Great chapter! The possesion was creepy, but it's good that Harry told people. About Snape, are you going to turn him evil (I mean, against the Order?), or Voldemort doesn't know about it? And when Harry was being possesed, didn't Voldemort have acess to all his memories (I don't know exactly what happens during possesion, is the possessed mind locked in a corner, or it just loses control and doesn't remember it?) And there's a problem. In OotP, Duimbledore said that Voldemort couldn't posess Harry for long because he was grieving for Sirius. And Harry knew everything then. The 'exercising of his possesion skills' could explain it, but still, we want a better explanation.
More questions: Harry and Ginny? R/Hr is already obvious.
Cho? Marietta? why didn't you say something about them in connection with the DA meeting?
My mum's yelling at me to turn off the computer, so I'll save my other questions for the next chapter.
Great chapter! 10!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and I'll answer your questions as much as I can. Right then...:
Whether Sanpe is gonna turn evil is quite important later. All I'm going to say is Dumbledore thinks Snape is a spy for the Order while Voldemort thinks he's a spy for him. Harry isn't sure which way his loyalties lie.
When Harry was possessed, Voldemort did have access to all Harry's memories but anything important (the Prophecy) was in the Clamcelo so Voldemort didn't find out anything he doesn't already know. As for what happens during possessions, I assume that the person just can't remember what happened to them at the time; like what happened to Ginny in COS.
Er, *cough* guess who'd forgotten Dumbledore had said that... the reason Voldemort could is that harry wasn't emotionally charged at the time and, because he was thinking about the D of M but NOT Sirius, Voldemort could control him a bit. Mainly though, all that happened was Voldemort basically could just make Harry forget what had happened, nothing more.
Right with R/Hr, but Harry and Marietta?! Why would Harry go out with the person who got dumbledore sacked and Harry nearly expelled? And I don't think Harry likes Cho any more - he wasn't exactly friendly towards her during 5th year. As for him and Ginny, Ginny certainly fancies Harry but true love? I'm not sure... I don't think Harry would want to drag her into the whole equation with Voldemort...
As for why I didn't mention them, I'd added a bit about them later on - more will be coming I promise.
Right then, sorry if that was long winded and confusing but I hope that explains it a bit better. Not my best chapter, lol.
Het, i was going to reviews ch 5 and 6 separately, but the story caught me and I'll just tell you more here. They're great! but there's one thing you should know. you're the author. you have absolute control over your story and caracters. Also, don't write to please your readers. that's what rita skeeter does. you should write, first and foremost, for youself. And how could we get bored of Latin? most of the spells in the hp books are in latin or aother languages. That said, 10! you definetely deserve it!
Author's Response: Thank you! *blushing* I haven't really been writing for the readers - I've done the story more for me. I wanted to see whether I could write a fic and I sort of let the story take me where it wanted to. Getting it accepted on here is a bonus :).I have tried, first and foremost, to use my own interpretations of the characters and, as the story progresses, I do intend to kill a few of them off. A few people have emailed me saying they don't want me to do anything to their favorite charaters but I am afraid to say I already know what's going to happen to all of them. As for the Latin, I was a bit worried I was becoming obsessed! :) Once again, thak you ever so much for your review and I hope I don't drift down the Rita Skeeter path. If I do, you're more than welcome to curse me! Seriously though, I hope that the story will go, ultimately, the way I want to. Sorry if that was a bit long winded, ~ Stormy x
Another great chapter, but we're already used to that aren't we? The Occlumency lesson was great, i would like more info on voldemort's intrusion on Harry's mind, and about Occlumency. Umm... what else... did I tell you it is a great chapter? and the contego shield was awesome, i believe Harry will use it more often than the other one...Again, keep up the great work! 10!
Author's Response: Thanks! And you want more on Occlumency?...hmmm...I'll think about that. Thanks for letting me know! And as for Voldemort's intrusion, just wait and see... :)
Great chapter! First, sorry for not revieweing ch 17 and 18. The log in thing keeps logging me out afetr i reach the my favorites page in my account. I love the way you wrote Snape, it's realistic, and his last words when he thought he would die were great! I would still like Harry to make up with his friends, especially Ginny. Maybe they do, but i haven't read the 20th chapter yet. Anyway, this is a great chapter and I absolutely love it!
Author's Response: Thanks! and no worries about not reviewing chapters 17 and 18, this log in thing is a pain. I hope you like chapter 20 and thanks for the encouragement!
It has been a wonderful journey, and I waant to thank you fot allowing me to take it. This story is one of the very best out there, and I could only wish that the sequel is longer. You got all the other qualities necessary for a superb writer. Again, thank you. And don't worry about Dumbledore's speech, the sorting hat is saying the same thing for three years now, and will continue to do so until they listen. Anyway, this story deserves a place in the world's top ten. I hope the sequel is up soon! Another ten, like all the other times I reviewed. -Crs.
Author's Response: You wish will almost certainly come true because the sequel so far looks as if it's going to be quite a lot longer than this one! I'm pleased that you like Dumbledore's speech and thank you so much for reading this right through to the end. I'm so happy that you've enjoyed it and as for being in the world's top ten, I guess I can dream! :)
Ahhhh!! The bit about Cho and Marietta wasn't like H/Cho, H/Marietta. It was just that io wanted info on them. Guess I put their names in the wrong context. Are you going to give Harry a girlfriend? Because he needs someone, or he'll go nuts. Somebody strong, who can handle his moods and get him out of his shell. If she has experience with possesion *hint! hint!* it's even better... Right, now don't take this wrong, I'm not telling you what to write (yeah right!). I'm a crazy H/G shipper, nothing i can do about that. But if your giving Harry a girlfriend, make it a temporary fling (if you plan on voldie to survive to a sequel) or something permanent (e.g. true love) woth somebody that loves him, and that he loves. From my point of view, Ginny's great for this (in OotP she is the only one who treats him normally, not like he's a walking bomb, and she has experience with getting rid of tom.) Sorry if i confused you earlier, it's my nature to ramble. I'll give you another ten cuz the chapter is great! (Not my fav chapter either, but that's cuz i hate the thought of Voldemort possesing Harry *shudder*). See you later! Hope the next chapter gets up soon!
Author's Response: Lol, I laughed when I read this review! (In a nice way!) :)
I think you're gonna like chapter 10 - I'm just finalising it and I'll add it to the queue in a minute. I'll add something about Cho/Marietta in a later chapter though. Don't worry, you're not telling me what to write but if you're a H/G shipper something tells me that after the next chappie you're going to be happy... :)
Author's Response: Oh, I forgot to say, if you want to, reread the bit about Dumbledore's explanation again - I changed it a little so it explains it a bit better ~ Stormy x
It does sound better. I'm glad i could help. did I ever mention that I hate waiting? Now I'll snap at everyone and build impossible scenarios in my mind about Harry and Ginny, just because of some of your words. *sitting anxiuosly on the edgs of the seat*
Another ten. (I can't help it, and this is the third time i review this particular chapter. And it's not like i could give you something less.) Bye! Thanx for considering my opinion! It's good for a writer to get reviews, but it's better for the reader to see his questions answered.
Right. I'm rambling again. Sorry. Bye!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like the changes I made. I'm hoping chapter 10 will be accepted really soon and thanks for the reviews! I love it when people let me know what they think and I really hope you'll like what's coming...
Author's Response: PS: the next chapter's over 3500 words so I hope the wait'll be worth it!
Great chapter! Snape is evil! I just said that because I hate him. *grin* What happens next... hmm... Well, Snape is jealous because Harry has a Clamcelo (he could definitely use one in his meetings with Voldie), but I suppose that he'll have to find out that Harry isn't running away from his traumatizing memories, he's just protecting a secret. Maybe if he tells Snape this, he'll come around. The two of them need to work out some steam, or they'll blow Hogwarts apart. Maybe more detail on why Clamcelos are so rare? Or valuable? The cliffie's alright, as long as the next chapter comes soon. Bye, and keep up the good work. Can't wait for the sequel! hint! hint!
Author's Response: Thanks! As for your suggestion about the Clamcelo's history,I'll add something about that in the next chapter; well, I mean chapter 15. Chapter 14 should be up soon, I submitted it as soon as the last one got accepted. And as for the sequel, I've written quite a bit of it already so I hope the whole lot will be relatively soon after HBP. I'll be really annoyed though if JKR makes all my characters go OOC because of her reavels in book 6... :)
Your story has a great start, but i have one question.
If harry is feeling guilty for Sirius' death, how come he wants to go to Grimmauld place? After all, it's full of memoreis of sirius, and Sirius hated it.
you get a ten raring for the story, like i said, its great. Send an answer to me if you want, or don't send one, it's your choice, but i would like to know what you think about my quaestion.
PS: don't let me distract you from your plotline. You started great, like i've said. Keep up the good work!!
Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I'll post the answer to your question here so it gets answered for anyone else who's wondering...
Yes, Harry is missing Sirius a lot, and he doesn't want to go anywhere near Grimmauld Place. However, he is at the Dursleys, which he hates, and being at HQ means that he can find out more about what is going on with Voldemort, as well as being with Ron and Hermione.
I've mentioned more about this in chapter four, and I might add a scentence about this in this chapter too. Thanks for your comments though and I hope you enjoy chapter 2 as much!
So I was right, Snape does have a hint of respect for Harry. I hope he'll stay on the side of the light, he put too much of his life in the war effort to just become dark. What else... the next chapter will be the Hogsmeade day, right? Get Harry to talk about his problems, keeping it in isn't doing any good. That's it for now... Love the Legilimency conversation... Keep up the great work! We don't care about quantity, we want quality! Which you provide.
Author's Response: Thanks for the great review! And the next chapter isn't that long either but I hope you'll like it. PS: the next chappie's called 'Hogsmeade', so good guess!
Great! Okay, guesses for what's going to happen. Snape said that he will choose the most powerful side, the winning side. Then I suposse that either Harry or Dumbledore will prove to be more powerful than Voldemort, or something will change Snape's mind. Or they discover he is a spy and the order/Harry rescues him. I like the encounter between Snape and LM, you did a great job with it, playing on the Lord's distrust of Malfoy after the prophecy event. And Harry needs to have words woth Dumbledore about the being left in the dark thing. It's like he said: He gives them info, but they don't give back. So i think he should get to know stuff. Bye now. Can't wait for the next chapter! How many chapters are left before you start posting the sequel?
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your words of encouragement! I'm really pleased you like the way I portrayed LM and Harry is going to say something about being left in the dark. The next chappie's coming very soon (hopefully the mods can get it up quickly!) and there are six (at the moment!) chapters left.
Great chapter, i can't wiat for the next to be approved.
I have one question. Will Harry win in the end? And will you add some romance to this story or you'll focus on angst?
10!
Author's Response: I'm not going to tell you what happens in the end, am I!!! lol, only joking; as I'm thinking of writing a sequel (year 7) I'm not going to kill him off in this story though, if that's what you're worried about :) As for adding romance - I will do but not that much as I get a bid fed up with it after a while! Thanks for the 10 and I hope you'll enjoy the next chapters as much.
Gret chapter! i hope Cho dioesn't interfere with them, or at least that they don't fight because of her. H/G, i mean. I can't wait to see Harry kick Snape's ass at Occ. and Leg. I hope you're going to do that. You ahould consider adding a bit of Ron and Hermione's reaction at the news of Harry dating Ginny. What will happen next... I suppose that Harry and Snape will develop a grudging respect for each other, after the uncovering of some secrets... That's it for now. Bye,
Crs.
Author's Response: Thanks! You've sort of got it right but drifting a little away from what's going to happen... Good guess though! I really hope you'll like the next chapter as much as this one and as for Cho, I mentioned her more so Hermione could say what happened to Marietta than anything else. I'll possibly add more about R/Hr's reactions to H/G but in a later chappie. Cya!
Finally! I've been trying to revoew this chapter for two days now, but I couldn't log in. This is a great chapter, it's good that Harry and Co have a break from the usual troblems. I don't have any guesses as to what happes next, but I'm sure you'll surprise me. Anyway, great chapter! Bye!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, and I'm also kinda pleased that you can't guess what's coming. I hope you'll like the next couple of chapters too, and thanks for trying to review! This log in thing is starting to get really annoying...
I hate cliffhangers!!
But the story is great. i like ythe second chapter. 10!
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. Chapter three will up shortly I hope! No cliffhanger in the next one too. :)
Grewat chapter! More long chapters! The longer the chaptethe more time it takes for me to start waiting for the next one! Now i'm going to read ch 8. See ya!
Author's Response: lol, the next has only got about 2800 words I'm afraid. You might have a bit of a wait too for the next chappie - I'm sitting a GCSE spanish exam tomorrow morning :( I hope you enjoy chapter 8 though!
Great chapter! The others have said it, but it wouldn't hurt if I say it too: The orb idea is cool! going home where? Hogwarts? Privet drive? hmm... Needles to say, 10.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was quite impressed with myself when I thought of it, lol! and as for where Harry's going you'll just have to wait and see... (evil grin...!) :)
Umm.. interesting. All sort of pointless, and you have a few typos, like "site" instead of "sight". It was interesting, though. I would have liked more detail, and a more detailed conclusion, but it wasn't bad :)
Very good story. The description of Harry's feelings is very well-written. You have a spelling mistake, though. you wrote Hermoine instead of Hermione. Correct it, please? I didn't see anything else wrong (except for small punctuation stuff), and it's a good beginning for a story that promises to be interesting.
Very good story. I liked the beginning very much, it set a sad tone, and you gradually made the story lighter. The question game was well-written, especially with the attenton accorded to detail and emotions. I love the open ending. All in all, a very good story.