I'm a bomb.
My heart keeps time as my life ticks down,
Down, down.
I'm not okay,
You're the fire,
I'm the wick.
Together,
we burn this place to the ground,
Our suffering written in words of smoke,
As we look at the stars one last time.
MORE STORIES COMING SOON!
Amazing, simply beautiful. It doesn't rhyme, but it feels like if it did it wouldn't reflect the feelings. I love the last part: 'I can feel it, feel the darkness, taking control, control of me, and I let it.' Amazing. And I'm really excited because my first poem has been accepted! Drifting, please read!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviweing. And I\'m glad that it did reflect the emotions I wanted in there. The ending is like my favorite part too. I\'ve been waiting for your work to be posted. *off to read*
Oh my gosh, that is amazing. It's beautifully written, but so sad. Poor Hermione. It holds a powerful message. LIve for today, because tomorrow may never come. Please, keep on writing. I love getting those emails saying 'lalalalatina has written a new story.' Day after day. How do you do it? Amazing, simply..amazing.
Author's Response: It makes my day when I get reviews... Especially really nice ones like this one! I don\'t know, but I just can\'t seem to stop writing and submiting. And I am always checking for new reviews. So, thank you for reviewing and for liking my work. It makes me so happy when I see that my poem has been favorited. ^_^
I adored the limerick at the beginning!
And the way you described the urge and attraction Death Eaters felt to join Voldemort and why...very, very beautiful in a dark and emotional sort of way! I can't believe reading these poems that you could EVER enjoy the pathetic one I posted, but yet you used it for a poetry class! it is because of you I have decided to dedicate myself to mugglenet once more, and am hoping to get at least a little poem in, before I go into my first fanfiction story! (:
Author's Response: OMYGOSH secret shadows! long time no talk, i was so surprised to find a "review received" notice in my inbox. thank you so much for your input, and don't be so harsh on yourself your poem was *amazing*. lol every time i read over my poems i like them less and less... so i don't think they're so deserving all your praise, but i appreciate it nonetheless. i'll be sure to check up on your works every once in a while, but the real world is constantly preoccupying me with busy-ness, so i only every get on mugglenet like once every other month. have wonderful holidays, hopefully we'll talk again sometime soon!
Holy Harry Potter, indeed! XD sorry that I'm replying here in a review, but I'm not exactly sure how else to contact you! Again, your poem was obviously amazing. Deserving of MY praise? Oh please! You're your own worst critic my dear. Of course, quite understandable. I wouldn't mind chatting once every other month. XD You too, dear! Happy Holidays! (:
Okay, this is one of, if not the most wonderful Snape/Hermione I've read so far! Oh, it brought tears to my eyes, this epilogue did (along with the movie RENT, haha_! I much enjoyed your plot, and am hoping to see more and more from you, Subversa! I adore all your works. (:
Dearie, This poem is simply amazing. I love the italic rhyme schemes, very intense, very well written. I love it, keep writing for you are an inspiration to me, who only has one poem accepted by this site. ^-^
Author's Response: An inspiration? Woah, that is really one of the nicest things I\'ve ever read in my reviews. Your poem was *fantastic* by the way and you should post more up soon!
Thanks for reviewing!
Amazing finish! Bravo, bravo! (:
I adored it, simply adored it!
Well done!
Congratulations!
I'm sad to see it's done.
Hehe Fox and Rose. I found it ironic the book was called the Little Prince when that was Snape's mum's maiden name. ;)
Special thanks to my awesome beta, SometimeSelkie.
I would love to read the unedited version.
I am enjoying the story so far. It has detail, but it does not drag on so much. It is a bit of a quick read for me, but I enjoy the quanity of chapters. (: keep it up, eager to see more!
sequelllllllllllllllll.
you write your stories exactly as I do.
I tend to start with the stanza of a poem, but most often the lyric of a song to set the mood. Haha. (: And I am enjoying the story so far! Very creative!