i can't find my review anywhere. :S and im sure i did leave one. anyways, i was re-reading the fic and i just wanted to say that... girl, you rock!! i absolutely love all your fics (the ones which ive read, i mean), but i still like this one best. =D

Author's Response: =D Well, I do try. No, seriously, thanks, I\'m really glad you like them! I like writing them, so I guess everybody wins ... really. Thank you.

first of all, CONGRATULATIONS!! =)
and i read this one cause you won, i dont read the same-sex pairing fics. anyways, this is really good... though... a baby?! =O is that possible...??

Author's Response: Look, there are ways that people can get pregnant without being in a heterosexual relationship. Also, Purplemage won; I was the runner-up. Thanks for reviewing.

Lily and Peter's conversation was pretty sweet. I'm glad that he just isn't an 'ego booster' in your fic. Because he IS a part of the group. He betrays them LATER. Before he's a FRIEND. 

“You know, waking up to half naked girls is quite the life.”

LOL. Sirius-ly. I loved this part. It was so bloody hilarious. Oh, I love James. =D

I'm sort of sleepy right now so I can't specifically point out the lines, all I can mention is that in the flashback, there was a line in which you've written 'tired' instead of 'tried', and 'Apparating' wasn't capitalized, same with 'Marauder'. Otherwise, it was perfect! I'll be reading the whole thing from start tomorrow. 'Cause I really love this fic. (my exams end tomorrow! =D)

 Thanks for writing this lovely chapter! =)

three people cant castrate james. and i dont want him to become a eunuch. pleasseee. lol
right, good chapter. love your fic. update soon. please. (i can even write ong sentences as well as short. lol. how lame was that?)

Author's Response: That would be terrible for James! ;) I\'m glad you like the story; thanks for the review.

Uh... so I got to read this chapter more than a month later after you updated it... >.> But I had computer problems, so... But I'm back again! And I've got two more chapters to read. =D But I'll review this one first. =]

First, I'll just point out some errors:
She didn’t his heed his desperate plea.
The first 'his' should be deleted.

She hadn’t just seen what she though she had.
Thought, not though.

“Don’t touch me!” snarled Emma, backing away from his just as Lily had, crying out, “How could you? After everything they did to us?!”
It should be: '...backing away from him...' And, no double punctuation marks together, so either remove the exclamation or the question mark in the end.

Sirius gave another chocking sound, and his face began rapidly losing all colour.
I believe you meant 'choking' and not 'chocking'.

“Do you have any idea where Ted and Emma went?” McGonagall questioned after a long stretch of silence had enveloped them all.
This is quite an un-McGonagall-ish dialogue. At least, she would use the surnames and not first names and nick names.

Yeah, done. =D

This chapter was pretty intense I must say. Lily especially. Quite an emotional roller coaster ride for her. First, shock, then denial, confusion, suspicion and what not. And then the rubber band just stretches and loses it. Why did they have to break? *sob* I feel so sorry for James. He was so mature in this chapter, always trying to keep his temper under control and begging to her in the end for her companionship.

Sirius sort of over reacted but then he's got family issues and it's understandable. But I really like how he comes to James' defense about the Animagi part. Shows how close the two are.

Very well written chapter! *goes to read the next one*

Author's Response: Thanks so much for pointing out all of those typos. I always appreciate it, and they have now been fixed! :) You mention the issues Sirius has with his family -- I actually address that a few chapters from now, both the problems themselves and how they relate to this whole situation. James was acting mature in this chapter, but sadly it was not enough to keep Lily from losing it. Of course, we all know what happens in the end, so. . . Thanks for the review!

Oh, crap. Crap. Crap. Crap.

This can't be happening... O.o

*is waiting impatiently for the next chapter*

*is too shocked to write a proper review*

Update soon. I beg of you.

P.S. Very well written chapter. Wonder what will happen to Emma...

that was awesome!! sirusly!
and yeah, there better be some good revenge.
well, i guess il have to wait for a week for the update, right?

Author's Response: Thanks! Revenge can be very good sometimes *evil smirk* If all goes well, another update should come as soon as the site opens again.

Woah. I had no idea that the title was based on a song. O.o But it's so appropriate. Maybe I'll look it up some day. =p

On with the review now. One thing, first, the chapter title is pretty fitting too. And so true.



I like how abrupt the starting is and that it's a negative feeling. The thought after it shows that James used to be arrogant. That there was something to why Lily called him 'arrogant' and not just because she thought him that.



The debate he has in his mind is quite natural. What to do? What to bring win back Lily? What to bring back the girl he loves? It shows how human he acts even though he's just a made up character. I know I've mentioned it quite a few times but I sirius-ly do love your James. He's mature but not overly so. He definitely has his moments of being arrogant but they're under control now and show that he has changed though not completely. That it would take time.



I love the cold/hot thing. How James likes being warm because it's comfortable and he always used to be that until Lily leaves and he suddenly feels cold. It's more of how he feels emotionally than physically.



Also, his thoughts about the firsts... he's truthful enough to admit to himself that he hadn't fallen head over heals for Lily at once. That he hadn't fallen in love at first sight. In fact, there had been many other girls before him. That she was just a crush, and sometimes a challenge. A ego thing. But, then, he comes close in contact with her. And viola! And, then, the jealously factor makes him admit. Now his feelings were so, that they weren't actually together... er... physically doesn't matter much to him. It's more of love and less of lust. He's willing to wait as long as he gets what he wants. And, he's willing to commit. In fact, he wants to. And he's even willing to be all friendly with Ted even though he doesn't want to. Shows how much he needs Lily.



After he finds Lily, he's relieved, but worried, but he's also in control and will fight for her life. He's panicked but he doesn't show it unlike Sirius and Emma. But he's obviously hoping, and praying.


Then there's Sirius. He completely fits. He's furious. And he's had had his own personal experiences no one would envy. It's just so natural that he should think of running away from Hogwarts too since he had run away from his home before. But he's loyal to the Marauders. *loves* It's sort of ironic though how he's thinking of 'Peter' and 'loyalty'. It is so Sirius, showing his anger at an apple. He still has brotherly feelings for Regulus, too. Shows that he's not cut off everything. He can't. No matter how hard he tries. He has a heart which refuses to hate his brother. He wants to change what's happening. But he can't. He's helpless. And he hates that feeling. When he finds Lily, he's horrified. He doesn't know what's happening around. He can't think. Lily's about die, and with him will die his best friend. His brother. The one person he cares most about in the world.



Emma's all freaked out. But she isn't in denial because she's a matter of fact girl. But that doesn't mean that she wants it to be the truth. She knows and it hurts. Her love is on the side she is against. And he has put her best friend, more likely her only friend, on her death bed. She was utterly happy some time back. And then suddenly everything has been snatched away from her. And she can't do anything to put her life back to normal. She ends up singing a song she loves. She ends up reminiscing. Talking about Lily and James and the hardships and the song. She's vulnerable. A feeling she's never shown.



Love the determination in the last line. And I hope like hell they find the antidote soon. I know they will find it, obviously, but I hope it happens soon. I really feel sorry for them all. *hugs them*


Also, somewhere in the chapter you mention Lily's BFF. Um, I don't think that in those days there were terms like these so maybe you should change it to 'good friend' or something. I thought of saying 'bosom friend' first but then that might be a bit too much maybe.



I can't wait till the next update!



- Afifa



Author's Response: Thanks so much for such a long, detailed review! This makes my day :) I absolutely adore James -- even if he is a fictional character -- and I'm to know you think I write his character well. I never really thought he fell in love with her at first sight or that his fourteen-year-old self could really be madly in love with her. I just don't think fourteen-year-old boys can EVER be madly in love with someone. As for Sirius -- he always seemed so tortured to me, and I love the character that J.K. Rowling has created: a boy who is so good, loyal and brave, yet so angry, bitter, and simply flawed. It's good to know you think I did a good job with him, too! Really, though, the person I think is worst off in this chapter is Emma. They'll definitely be more on her and what she's going through! Thanks again for the review; I'll have to change that one line.

i love sirius!!! and i love this fic too!!
one thing though...
Harry will have to spend his life with his Aunt and Uncle, who happen to detest what he is.
this thought shows that sirius knows that the dursleys wont treat harry properly, but in the third book, he hesitates when asking harry if he wanted to live with him, thinking that harry had a lovely time with the dursleys.

yeah, so now im going to add you in my favourite authors list... i can't believe it that i never added you before! *curses herself* anyways, contiue writing such good fics. =)

Author's Response: Wow, I\'m really honoured to be on your favourites list! No, really I am. Thank you. I think, in the third book, after so long, Sirius was very unsure of himself, he hadn\'t been able to get to know Harry, he doubted himself and their relationship very much at that point. Sirius is very complicated ... I think he was just really self-doubting to be honest. But still ... it\'s a good point. Thanks for reviewing!

Lovely! =D