Wow that was really good. I read through it in two days, and believe me, that's impressive for me. I have to really love something to do that, and I just adored that. I would go on for hours but my right arm is wrapped up so I'm typing this one-handed. I'll try to leave you the review you deserve when I get to feeling better. Just let me say that the ending was perfect, an awesome time-traveling story with everything appearing rational and everything. The ending was bittersweet, and that's what I love i an ending. Thanks so much for this. It was AWESOME!

I am speechless--and that doesn't happen to me very often.

But let me say that I absolutely loved it! I believe with all my heart that it's how HP should have been.. I read this, expecting it to end sadly with Severus, but to have Lily leaving James at the altar (oh that is priceless. Imagine the look at that toerag's face!) and having her go to Severus. I feel like I'm going to cry, my word! This is incredible, the best Severus/Lily story I have read.

I do wish you'd write a sequel, because I truly want more. But, for now, I give you a thousand well-dones and a thousand thanks. You made this Severus/Lily shipper's day...week...heck, I can die happy now!

Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you enjoyed it. This little AU sure would mess up the canon story line, though, wouldn\'t it? Oddly enough, I think it was bunnied by dear Slian\'s portrait of Severus with a brandy. Not to mention a lot of writing about both characters.

Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m glad you enjoyed it. This little AU sure would mess up the canon story line, though, wouldn\'t it? Oddly enough, I think it was bunnied by dear Slian\'s portrait of Severus with a brandy. Not to mention a lot of writing about both characters.

When I first saw the summary to this story, I burst into laughter and the story was good too. I reallly enjoyed it and couldn't stop reading (which really is rare for me right now). The characterization is really good for all the characters and lit' Hermione is so adorable. And what's that--- I think I hear the ice on Draco's heart cracking. Children have a way of doing that. I raise my glass to you--you have a good imagination to come up with a story like this. Please, PLEASE post up more.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. *squishes* You really flatter me too much. Children definitely have a way of cracking evil people\'s hearts. I shall post as soon as I can

You know, I should probably feel sorry for Harry considering that's the second time in two days he's gotten slugged, but somehow I can't muster up the sympathy. I love the way you characterize Harry, showing him as arrogant, because he always had that side of him and I don't like fanfics that show him as 'perfect'.

This chapter was funny. I loved 'Scorpius the Dragon'. The line 'I think you and I are going to get along just fine now, Granger' was so sweet, but perfectly in character.

Ron's reaction was nice. I really enjoyed it. Overall, another adored chapter. I think your story is the only one I continue to read on this site, just because I'm so busy, but I always find time for your updates.

I do have a couple of things to critique though.

#1: You should really italisize character thoughts, because all of a sudden the story was in third person and then it was in first. I figure out it was Ron thinking to himself pretty quickly, but to avoid taking readers out of the story, you should put italics there.

#2: in the last section you said 'now' instead of 'not', no big deal, just something I caught

#3: I don't think you should refer to Draco as the 'former' Slytherin. He didn't change houses, he's still a Slytherin, even if he isn't still at Hogwarts. 'Once a Slytherin, always a Slytherin'. But that's just my opinion.

Yeah, I know I generally just leave a 'wow, I loved it, update soon' review, but I thought I'd spend a few extra moments giving you a nice long view like you deserved. So, to sum it all up:

I loved it! Please, PLEASE, update soon. (tehe - no seriously, take your time. I'm sure it will be worth waiting for)

Author's Response: Thanks for your thoughtful review. I love to read your reviews (no matter how short), and I\'m so glad that you still read my story regardless of your busy life. XD As for the critique, thank you so much! Lol. I read through the story after it was updated/submitted, and I noticed those same things like the italics, and the now, but haven\'t gotten around to changing it due to my own hectic life. However, I really appreciate it. Thank you. As for Draco, true that! Always a Slytherin. Thanks so much. -hugs- Ritta

Bravo! I didn't really care for this the first time I read through, but I went back and, as every poem should be, studied it and I found it quite wonderful. The emotions were understandable, but were described remarkably well. This poem was very noteworthy. Bravo!


((this is thegirllikeme from the forums. Still loving the avie you made for me))

This was really good and really funny. I couldn't stop chuckling. Good job and thanks for the laughs. *adds stories to favs*

Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I\'m glad I made you chuckle. Thank you very much for reviewing!

Ooooh, Snape. I love Snape, and you did a good job in characterization - though I'm slightly confused on where this is going. He was hard on Harry which mean he still hates Snape. But shouldn't he love Neville's mum? Because the whole thing of the sacrifice protection on Harry was because Lily chose to die instead of live and she only had that choice because of Snape. I know this was probably written pre-DH but I'm still really confused on how it will turn out. Oh well, nothing left to do but keep reading. Good job, I really like this story.

Author's Response: This was written pre-DH (as was all of my PS, DH came out between me finishing PS and beginning COS), but I think my version of Snape\'s storyline still works out. Rule No. 1 for this fic is that everything that happened pre Voldemort\'s choice of Neville over Harry (in mid 1981) remains canon. So Snape still loved Lily and has no interest in Alice Longbottom (That is of course why he is still mean to Harry). I have come up with a (I hope) plausible reason why Voldemort offered to spare Alice, but I don\'t know when it will be revealed (maybe not until my DH). It has nothing to do with Snape, however. Snape\'s story over the course of this series will differ (starting in GOF) and his loyalties will even further be called into question. After DH came out, I had to sit down and plan out all of Snape\'s story very carefully and I think it has the potential to be one of the highlights of the second half of the series. I hope you\'re still reading when we get there...

I've been meaning to read this story from the moment I saw it's title first appear in the new stories but I never got around to it. Same on me. I've always wanted what would have happened if it had been Neville and not Harry who had been the boy who lived, and thanks to this, we'll soon find out.

At first I was afraid that since this was AU, that it might not be the Neville that I know in love, but as I had hoped, you captured his personality beautifully. And you captured the grandmother's as well. Details were good, and everything was simply wonderful. I can't wait to read the next part of this part of the story!

Signed,
The Order of the House Elves

Merry Christmas from your fellow 'Claws!

Author's Response:

Wow, a review for PS! I haven\'t had one of these for a while. Thank you!

I thought it was pretty good. I actually can't believe I sat down and read this when I should have been writing in NaNoWiriMo -- but it was interesting anyways. I always thought Hermione had a touch of Slytherin in her -- she always was a ambitious as one and had the potential to be as cunning. I liked how you brought that out of her. Also, I like how the Slytherins hated her because she was a Muggleborn, but still managed to be fond of her. I think that it might be different if there was an actual Muggleborn in Slytherin, but for this story you made it work. I liked how to interwoved things into canon -- and that last line with Ron was cute.

But I still have a lot of questions left over that easily could have been answered if you'd added a bit more detail. 1: I have no idea why Draco was at Grimmauld Place, or what time the scene took place (before or after the last battle), or why Draco was there? I'm just really confused. And what happened with the spell that Hermione cast on Draco's wand? Since he didn't use it, it didn't do anything. Wouldn't she use that to prove Draco's innocence? And were you trying to imply that because she had cast the spell, that was why he didn't kill Dumbledore?

2: I have no idea if this was supposed to be Draco/Hermione or Hermione/Ron -- because you sort of hinted at both. That thing isn't really as important, but I was just confused because I expected a bit more during the last part that would show, if put in Slytherin, which person Hermione would end up with.

Besides the many questions I still have, it was good--an interesting look at a Slytherin Hermione. Good job.

Chante'

Author's Response: Wow, Chante, thank you so much for this! I\'m so glad.

Now, to your questions.

Wow - that was...amazing.

I adore Severus - he's my favorite character - and I've always known that to be asked to kill Dumbledore would have been sheer torture for him, and you put that into words perfectly. I loved the beginning of this - adored it in fact. The narration was beautiful, and the details were potent. You showed an awesome understanding of a part of human nature.

Characterization was spot on. I loved this line: It was a look of the purest empathy and it frightened me more than anything has frightened me before. It was so much the way that he would have viewed empathy and pity - hating it, because it scared him.

In short, this piece was outstanding.

The only two pieces of criticism I had was once you said thy instead of they and I don't think Severus would have thought that everyone was horrible, because of Lily. She had been wonderful, and I think you could have mentioned that a little more (I know Dumbledore hinted at it, but Severus should have thought it). But seeing how Lily's gone, I can still see him as viewing the world the way you described him viewing it.

To sum it up, I loved this story. It captured Severus potently and I absolutely adore it. Wonderful job!

Signed,
The Order of the House Elves

Merry Christmas from the Ravenclaws!

Author's Response: Wow! Thank you so much for this great review! I\'m honoured you liked my story enough to put this much effort into reviewing it.

I suppose in retrospect I could have mentioned Lily a little more... To be honest I didn\'t think much about it.

Thank you so very much, once again, for a wonderful review. Merry Christmas to you too! :)