05/23/05
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Hello! I'm an Indian, Hufflepuff, HP-obsessed fanfiction reader and writer, beta-reader, member of the Susan Bones Book Club, member of the Society for Promotion of Better Evaluation of Writers (by Readers), Sirius fangirl, Harry/Luna shipper and a geek.
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The Daughter of Light by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: An Irish witch languishes in the darkness of her family home, confined by her father and circumstances. What will it take to bring her out of this exile? The chance to return to Hogwarts? The opportunity to participate in the fight against Voldemort and his Death Eaters? Or will it be Severus Snape, a man she did not expect to see again in her lifetime?
This is canon compliant to OoTP but written pre-HBP.
Reviews and constructive criticism are most welcome, and thanks go to Ashwinder who kindly beta read the chapters for me. :-)
Date: 10/29/05 Title: Chapter 1: Flight.
Okay, I read your story because it was recommended to me by a friend, but now, am I glad I did find it. I'm lazy to review each chapter, so I'll say everything here. Maeve, you're the best author I've ever read(on this site, at least) I'm really amazed at your writing style and how you've managed to put it all together. I liked your fic because it showed us different faces of many characters: Snape, Remus, and Neville. Your writing style's very captivating, too. I can just see it all in my head as I read, something that I've been able to do only in the case of Jo's writing.
I really don't like Snape, but after reading your fic, I think I might need a quick attitudinal change.
And then, onto Maeve. She's so enigmatic and I don't know what else to say... All that I can say is that I really enjoyed reading your fic and I'll go staight and read it's sequel. Your writing's magical, Maeve. *salutes you and your perfect style*
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, and the compliments! I'm so glad you enjoyed the fic. I had a lot of fun writing it and I hope you go on to enjoy the sequel as much. When I sterted I wasn't sure where the characters were going to go, but they all took on a life of their own and grew... which is why Severus turned out the way he did...naughty man! LOL Thanks again for letting me know you enjoyed it. :-)
Date: 06/26/05 Title: None
Do you need more pursuading to UPDATE??????????
Date: 06/26/05 Title: None
OMG!! So close but even now Ron and Hermione are not open with each other *loud sigh* Hope they confess their feelings atleast in the next chapter.
Author's Response: hehe! I know I know, they are stubborn lol. But thank you for reviewing now and for reviewing chapter ten as well! I really appreciate you taking the time to do that! Thank you!
Date: 03/12/06 Title: None
I read this while browsing the General section and it was good, overall. Here are a few things I would like to comment on:
It’s probably something to do with the blasted Boy Who Refuses to Die!
I like the humour of the line, but it doesn’t seem to me like something Snape would say. It’s in the middle of the night and he probably must have been sleeping, and this line doesn’t fit the scenario well. Maybe you could consider changing it to “It’s probably something to do with that blasted Potter.”
I also noticed that Snape keeps insulting Dumbledore which we haven’t seen him do in canon. Since it’s the middle of the night, a bit of swearing would be alright on Snape’s part, but I don’t think he would say it right in front of Dumbledore’s face especially in the following two places.
“Damnit, old man, just tell me why I’m here! Stop avoiding what you have to say, or else I’ll realize I never should have left my comfortable bed.”
However, you still haven’t explained why I’m here.”
Maybe you could change the lines to make it something he thinks, instead of saying it aloud.
Snape also seems to use Albus to address Dumbledore, and maybe they do it personally, we don’t know, but from what we’ve seen, Snape always says “Headmaster” to address Dumbledore. While it isn’t necessary for you to change it, it would be truer to canon if you did so.
Dumbledore looked sufficiently cowed, and finally nodded, somewhat sheepishly.
Tsk. Tsk. This is a bit Out of character for Dumbledore. I don’t think he would ever look cowed in front of Snape. He’s a lot braver than that.
I also noticed that you had Snape interrupting Dumbledore in a few places. This is entirely my opinion, but I think Snape would have the manners to interrupt the Headmaster especially when they’re discussing something serious.
Dolores was just here, of course, questioning why I sent off
students in the middle of the night.
There’s a formatting problem with this line. It just breaks off abruptly after off. Check on that.
“Thank-you.” Thank you need not be hyphenated.
Severus got out of his seat and made his way for the door. Smiling grimly to himself he muttered, “Just following my Master’s orders.”
That’s a nice line, showing where Snape’s true loyalties lie.
Overall, your fic was an excellent read.
Highly Improbable by Vocalion
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: COMPLETE. A woman visits Hogwarts expressly to meet Severus Snape. Her eccentric aunt led her to believe that he was the kindest, handsomest man to ever grace the earth. What will she do when she discovers the awful truth - let a few minor imperfections stand in the way of romance? Highly Improbable has been recognized by the Multifaceted Awards as Winner in the Laughter Category and Runner-Up in the Identity Category (Best Original Character), and also by MNFF's first annual Quicksilver Quills Awards. Thanks, MuggleNet!
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Date: 08/15/05 Title: Chapter 32: I'm Beginning to See the Light
I simply love your story. I read the whole thing in one go! I love Clancy and the way she has evolved as a character. Update soon! Can't wait! 10/10
Date: 08/28/05 Title: Chapter 34: The Hour of Parting
The chapter was sooo sad! Your Snape is so in canon and I feel like reading JK's Snape! 10/10 Update soon!
Date: 09/03/05 Title: Chapter 35: Help Me, Rhonda!
Awww....Poor Clancy! She must feel so horrible! Will Severus come and explain it to her? The letters that she had written were funny, especially the postscripts! Update soon! 10/10 :)
Azkaban Dreams by Terri
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Time is heavy burden in a place like Azkaban Prison, especially for a man wrongly accused of the death of his best friends. All Sirius has are his dreams of what might have been...
Date: 03/11/06 Title: Chapter 1: Harry's 11th Birthday
I enjoyed reading this. As soon as I started, I thought this was an AU fic or something, I was really confused, but I enjoyed it nonetheless. And it made sense at the end. It was really painful when Sirius wakes up in Azkaban, and wishes his godson "Happy birthday" into the darkness. Those lines were powerfully written, well done :) It was funny that Harry says Uncle Remus but calls Sirius by his name, though. And Harry seemed a bit childish squealing and all, but maybe he would have been like that had he been brought up with love and affection. Anyways, it was an enjoyable read.
Always Stick Together by hattiepotter
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: 6th year. Harry and Ginny's friendship quickly turns into something more and they have to struggle through the Second War together. Trials and tribulations, drama, cuteness, excitement and a chunk of mystery.
Now completed with over 6000 reads! Thank you!
Date: 02/11/06 Title: Chapter 9: Like it or not
Nice one:) I like how you put up a hare-brained scheme of Ginny's. She exactly the kind who would come up with such things without actually thinking on it. Trust Harry to follow her. I like your style of writing Hermione and Ginny. Great job. Few nitpicks: “Oh, hi Harry,” she replied, looking up from her parchment.
“Well your two friends are not planning on getting caught,” answered Ginny.
A comma after hi and well respectively. And in few places your close quotes (") are facing the other side after the hyphen (-). Check on that. Anyway, I'm enjoying this.
Author's Response: Yeah well there's nothing I can do about the quote marks, I'm afraid. That's just stupid Microsoft Word. As for the commas, I see what you mean, but I don't think they're really urgent. I'm glad you liked my characterisation. xx
Vold's first Death Muncher Meeting by CallingMidnight
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Voldemort and crew try to think up a name, they play a death defying game of truth or dare ... etc. READ AND REVIEW and tell me if I should write something else, because I've got some ideas ... liiiiikkkkkeeee maybe Voldemort's first attempt at a bad deed or something. Anyway. Tell me what you think ... READ IT, REVEIW IT!! =P
Date: 06/13/05 Title: Chapter 1: One
Loved it. How did you get the inspiration for this? The best part was "Don't call me Vold." So I give u 10/10
Date: 06/14/05 Title: None
Great chapter. Is this Felix character real? He happens to be on the title of HBP....
Author's Response: Sadly, all of these OCs are real, and I have to deal with them on an almost-daily basis. And back a little while ago, while this story was still in progress, I saw on JK Rowling's website that there would be a character named Felix...coincidince? I THINK NOT. *actually it pretty much is*
Oh to Remember, but Never Forget by MartiOwlsten
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Part One: Everyone knew and loved Lynn, but her ordinary and, well, muggle life isn't exactly what is seems. She's tried to forget the life she had before, but now she must face what she left behind... even the guilt. Starts right after GoF. Later chapters are post OOtP.
Part Two is now Here! Be sure to look for it as Recently added! (I was going to tack it onto this story, but realized that it may need to be it's own, as it has changed Genere)
Date: 06/26/05 Title: Chapter 5: Truth Be Told
OMG! great story. Keep up the good job and UPDATE SOOON!!!
When it all began by HBPrincess11
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: How Lily and James first got together *Poem*
Date: 04/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: The first night
I'm not a great poetry fan as well, but this was was cute. Simple, though, but made me smile. The language was easy to understand and it was not a big problem for someone like me to follow. The rhyming was nice, though, you could have made each line of even length. Some lines have only a few words while others are long, and that's kind of weird. Anyway, I enjoyed the poem. Short and sweet.
Tom Riddle and the Half Blood Prince by Zetera
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Parody of the Harry Potter series written and completed before the release of Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince. It looks at the lives of some of the major characters as they wait impatiently for book six to arrive. Naturally, chaos ensues. Suitable for all.
Winner of the first annual Quicksilver Quills Award 2006 for best humor fiction. Thank you!
Date: 06/07/05 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Six: Returning to Hogwarts
OMG!!! I've never read anything as funny as this. Would you mind publishing Tom Riddle and the Half-Blood Prince? Ask Jo...
Author's Response: I'd love to look into publishing it actually, Micheal Gerber got away with it after all...if you know how I can do this - email me!
Meant To Be by chloish
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: "What can I say?" James shrugged his shoulders. "We are just obviously,"
"Completely,"
"Irrefutably,"
"Logically,"
"Undeniably,"
"Unfortunately,"
James laughed, "Meant to be."
Lily Evans and James Potter share absolutely nothing in common, not even their feelings for each other. Lily, perceived as a ‘model student,’ detests the handsome, popular, Quidditch star James, who she thinks to be something of a git. James, on the contrary, has been infatuated with Lily for years, and has let her and the whole school know it.
As time progresses into Voldemort’s ‘reign of terror,’ the two have to learn to trust, tolerate, and love each other.
Please note, this story is incomplete, and will likely remain so for a long time. I apologize!
Date: 06/05/05 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Mick the Prick
OMG!!!! OMG!!!!gr8 chapter. Simply loved it!!!!!!!!!!!! Update soooon. Pleeez.
You Smell! You Stink! But, I Like You, I Think... by MartiOwlsten
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Mischief happens; for sixth-year Gryffindor, Andran Audierus, it's somewhat expected. Clumsiness also happens, and for New student Marti Owlsten, it's more of a way of life. Put these two together, and they may end up in over their heads in trouble... and toothpaste. Insults, ransom notes, magical dares, pranks... will they make it to their seventh year in one piece? **This is a post-HP7 fic, by about ten to fifteen years... but that doesn't mean their won't be familiar faces. Lots of humor, butn also a good plot line, too**
Date: 06/18/05 Title: Chapter 10: Wake-Ups and Wonders!
Wow! First to review! You've got a great story but seems like you're concentrating on romance than humour. Hope the next chapter is posted soon, with lots of humour!
Author's Response: Ah, yes, the plot does seem to get in the way. Don't worry, I've got loads of funny stuff coming up - all the plot does is make it so it's not a nonsensical (my own word there, hee hee) comedy. It has to have a point, at least if I'm going to write it. Next chappie comming soon!
The Ghost of Godric Gryffindor by GoG
Rated: •Summary: At the start of Harry’s sixth year, the wizarding world is falling further under Voldemort’s evil control. Fudge has declared a draconian State of Emergency, but he is little more than Lucius Malfoy’s corrupt puppet. But when Malfoy seeks to impose Voldemort’s racist Pureblood ideology upon Hogwarts - the last bastion of the Light - the students rise up in revolt.
The spirits of the great Witches and Wizards of the Light, fearful for the future of the Wizarding world, send Harry and his friends a powerful ally, to help them in the desperate struggle to save Hogwarts and the wizarding world from impending darkness.
An epic struggle of Good against political corruption, racism, elitist ideology ... and Ultimate Evil. The roller-coaster plot twists and turns into the past and future – and Nightmare Realities, where the terrible consequences of failing to stop Voldemort are chillingly revealed.
A story to fascinate the intelligent reader ... philosophy, politics, time-travel, romance, humour ... and a few very cunning ideas.
Date: 03/11/06 Title: Chapter 34: A Midsummer Night's Dream
I enjoyed reading your story. Rick was an amazing OC and someone whose unusual magical abilities didn't make me iffy at all. I enjoyed your style of writing the confusions inside Rick's mind. The scenes where his mind alternated between his 'real' Muggle World and the Magical world were nicely done. Also, I liked the whole Yule Ball part where Rick makes fun of Snape, and the alternate world of when Voldemort didn't kill Harry. Nice insight on that one. 10/10.
The Second War by HPotter7
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: With the ever-growing threat of Lord Voldemort and secrets of the past that could tear Harry apart, Harry’s six year will be like no other. More attacks on muggles and wizards then ever before as Voldemort gains back the power he once had. Harry will make a decision that will change not only his life, but also everyone’s around him. He will have to choose between what is right and what is easy...
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I've finally updated! Now that it's finally summer I'll have more time to write! I've submitted my new chapter and I hope it will be out soon. I really need a beta because I can't get a hold of my last one, so feel free to volunteer!
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This story was written Pre-HBP so it's my own storyline!
Date: 06/28/05 Title: Chapter 6: The Potion
Great story! Apart from a few punctuation and spelling errors, your story has me hooked. If this is going to end soon, then why don't you plan to do a sequel? It didn't kill me to review this, so it wouldn't kill you to update either.And thanks for reviewing my story.
It Begins This Way by Zetera
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: A Marauder tale set during the first war. A story of love, hate, friendship and betrayal; and how, at the end of the day, you only have yourself, alone.
There is a LOT I would add to this now that DH has been released, but what's done is done.
Date: 06/20/05 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter Three: A Suspicious Mind
You're certainly great at this capturing the war time perfectly. Update soon!!!
Author's Response: I'll do my best, thank you!
Date: 08/26/05 Title: None
GREAT!!! I don't think the characters are OOC, they're just great! 10/10 and straight into my faves!
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