That was great!! I really want to read further. I always imagined Lilly with Scorpious
I think this was fab. Could do with a lot more romantic fleshing out at the end though. Some clues on what made Ginny know for eg. and maybe you could get started on the grandbaby names. It could even make it into Potterverse! ^_^
Aww... that's the problem with this site,.. - it doesn't have the author's name both at the top and bottom. Author's name and title. Just like TPP,.. that way I don't have to scroll on up again! :(
Hey Jess,
So I finally got a chance to sit down and review this :) It is such an injustice that a Loulily story on MNFF doesn't have any reviews, because I loved reading this when you first posted, and upon rereading, I noticed things I previously hadn't seen and appreciated.
There's so much of this story that I love. The fact that the stigma usually associated with cousin relationships is basically dismissed by Louis early on was interesting, something I'm glad you did because I've seen it come up so often in cousin pairing stories. I had to smile when you also threw in Fred/Dominique, haha. The fact that Ginny and Harry were betting on when Loulily was going to happen made me laugh too. It explained Harry's frosty attitude towards Louis in the tent earlier on.
On that note, I also thought the Harry/Ginny going on in the background was so funny. I know you're not a big fan of the pairing, and seeing them be so vanilla next to Louis and Lily kind of brought out how dynamic and well-suited they are as a pair. The way Louis sometimes lapsed into French and Lily then followed suit and also spoke French was a really nice touch. I feel like that's something I do in Bengali sometimes when I go off on a tirade about something, hehe, so I can totally relate.
And there were other things that really defined Lily's character too that I loved reading about. Her love for pranks and anything joke-related was something she shared with Louis, which I again thought was really well done. The prank Louis played on Harper sounded great too, definitely very Weasley-esque.
I do wish there could have been more, though. I would really like to know what happened after this and if, indeed, grandbabies happen :P Know that I would totally read it if you wrote it.
I've kind of become a rookie!reviewer by being out of the MNFF loop for so long, so please forgive the rambly disjointed review. Plus, I'm still on a tea high, hence the emoticons. :D This was a fab fic, Jess, and it's a shame you haven't had any reviews for it on here because Loulily should always always always receive love.
~Soraya xxx
Author's Response:Hellooooo!
I think what I really wanted out of this fic, I did it. Sometimes, it's just nice to read a story with some tension, but nothing OTT or heavy-handed. Here and there, a couple doesn't happen because one or more parties involved are just being dumb about it. Like here. Louis is having all of these mental crises about Lily and how he feels about her and why he shouldn't, but when he tells her these things, she makes sure he knows that none of it matters more than that they want to be together.
I don't think I've ever been this nice to Ginny, but I do think she has the make-up to be Teh Cool Mum. You know, the ones who other kids like but isn't nearly as embarrassing as most parents who try to be involved in their kids' lives. But really, I used Harry and Ginny (as well as FreDom) as a foil to show that the Weasley clan is an accepting bunch, and to let the reader know that, in the event these two stop being idiots, their family will love and support them.
The inclusion of French was my way of showing that the cousins are a tight-knit group. Imagine all the shenanigans they can get up to when only like...four of the adults at the most can understand what they're plotting. It's Bill's kids' greatest contribution to their little clique. I head-canon it as Vic taught Teddy, who taught James, who taught Al, who begrudgingly taught Lily, and they plot, only to find that a spur of Weasleys, led by Dominique and Fred, have already been hatching dastardly pranks in the same manner for years.
Anyway, thanks for reviewing. It's barely recognisable from the drabble from which it sprang, but it's the easiest time of writing I've had in a while, so it gave me something, too. *hugs*
~Jess