in and out.
here and there.
who even knows anymore.
where did the good times go.
Alyssa! I told you I would leave a review. Bwahaha. This story's really cute, albeit a little fast for my taste... *shifty eyes* Buuut, I loved it! Heh, and even though you're my beta... "... You are better then that, and always will be." It should be 'than' not 'then'. Hehehe. Oh, and, what is the secret Lily's talking about? Maybe you hinted it somewhere, or maybe I'm too curious.
I loved it. It was short and sweet. And yet you pulled it off! Whee!
Cheers,
Vicki c:
This was awesome! I really loved how you managed to capture all of Louisa's feelings, and you were so descriptive! The happy ending was kind of sappy though... But I'm a sucker for happy endings, so of course, I loved it. c: This was excellent. In the beginning, I thought some parts were maybe too descriptive, but you had nice flow and I really liked that. Great job!
Author's Response: I'm really pleased you liked it. I know what you mean about the ending, though. When I first drafted it out she burnt at the stake, but I was so sure I'd read about JKRs Witch Trials not actually catching a real witch that I changed all that. Description ... umm ... sometimes I love description, sometimes I just want to get to the action! In this story I really wanted to get my point across about how horrible it was, but I can definitely see where you're coming from when you say maybe too much. Lol. Thank-you for your review. :)
I love this story. IT'S AMAZING.
The sack of haggis thing was PURE JOY. My brothers and I wrote an idiotic story about a girl who got kidnapped by a ninja, and she was also wanted by some Scottish golfer. The fought on the cables of a bridge, the Scottish man fighting with a sack of haggis, and the ninja fighting with a bag of the girl's tears. Haggis and tears exploded everywhere, and I really don't remember the rest. I think that the Joker got his toe eaten off two or something.
I just told you about that so I could explain why I thought the haggis thing was so funny. I also just REALLY LIKE the word 'haggis'. ^_^
Oh, this made me snort: 'Without introducing any of their names yet, they finished eating with their miniature pitchforks (as in forks) and scimitars (as in guitar picks) and headed to their first class of the day: Defence Against the Dark Arts.' HAHAHA! Scimitars? I never knew such a word like that existed. And you certainly didn't make it up, otherwise it would be underlined in red squiggly lines because of spell check.
I also really like this: 'The teacher person-Homo sapiens sapiens-thing then proceeded straight to the lesson.' Homo sapiens sapiens-thing? THAT'S PURE GOLD, SON! (:
'Girl A was as cool as a cold cucumber that had been left in the freezer, then warmed up for a bit in toaster oven, and then put back in the freezer again, not that that simile made any sense at all.' This simile made sense to me. I chuckled.
I'm favouriteing (definitely not a word) this story. I think I may just be in love with it.
Good day to you, SIR!
Vicki (:
Author's Response:
Salutations, Vicki Reviewer Person Harry Potter Fan Thing!
I am ecstatic that you found my story so hilarious! I had an roaringly fun time writing this magnum octopus, and I am quite glad that other people seem to like my rather absurd sense of humour.
Your story about the ninjas and haggis sounds very entertaining! If you give it a Harry Potter twist and post it here on MNFF, I’ll certainly read it. Also, you’re not alone – I like the word ‘haggis’ too. No other food name in the world inspires such terror…
Ah, so you noticed my alternative dining cutlery? I wanted a more exciting way to say ‘forks’ and ‘knives,’ so those implements became ‘miniature pitch forks’ and ‘scimitars.’ However, the knives (or scimitars) turned into guitar picks for some reason, probably because I thought it was weird. Anyway, a scimitar is a generic term for any Middle Eastern sword with a curved blade, like a sabre.
I have a strange habit of calling people “Homo sapiens sapiens,” just like how I sometimes refer to water as “Dihydrogen Monoxide.” I like to confuse people – it’s rather fun. Also, I have no idea where the cool cucumber simile came from. I suppose my brain works in mysterious ways!
Thanks for reviewing, and watch out for the next chapter!
Tim the Enchanter