I like short stories, or one-shots about specific characters, but writing goes slow for me since I don't have a lot of time.
Pallas, Congratulations on your wonderful story. I very much enjoyed it. I found this story when it was on the featured section and immediately got hooked by your striking vision of Remus and your wonderful scenery descriptions. I've always liked Remus, ever since his introduction in PoA, but your story contributed to the fact that Remus is now one of my favorite characters, along with Tonks. I read your story up to chapter 29 in just 2 or 3 days and I honestly thought that was the end of it. Really, I think the ending of that chapter would have been a wonderful, but tragic ending in it's own right. In all honesty, I actually couldn't read on after that and was shocked to see you had updated. Not that I wanted to see Remus dead, but somehow the story was finished. Remus had done what he had come for: Protect the innocent. And Kane was defeated aswell, so basically his struggle was over, as far as I could see. Anyway, I was very curious about the rest of your story, so I decided to keep reading and I was amazed to see how well thought out the second part of your story was. When I realized that the real struggle wasn't over yet, I found it easier to read on and I think that the ending you chose was the only right ending. Your worries about not having potrayed him in the right way are totally unfounded. I think his last battle was perfect and he did the only right thing, thanks to you. Also, you inspired me to write better characters. Not that I have any illusions of being able to create anything worth reading, but at least I'll be having fun doing it :) Once again I congratulate you for writing such a marvelous story. You've kept me and many others reading for months. I'll be checking out your new story soon. Cheers, Dutchy
There's so much I'd like to say, but I can't find the words for it. All I can say is that somehow I can relate to Ninette, and it surprises me. Not that I do ballet, but something in how her Aunt controlls her life strikes me. I recognise it and that's why I can relate to Ninette and why I keep reading. I hope that part of your story is not from your own personal experience, because I can honestly say that it's a misserable way of life. I'd love to see how Ninette breaks out of this way of life and how Tonks plays her role in this. Congratulations Ennalee.
Author's Response: Ninette has been a hard character to write, but I've found her very eye opening, and she's taught me a lot. I'm glad you can relate to her even though she's part of a completely different world. Thanks for taking the time to review.
This is a great story, Ennalee. I've read the four chapters in one go (at work) and I never thought I'd like it as much as I do. You make me relate to Ninette and Tonks and I hope that Charlie's role will grow. I think I read an excerpt of your next chapter on the forums about those tunnels. Looking forward to reading the entire chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks! Charlie's role is definitely growing, as you'll see in chapter five (and yes, it is the tunnel chapter). He has become one of my own favorite characters. It's funny, I've become rather more attached to Tonks, Charlie, and Bill than I am to Harry, Hermione, and Ron - writing gives you an intimacy reading doesn't. All through HBP, I was crossing my fingers for my own characters! Thanks again!
Hey Iris, congrats on your first approval, I know how you feel :)
I enjoyed reading the letter and you’ve raised my curiosity, which is, considering the fact that I’m not really a Hr/Dr shipper, a good accomplishment.
I think Hermiones internal conflict could be emphasised a little more. I think it would tear up everyone who would be in this kind of situation; to fall in love with your enemy and knowing that the next time you meet one of you will probably die. That would break anyone’s heart.
Also, she might have trouble with choosing which side to follow: Follow Dumbledore and loose the love of her life, or follow Draco and loose everything else.
I hope you will emphasise this more in the rest of the story; I’m not sure in what state of mind this was written.
All in all a very good prologue and I’m looking forward to your update.
Cheers
Dutchy
Author's Response: Thanks Dutchy, I most appreciate it!
*Jots down internal conflict*
I'm taking note on everything, and love to hear it all!
Thanks!
Once again you have managed to pull me into a wonderful story. It's amazing how seemingly easy you can turn a rainy night into a world of disaster. I actually was a bit shocked by the horrid splinge; I never really thought about the possible concequenses. Anyway, I can't wait to find out what wonderful things you've come up with for this story. Good job and good luck with your sequel :) Dutchy
I love it!
It made me feel very good all the way through the story. I especially like the way how they are constantly teasing each other.
I only doubt they were married that early. They could have, of course. It seems the wizarding world Rowling created thinks differently about the age people get married and get children.
I love your specs and necklace. I like it when people come up with their own spells and items and such, it really makes your story your own and not just a copy from J.K. Rowling.
At the end of the story though, it all feels a bit rushed when James learns about the pregnancy. Other than that I think it was a wonderful one-shot, much like I would do it actually. Good job! :)
Author's Response: Thanks Dutchy. I\'m glad you liked my specs and necklace. I wanted to make the story more believable and felt like I had to put something in that was my own.