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Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 07/28/09 17:37 · For: 11. Celebrating Samhain
powerful! although I must have missed how draco was reading ginny's thoughts--was it legilimency or something else?


Name: WIZARDMANIA (Signed) · Date: 07/27/09 9:45 · For: 11. Celebrating Samhain
hesperides' apple chapter 11. wow that was a great chapter can't wait for the next one i really want to know what is going to happen.


Name: Ginny_Luvs_Malfoy (Signed) · Date: 07/24/09 12:11 · For: 11. Celebrating Samhain
oh wow... very interesting. timing is everything isnt it?


Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 07/23/09 16:50 · For: 10. Preparing Halloween
I am so, so glad you updated. looks like things are heating up for ginny...


Name: Ginny_Luvs_Malfoy (Signed) · Date: 07/22/09 17:13 · For: 10. Preparing Halloween
wow you really have to update more.. but on a good note you're story is one of the only reason ive been coming back to the site to read.. its just freakin awesome...XD


Name: WIZARDMANIA (Signed) · Date: 07/22/09 11:19 · For: 10. Preparing Halloween
great story so far... keep up the good work. so wen is the next part going to come, i really want to know what happens


Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 02/03/09 19:44 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
more please :) !!


Name: whirling dervish (Signed) · Date: 12/07/08 22:24 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
hahahah I actually live in New Zealand and thought the names of your All Blacks team were fantastic. Very.. polynesian sounding. Looking foward to the next chapter, more, more!


Name: R_Ravenclaw (Signed) · Date: 08/30/08 9:09 · For: 2. A journey of discovery
I know I've already talked all about characterisation last review, but I must say that you're definitely not disappointing me this time around — I think it's excellent. These few lines, I thought, are excellent examples:

Not a bathtub, a pool. Everything here must be to the measure of their ego.

Regardless of what she becomes, she is paid for this. Nothing more than a lucky courtesan. A high-class prostitute.

"Well, we couldn't exactly affo-" Ginny began without shame.


Also, one of the best things I think you're accomplishing so far is how you're writing the relationship. They seem to be having an affection for each other without it being unbelievable or forced. And considering this is basically an arranged marriage, I think it's coming off perfectly.

And though he had promised himself he would not care, that if she suited him he would be satisfied with the new woman the agency had sent, he found himself longing to know more about her past. In fact, rather than knowing more about her, he wanted to know things about her that she would not want him to know.

I feel badly for Draco and Ginny here. I love that Draco wants to know more about Ginny, and I think that's lovely, but she has so many secrets… it's going to be hard for her.

I think my favourite line in regards to their relationship would have to be:

He couldn't bring himself to figure out which young woman, of the bright and direct, or the sophisticated one, he preferred.

It makes me feel for Draco. He wants to like the proper Ginevra, but instead he's falling for Ginny, who he knows he shouldn't like this much. How perfectly written. As a D/G fan, this makes me very happy. :]

Another thing I thought you wrote perfectly in this section was the descriptions of the Malfoy Manor. It seems just like a house the Malfoys would have, and you really make it come alive. I could just envision the house and the grounds this chapter, and you made it truly lovely. I want to live there! :]

Oh! You missed an html tag to end the italics at the beginning of the chapter, so basically the entire thing was italicised on MNFF. It was annoying (I actually couldn't stand it so I had to go find it on Fire and Ice) so you might want to go and fix that.

I really have no con-crit for this chapter. There's a lot of things I hope to see in future chapters. I really can't wait to read them!

~Alison


Name: R_Ravenclaw (Signed) · Date: 08/17/08 10:18 · For: 1. Ashes to ashes, the past relinquished
I've been searching and searching for the perfect Draco/Ginny fic — one that's original and slightly angsty. I think this is it. I read your fic ages ago, when it only had about four chapters, so I'm glad to see it again. (I'm also glad I don't remember any of it so that I can be surprised. :] )

First I think I should mention how amazing the basic idea behind this fic is. I've never seen anything like it. It's so ridiculously original, it's just really a joy to read. I've read and written Draco/Ginny fics, but nothing comes close to this in originality. I wonder how you came up with the idea.

Hm, now to everything else. First off, I love the relationship between Draco and his family. So often in fanfic the Malfoys really hate each other, and in here I was glad to see Draco amused (though slightly annoyed) by his mother, and sad about his father's death:

"Me neither." For the first time, a hint of hurt pierced through the cool tone of Draco Malfoy's words.

Poor Draco. :[

Also, because this fic seems as thought it's going to be very dark, I was pleasantly surprised to find such unexpected humour. Not too much, but just the right amount. My favourite:

"I'm going to string pieces of raw meat in front of the Manor and wait for the widest woman to show up, attracted by the stench?"

*giggles* I also found Ginny's lessons (it feels like she's becoming a princess or something! ;] ) to be highly amusing.

The characterisations are excellent so far, which is quite a feat for a fic that is this unusual.

Ginny is especially well-done. I think you perfectly capture her fierce and determined attitude.

Ginny Weasley looked her straight in the eye. It was now or never.

"I will meet him," she said, willing her voice to be firm, "and marry him if necessary."


Draco is also wonderfully written. You managed to pull off his coolness while not making him evil or too nice. There wasn't much about him this chapter, so I can't wait to see how you write him in future chapters.


A couple of things confused me, though. Why did Ginny go to Lucius' funeral? It seems like a random thing to do and was never explained. She was there, right?

Also, Ginny's reaction when she finds out that she's marrying Draco:

"Draco Malfoy."

A wave of reassurance and pleasure chilled Ginny back to common sense.


Why is Ginny happy that it's Draco? Does she understand that he isn't really evil? Did she ever get to know him? Is she just glad it's someone she knows fairly well?

This confused me even more later:

"No, Madame, I am as pleasantly surprised as you are," Ginny lied.

So does this mean she never really was happy about it at all? In which case that previous quote wouldn't make sense.

It seems as though Ginny's reaction to it being Draco could be expanded on, and I think that would make it more interesting. What exactly is she thinking? Did she regret signing the paper? Unless these questions are going to be answered next chapter, I think that would have been very interesting to read here.

I also really want to know how the Weasleys died. Are we going to find out in later chapters?

Last thing: this fic is very intriguing, and has me dying to know what is going to happen. (If only I had discovered it during them summer when I had time to read!) I especially wonder when Draco is going to find out she's Ginny (or if he will… but I assume he will…) and if he's ever going to love her. And if she's going to love him as well. I certainly hope so, being a die-hard Draco/Ginny shipper. But I'm sure whatever you come up with will be perfect, whether there is a happy ending or not.

~Alison


Name: dracois4ever (Signed) · Date: 08/05/08 8:56 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
Great story so far, I look forward to reading your updates.


Name: Ginny_Luvs_Malfoy (Signed) · Date: 07/28/08 1:47 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
Oh. Wow. im starting to notice a very nasty twist taking place... excellent so far... woot! you rock! XD


Name: mathgirl365 (Signed) · Date: 07/27/08 11:55 · For: 1. Ashes to ashes, the past relinquished
different way to get Ginny and Draco together but it works and keeps the reader wanting to read! BRAVO!


Name: amzing (Signed) · Date: 07/23/08 9:15 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
I might have to hurt you if ginny and malfoy are torn apart because of ginny's quest for revenge...i really like them as a couple and while i understand why ginny has to ruin malfoy..maybe it wont all lead back to malfoy...maybe it was someone else...well thats my hopeful thinking... overalll im so glad you finally updated....and i liked this chapter alot..even though its not my favorite..it was well written...( although i din't like that part with hermione and ginny at the very end...like ive said i really dont want anything bad to happen to draco and ginny's relationship because i do love them together) i hope your next chapter comes soon...good luck


Name: K_Bella (Signed) · Date: 07/22/08 19:50 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
I really like the inconspicuous ways people are starting to realize it's actually Ginny Weasley...I can't wait until the next chapter!!! I'm completely hooked....keep it up!


Name: K_Bella (Signed) · Date: 07/21/08 21:44 · For: 3. Lifestyles of the Rich and the Famous
I like this chapter the best so far.
Draco is acting more like Ginny's "suitor" and less like her "owner".
I also like that even with the hints Draco still doesn't realize who Ginny is.
very well writen


Name: violetta (Signed) · Date: 07/21/08 17:34 · For: 9. Of ice and Wood
Well, That chapter was good, but the part about Ginny watching the magic mirror with her brothers irked me for some reason.


Name: marionettegirl (Signed) · Date: 07/20/08 23:54 · For: 1. Ashes to ashes, the past relinquished
I absolutely love this story
I can't bring myself to express how much awesome there is in here o_o

thank you for writing this, i've been following up on the chapters as soon as they come out and i can't wait to see the next! i wonder what role oliver will be playing XD

keep it up!


Name: violetta (Signed) · Date: 07/07/08 11:02 · For: 8. Kindling suspicion
Ooh, what a perfect ending to this chapter! Please update quickly!


Name: whirling dervish (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 2:40 · For: 8. Kindling suspicion
MORE please!!!!


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