All Stories Are on Hiatus.
sorry guys, i'll get on them as soon as I have time!
Status: Writing chapter 8...kinda.
Neversent: One-shot/finished. (:
A big whopping thank you to my amazingly amazing beta- Orlaith!
My god, this was an amazing little ficlet here! Powerful. Very very powerful. I loved it. I adore how Ginny comes off as the fighter she is, but we really see into her mind and thoughts here - even throught the facade. Lovely work here. I can't really say anything else! Perhaps that you didn't ruin my poor Draco, but other than that 10/10. =)
Powerful. And an interesting turn of events! I enjoyed this story a lot, although I have a few suggestions. The ending was not nearly as powerful as some other bits of the story had been, I think, perhaps if you had prolonged your descriptions and gave the ending a darker feel it would have been even more lovely!
Author's Response: A few suggestions, eh? That interests me. Although this story was over and done with ages ago - a one off, written while I was bored - so I doubt I\'ll make any changes.
Hmmm, I like it. Rhianna is the name of my roleplay character who's with Draco. =) I Love that name, was going to use it in my own fanfiction, but changed it. The story sounds interesting, but...Draco seems just a bit out of character with his insults.. maybe your just not as good as insulting people (which isnt a bad thing) but I'm not feeling the whole "Slytherin-bad-boy" vibe just yet... Good work though!
Wonderful! I really love how you portray Draco, his views are so in character for him but they're just different. Beautiful writing, the morbid and dark aspect of it all is also fab-u-luhz! =)
Author's Response: Writing morbid stories is always fun, isn't it? I love picking apart the minds of bad guys. Anyways, thanks for the review!
Merlin! I Love it! (and not just because of the comma. haha.) In all seriousness though, the topic & characters for this piece have something morbidly interesting about them. That makes te fic way more interesting just because of the characters. Merope's actins are just as I imagined her, as well as Marvolo's and Morfins. I loved the knife scene (just...don't ask why.), it was written beautifully and actually seems like something that would've happened. I /think/ I noticed an -gasp- error! In one sentence, I believe it should be "Shoulder" instead of "shoud."
This one:
"She fell to her knee as she felt the knife sink into her should."
Other than that, I really enjoyed it and can't wait for more!
--Jen
Author's Response:
I actually saw those mistakes - I'm just lazy - I'll change them next week maybe. Yeah, the characters are definately the morbid kind and their despair or interests make it all the more compelling. Im really glad you liked my portrayal of Marvolo - he must have meant something to merope for naming her son after him. I'm stuck on how to begin the next chapter, but I'll have a ponder. Cheers, Jen!
My god, Robyn this is amazing! I command you to get over your block and finish this. Like now. =P I love how there's a bunch of this subtle humor in here, even the fact that Snape's married amuses me. I honestly want to marry this fic. And this review is crappy. Excuse that as well.
Author's Response: No one ever reviews this, so first off - cheers! This is my favourite fic that I've written - to me it just demonstrates how far I've come in the realm of fic writing. I wanted to include some basic, subtle humour as befits the situation, but not so it was an inherent theme. But I think they make a rather good pair! Sorcha started off as a joke - the prequel to this is a mess, and I'm re-writing it. Maybe I'll show the original someday, you'll laugh your head off... thanks!
Extract:
"However," the terrible voice resumed in a tone constructed solely of icy menace. "You are young. Too young to understand. No matter how far you go, no matter who you stay with or where you hide - if you run from me I will find you, and when I do you will pay."
Final chapter up! COMPLETE
hmm...I like this. I like this alot! I think you've got some great writing going here, and I love your imagery and description. Such an interesting idea too. Keep up the great work. Alice, Craig and Frank make me laugh. =]
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, they are rather comic aren't they? Glad you're enjoying it!
Sorry but, Mary-sue much?
Author's Response: I know. I made her that way on purpose.
Author's Response: I know. I made her that way on purpose.
Author's Response: I know. I made her that way on purpose.
O0oo0oh. Great Job! I really enjoyed this concept, and Draco & Ginny's seperate reactions. To be constructive perhaps you should include more discription, thats the only problem I found with it. Perhaps, something about Ginny seeing the world with"new eyes" persay. All in all, I really liked it. Can't wait for more!
Yes, I know its the second review in a row. But I couldn't resist, it's for the MNFF scavenger hunt.=) Still, I really are intrigued by the fact that Ginny is "dead" and Draco can't recognize her. The poor girl. A bit of advice is that the chapter flows a little too fast, maybe you should stop and give more detail - but thats just me. I also think Ginny is wonderfully in character and not going all lovesick and attacking Draco... yet. Great work!
Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I\'m working on expanding my descriptions. I tend to write very matter-of-factly. I\'m glad you think Ginny is in character, I\'ve tried very hard to keep her that way!
Oh this is such a cute story. Do write more, turn it into a multi-chaptered fic. It's great! My only concern however, is that the main character Narcissa is seven, correct? She seems a bit...well...a bit too old for her age. Maybe tone down her language a bit to be more appropriate for her age bracket. Other than that I adored it! 10/10.
Author's Response: Cissa sounds younger in later chapters, lol. I'm trying really hard to make her sound younger, but making her grammar a little less good (well. But Cissa would say good. ;)) Also, keep in mind that Cissa has a lot to think about constantly... this will make more sense in later chapters. And she's incredibly clever; Ginny's a fantastic witch and Draco was very, very smart (he did sneak Death Eaters in under Dumbledore's (sniff) nose), so she has smart genes, lol! Thanks for reviewing!
*gasp* Robyn, get your arse in front of the computer and update this instant.
So sorry it took me so long to actually sit and read it, but let me tell you this chapter was well worth the wait. I feel I need to restate how much I love Sorcha, and how I want to take Dag home with me. =)
You move the story along very well and the interactions between the characters make them seem perfectly canon, even if they're not. However, during Sorcha's explanation to Tim, I feel that the big chunk of text without the slightest break gets a bit confusing, and for someone like me , a teensy little pause would've been lovely. =)
All in all, amazing as always.
Your fangirl,
Jen. (PS - I think I fell in love with Tim somewhere along the way. )
wow Jace, I absolutely love this! I don't seem to see any punctuation issues like you said. =] so I'd have to agree with you there. Anywhom, I love what you did with the apple. Its odd to think that something as simple as an apple could mean so much to the guy. Poor Trent.. he needs a hug... *runs off to hug Trent* Keep it up! - Jen
Author's Response: I wanted to emphasize in the fact that some people would burn someone\'s hands off for the chance to have something we take for granted.
(and for the record, I didn\'t see any either..)
- Jacie the Cat