Name: Oregonian (Signed) · Date: 01/05/14 1:51 · For: The promises that they hold

Hi, Sarah. This is Vicki of Slytherin House. I have been widening my experience by reading Next Generation fics, which I had not been reading before because I had thought that I wouldn’t enjoy them (silly me!), and I really do enjoy this story of yours, and am sorry to see that it is lying in a state of suspended animation after five chapters.

Although it is told entirely from Lily’s point of view, all the characters are well defined; their personalities just shine through. You have achieved great success in this area. Your storytelling talents are also admirable; the plot progresses steadily, and the many details that make the story so vivid are all directed toward the furtherance of the characters and the plot. There is a lot of imaginative originality here.

You have avoided skipping too quickly through the progression of events. You have avoided dragged-out conversations that don’t go anywhere. You have avoided stereotypes that are overused to the point of being boring. You have successfully steered your ship of Romance between the rocks of sickly sweetness and angstiness without getting wrecked on either one or allowing a tsunami of Romance to overwhelm the rest of the story.

I can’t really think of anything that I didn’t like about your story. It would be worthwhile to come back to this story and finish it up.

Name: Luna Thomas (Signed) · Date: 05/23/12 0:12 · For: The promises that they hold

please wright more

Author's Response: The next chapter is on it's way. Thank you for the review!

Name: kobbiblue (Signed) · Date: 03/30/12 9:10 · For: Steps out of the shade

keep writing ...

Author's Response: Chapter 5 is coming soon I promise! I'm so sorry for the delay I've been busy. Thank you very much for reviewing :)

Name: Snowlily (Signed) · Date: 02/17/12 2:52 · For: Steps out of the shade

I like how you've written Lily's character: she's very...unconcerned. I'd like to see what happens when someone comes and bites back. =) Keep writing; I've been waiting for this story a long time. =)

Author's Response: I love Lily as well, she is something else! I'm so sorry I know I have taken forever but I've been busy. Chapter 5 is being beta-ed and Chapter 6 is in progress. You should be seeing the next chapter very very soon. Thank you so much for reading so far :)

Name: amyjoe (Signed) · Date: 08/28/11 7:27 · For: Now your dream is real

continue writing ...please......!!!

Author's Response: The next chapter is nearly finished I promise! I just have a lot going on with school right now. But thank you very much for the review.

Name: Snowlily (Signed) · Date: 08/04/11 18:40 · For: Now your dream is real

"Well, she's sometimes not like this...." Hugo is too honest for his own good! Much too short, I want much, much more! I'm so sad. You still haven't told me why Lily's hips are stiff. A healthy girl does not have stiff hips! Keep writing!

Author's Response: Haha I know! I love Hugo, he is so cute and such a Hufflepuff. Well don't worry the next chapter is very exciting, although that is according to me and I have been spending far too much time with it. You will find out soon, I promise. Thank you very much for the review!

Name: harry potter lovee (Signed) · Date: 08/04/11 8:51 · For: Now your dream is real

Awesome job! Next chapter please!

Author's Response: Why thank you! Don't worry it is nearly finished.

Name: parseltonuge (Signed) · Date: 07/09/11 8:27 · For: Animals strike curious poses

I just have to say, this is pure wizardry. It sounds much so like J.K. Rowling herself.

Author's Response: Oh wow! This has to be the best review ever, I'm so pleased haha! Thank you so much.

Name: Snowlily (Signed) · Date: 07/01/11 19:47 · For: Animals strike curious poses

I enjoyed it very much.... keep writing! I really want to know what happened to Lily, though.... with her hips..... please tell me! =)

Author's Response: Thank you! You will have to keep reading for that I'm afraid.

Name: Verita Serum (Signed) · Date: 06/26/11 8:01 · For: You can fall for pretty strangers

I am intrigued! Great start, I like your writing style and the character personalities. And I do enjoy Scorpius/Lily. Can't wait for your next update.

Author's Response: Thank you, I put a lot of work into my characters so it means a lot. The next update will be very soon.

Name: NextGenerationWriter (Signed) · Date: 06/14/11 12:05 · For: You can fall for pretty strangers

This is a good start. I like how the Malfoy's and Potter's don't absolutely hate eachother. I also like how it's going to be Lily/Scorpious, because it is my favorite ship, and there aren't enough of those stories. Keep writing.
~Brandon~

Author's Response: Thank you! And I agree there aren't enough Lily/Scorpius that's why I wrote this. The second chapter is in the queue. Sarah