to post, but, again, major changes renders me unable to. I will however respond to your lovely reviews. So, thank you so much to everyone who has read and reviewed. I deeply appreciate your support and faith in my writing.
Until we meet again...
Eilime
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The series of Hermione/Draco one-shots
Some people find the Hermione/Draco pairing outrageous, and I agree – when speaking of the likeliness of this relationship arising in the books by JKR. But the reason I like writing stories with this pairing is because of the challenge; it’s a challenge to make a Hermione/Draco story seem believable and original. An IC pairing such as Hermione/Ron has the advantage of likeliness, and the challenge in this pairing is therefore simply to make it original. I find Hermione/Draco fascinating. Two people who are so unlike each other, but still both have a strong belief in themselves and their abilities. They do have certain similarities and it’s a puzzle that is intriguing and fun to piece together.
I’m posting a series of Hermione/Draco one-shots. I have 9 of these one-shots posted already. “Not Going to Happen, Chica” (Parody), “Finality”, “New Year”, “Two Lattes from Hell, Please”, “On Edge”, “Isabelle”, “Take the Plunge”, “For Innocence We Sin” and "Masked Ferret Unmasked" (Parody) are up, the latter of which being the newest instalment. None of these one-shots relate to each other. They are each very different and new. Any more one-shots will be reported here and under ‘Story Updates’ below. Enjoy!
Story Updates: N/A
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Announcement!
Two Lattes from Hell, Please
won the Her Story Award (Hermione POV)
at the Dramione Awards (round 4).
Thank you to everyone who voted.
I am so deeply touched that you like this fic so much.
Brilliant. "Or perhaps in Hufflepuff; those slow, delusional students" - that was the best part (Not that I'm against Hufflepuff). To sum up: Brilliant.
Author's Response: *checks behind to see if there's any rabid badgers*
Thanks. Great to hear that you enjoyed that one best ... the one about Slytherin in prison was getting too much limelight. The Puffs fully deserve a bit of recognition. *evil smile*
*checks behind again*
Kidding! (Those badgers can be dangerous.)
I really enjoyed your story! Really wrong but really funny. I especially liked the, "'Yeah, Alan Rickman is H.O.T.!' He licked the tip of his finger and pressed it to his hip, making a hisssssss." But what made me laugh the most was, "Dobbermort if it was a boy, Voldebby if it was a girl." This story is so strange and I like that you, by writing this, suggest Hermione's a very busy bee in fanfics. (I'm in the progress of writing a parody on the traditional Draco/Hermione fanfics because those have often very weak plotlines, so it's kind of one the same lines as this one). Anyhoo! I really loved it! (10)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, chapter 4 is up and running. More harrowing adventures ahead!
I think your story was very good. I really liked that it had another plot than the average Draco/Hermione romance fics. I find Draco/Hermione stories very interesting when done well. Since it was a one-shot, I'm glad it was long because a Draco/Hermione story can't develop into a realistic romance if it's short. I liked that the romance in your fic was subtle and that the reader could imagine his/her own ending to the story. Some things in your story were a bit rushed though, but believe me I still liked it! It was very good and you seemed to have a lot of background information (the hospital scene etc). All in all, very well :)
I really enjoyed this first chapter. It seems like there's a lot to come! The story is very well written and I'm very curious about what Hermione was doing. The first paragraph made me think that the story might not have such a happy ending... Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
I really liked this story. Funny, too. And I'm so glad Ron really wasn't that thick, that it was really just an act to get them together! Great job, it's very well written. (9)
It has a good start. I would recommend, though, that you did not write such things as *bell rings overhead* and instead write it out as a descriptive sentence. I like the confusion in this chapter, though I can't see how Ron could tell that Harry knew something he didn't about Hermione. Be careful you do not use the Draco/Hermione clichés; such overused sentences like, "Hermione's really changed in the looks department" (of course you didn't use that one but it's just an example). I'm going to read chapter two now. Keep it up!
The story seems interesting, though I have a few points I’d like to make.
“He’s never been kind to any of us, but for some reason that doesn’t matter to me anymore!” I find this hard to believe. We, as readers, have not had much description of her feelings, we only know about how she can’t forget about his eyes etc. so there is no deeper affection. To forget about six years of torment that easily is not very believable.“Yeah, well thanks Harry. But he will never notice me like that.” This sentence seems to indicate that Hermione accepts her feelings for Malfoy and that she’s sad when she realises that she doesn’t have much of a chance. Wouldn’t she try to deny her feelings and convince herself that it’s only an infatuation; she has not even talked to him properly yet, so her feelings must be purely blind curiosity and physical attraction.Also, that Harry offers to help her gain Malfoy’s attention and even affection doesn’t seem likely. If it’s important for the story though, I think a reason for Harry’s change of views would be a good idea.I hope you understand what I mean. I’m going to go read on now; I’d like to see where this is going!I'm looking forward to seeing what happens on the patrol. On the the next chapter...
“You what Granger? I haven’t got all night to just stand here. In fact I should be asking you what you are doing out of bed at this hour.” This shows that Malfoy is trying to deny his feelings and I think that’s good. His feelings have come unexpectedly, obviously, and he would never just act upon them. Oh, and I can just believe the awkward silence when he and Hermione started to patrol. I hate it when neither knows what to say. There is a typo I thought I should tell you about: (…) they should probably get back to their respected common rooms (…) It’s supposed to say ‘respective common rooms.’ I think it’s sweet that Malfoy offered to walk her back to Gryffindor Tower, and I liked the argument in the end. On to the next chapter… Oh, by the way, how come Ron and Lavender are together? They broke up in the book…
I thought this story was post-HBP? But Dumbledore is mentioned in this chapter. Oh, but I guess if it really had been then Draco being at school would have been mentioned in the beginning, too. But then there’s the thing I asked about in my previous review about Ron and Lavender being together. If you could just clear this out for me, I’d appreciate it. Though I’m confused about Dumbledore’s presence, I like what he did, saying to everyone in the Great Hall that he had made Draco and Hermione patrol together. I’m looking forward to seeing who the ‘figure’ is in the end.
I thought Hermione’s outburst after listening in on Draco and Pansy’s conversation was slightly unrealistic. She completely let down her guard, crying and yelling, instead of trying to be rational and indifferent. I know she’s got feelings for him and is therefore hurt by his words, but just because she’s had one conversation with him doesn’t mean they’ve opened that much up to each other. That she hexed him was just too much. But apart from that, I like where the story is going. I’m looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: thanx for all the feedback, i really appreciate it! :-) i will answer your main concerns.
this story isn't post-HBP its actually during their 6th year.
also, i know that some of them are OOC, but that is what i was going for. especially with hermione, she usually is logical and rational girl but i wanted to show a non-rational in love side of her. i know that i feel frustrated like she is about how she feels about a guy and i thought it would be nice to show that everyone gets like that at some point, whether they are usually level headed or not. and she is in love with him, its not something that needs a lot of conversation between them. it will help and it will happen in the next chapters, but she loves him. its not "ohhhh you have a crush!" its deeper than that.
as for the Ron and Lavender thing, the story is before they broke up, obviously. that really isn't important anyway, it was just a minor detail that helped me work ron into the story. lavender doesn't really show up anymore in the later chapters.
it might be a little too far fetched for you, but i have stated that it is an AU fic.
thanx for all the feedback though! it means a lot. :-) i hope you continue reading!
That was a great start. I'm definitely going to see where this story's going. I like that it was written by a first person narrator; it gives Draco a new touch. It's much more personal this way. I like how we see the transformation Draco undergoes from Lucius' beloved and devoted son to someone who slowly backs away from his childhood. So many Draco/Hermione fics have Draco say something like, "I never wanted what my father wanted, the cruel man!" So I love that you've made him much more true to his character and that it will be a slow progress. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: I've never thought of Draco as a good guy. He's bad to the core, though HBP makes me think he's not the murderer his father is. But I believe people change, sometimes against their own will. Draco is changing, though he does not realise half of it.
That was a very good chapter.
I really like this story. I'm off to read the next chapter.
~ Eilime
Author's Response: Hopefully I\'ll see more of you in the future then.
Another great chapter, though I'm not particularly fond of a shifting POV that retells something as long as a whole chapter. It gets sligthly monotonous, even though it's interesting to see it from the other person's POV. Other than that, I really like your writing. Keep it up!
Author's Response: It can be monotonous, but sometimes you need to write something for the sake of the story, instead of what might be fun.
Okay, I really want to know what's in that letter! When are you going to tell us? Anyway, I really liked this chapter. Very well written.
Author's Response: The letter is next, though some have asked me not to reveal it.
It's a very good story. The 'sharing waffles' scenario is sweet, and you've written this story very well. It's simple and cute. Please continue :) 10