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Regret by ron lover
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: When Molly is asked to speak for H.O.M.E., she chooses to speak about the loss of her son, Fred.
I am ron lover of Gryffindor writing for the H.O.M.E. prompt on the Beta Boards.
Date: 03/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: H.O.M.E.
Alyssa. HI :)
I really liked this. I considered taking up this challenge, but yours was so much better than what I was planning.
I loved how Molly was proud of her children, but regretted them fighting anyway. And the way you have her talk - one can really feel her sorrow and love for her son.
I have a few suggestions/comments/questions.
At the very beginning of her speech, Molly speaks of the relationship between the twins. Suddenly she goes on about how they once wanted to do an unbreakable vow on their brother. How are the two connected? Shouldn't the last part belong to the section about them playing pranks?
You say that they wouldn’t let anything happen to them. but who are you referring to as 'they' and who is 'them'?
Also, what confused me a bit is that you said he wasn't the brightest, but he has the ability of making people laugh. I think we agree though, that he really had incredible brains, he just didn't use them in the academic field. Molly says this later as well ('bright young man').
He is – was – always stubborn, but I could tell that he was sure of his choice. Here I think you should change the 'but' to an 'and', as it would connect the two thoughts better.
I liked that you had Molly break the speech off. It allows the reader to kind of think what else she would say (I for one thought she would address the audience more, in a way. She was giving Fred's background, so now I imagine her talking more of the presence, and what his death meant for her and the family...). It also shows how hard it was for her.
Great job, Lyss. Really, it was great. :)
---Andi (oh, and does this count as talking? jk :P)
Author's Response: For the they/them thing - "They" are Fred and George and "them" is the Gryff Quidditch Team.
Unbreakable Vow - At the end of the paragraph I have it trailing off because she didn't finish it. She started her speech but got of on a tangent. She stopped herself. You know? I understand it, but I'm having a hard time explaining it. Sorry.
His brightness - Yes, that's what I meant. :P
I'm glad that you liked this, Andi. Thank you so much for reading and leaving me a nice review.
The Mind of Arthur Weasley by Northumbrian
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
The kitchen at the Burrow has six occupants, Harry, Ginny, Ron, Hermione, Molly and Arthur. The youngsters look nervous. Arthur suspects that they are up to something. What is going on inside…
The Mind of Arthur Weasley
Date: 02/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Mind of Arthur Weasley
YAY :D I knew you could get it up. Fantastic characterization and humour, as usual.
Andrea
Author's Response: George would never let you get away with THAT double entendre. ;-D -N-
The Best Team in East Anglia by minnabird
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: Every year, the best amateur Quidditch team in Suffolk faces off against the best team in Norfolk in the East Anglia Summer Tournament. Isobel Jones, one of exactly seven young witches and wizards in the tiny town of Eleigh St. Mary in Suffolk, decides that not only is she going to form a team for the tournament, her team is going to win it.
The problem? Well, let's see. One of her seven possible players is an utter klutz at Quidditch. Two others are often too busy with their school Quidditch teams to practice hard during the school year. And then there's just the little matter of getting to the finals, facing up against a team that's won two years running and isn't afraid to play dirty, and getting her team through the game unscathed...
"We'll win," she says. "We're going to prove that we’re the best team in East Anglia.â€
People scoff. But her team believes - and that's all that really matters.
Date: 02/21/11 Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2
Hi Minna :)
I was just going through the most recent and the summary caught my eye and then I saw it was yours so I read it. This is a really good idea for a story. I like the characters, and the quidditch-ness, and how you go further into the wizarding world than just the usual Hogwarts fic. Update!
Andi
Author's Response: Hey, Andi. Thanks for reading and reviewing. And I loove going farther into the wizarding world than the usual Hogwarts fic. ;) I will certainly update - I have chapters away with my beta, she just has a busy life.
Minna
Boy Oh Boy by Sagen
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: And I’m fallin’, this spell I’m under
I don’t know what’s up or down
I’m fallin’, it makes me wonder
Why I’ve spent time foolin’ ‘round with boys
Boy oh boy this must be love
Andromeda Black has always wondered why she wasn't like the other Black girls. Oh, she tried to be: she never spoke to Muggleborns and looked down on those from the other houses with disdain. However, one day she meets a boy unlike any of those she's known before. Someone who can look past her heritage and see her for who she really is. Slowly, she starts to believe him when he tells her that being different might not be such a bad thing...
Date: 11/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: Boy Oh Boy
Hehe
Author's Response: Dos that mean it's good? Hehe :)
Wangoballwime? by Midnight Storm
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: James and Lily watch from up above as their son asks Cho Chang to the Yule Ball.
Date: 11/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: Wangoballwime?
Wow :) I don't know whether to laugh or be sad - or both? The conversation between Lily and James was really funny (and I can see them reflecting on it like that), but it was sad, too. Whenever I think of them watching over Harry I never thought about them witnessing the bad parts.
This was really good. Keep writing! :)
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! It's my first fic, I'm really glad you like it. It came across my mind when I was reading GoF a few weeks ago. I was wondering how this scene would look to Harry's parents, and then I figured I'd write a story about it!
~Midnight Storm
Chances by ron lover
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Lauren and Robert had a plan if something happened to Hogwarts while they were still students. It was a simple plan, easy to follow, but Lauren couldn't go through with it. Even though it would mean she could get herself killed.
I am ron lover of Gryffindor and this is my final for the Missing Moments class on the MNFF Beta Boards.
Date: 01/04/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Hii,
Lyss, I already told you, but I like this a lot :D I like how the characters slip in so easily with the world we know, as if they were always there. Good job.
And you're welcome (although I do realize that doing it over AIM was more difficult than just sending the word doc back... >.>). My pleasure -
Andi
Author's Response: Thank you so much Andi! And yes, it would have been so much easier to send the doc back to me, but it doesn't matter now. :P
Ticklish by armagod679
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Never tickle a sleeping dragon. This should be fairly obvious, but Godric Gryffindor, the bravest man in England, has never cared about the obvious.
Date: 02/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: Motto
Wow. I must say, I was very impressed. A very original take on the potterverse and the motto. I've noticed your stories for being original. :)
The setting was done excellently as well. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Epithalamium by Northumbrian
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Weddings don't just happen you know! They need planning.
Date: 08/30/11 Title: Chapter 1: One Hundred and Eleven Days: Plan, What Plan?
Hi Neil,
we haven't been in contact for a while, sadly, but when I saw this I knew it must be good. And it was! It was sweet, it was funny; it's easy to imagine it having happened this way. Good job!
Andrea
Author's Response: Andrea
You're right, we haven't. Sorry about that, it's probably my fault. :-(But thanks for the review. There will be more.
-N-
The Last Straw by Radcliffefan07
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: A disgrace. That's what his mother called him. He'd denounced the pure blood life style, and lost his temper with his father for the final time. This was it. The last straw.
This is the story of the night Sirius Black left home for good and moved in with the Potter's. Enjoy!
Date: 09/28/11 Title: Chapter 1: The Last Straw
Ash, this was really good! I loved that you put in James's view too. And the "welcome home" at the end was very sweet. = )
Author's Response: Andi,
Thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it. We really need to catch up sometime! I miss you!
-Ash
The Only One by Equinox Chick
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Victoire Weasley is in her third year studying to be a Healer. She is beautiful. She is bright. But she's alone. Since splitting up with Teddy Lupin, only one person has come close to disturbing her dreams.
Unfortunately, he happens to be the professor standing in front of her. She knows he has a partner, but she also knows that he's distracted.
This story is a prequel to my Next Gen fic High. It is not necessary to read that to understand this, but reading Lavender, blue - A Gryffindor True might help, although you should get the gist.
Happy Birthday. Ariana (lucca4) You are an incredible writer. (She also left me a shedload of reviews when I deleted the whole of High.)
Thank you, Natalie. You are a stellar beta and a wonderful friend.
Disclaimer: I am not JKR, but I make fab spag bol.
Date: 09/25/11 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Just a Little Crush
Uhh, I liked this a lot. You really made the relationships intertwine and everything fit together.
Also, as I live near DC, I enjoyed that part. =)
Andrea
Author's Response: YAY! I went to DC years ago and loved it. Glad you enjoyed the story. I was a bit too sad for Lavender and Blaise, though. Thank you ~Carole~
The Unbreakable Curse by Karaley Dargen
Rated: 6th-7th Years • Summary: In 1993, Bill Weasley is working on a tomb in Egypt with a team of Magiarchaeologists and Curse-Breakers. It is a job like any other ... or so it seems, until members of the expedition start dying, and Bill has to race against time to figure out what exactly it is that they awakened in the tomb of Mentuhotep, and how it can be stopped before it reaches him.
The following are characters from JKR’s creations: Bill Weasley, Ragnok, Agatha Chubb (QttA), and the last names of Deverill and Pilliwickle. I don’t own them and never will!
I owe a large debt to Hannah (coolh5000), Carole (EquinoxChick), and Natalie (hestiajones) for their constant encouragement and help at various stages of this story.
Fair Warning: Some of the reviews (naturally) contain spoilers, especially those towards the end. So if you want to be safe, don't read those before you read the story.
This story just WON a 2012 QSQ Award in the General category, as best chaptered story. THANK YOU!!!
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So here we are, at last, at our journey’s end,
And it’s time for some sweets; come on, bring a friend!
Simply search for the holiday and the first thing you’ll see
Is a familiar character’s first Halloween.
Date: 03/22/12 Title: Chapter 1: Bliss
Hi Karaaa
I really enjoyed this story! Your plot was really well thought out and interesting. I never warmed up to Marcus though so I wasn't overly surprised at the end, but have having both Marcus AND Natasha be the bad guys was unexpected - poor Bill!
I loved your characterization of Bill. He was the perfect mixture of super cool guy and Head Boy.
Thanks for writing this! I'm in Egypt at the moment actually, and am flying to Luxor tomorrow. I'll connect this fic with my stay here from now on. =)
Andi
Author's Response: ANDI! I haven't heard from you in forever. You're in Egypt, that is so exciting! I'm very jealous. I'm also extra glad you liked it then, and didn't think the setting was wildly off. Thank you so so much for your kind words. I think Marcus was a bit too obvious, but I'm still learning, so...
This review was such a surprise, I'm so glad to hear from you. And glad that you seem to be doing well. Have a ton of fun while you're staying in Egypt!