I am 32 and Cheshlin is my twin sister. I work as a Pediatric nurse. I have been writing free form poetry since I was 16 and am now working on stories and poetry here. I have also taken to photography. Check out my pictures at: http://www.flickr.com/photos/cwiddy/!!
Great story and Poem! You are getting better with the poems!! 8) I always have to glance at these again to see if you made any last minute changes since I read them first. ;)
Author's Response: double. LOL
Great story and very touching!! Sorry it took me so long to review! Would review first time I read if it was on here!! ;)
Author's Response: It would be very difficult for you to review the first time you read my stories!! You are the first one I run them by. Silly Cwiddy!!
Cyns
Wow, that is totally a different view then I would have been able to imagine, but you make it so real and believable! :)
Author's Response: thanks. <3
I'm not sure why my entire review didn't show before, so I'll try again!
This is definitely a different view that I would have never thought of, but it explains a lot that could have been. It explains the mystery behind Ollivander, his disappearance once Voldemort came back.
To make the Pheonix feather be one of the horcruxes opens the door to Harry's downfall, or at least brings that possibility to the forefront.
Ollivander a true follower of Voldemort...and like most Death Eaters believing (with the pride down in his heart) that he was the one person following Voldemort that had the most to offer. He did have a lot of freedom brought about by his trade. He needed to travel to distant places to obtain the things needed to make his wands. He did have to see Dragons and other mythical creatures in practicing his craft which would make him a perfect ambassidor.
I did get a bit confused with the centaurs...as they seemed to want nothing at all to do with Voldemort, or the otherside. They were adamant about remaining neutral and just to interpret the stars. If Voldemort had such a trusted Death Eater that had the ear of the centaurs who completed the prophesy from reading the stars, why would he still extend so many resources towards obtaining the prophesy? Plus, I think that Voldemort always had some distrust of even the most trustworthy Death Eater because he would fear that they were following him only to take his place at a later time...distrust is a central trait to Voldemort that he tried to beat out of his followers with fear. Fear is a powerful weapon, but it can back fire, too...take for example the Malfoys in DH.
Anyway, I loved this different view of Ollivander and can see how if he was more drawn to the dark arts could have been a great Death Eater and most trusted associate of Voldemort's.
This is very well written and shows a point of view that many would not notice, nor would the see the heroism behind these simple things! thanks for pointing out that sometimes it is the courage to step up and do the small things that can win wars!
IT is funny the events that make us who we are...and loosing one's mother is an event that just leaves scars on most people, especially young girls who love their mother more then anything! This is a sad story about how Luna's mother died...but at the same time it shows hope...hope that even when something is lost, it becomes a part of us and by remembering that part, we move on and change. Well written story that shows the pain and anguish that death brings, but also shows that even as the pain remains, it brings a bit of peace with it because we remember.
Author's Response: thanks! you\'re comments mean a lot to me.
Author's Response: eh. me and my typos. your comments mean a lot to me. thanks again :-)
IT is funny the events that make us who we are...and loosing one's mother is an event that just leaves scars on most people, especially young girls who love their mother more then anything! This is a sad story about how Luna's mother died...but at the same time it shows hope...hope that even when something is lost, it becomes a part of us and by remembering that part, we move on and change. Well written story that shows the pain and anguish that death brings, but also shows that even as the pain remains, it brings a bit of peace with it because we remember.
Author's Response: Oops, thought I had responded to this already, sorry!
Wow! What a beautiful review! You have me tearing up, in a good way of course. Thank you so much, you just made my day!
Chance occurances...that teach us that the supernatural is not something to be played with. This was a well written story and very imaginative! Dark, definately dark...
This is a very well written story. I like how you developed Dumbledore's friendship with Nicholas Flamel. I do have to say that I do not like the deterioration of Perenelle's personality...and she worked with her husband with many of his experiments, so I do not see that she would become that bitter...that distant with him because they shared so much, their love life, their experiments, etc. I always saw her working beside Nicholas to translate the Book of Abraham and to conduct the Alchemy necessary to make the stone. That is my opinion though.
I always believed that Nicholas did not mean to allow himself to die until after the run in between Harry and Voldemort in Philosopher's Stone. That he talked with Dumbledore and Perenelle and together decided that they have lived long enough...that the danger the stone was to the world was greater then their need to keep living. He had given the stone to Dumbledore to keep and protect for him because he was a trusted friend and an obvious choice to guard the stone as he had one of the safest hiding places in which to protect the stone. It would also have been more obvious for Nicholas to keep the stone in his own safe...not everyone would think that Dumbledore would be in possesion of the stone, even if they knew he was friends with Nicholas.
Thanks for this different view of how the story of Nicholas Flamel would have ended. Sometimes these views into other worlds open up our minds to see more of how the world works.
Author's Response: I think there\'s some underlying opinions there that I think are amusing. But thanks for saying it in a civilised way, you know? Thank you for recognising that my ideas are different to yours without saying \"OMG I H8 THIS! YOU DID EVERYTHING WRONG!\"
But in truth, I didn\'t know a huge deal about Nicholas Flamel other than a few basic facts I put in the story. I was just trying to come up with an idea why Nicholas would give Dumbledore the stone for the year when he would have needed fresh Elixer - or maybe he doesn\'t. We\'ll have to see how it all works out, with the details pouring in, won\'t we?
Never sent this one to me! It is a great poem! 8)
Author's Response: I\'m sorry! I was really happy with the way it turned out, and you weren\'t around the night I wrote it, and had to get it turned in. :) I\'m glad you enjoyed it!
Sorry it took me a while to review this, but I never know when they get posted to your page! You e-mail them to me!! Great story, and I like where you took the story! 8) Plus gotta love the romance!
Author's Response: I knew you would like it! :) You are almost as fond of Tonks/Remus as I am! hehe. :) Thanks for reviewing and Betaing for me!
Cyns
wendelin, you have really captured here a lot of the feelings that I can see Tom as having. Poetry is a very nice venue to portray feelings and I've used it myself frequently, although I haven't had a chance to post a whole lot here yet! Great poem!!!
-Chris
Great story sis!! the joy of the holiday season and the importance of family and friends shines through!
Author's Response: Thanks SIs!! I\'m glad you had fun reading it! :)
Great song Sis!! 8) Did a great job with this!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you!! :)
Cyns
Really like this...it's sad, but heartening...and a reminder that this is more after this world for those who but believe!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. Glad you liked the poem.
The description you use here is great...it really shows emotions and actions. The depth of the characters have a chance to show through. Great poem!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Great story! I love how Mr. Weasley needed Egg nog to get Molly to go to bed! The gifts were well thought out and very appropriate! It would have been great to see everyone's reaction to the trio being home, as that was the truest gift! (as you said earlier in the story!). But great story! (although I think I read an earlier version!) ;) -Chris
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'m really glad that you enjoyed this story. Maybe I\'ll add another chapter and show everyone\'s reactions to having the Trio home. We\'ll see! :) Thanks for the help! Cyns
I really like this story. It's a new set of characters for you, but I like how you portray them. I also like how you incorporated the dreams into the story...how she tried to deny the bad ones and only set her mind on the good ones. That seems to be very in character for Helga! Good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It was a challenge for me to write this era, but it was a lot of fun also! I just hope others think I got it right! :) Cyns (I would also like to thank you for all the help you gave me with writing it! )
This is a great look into Snape! I love the limericks, too!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Snape is such an interesting and complex character because you really never know what\'s going on with him. I enjoy writing him and I\'m happy you enjoyed reading! :D ~GG
Love your portrayal of Tilly, Blenkin, and Remus! Great story! Can definitely see this time in Remus's life as when he was the most lost and needing direction!
Author's Response: Thanks Cwiddy! It just seemed like the perfect time and person to use for this prompt. I hope to get the next chapter up soon! Cyns