Awww, excellent writing, truly heart-rending. :( "Do what you have to do little brother, but then you come back." BUT HE DIDN'T *bawls eyes out*
Author's Response: I know! I wish Sirius could have found out what his brother tried to do in the end.
Oooh, dun dun duuun! Shouldn't Remus have been wearing the Invisibility Cloak, though, if he looked so bad? At least one of them should have been wearing it...
Your story has some pretty big spaces in between the paragraphs. Is it meant to be like that? Because it messes up the flow a little. It's odd, since I have a friend whose story was rejected on the grounds that the spaces in it were too big...
Author's Response: Remus didn\'t think anyone would be up to see him that early, and he could always just make an excuse if he ran into someone. He just had trouble lying to Lily. Also, the other Marauders needed the cloak the most to get back because what they had been doing was illegal.
Yeah, it made big spaces when I uploaded it from the file. Now I just copy and paste, and in later chapters the gaps between paragraphs aren\'t as big.
Thanks for reviewing!
Oooh, dun dun duuun! Shouldn't Remus have been wearing the Invisibility Cloak, though, if he looked so bad? At least one of them should have been wearing it...
Your story has some pretty big spaces in between the paragraphs. Is it meant to be like that? Because it messes up the flow a little. It's odd, since I have a friend whose story was rejected on the grounds that the spaces in it were too big...
Lmao! That last comment by Sirius made me burst out laughing XD Thankfully there's no-one around or they'd know I've gone mad!
Very funny =D I have to say that I can't believe it of Kingsley to come up with a prank or indeed to behave at all the way he did in this fic, and others seemed somewhat OOC as well... but regardless, I loved the interaction between Tonks and Lupin at the end, and also your use of Mundungus' "I 'gree with Sirius" comment.
Author's Response: Dungie\'s words seemed to fit the fic. I think for a good dose of humour, a good dose of exaggeration is necessary, right?
I certainly did enjoy it :D Great writing and a lovely heartwarming ending :3 Hooray for baby Harry. :D
:D This is the first fanfic I've read on Mugglenet which I've liked enough to add to my favourites. Your characterisation of everyone was absolutely spot-on. I especially liked how you wrote Peter as being more than just a pathetic hanger-on, a Marauder with equal status and sense of humour to the other three. I also like that you wrote Lupin as not quite the goody-goody people think he is XD The image of him pouting at Mary is especially cute. I can't help but wonder what Sirius put in his trunk! XD Also, trust Lily to figure out exactly what would stop the Marauders pranking her. She is the best :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Finding this when randomly logging back into my account after more than a year's absence was a nice surprise :) I learned these characterization skills from taking a class on the Marauders on the beta forums - I would definitely recommend the beta forum classes, if they still exist. Thanks again!
~ LiLu
Sirius Black spends his last Christmas at Grimmauld Place.
This is Gmariam of Ravenclaw writing for the Great Hall Christmas Challenge, Prompt One.
Excellent fic!! Perfectly characterised, great writing, and well in keeping with canon :D I particularly liked the way you wrote Regulus - he and Sirius obviously don't hate each other's guts, but they're on two very different sides of a coin. It's interesting to read his words in terms of how his perspective on "My own personal thoughts don't matter" changed over time. :3
Author's Response: A belated thank you for the review! I'm so glad you enjoyed the Blacks in this story. Thank you for reading and reviewing! ~Gina :)
Great story! I loved your characterisation of the three Potter children and especially the way that Albus acts differently around his siblings compared to with everyone else - very believable. I would love to read more about James' adventures with the invisibility cloak! It's a shame that he can't share its existence with his siblings, though, because I'm sure they would love to huddle under it together. Didn't Albus inherit the Marauder's Map? It would have been cool if Harry had sent a special "troublemaking" present for each of them, though I'm not sure what Lily would have got... Maybe a Weasley heirloom? A Weasley's Wizarding Wheeze, courtesy of Ron and George? Ah well, my headcanon is running away with itself as usual. Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I like to think of Albus as quiet and timid around others, feeling a little overwhelmed with everyone always asking him "So you're THE Harry Potter's son??" So he's truly himself only when he feels the safety of those closest to him. At this point in the story, the Marauder's Map is still with Harry, but will be introduced soon! And don't worry, while the Invisibility Cloak is currently a secret between James and his dad, you'll quickly see that it's nearly impossible to keep it from his siblings for long....but that comes with the next chapter! Thanks for reading and reviewing! - Ethan