Ooh, that was really deep. That was a really great fic. I think that you had Snape's character down greatly. It'd be great if this were a chaptered fic...

~Lindsey :)

It was more passionate, there were more tears, desperation and love between the two Gryffindors that any logical thought had escaped them. I really agree with this. No thought would have been put into thinking about those things, it all would have just been for false worry. What all teenagers think. But I do sympathize with Hermione, great, because she didn't know that this would happen. In this sentence, though, I have a slight nitpick. I think that you meant to add another little something to the end of this sentence, it just kind of runs on and ends without warning. Like, instead of ending it with just It was more passionate, there were more tears, desperation and love between the two Gryffindors so great that any logical thought at that moment had escaped them. It makes it more understandable.

There was so much she wanted to know, and not enough books to help her. Love this. It just adds to the fact, again, that you've decorated Hermione's character so well.

I can't tell him. I just can't. I won't. You've named all of the key points in why Hermione should and should not tell him, explaining very nicely to the reader why she could tell Ron about the baby. Nice work.

You're thousands of miles away from me and relationships are hard enough without that much space between the two people. I think we should take a break from each other for a while, or at least until I return to England. While long distance relationships are sure to never work, this is quite devastating, I know, to Hermione. Maybe she had already known that this was going to happen, but not thought on it too much, only thinking of their last night together. And look at where that had gotten her. Poor thing.

who had thin dark red hair and big blue eyes that strongly suspected would darken to brown over time. There should be a 'we're in between 'that' and 'strongly'.

At the beginning of August, Molly received a letter from Ron, which informed her that he and Harry would be returning home in a few weeks. When she told Hermione the news, Hermione spent those weeks writing and re-writing a speech containing everything she needed to tell Ron, including how she would tell him and a list of questions she figured Ron would ask. What a struggle that would be, to not write to your baby's father, your former lover, your best friend for so long, especially if she knew where he was, what he was doing, and most especially if it's been a year that has gone by since the child has been born! It's a good thing Hermione is so strong. Many couldn't do it, and I'm surprised that Mrs. Weasley contributed to her decision in not telling Ron-- I know that she loves Hermione dearly, but Ron is her son. Wouldn't she want to tell him?

Hermione reached down and lifted Hannah out of her crib and kissing her cheek. In this sentence you either need to omit the 'and' and place a comma before 'kissing' or replace 'kissing' with 'kissed'. Tiny little nitpick I saw.

"I'd like to introduce to you Miranda," Ron said. "She's my girlfriend." Didn't see that one coming! Wow, how awful it would be for Hermione to have to tell her now! I feel just horrid for her. Nice cliff-hanger by the way. If the story wasn't already updated I might have gone crazy.

~Lindsey :)

Aw, this was sad! I liked this one shot; keep up the good work, and it'd be cool if you continued it.

~Lindsey :)

While I don't think that first person would have been the best to choose for this story, I think that you have an interesting premise for this story. George/Tonks? That's very interesting; I don't know how you could have come up with that!

I think that more description and intense detail to certain things throughout could have made this first person story more enjoyable. While it's just a prologue and they don't have to be a certain long length, i still think you could have conjured up a few more thousand words --- you could have described the train station where she talked to George, you could have told why Tonks' mother sets her up on those dates, you could have gone into more detail about why none of the men her mother picked for her were right . . . Not everyone is meant to write in first person, but I think that you would have done this story justice with a different tense. Oh, and you accidentally tended to switch the tenses in a few sentences.

You had quite a few mistakes for this, and I think that a good beta reader could sort that out.

There’s more too it than that of course, but I didn’t see it at first.

You only need one 'o' in 'too'.

“Oh, this fell out of your back pocket”

You need a comma after 'pocket'.

“Well, I guess I’ll see you around” his voice snaps me back to reality.

“Yeah, see you around” I say and walk away.

You also need commas at the end of both of the speaking sentences.

Whether he is Fred or George is yet to be determined, but which ever one he is, he looks relieved that I have stopped.

Ha, I really like this. I find myself in the books sometimes wondering which twin is which . . . you did a good job with that line.

He has a cute smile. I’ve never noticed it until now. I like the way his hair flops down into his face too. He’s really quite cute.

While student/teacher (adult/kid) relationships aren't my absolute favourite, I'm starting to branch off into them more and more and read and write them. While I think that you've won the award for 'most original' in a Tonks and George relationship, this sentence just kind of turns me off of the story. Don't get me wrong-- I like the ship and some of the way you describe this is witty, but a grown women, I highly doubt, would think of a kid this way. I know that Tonks seems kind of fed up with her life (and slightly OOC) but this is kind of going a bit overboard. Now, if I hadn't have known that this were a George/Tonks relationship story, then I would have thought 'Oh, she's a woman looking at a child'. Since you've never specified on how old George and his twin are in this story (though I assume he's still at Hogwarts because he was at King's Cross), I myself would want to guess fifth year, and that would make George 15 or 16 and Tonks 20 or 21. While this isn't that big of an age difference, it just seems odd to me that she would think that. Tonks is just a bit OOC throughout this, though.

After my realization that George Weasley was something of a hottie, I started hanging out with him more and more. First Fred tagged along, and then it became just the two of us.

Umm . . . wouldn't someone tell his parents about this? I know that about more than 80% of parents would freak if they knew that their son or daughter was going out with someone that much older than them. Tons of things would be running through their head, like why Tonks want George when she can have so many others? She's too old and he's just a 15 year old. So, since Tonks and George are spending so much time together, wouldn't someone find out and tell Mrs. Weasley? While I'm fairly positive she would love to have Tonks in the family (it says so in either OotP or HBP) I think she was meaning more along the lines of Bill or Charlie dating her, not one of the twins. The twins are not mature by any means, especially at that age. I just think that you could have made this more believable.

Even perfect has to end sometime though…

Aw, you had better not kill off George! Nice cliffie ending, though, I'm sure your readers loved it.

This was cute, though. Good work.

~Lindsey :)

That was a wonderful story, it was a tear-jerker for me. I love the way that you described their emotions, very sad. And the way Ginny died, soooo sad. I'm glad that you let them die as heroes. Overall, very very good work. The ending was great too.

annie, dear, you're amazing. Seriously. You are an amazing writer. *gushes*

Once again, I saw the beautiful, intricate storyline from you; it's not just one story, it's all of them. Your description, stories . . . everything are just great. I'm fairly sure I'll have all 27 of your stories read by the end of the week if they continue to stay as good as the ones I've already read.

The characterisation, again, I must comment. BRILLIANT. Snape's character was spot on, as was Draco's and Voldemort's.

Voldemort--- he was very unmerciful, and I really liked the twist you had when he told Draco that he was given false information. It's so in character for him; great work.

Draco--- he seems very weak and annoying, almost, in this story; something that I really think he would be while he was begging for his life; especially after what Snape had done to him. it's very sad to see what he's become. Perhaps we could have a one shot, prequel, as to how Draco ended up this way?

Snape--- I really liked the way you've written him. I could just see the hatred etched into his face, the hooked nose sliding out from under the cloak . . . But one thing I didn't understand--- why did he fundle in his seat when Draco was being tortured if he was just going to kill him himself? That's the only problem I have with him, but other than that, I loved him as well.

His red cloak slid off the throne behind him like a thick river of blood.

Ooh! I really loved this description here! It's definitely apparent throughout the entire story, but I really liked this sentence. I can just see Voldemort coming off his high throne and the cloak billowing out behind him and sliding off the chair silkily. 'Blood' was a great word to use.

Oh, gosh . . . I honestly couldn't find anything wrong with this story. It was so well written; you should be a real author; like, not just for fan fiction, but have books and things. I'm sure you'd sell out with the right publisher.

Oh, I did find this mistake:

. . . It was a test, Draco, a test to see where your loyalties lay and whether you were willing to endure pain and death for your master."

Instead of 'lay', it should be 'lie', I'm fairly sure. But this does not change how wonderful your story is. :)

I will admit, I had expected nothing less from you -- which is why I gave you false information."

Poor Draco got fooled. But, this sounds just like something Voldemort would do. And, Malfoy would be just the person that was weak enough to betray it. Not good on his part, but on your part as the writer, amazing.

Draco was dead long before the two jets of green light ever hit him.

Aw, great ending, but very sad. I really, really liked how you've worded this though. We know that the Avadas didn't kill him . . . but it's like he died from Severus' betrayal to him. It seems as if Draco really, truly considered him as a father, and he really looked up to him. To have someone not save you when you're about to die is really heart breaking; it's very sad, even if it is Draco Malfoy.

The way you write Malfoy makes me want to pity him, even after all the bad things he's done to Harry. In your Hermione/Draco fics, I really want him to get together with Hermione; he's just so sweet and sensitive and giving with her. In this story, you've got him portrayed the same way, and it makes me feel a tad sad for seeing him be like this, then get killed. But, if it's convincing, then that's a good sign.

This was a great story all together. I really liked your creativity and writing style in this, as in all your other stories. It too will go on my favourites. Great work---- again!

~Lindsey :)

Oh my gosh! This is one of the best, and saddest, fan fics i have ever read! Keep up the good work!

Wow, once again your story amazes me. You're an amazing writer, annie.

The first thing that drew me to the story was, of course, that the author was you, and then the fact that it was a song-fic with one of my favourite songs in it, and then that it was a Hermione/Draco, a pairing that has recently became serious to me.

I shouldn’t be doing it. But I’m doing it anyway.

I adore the words you've used--- they show that Draco is unsure himself of what he is, what he's doing . . . he knows that he shouldn't be doing it, though he does. I like the uncertainty that you've built on Draco's characterisation--- I think you've got him portrayed brilliantly here. In the books we see Draco as a guy that always wants to be left alone, is very secretive . . . especially in Books 6 and 7. It's perfect here because he's sneaking around with Hermione and he knows that he shouldn't be doing it.

Moments later, she is shaking beneath me as I kiss her with a vehemency and passion that scares even myself. Her hands, cut by the times I pressed them against walls and floors covered with jagged rocks, clutch onto my shoulders, nails digging into my skin in a way that only spurs my lust. Her hips, bruised by the times I gripped onto her so forcefully that she cried out in pain, are thrust up against mine as I pin her against the wall behind her.

Aw, this is terribly sad. Because of Draco's sad and naturally (even kind of abusive, neglectful) homelife, I can actually see him being abusive toward a friend or girlfriend, though Hermione it's sad to see it being done to. You have that paragraph perfectly--- it;s amazingly descriptive and I can see all of those things: the bruises, the cuts, the rocks that he cut her on . . . I can see all of them happening, and you've done a great job with that.

When I return to the common room, my friends greet me excitedly. My friends…who am I kidding? They’re not my friends. They don’t give a damn about me.

I like this--- I can actually see Draco feeling this way about 'friends' like Crabbe and Goyle, and possibly even Pansy. Good work.

Then again, she doesn’t live an easy life either. It never fails to amuse me that the friends she once loved are the ones most determined to uncover what I’ve been doing in my spare time. I suppose that’s why she gave them up: my little secret doesn’t harbour the strength to divide her heart in two. So now she lives only for me, because she has no one else.

I find this especially sad as well, but kind of odd. Why would Harry and Ron abandon her? I understand that Ron would possibly be harbouring some sickening feelings toward Malfoy because of how long he's liked Hermione, but to actually abandon her as a friend and not talk to her? Not confide in her? I can't see this--- I think that they would be a bit awkward for a while, but they would eventually come to terms and, realising that she was a friend, respect her wishes and tolerate Malfoy.

The same look I had trouble placing earlier this evening is in the eyes of the image I envision. Sensuality, desire, and…

I really like how you've got Malfoy leading a double life--- we already know that he did in Half Blood Prince, and that makes it more apparent that it could happen with the romantic aspects in his life--- Hermione and Pansy, and he's torn between them. Even though he abuses Hermione, I feel that he actually truly does love her, and that drives him to hurt her to punish himself. Though Pansy, I think, he just keeps and uses for her own pleasure, he also keeps for himself to ensure that nothing else is going on between him and someone else--- especially a Mudblood, something that a certain Dark Lord would possibly have him murdered for.

I love this story--- once again, another one of your masterpieces. I look forward to reading another. Another favourite to add!

~Lindsey :)