Nooo!!! Harry might Hate Hermione! No your so evil, and i luv it! I love cliff hangers, love writing them [;-)] luv reading them!!! You could have said somehting like "a change came over his face as he looked at Hermione standing in font of him", and that could have meant either good or bad... but most likely bad... but at least then we would have known!!

Bah, I'm just a mess of ramblings! ~Lurid*

I’m about to facepalm. Said it wouldn’t be about errors. Scrolling back up I found this beauty: Their deficiency, separates them from their superiors, Ooops a daisy, spare comma. *ducks the rotten fruit* Oh well. I succumbed to the spell checking powers of Word, so now we’re even :).

Eegad! Albus Dumbledore, second tier wizard? Oh, you’re evil. But then I thought to myself ‘No, I’m not deluded about Albus Dumbledore’s great powers – no. No, the Third Tier has decided he’s too much of a threat to Turpin’… and then I was like. Dude. That guy has a no body with the Turpin name at Hogwarts in canon. This Turpin guy has lots of little kitties that he’s patting and stroking the wrong was on the head. And he’s not paying these kitties enough. And sooner or later, these kitties are going to get themselves veteo’d and be all ‘Fine!’ and they’re going to stamp their feet and run to Dumbledore.

So, no, I’m not deluded about Albus’ powers at all. Not one little bit. He’s pacing himself, hee. And might I add I love the fact Sirius is free, alive, but still a rebel? Because I totally love that about him in this. Sirius's utilitarian soldier's black robes only hinted at the athletic build they covered. You’re mean..

Hee. Lucius is a law abiding cop. And it’s so belittling, because he’s really not that important. He just thinks he is. This chapter is just making me giddy with all the stabs at people!

"Did you say leave, Captain? I could use some liberty" Shelia said. She rose out of her cat crouch and into a sinuous stretch. Could I buy a comma, please? Maybe we should move the one from above down here. Sly bugger, going walk-abouts. And while I’m unwillingly being nitpicky, you’ve said that both James’ and Harry’s hair is/was brown. I suppose you could attribute this to AU, and then you wouldn’t have to shoot daggers at me for being mean :). And maaaaate these chapters are long But you’ve sucked me in. So now I’ll be here until YOU wake up and my sun comes up. Not that there’s anything wrong with that…

Author's Response: hehehe, my chapters aren\'t long. Jan\'s chapters are long. Thanks for the lovely review dear.

It was Dumbeldore's Is it a bird? A plane? NO! It’s Dumbeldore, champion strongman of Hogwarts! *giggles*

She just listened to the children and offered those who were simpatico a connection to the fringe they were looking for. Spanish. Impressive. *nods* And I feel for Minnie here. And it’s quite sad how she remembers something like that so vividly.

Um. Highly embarrassing. I just hit myself on the mouth at the mention of Tom Riddle. Too bloody evil. And how ironic that Harry picked AK, and Tom’s like ‘Yes, well, I’d bee a good little boy if I killed someone mercilessly that could easily have been put into an institution, pummeled full of drugs and then come back and kicked my ass.’ That made no sense to anyone except in my mind.

We need to win this year's intercontinental match because we lost to the Australians last year. Of course they did. We pwn, even at sport that technically doesn’t exist anywhere else but in our mind.

Oh. And he’s still The Evil. Obviously. A bird can’t change his feathers, just because a highly awesome/trained author wants him to appear to have done so.

Author's Response: *nod* Minnie is a sad character. And yes, you Aussies are to be feared. Riddle? Riddle is so the hero. What are you talking about?

Today, loud girlish shrieking was apparent in the background. Heeeee. I noticed back in the "tea party" chapter that Charlie seemed to be channelling Bill's curse-breaking abilities, and I was dearly hoping that pecy would still be his anal, pedantic self. Thanking you for bringing me delight and reminding me of their names!

Author's Response: :D *loves*

"You have to say," Sirius said. He circled around the desk, throwing Peter back into his seat. He planted a knee in the traitor's groin. "Say what you've done." He applied pressure until Peter began to whimper helplessly. ... GUH. I like this Sirius. I forgot how much I loved him! I LOOOOOOVE the way you stil have those canon details and then you twist them - so that they're exactly the same, but different! And this interrogation brought out Sexy!Sirius. Bridget. Bridget. Squee.

And the Seamus - duh. I so didn't pick up on the hint earlier when Harry said he knew him. Sneaky. Very sneaky. Me dad's a Muggle, mam's a witch. SO clever. You're scary. I have never read another fiction that could potentially sand on it's own away from the Potterverse. It's... remarkable, really. You've won me over completely.

Author's Response: *hugs* Sexy Sirius is fun :) Thanks so much m\'dear.

The emergence of a colony of radical Quidditch players in Antarctica who live their lives to the beat of that complex game is a recent development.
Can I just start this by saying your choice of countries is just hilarious? Alright, now that that’s been said…

He knew the man behind the scars and the prosthetics now, and Mad Eye Moody didn't scare him anymore.
Ah. Good detail. I love the way writers say intelligent things in order to make themselves sound like a confidante. Like, you could have said behind his scars an the fake leg, but you didn’t. In English, we’re supposed to say what word choice achieves. I’m not sure exactly. It just gives a little of you away, I think. As a writer, and a little bit as a person. Seeing as writing is so personal… and I’m really rambling. I just wanted to say that I like your style a lot.

I’ve never really thought about an Animagus potion. Either that’s your brilliant idea, or it’s on the Lexicon and I’ve been a bad little Potter nerd, and don’t know it. One of the things that amazes me most is the way you bring small details into the story, like this. Even if they’re not canon, you just skim over them lightly, adding the right amount of importance. Because you get those stories and that say briefly, “he went into the cupboard and got this which actually did this, this, and this.” That’s one of the things I like about this. The Red flags in the prison, the potion, the sticky stone, the bog monster curse… they’re all non-canon things, but you just make them seem like we should already know them, so you’re going to leave us in the dust while you just speed on, leaving us in the wake of your brilliance.

See, when I read your chapters things are so connected to the other chapters it’s a little hard to sort of pick out instances that stand out, because they’re like an unfinished scarf. It’s like.. you go to stop, but you just can’t. I mean, I’d love to write a paragraph on every single perspective you go through in this, but one, it would be incredibly long, and two, that would prolong the time it took for me to reach the end. I just… I don’t know how to explain it. Once you begin you can’t stop? Not so much. While this is a good thing it’s not the exact phrase I’m looking for. You just… get sucked in. Which is good, actually. Thank god for clichés. I’m supposed to be commenting on the whole Bart/Melinda scene, but... there’s just so much packed into each part I can’t pull something specific out to comment one once I’m on a roll. It’s all one neat, lovely little package.

Why were his best a brightest going down there to freeze their collective arses off?
Even though this line is quite funny, it doesn’t disguise the mistake. Cough. I believe the phrase is ‘best and brightest’, dear. I like the term collective. Like I said before, I like when you use more intelligent words. Sometimes, to the younger readers I suppose they could be confusing, but I just like the connotations associated with the less used words. *snuggles* And you said arse. Huzzuh for that.

Um, with the tunnel to London – brilliant idea, actually. But, I’m thinking… isn’t the Platform in London? They leave the station at eleven in the morning, and arrive at nighttime, because it’s dark when they arrive. So it’d take an awfully long time to get to London. They’d spend the whole day walking, if not longer, and then they’d have to walk back without actually doing anything. And someone told me that Hogwarts is actually… in Scotland? I’m not too great at geography, but maybe someone who actually knows this for definite, or lives there might be able to help you out… or catch you out :D.

And you know Bridget dear, that we will never hate you for your work. Because, quite obviously, you’ve already turned me into a rat and faced the worst of my wrath, haven’t you?

Author's Response: Hey! It\'s kinda funny that you pick out words in the composition and say, sophisticated, when I\'m more used to people commenting on the simplicity of the prose style. As for the tunnel thingie. It first appeared way earlier in the fic, a secret exit from the school through an enchanted tunnel. This isn\'t Hogwarts and I haven\'t hinted where the school is actually located as of yet. But no, it isn\'t close enough for a real tunnel to be a reasonable transit mechanism. But as it\'s enchanted, the walk takes around 5 minutes. :D It\'s nice to have a SPEWer reading your fic. *hugs* Thanks dear!

Oh.. my.. no... *pants* halrious, Crafty. Been a while! I really must get updated on your story, it's been such a long time since i read it.

Reading this for the second time was just.. so totally right. I don't knwo how i would have conqured the boredom of this Thursday afternoon without it, lol.

Crafty equals love. I was starting to annoy my sister wiht all the lauhging at the "lets walk to dinner dso i can see your muscles ripple" bit. I heart this humor fic.~10

BTW, which cheeks were you talking about when he was jumping on the bed? =-D

Author's Response: Probably both sets, don't you think? Teeheehee :)

*nods and keeps going*

One word.

Guh.

Or, two. Yay.

So, I’m a huge fan on very distinctly canon!style writing. Probably because my own attempts are so far removed from JKR’s particular style. I do think you have your own style, but it’s a good change from the usual, “So this is the random protagonist I’m inserting for the love of it. And by the way she’s cool m’kay”. So huzzuh for believable characters.

"Sorry," Siobhan shrugged uncaringly before sitting down.
McGonagall stared at her.

I’m always hesitant to criticise when I’m not perfect myself, but maybe the second sentence should be attached to the first, instead of being a new paragraph. I think that works better than before the dialogue, because to me, there’s something about reprimanding!McGonagall that always requires a new line for dialogue.

"What are you all chatting about?" … Draco had in store for her that evening.
And again, there needs to be paragraphing. I deleted the guts of it for space purposes, but it’s right before the break before the paragraph on Draco’s inexpertness. Because I know you probably took great delight in writing that and would know where it is >.>.

Speaking of which, I love your not so casual hints about his lack of skill. This - and she felt his already open mouth collide with the bottom half of her face. - would have to be the best one, though.

Lucius sure as hell better be worth this. Interesting. Leaves me wondering whether or not she means in her dreams, while with Draco, or whether she’s actually going to be with Lucius. And now I have to reboot my computer to continue enjoying this!

And by enjoying, I mean, deleting the other review, submitting this one, and saving your page :).