Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/26/13 9:21 · For: Chapter 4 -Tea and Sympathy

"“They’re skilful. Good eye to hand coordination, but a bit boring, really, and went on all afternoon.”" Oliver should watch some T20 cricket. It's all the rage now and doesn't go on for days. :D
Moving on...oh where do i even start? Absolutely brilliant chapter with so many brilliant lines...
"“I think what Septima is going to tell you, Charity,” Remus said as he pulled up a chair, “is that I used to know Black. We were at school together, as was Septima.”" What an entry, Prof.Lupin, cool and casual and matter-of-fact forever. And Charity complaining about having to teach the Gryffindor team who can't sit still.
Oliver recovered from his team’s defeat faster than she’d thought possible. Unlike last year, there was no repeat of the fury that had caused such havoc; he’d even turned up on time to her lessons, much to everyone’s amusement.

“I might need a fall back option,” he retorted when Dorinda mocked him. “Or I could fail my NEWTS this year and come back to Hogwarts like your ex.”

She smiled acidly. “Keep failing, and by the age of fifty, you might just win the Cup, Wood!”
...
The little detail of Harry being delighted to see Remus, Remus talking about James...this was 3rd year, right? I wish I could see a bit of Hermione Granger but then I understand the focus is not on her year.
Great great last part., especially the last couple of sentences.

Author's Response: Yes, I couldn;t really get Hermione into the story, but id have plans for her originally because I imagine her being quite annoying and correcting everything Charity tells them - ha ha. Damn, I should have included her!

hahahahah - yeah, Oliver was probably watching an interminable Test Match and should have watched a one day international. I think he'd quite like football, but be frustrated at the lack of pace in cricket.

Thank you for reviewing. ~Carole~

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 02/23/13 13:45 · For: Chapter 4 -Tea and Sympathy

Fabulous chapter, Croll! I am enjoying this so much and am sad to see it nearly finished :( Gahh this is definitely one of my favouritest stories by you (I know I say this about a LOT of your stuff but damn it it's your fault for writing so well!) mainly because the characterisation of everyone present is just perfect. I love Oliver and his thoughtfulness, and I love Charity for how she very clearly has tried to shake off her feelings for Oliver but isn't able to. And I really liked how, despite Charity not really being interested in Quidditch, Oliver still thanked her for everything. She sounds like a fabulous teacher. :)

That's it, I think! Sorry for the awful review -- my brain is kinda fried right now, eep. But I look forward to the next chapter!

Oh, actually, one more thing.

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE COW BISCUITS!!!!!!!!!!!!

/squee out

Author's Response: COW BISCUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUIIIIITTTTS! Hahahahahah, thank you so much for the review. I have adored writing this story and tried not to self insert, but the cow biscuits were too wonderful to ignore. ~Croll~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/16/13 9:53 · For: Chapter 3 - Careers

The best Oliver Wood characterization I've ever read.

Author's Response: Thank you! ~Carole~

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 02/16/13 6:50 · For: Chapter 3 - Careers

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

Oliver is so hot. I love him. *heart* I think you did a great job here, Croll -- I particularly like how Charity's attraction to Oliver is very much a gradual thing and she didn't think of him in *that* way until now. Also, I was so ready to call you out on the Apparating thing -- lol -- but then it was a dream! Hehehehe.

Seriously, though, I am enjoying this so much, Carole! Only you could make me root for a student/teacher pairing -- I mean, I have nothing against it in the slightest, but I generally find the fandom!student/teacher consists of Snape putting Hermione, Luna or Ginny in detention and then he shags them with teh cauldron bubbling in hte background or something, lolol. This is far more plausible.

Well done and update soooooon! :D

Author's Response: Yayayayayay - thank you for the compliments; it means so much to me that you think this plausible. Yes, the detention thing is a little overused, and speaking personally, even with seven lovepotions, a locked dungeon, and the threat of Crucio, I still couldn;t fancy Snivellus - hahahaha.

Ha - I knew I'd have to mention the Apparating thing because someone would have read Hogwarts: A History and will be picky - hee hee - but I suspect Charity caught up in the throes of passion would have forgotten all about it.

Thank youuuuu! ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 02/09/13 2:42 · For: Chapter 2 - Laws

“I pity you next week,” Septima said.

“Why?”

“Don’t you teach the Weasleys? They’re going to be as high as Peeves after that win.”

Involuntarily, Charity shuddered. She remembered the highs only too well.

And the crashes. ....

The Weasley twins are awesome, even when they don't actually appear in a scene.
Good chapter, the proverb now makes sense, Dorinda evokes a bit more sympathy when i hated her in the last chapter, Oliver gets more interesting day by day...opening his birthday presents, really? I would love to see someone use that excuse on Mcgonagall. Preferably from a safe distance.

P.S: Er, remember one time you began writing this great story called "The Lions of Gryffindor" and abandoned it just when the suspense was at peak? I haven't forgotten it yet.

Author's Response: *hides from Lions reference but will try and get around to it for the lovely Ruchira*

Thank you so much for the review and I'm glad you're enjoying the story. ha ha - yeah, Oliver can get away with a lot, mainly because the lateness thing has become a bit of a motif with him. (And he's Oliver Wood - sigh) ~Carole~

Name: lucca4 (Signed) · Date: 02/08/13 23:56 · For: Chapter 2 - Laws

Ah, this chapter was well-worth the wait! You actually have me feeling sorry for Dorinda, when she was one of the characters I disliked the most in the first chapter. I love seeing the beginnings of Charity and Oliver's relationship, the little hints…you've painted characters who I really want to be together :).

Fantastic! This next wait will be even harder. xx Ariana

Author's Response: Actually, you won;t have to wait long as it's nearly set to go, I just need to tweak a little.

Thank you so much for the review, Ariana, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story.

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 02/08/13 13:58 · For: Chapter 2 - Laws

Great background information! I was so curious about Flint in the last chapter that this was really good. I feel bad for Dorinda. The parallel to Charity's experience is striking so I hope Charity can help her. Can't wait to see what the reaction is from everyone - Snape, Dumbledore, Wood, Dorinda. Very good chapter!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ahh, you might be disappointed with the next chapter then . . . But there is our favourite Ravenclaw coming up. Mwahahahahaha. Gina, if this hadn;t been for the Cotillion, and hadn;t been about a pairing, then there would probably have been much more story (and the fic would have ended up at 50K instead of 22k) but, alas, some things have had to be skimmed over. Thank you for the review (is this 800 or 799?) ~Carole

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 02/05/13 12:40 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

Ooooooooh!

Carole, this was really interesting! :) Honestly, I expected the usual scenario (or at least what seems to be the usual scenario) of a teacher giving a student detention and then something going on there. This was therefore very unexpected in a good way :)

Charity is a lovely teacher! I would love to have been taught by her -- I think you did a great job in making her a really likeable and well-rounded character. Also, I giggled at Professor Sinistra's comment about not smiling till Christmas :P

And poor Oliver :( I can see how this kind of classroom discussion could get nasty, even if it is a really interesting discussion they got into. I think the way you presented a classroom situation and kept it so engaging with teh dialogue was fabulous, especially the things they were learning in Muggle Studies, because that's one subject I've always been curious about. I think you did a great job with that, and I liked Oliver's appreciation of Shakespeare in particular ;)

Anyway, I would love to see where things go from here, Croll! :D This was a great start, and I am intrigued, especially as this is when Oliver is in fourth year -- I'm guessing anything that happens with them would probably take place when he's at least a little older? Anyway, update soon, and once again, YAYYYY COW BISCUITS :D

Soraya xxx

Author's Response: Cow Biscuits to you, too.

Soraya, thank you so much for the review. Hmm, I wanted to write this as a teacher/student that's as unsquicky as possible. Basically everyone seems to think of the Snape and someone, but the female teachers could have been as young as I've made Charity, and it's not entirely squicky if the boy is of age, in my opinion. I also decided a long time ago that this wouldn't be a kept in detention accidentally brewing Love Potions scenario - ha ha ha. Thanks again ~Carole~

Name: Ruchira_M (Signed) · Date: 01/27/13 10:39 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

What happened between Flint and Charity?

Author's Response: Hushhhhh, no spoilers! All will be revealed in the next chapter ... well ... it will become a little clearer. :) Thanks for the review. :) ~Carole~

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 01/27/13 1:54 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

Well, I'm very picky about Oliver, and I like him here so far...

Having taught Shakespeare to reluctant Muggles, I must say Charity is doing far, far better than average on her first outing.

There really is something repellent about certain of those Slytherins, isn't there...

Author's Response: Charity is just dabbling with Shakespeare. A small peak at Julius Caesar, it won't be a set text - ha ha. Repellent Slytherins ... hmmmmm, Marcus is a Slytherin, and yes, he's repellent, but have I said which house Dorinda is in? Mwahahahahah. Thank you for the review, Thea and I'm glad Oliver hasn;t annoyed you ... yet. :) ~Carole~

Name: lucca4 (Signed) · Date: 01/26/13 22:37 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

I really like this so far! I meant to open this in a window read a little bit later, because we were about to start dinner, but the first paragraph caught my eye and then I couldn't stop reading. I've never really considered Oliver a character I had to read about, but you've already made me fall slightly in love with him in this chapter. I'm also ready to kill Dorinda and Marcus, and I'm slightly in awe of you - how you've made me feel so strongly about characters in just one chapter.

I'm excited to read the next part of this, I'll try to be patient :).

xx Ariana

Author's Response: I hope your dinner didn;t get cold! Thank you so much for the review, and I'm really pleased that the first paragraph intrigued you enough to read on because I was setting it up to sound like a scary DE scene when really it was her first day of teaching - ha! Dorinda and Marcus are gits, but maybe not irredeemable. :) ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 01/26/13 21:12 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

Interesting start, Carole! I love how you've brought these proverbs into the magical world and have the students (especially Oliver) discovering their meaning. You've given us a spot-on Percy and whoever Dorinda is, you've given us a lovely witch to hate, lol. I really liked Charity in your other fics so getting to read her again is lovely. And I'm intrigued by this strange connection to Marcus Flint--and how things will play out with the pairing given the setting. So glad you were able to submit it, good luck as you continue!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ah, Marcus Flint, the party troll we all love to hate. Uhm, well, maybe we shall hate him eternally, maybe we shall grow to love him and pick flowers to garland his hair with. Uh, okay, I've just switched to a different astral plane altogether. Dorinda is a b1tch, there's no doubt about that, but she might grow on you a little (depends on word count - ha ha) I am pleased you like Percy because he's a little bit stumbling here, but I figured when he's not being Mr prefect and lording it over his brothers, he might feel quite insecure and touchy about money (like Ron). Thank you for reviewing. ~Carole~

Name: sam_1034_lily (Signed) · Date: 01/26/13 18:37 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

I like this a lot! It kind of makes me sad that she will die but I am hoping you will change that!

Author's Response: I wish she hadn't died either :( . Thank you for the review. ~Carole~

Name: Dad (Signed) · Date: 01/26/13 17:11 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

Interesting characters.

Author's Response: Thank you! ~Carole~

Name: Snorkack (Signed) · Date: 01/26/13 9:56 · For: Chapter 1 ~ Proverbs

Very promising first chapter! Hope you upodate soon! Also it shows that even Muggles can profit from Muggle Studies - I'd never heard that proverb before . . . ;-)

Author's Response: I hope to update next week. I heard that proverb a few years ago in a TV programme called Foyles War and it's stuck with me ever since. I was waiting for a story to use it in. Thank you for reading and reviewing. ~Carole~