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Next Game! by Liisa
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The Marauders and Company get their hands and some muggle board games. Hilarity ensues.
Date: 02/09/08 Title: Chapter 1: That's impossible...
Very funny, I recognised the muggle games. James was perfectly in character, although I didn't want to punch him (which is my usual reaction to james). I've never met th eLongbottoms in a fic before.
A Bond Unbroken by Emmeline Vance
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Remus saw Harry’s pain. He saw it from the moment the boy, or rather, man, walked through the door. He wished he could do something to dull the anguish in Harry’s eyes. But that seemed difficult while he was still dealing with his own hurt.
Date: 09/09/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Bond Unbroken
that's so sweet! I love Lupin, but hate Harry, but this story is so touching! Sorry, I finished the story a few minutes ago and I'm still crying. Well done!
12 Days of Christmas at Hogwarts by Tania Dalyn4
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Challenge #4- for Hufflepuff house. The inspiration for this version of "12 Days" is one of my favorite xmas tunes "The 12 Pains of Christmas". At the end of each stanza, the lines in parentheses are Harry's musings on the gifts of that day. I fixed the 8th day, thanks everyone!
Date: 10/28/07 Title: Chapter 1: Xmas with Harry
HILARIOUS!!!!!
The bits in brackets made it. I'll learn and sing this at my family's christmas party this year instead of the traditional (boring) version. I wonder if they'll notice...
A Letter Never Read by beauty and brains
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A motherless child. A heart-broken father. A box filled with long lost treasures. And a letter holding all the secrets that have been buried for over ten years. Will Harriet discover why her father has kept her in the dark for so long? Will she finally come to know her mother…through a letter never read?
Date: 11/06/07 Title: Chapter 1: A Letter Never Read
*SNIFF* Ah bless! I *SNIFF* can't believe how *SNIFF* sad this is.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks dear! Glad you liked it.
Escape by BlackClaude
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A ballad about my favorite conflicted hero and the lengths to which his loyalty drives him.
Second place entry in The Ballad Challenge
Date: 10/24/08 Title: Chapter 1: Escape
I heard this on the podcast and thought it was so good I'd have to leave a review. It's amazing how you got it to rhyme without adding useless words, and it had a great rhythm. I've run out of adjectives meaning good, so I'll stop now, but I just wanted to let you know that I thought it deserved praise.
Shades of Black by Striped Candycane
Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Summary: The three Black sisters are very different. But once a week, for a brief moment, they become very much the same...Pre-Hogwarts.
Date: 11/26/07 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I never imagined the black sisters tolerating being in the same room as each other, even as children, let alone holding hands! Sweet. I really hate Bella, but I didn't want to punch my computer screen when I read this, so well done.
^-^
Author's Response: Part of why I LOVED writing this one-shot is the fact that I strongly believe that the Black girls did have a somewhat loving relationship at the beginning. They are, after all, sisters, and I imagine for the most part they had a very lonely childhood: I doubt their parents cared very much about what they did as long as they remained respectable. They HAD to stick together to survive.
I can’t imagine “liking” Bellatrix…but she does make for some interesting characterization! XD
Thanks for reviewing!
Lovers in the Moonlight by beauty and brains
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Irene Mahavior had always taken a fancy to the quiet Remus Lupin. She liked the soft spoken boy, as she had grown up with her rather raucous Irish family. Irene couldn’t though, for the life of her, figure out where Remus disappeared to once a month. Not thinking anything of it, Irene decided to take a moonlit stroll out on the grounds one night. This one mere urge would seal her fate forever.
Date: 01/18/08 Title: Chapter 2: Fear in the Moonlight
Oh my god, it's an EPIC! When do you get the time to write all of this? Though I'm exceptionally glad that you did, because it's brilliant! It honestly is. I usually end up thinking "now, what would I do if this was my story?" but I'm not with yours. I feel like I'm part of this story, being pulled along with all the emotions and twists and turns. It's so exciting! I want to read chapter 3 soon!
Author's Response: YAY! I\'m glad you liked the second chapter! It makes me so happy to know that readers appreciate the small humble works I put on this site. I am so thankful. Hoping you enjoy the third chapter just as much, and if you have any ideas for one-shots containing these characters please let me know.
Date: 01/14/08 Title: Chapter 1: Shadows in the Moonlight
Oooh! Exciting! This is such a good story. Unfortunately, if the second chapter is as long as the first, I won't be able to read it today. Do you not like James and Lily either? Yay! I can't believe how much your attitude towards the characters matches mine. I want to read more!!!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! And I\'m not really a big Lily fan. I don\'t know why really, but I never was. James, on the other hand, makes me laugh helplessly. I\'m cranked that you enjoyed the first chapter, and hopefully the next two do it justice!
Date: 01/20/08 Title: Chapter 3: Unmasked in the Moonlight
That really was amazing. I do believe this is my favourite fan fic yet. Honest. And I'm crying too! (Again), I promised myself I wouldn't. I'm glad you handled the transformation scene sensitively, because when people try to describe the whole thing in detail it just sounds terrible. Please do write more about Irene, she's a very cool character, she actually has substance, which is more than I can say for a lot of heroines. WRITE MORE! Oh, and on the subjec tof reading material, you might enjoy 'A chapter in the lives of Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs', it's another younger-Remus-random-heroine fic. But if you don't like it, perhaps you could try some of the other fics on my bio page. Who knows, you might like them.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m so glad you enjoyed the story, however short it is. I really am overwhelmed with how well this small idea turned out and no words can express how pleased I am.
The transformation was really hard for me to write, because I didn\'t know if I should go into full detail or none at all, so I sort of went with a middle ground. I guess it turned out well?
Irene Mahavior is really bugging me write now, insisting I write more on her as well. I think all this popularity and compliments is really going to her head. The only problem I have is not having any plot bunnies for her. This is something I need help on.
I will definitely check out your stories and faves. Thanks for giving me some new reading material, it is greatly appreciated!
Once again, thanks for sticking with me on this short journey. I\'m so pleased you liked it!
Roses and Thorns by Phoebe Gruzelier
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Love's not a bed of roses...
there's also pain, betrayal and heart-break.
A lonely and neglected girl. A stubborn young Order member. A sarcastic Healer. Hermione's been trusted with a secret. But with knowledge comes danger...
Againster a backround of prejudice, family ties and surpression, two powerful love stories are playing themselves out. But the clock is ticking against them...
Date: 08/27/07 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Cassandra Trelawney
MUUUUUUUUGH!!!!!!! THE SUSPENSE!!!!!!!! I've checked every day to see if it's finished, and now it is. The whole son-swapping thing is... interesting, but I'm glad it happened because now Harry can lose centre stage. The Malfoys are a cool family, they're some of the few death-eaters that I can stand. (Apart from BCJ) The riddle is cool, I like riddles. But not Tom Riddle. Cassandra Trelawney looks like another w.i.t.c.h we've encountered. Oh, and thanks for Lupin, that's two out of three. And this seems like an appropriate moment for an Albus chorus. Come on, say it with me; one, two, three, Aaaalbuuuus! (Watch film three, listen to Karkaroff.)
Author's Response: Glad you make an exception for the rougueish (but strangely attractive) BCJr. I find it difficult to write explaination scenes and keep them interesting (that\'s why I added the flash backs). I actually forgot about Lupin being one of your favourites, so he got in on his own merits!
Now: AAAAAAAAAAALLLLLBBBBBUUUSSS!!!!!!
Date: 08/27/07 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - Cassandra Trelawney
Oops, I meant film four. Sorry. It's not my fault I have a memory like a sieve!
Author's Response: Tut tut tut!
Date: 08/16/08 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 12 - Returning Angel
Whew! Thank the lord for that! All is well and happy, and he survived. Some of the similies or metaphors or whatever they are are brilliant, like... can't remember an example offhand, but they were there. Three little things: should be tired (sleepy) not tiered (like a cake or dress), this came up twice. There are speechmarks randomly floating at the end of an un-speech paragraph (they need exterminating). And you suddenly switched to first person- "Handed me a ..." instead of "handed Cho a ..." or something, near the end.
Oh! I remembered another bit I liked: The 'E' plant having heart-shaped leaves, like all cutesy, but possibly death-bringing. I thought that was a nice touch. Ooh, what will happen next??? (strokes imaginary goatee)
Author's Response: Yes, so they all live happily ever after...I don't think so! Tommorow will be a big writing day, so BE PREPARED!
The first person? [slaps forehead] I dunno why, but I randomly started writing in 1st person at the very end of the chapter. I thought I'd got rid of them all, but obviously not...
Date: 12/15/07 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 – The Prophecy of the Six Elements
Suddenly I See? KT Tunstall may, but I certainly don't. You've confused me. Ooh! I remember you gave me a sneak-preview of the prophecy when it was in its notebook stage on the coach last year. I think that I can remember who the elements are, but then again, I might just be making it up. Why doesn't the nurse recognise Crouch? Is it the hair? (They do say a change in hairstyle can make you look like a new person...) Is it just me, or did it take a long time for this chapter to be validated?
Author's Response: Hiya, have a nice X mas?
The nurse doesn\'t recognise Crouch, because, as he\'s changed his hair, he\'s not immidiately recogniseable, unless you think about it. And she\'s not exactly expecting him to be there. And I also don\'t think everyone in the wizarding world would be too farmiliar with his face, as he hasn\'t been not-pretending to be Mad-Eye for very long yet.
You think you can remember the Elements? Well tough, because I change plans about a trillion times before things get written so half of them will probably be different now!
Date: 09/23/07 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Welcome to St Mungo's
I just wrote an epic review that got eaten by cyberspace. Your story was HILARIOUS! It made me laugh, and that's saying something. The people at St.Mungo's are funny, I mean, flashing green and pink when sneezing? Great. The only bit I didn't get is which side is BCJ on? Is it Hermy's, like it said now, or Voldy's like the last story? Me confused. And I like David Tennant with glasses. Delving into BCJ's sorting, how sweet. "I could hear all the Gryffindors conducting a few minor wars, the Slytherins moaning, the Hufflepuffs chatting and the Ravenclaws flicking through books." That's classic. I like the sound of a few minor wars. Well done.
Author's Response: Your review got eaten? I know how you feel! And I am honoured to have made you laugh.
I wanted to delve a bit deeper into why BCJr is like he is, and I thought the sorting ceromony was a good place to start.
The glasses....swoon!
Which side is BCJr on? Well, he\'s a DE so I\'m guessing Lord Voldie, but he\'s not too bothered as long as he gets to fight people!
Minor wars...you know what boys are like!
Date: 02/16/08 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - New Beginnings
Draco's got a bit angsty here, hasn't he? You really enjoy describing the appearances of women, don't you? I only have two criticisms: "And don't fight anymore than you have to" I think it said. 'anymore' is two separate words. And Draco's a bit OOC, but he could just be living up to his sulky-spoiled-brat reputation.
Author's Response: I dunno why I like describing women more than men. It\'s just...more interesting (and I like writing about hair, and guys don\'t exactly have exciting hairdos...except punks I suppose).
\'Anymore\' is two septerate words? Really? Oops, better go and change that!
Draco IS a spoiled brat (in my opinion). I don\'t even know why I decided to include him. But he is quite fun to write!
Glad you enjoyed in, Jojo of the Wolves!
Date: 06/26/08 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Parents and Children
Lulu Sugar, you are a nut. In the kindest possible way. Arnie S, indeed... And you, Phoebe Gruzelier, are also a nut, but a different kind. Hopefully not a hazelnut though, otherwise you would be allergic to yourself. May be problematic.
Author's Response: Of course I\'m a nut! How could you possibly mistake me for anything else???
Date: 06/22/08 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 10 - Parents and Children
Wow, it is long, isn't it? I'm liking Myra flirting with Sirius. Just a guess here, but I bet 'MHM' stands for either Moore or Myra Mix. She has an odd last name. I also liked the little bit with Cho and Moore. Still not sure about the parent swap... we'll see. I won't even ask how much thought you gave to describing each female character in infininte detail. Good chapter. Oh, I found a couple of typos - near the start you but 'he' instead of her, and I think you meant bushy- instead of busy-haired for Hermione, althought the latter also works. There may have been one more, but my memory fails me. Keep writing! (Where would you hear a similar closing statement to that?)
Author's Response: Thanks for the typos - I never pick them up myself, no matter how many times I read through it!\r\n\r\nI\'m glad you liked the bit with Rob and Cho, I was a bit worried it was going to sound a bit OTT, but I wanted to have it in for a bit of comic relief. And also it was a big \'community\' chapter, with nearly all the main characters in it (apart from the evil ones, of course) and so they really needed to be there.\r\n\r\nFemale character\'s desciption...don\'t even ask. In my defense, it\'s way more fun, because girls have lots of hair!\r\n\r\nAnyway, thanks for reviewing. I lurve your closing statement, Jo! And I wish the same to you...
Date: 07/23/08 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Desperation
EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!?
I'LL KILL YOU IF YOU KILL HIM AGAIN!!!!!!!
WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
YOU BETTER GET THAT NEXT CHAPTER
UP QUICK GIRL, BEFORE THE SUSPENSE
WRECKS MY HEALTH...............................
Author's Response: Ok, Jo. Breathe. In and out. in and out.
Don't worry, I won't keep you in suspense for long...
Date: 07/23/08 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Desperation
Okay, whew, breathe, I'm calm.
That was a really good chapter.
Well written, well structured, not
too long or complicated... But
total, ruthless, unmittigated
EVIL! Good job you've already
written the next bit: there will be
a lot of bloodthirsty reviewers
out there. Typo: I think you put
way or something like that when
you meant was, or vice versa.
Can't quite remember, you may
need to check up on that... I think
it was while Robert was speaking
near the start... Oh yeah, sorry
I've messed up the formatting of
your reviews with the 'spelling'
one (heehee). Get typing girl!!!
Author's Response: [cackles evilly] I lurve being evil!
Ok, Ok, I'm typing. Look at me I am I am. Please don't kill me!
Date: 11/05/07 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - An Everyday Story
TADAA! IT'S HERE! Again, I've checked every day, and again, my vigilance has been rewarded. (I didn't use that word on purpose). This is a really cool chapter, and it's not murderously long either. You know I like stuff I can get my teeth into (ha). I only have one little nitpick - you don't need to describe the colours of everthing, you were doing that a lot at the start and it got a bit annoying. But enough of the criticism. I love the alarm clock - I really need one of those. Robert Moore is very Mr Rochestery, isn't he? And Lav-Lav the drama queen, that's perfect, but she can't have Sirius! Me&Lulu won't let her. Ugh, that was so gruesome. Snap, crunch, blood. Ugh. I know I like gore, but, poor Sirius! I'm so glad you included Moody as a cameo, but you didn't hurt him. Good. Y'know, I think I'm going off Sirius a bit. But I still love him. And in honour of the longest chapter, I have written my longest review!
PS: you must teach me how to put pictures on my bio.
Author's Response: He he!
Thanks for the thing about colours - I had no idea I did that so much...I\'ll go back and change it some time!
Mr. R and Rob Moore...? I didn\'t intend for them to be similar, but they have turned out a little like that. No mad wives in the attic, unforetunately. :(
I was never intending for Lavender to have Sirius, I just needed someone for Rob to tease! So, don\'t worry, Sirius will probably come up later to give Harry advice, but the whole Lavender/Sirius thing doesn\'t develop at all.
HA! I thought you\'d like the grusome bit! You hypocrite! (Also if it hadn\'t been grusome, Cho wouldn\'t have had a good reason to pass out!)
Invite me to your house, and I\'ll teach you how to put pictures on your bio!