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Daughter of the Dark Side by Lyra Lestrange
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary:
Lindsey Tonks appears to be a normal, almost invisible Hogwarts student, but underneath her is someone far from normal. What the world doesn't know is that Lindsey is the daughter of two well-known imprisoned Death Eaters, and has an identity she must hide from the world. Underneath Lindsey is a girl named Lyra Lestrange, a girl who is meant to be a secret forever. But will it last forever?
*Begins in GoF and follows the series through DH.
**Will appeal to fans of the Black family! Prominent characters are Bellatrix, Tonks, Andromeda, Sirius, and (to an extent) Narcissa.
Part Four Synopsis:
It's the summer after Albus Dumbledore's death, and the whole world is falling to Voldemort and the Death Eaters. Broken-hearted Lyra, unable to return to Hogwarts, must go into hiding with her family. It doesn't last long, and eventually Lyra is faced with a choice: join or die. Lyra's decision comes with many surprises, including a new ally who follows her to the final battle of good versus evil. While Lyra's path may seem clear, she finds herself torn between two sides for the final time, and in the end, despite tragedy and loss, Lyra accomplishes the impossible...which defies all of the agreements she and her family ever made.
Three years later, the fic has been completely finished! Enjoy reading it without having to wait for new chapters. Thanks to those who patiently waited and faithfully reviewed!
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 7- Holiday in Hogsmeade
I loved it!!!!!!!!!!!
Nitpicking:
'... she'd successfully asked the fourth year Hufflepuff Justin Finch-Fletchley and he'd accepted...' you wrote SUCCESSFULLY and then HE'D ACCEPTED, which is to posotive forms... you only need one....
hmm...I had somethig else bu I can't remember right now, so I'll be back later!
And again, I loved how Lyra is (Call her Lyra???) making friends! (: Or trying to, even if she's afraid of her secret being found out...
Author's Response:
Oh, I see what you mean...
Yep, I call her Lyra even if everyone calls her Lindsey. I like how she's trying to make friends, too!
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 8- Big Night
you say Dora tought Lyra a spell to staighten hair, which is fine-but toinks wouldn't need it, being a metamorphmagus...
you also say that she usually is normal looking, and that she takes after her mother. but Bellatrix was beautiful, so wouldn't lyra be too?
I don't know about you or Lyra, but i miself wouldn't find it sad that i would never see my parents again if they were death Eaters. i would be really angry at them... Lyra never knew them and grew up with the Tonks', so in her place I would ttally think of them as my 'parents'...
parvaty refers to ron as 'farry's freind' to the other girls in her dormatory, but I'm pretty sure they all know who he is- they don't need the remark of him beeing haarryy's friend, or so I would think.
Alsom Pavarty seemed surprised at seeing hermioone and Krum together at the beginning of the ball, so it's sort of OOC to have her tell them that she's gooing to go with Krum... but it works fine with the story, just being nitpick- sorry!
she should talk to harry, they could have a hurting-because-of-voldemort-club :P
once again, great job!!!
Author's Response:
You're right, she doesn't need it--she just happens to know it.
She takes after her mother in the eyes and facial features, mostly. I understand you would think she's beautiful--it makes sense--but Lyra can't stand out so she has to be plain. It's possible for her to look like her mother in certain ways (not every way) and still be plain, I think. She also takes after her father, and since we don't know what he looks like I made it up and I picture him with straight brown hair and brown eyes. I imagine him very plain, therefore his daughter is very plain.
Lyra is angry at her parents but still feels like something is missing from her life. I personally would probably feel the same. She just wants to know more about her origins. For instance, she doesn't know why they even had a baby when they were so devoted to Voldemort. Not knowing her parents leaves her confused over lots of things!
Well, that's true. It was kind of tough to characterize Parvati and Lavender, because even though Lyra and Hermione know them, they're not the greatest of friends or anything. I don't know. Sorry if it sounded weird.
Oh, are you talking about what happens in the book or movie? I think I know what you mean but I really wanted to put in a "girl talk" scene if you know what I mean :) Thanks again. You give me stuff to think about.
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 10: Chapter 9- Day at the Lake
i think neville met luna in his 5th year
but I still love how she's meking friends, although you wrote tthat she made one-maybe two friends, but what about ginny?
Author's Response: They probably did, but it's fanfiction so I'm changing things up :) And yes, Lyra is sort of friends with Ginny but at this point she isn't really close to any of the three. She's saying she might have some new friends.
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 10- The Easter Holidays
you swithched the POV once, i think. during dinner, you say 'Dora told her' but normally Lyra tells us the story...
Author's Response: I look this up and found that is says 'Dora told about her job.' So Lyra is telling us that Dora was talking to everyone else.
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11- The Imposter
When Lyra and BC jr. were talking, dumbledore left her without any protection- he would have left, but stayed nearby. And i think you should have added more AFTER the dementors kiss. Aftrerall if she was in the room she probably would have been sent to the Hospital Wing......
Great so far!!!
*leaves to keep reading*
Author's Response:
I didn't add more after the dementor part because I wanted to end it with that line, but I can assure you Dumbledore was outside the room. She didn't need the hospital wing because she wasn't attacked, just a little scared. I'm glad you continue to read this!
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 13: Chapter 12- The Order
isn'tNarcisa a death eater?
And Abdromeda's pretty tough, i think. I'm pretty sure she could handle Tonks being in the Order. By the way, I loved how you did that with Tonks, the joining,...
And Mundungus rang the doorbell, which should have set off sirius' mum.
And when we first see lupi there was something in the paragraph... it was supposed to be
sense
but you wrote 'since' I think.
And the Weasley's (Ron, Ginny, the twins) and Hermione havn't arrivesd at grimmould place yet?
Author's Response:
No, she's not, she's just caught in the middle since her whole family is. Andromeda is tough, I'm sure, but she's lost two sisters to the Dark Side and doesn't want to lose her daughter. It's also tough for her to think about her daughter fighting her sisters. I'm glad you liked that part, though, because it was definitely one of my favorites to write!
I don't think Mundungus rang the doorbell, he just burst into the room. You were right about the 'sense' thing though, although I feel too lazy to fix it :P
No, they haven't arrived yet. Thanks again for your review!
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 14: Chapter 13- Spilling Secrets
ginny says that they have faced 'way more thab they have!'. I'm not sure this is accurate; defianetly the same amount, but I think members of the order must have faced pretty much.
isuppose you like sirius? :P
loved this chaooie!
Author's Response:
She says 'most of us,' so she isn't referring to all the Order members. True, Lupin, Mad-Eye, Sirius, and maybe Tonks have probably faced more, but I'm sure the others have more experience than, say, Mundungus or even Mrs. Weasley.
And yes, I love Sirius :) I think everyone does!
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14- Fifth Year Begins
hmmm... i would expetc harry, Hermione and the Weasleys to be nicer to lyra now that they knew her, and invite them to sit with them on the trainride...
i liked it!
(am i annoying???)
Author's Response:
Others have mentioned this to me, but if you recall that in OotP, there were six people (Harry, Ron, Hermione, Ginny, Neville, and Luna) in a compartment, and I don't know if Lyra would fit! Don't worry, you're not annoying...these reviews make me think.
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14- Fifth Year Begins
hmmm... i would expetc harry, Hermione and the Weasleys to be nicer to lyra now that they knew her, and invite them to sit with them on the trainride...
i liked it!
(am i annoying???)
Author's Response: Oops, this was posted three times...
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 14- Fifth Year Begins
hmmm... i would expetc harry, Hermione and the Weasleys to be nicer to lyra now that they knew her, and invite them to sit with them on the trainride...
i liked it!
(am i annoying???)
Author's Response:
Already posted
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 19: Chapter 18- Escape and Encounter
well, about the magic she did underage: didn't she use a hex on Harper?
uh... exiting chappie!!!!!! she made the right chaice (: (: (: (: (:
so did ginny guess????
i'll keep reading, maybe you will tell me in future chapters! (:
Author's Response:
Okay, yes, she did. I looked it up and you were right. You'll just have to go with it :P After all, didn't Harry and friends use magic outside before without getting caught, like in Diagon Alley? At least just to cast Lumos or something? I can't remember. I'll look it up.
Ginny hasn't necessarily guessed, but she's a bit suspicious :)
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 19- Gamma Orionis
well, there's not much i can say about this chapter, it was great!
hmm..exept, if i were REALLY picky, I could tell you that you used the word 'time' twice in a row. 'for the first time in a long time' insted, you could write 'for the first time in days' or something like that. but it doesn't matter :P
good characterization of tonks! (:
Author's Response: Thanks! Tonks is very fun to write about. And I like the sound of 'first time in a long time' for effect. It's catchy :)
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 21: Chapter 20- The Beginning of the End
the beginnig of the end, you could say that.
so she's going to go to the minisrty? and her 'parents' will be there...right???
why a dove?
i'll just keep reading :P
Author's Response:
Yep, she's going to the Ministry, and yes, her parents will be there (scary music plays).
Ooh, yes, I love this question! You're the first to ask, but anyway. I considered a few names for Lyra before I chose one, and one was Columba, the constellation for the dove. I decided to make this her middle name (which is stated later in the story). So naturally, her Patronus is a dove :)
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 21- Floo, Fire, and Flight
ok, don't have much time to review-need to keep readsing! good characterization of harry, also the parts not from the book. although from lyra's view he seems kind of stupid.....
i liked how you did itwith kreacher, two...
gotta go! next chapter, here i come! :P
Author's Response:
I do my best to write parts not from the book. Why does he seem stupid? Is it just because Lyra is frustrated with him? Kreacher is also fun to write about. I write about the characters who had important roles but not necessarily a lot of scenes (Kreacher, Tonks, Bellatrix).
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 23: Chapter 22- An Unexpected Twist
at the beginning you forgot the 'e' from 'he' ut i'll live with it :P
well i think harry seems a little stupid, not hust in the last chapters, but in the whole story so far. not a lot, but with lyra saying how he always gets everything......
hmm...i think harry, however much he would want tio save sirius, would not let lyra ,or anyone, die. i think he would go after her, or split up....and hermione can't do heeling spells yee; she didn't even really know how in their 7th year.
And i noticedd that lyra passes out a lot. Although she really is a Griffie (:
unexpected in deed...
Author's Response:
Oops, yeah, I did forget that. Okay, I see what you're saying about Harry. I guess I don't understand how he seems stupid...he's just in the spotlight a lot. I actuallly thought of this a long time ago, in like third grade when I first read GoF--everything happens to Harry (Triwizard Champion, Chosen One, etc.) but obviously there wouldn't be a plot if that stuff didn't happen. Lyra, who can't get into Harry's head, sort of thinks he's a spotlight-seeker and is bitter about it. That's just the character she is. But I'm not trying to portray him that way.
Wait, do you mean Harry is acting stupid, or the way he's characterized is?
He wasn't going to leave her to die. He just figured she would be okay because the teeth weren't sharp (and he's acting on an adrenaline rush, so he can't really think right :P). I don't remember the healing spell thing exactly but I think I might know what you're talking about...but the cuts weren't very deep, so I figured a simple spell would do it, an easy one Hermione could probably perform.
Actually...she passes out a lot because I want to remove her from a scene that would require copying lines from the book, which I don't want to do. And it's more exciting if she passes out, anyway. She's a Gryffindor, so her bravery will kick in someday (think of Neville in book one and then in book seven).
Thanks again!
Date: 07/10/09 Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 23- Blood Spills Blood
urg! i hate it when she crucios good people ):
NOW, EHERE'S THE NEXT CHAPTER??????????????????????????????????????????
Author's Response:
Sorry :( It has to happen for the story to work. The next chapter is waiting to be submitted! It should be up soon (within the week, maybe?) so keep checking back or add the story to your favorites so you can get updates. Thanks for all the reviews and enjoy the rest of the story!
Date: 07/18/09 Title: Chapter 25: Chapter 24- Aftermath
AWWWWWWWWWWW!!*wails*
yes! i FINALLY have time to finish reading this chappie! And I get to leave the 100th review!!! (I think0
so to the chapter(nt picky voice): once at the beginnig when lyra and Andromeda are talking you forgot the speach mark things. (these: ")(i know i should kjnow what their called, and I do, I just can't remeber, LOL)
wow, you had me scared there for a moment! When you said someone had told her secret I had kind of just read it quickly because I was exited and then I missed the Order thing so I was lke 'WHAT? Harry told everyone????) So Snape told..... I guess Snape is not your favorite character???? I don't know......It seems sort of unrealistic, but it's defianetly the only good way you could have gotten the secret out, unless Bellatrix said something.......oh, whatever. Just ignore that last paragraph!
Haha what a coinsedince that Dora woke up when they were there, but it's fine. Just yankin' your wand a bit :P
And hmm I think that it would make more sence if tonks said if she would have, i don't know...'i was duelling her, if i wouldn't have blabla then sirius would be alive...' instead of 'kill her' of course they want her dead, but ... she just .... oh, SCRATCH THAT to.
Sorry for this pathetic attempt at a reviw, but give me a break, it's 2 in the morning. I stayed up to read your chappie!!!!!
Author's Response: Yes, I'm pretty sure this is the 100th review. Snape isn't my favorite character but this seemed like the only way for the secret to get out. Bellatrix could have said something, but she had to flee with Voldemort! Anyway, I'm glad you stayed up to read the chapter (I couldn't do it--midnight is as late as I can go). I know you said to scratch this, but I had to respond anyway :)
Date: 07/18/09 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue
urg, you know what? just forget my other review!
I really liked this chappie. it was one of my favs! I like the talk between harry and Lyra. And their visit to St. Mungo's. And Madam Pomfry (how do ya spell that???)
And it was so sad ):
*sigh8
Can't wait for the next chapter and see how everyone will react to the spilled seret! Especially Neville. And the prophet, if that's going to play a role in it. Anyway, good job!
And i was also at the midnihgt release thing (: (: (; Did you like it??
Author's Response: Yay! The Harry-Lyra talk seems to be a favorite part. You'll see some reactions to the secret in the next chapter, which is in the queue. Thanks again! And yes, I loved the movie :D I'm going again on Monday!
Date: 08/25/09 Title: Chapter 28: Chapter 27- A Pensieve of Memories
ohkay, it was a good chappie overall. (:
i doubt making a pensive would be that easy, though. in the books it's a rare object, isn't it? if it were that easy wouldn't everyone have one?
and i also doubt andromeda would go to bellatrix about ted, as she's constently talking about purebloods and the like.
and if you say black mannor, you don't meen grimmould place, do you?
and the 'why do i need hogwarts, the dark lord won't care...' speech was almost the same as draco uses in the book.....
a good chappie, though. i hope i an finally find the tiome to catch up on them..... and i hope i only post this once.... don't know why it always does that.... and only on this story.......
Author's Response: I know the Pensieve thing is a little weird, but she had to get one somehow. Before I revised it, she received one from Moody, who just happened to have one on him. I didn't think that seemed very realistic, so I made it happen like this. I don't mean Grimmauld Place; that's where Sirius's family lived. This Black Manor is where the Black sisters and their parents live. Glad you had time to catch up. Finding time to submit...well, that will be difficult for me...
Date: 08/25/09 Title: Chapter 29: Chapter 28- Rage in the Robe Shop
-Find out what kind of relationship Bellatrix had with Narcissa and how things were like for the three sisters growing up
this is her last point on her list. but the how things were growing up, wasn't that kinda answered in the last chapter? well, of course there can be more....
and what i would like to have explained better, is why narcissa didn't take lyra in? you said she had a son, that was the reason..... but... i thnk that's a rather weak point. she was the one who got along with bellatrix, wasn't she? .... ect......
and, seesh! when will lyra stop doing that?????
Author's Response:
Yeah, it was answered in the last chapter, but like you said, there can be more. The main point is that Andromeda and Narcissa have completely different perspectives on their childhood/family, and Andromeda can only tell Lyra so much.
The thing with Narcissa gets a lot of people. In short, the reason is this: if Narcissa had taken her in, there wouldn't be a story! I mean, I could write one but it would be totally different, and I personally like the idea of the struggle between dark and light, which is kind of a theme, and something that wouldn't be present in a story where she was raised by the Malfoys. I also can't say much because it may give away too much about Narcissa's character. You'll see in the future.