I like this chapter. Everyone is very believable in it. I think the whole potions scene was pretty believable, too. I like the part with Kat the most. Most people write James as a 17 year old male who only thinks about his love for Lily, but you don't, and I like that. You are doing a great job on your story so far, and I'm excited to find out what happend next.

Author's Response: Thanks! I get a little annoyed too when writers make James - an attractive, popular teenage boy - spend all his time pining for Lily. I'm glad you agree! The next chapter hopefully won't take too long.

I like this story so far. I really want to read more of it. I feel bad for James though. His uncle sounded like a cool person. I hope it's all from James' point of view because it's really good and interesting.

Author's Response: Thanks; I'm glad you want to read more! I feel pretty bad for James, too, and I agree that writing from James's POV (if I can stick to it!) will be interesting.

This chapter is really great. James is just amazing. If there was a QSQ for best characterization of canon characters, then I would nominate James. He is just so much fun to read. His believability is really good too. He is mature, but he still fun. Do you know what I mean?

I know I keep telling you that, and I'm going to every chapter, but it's something that's nice to hear.

Lily is also good too. She handled the situations just like I would imagine her to. She isn't cliched with the blow-up-in-your-face kind of reactions, but she handles them well. Especially with what that girl said to her about her dead friend.

When James went to his room and Lily was there, I thought you we going to end it when he realized that it was Lily. I am so glad that you didn't. I think that you left it off at a great spot. It makes me want to find out what happens next, without leaving a huge cliff hanger.

Speaking of cliff hangers, I love how you ended the last chapter. It made me think that somebody died, but then we found out that she didn't die. It's a great twist.

This is by far the best chapter that I have read. I can't quote all of the lines that I like because it would take forever. There are some really good lines in this chapter.

I'm very excited for the next chapters so I can find out what happens next. Actually, maybe I just want to read them so I can read good characterization. I don't know. What I do know is that I love this story.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! One of the main goals I had in mind when I started writing this was to write a very in-character James, so it makes my day to read that you think I've written him well! And I'm glad you liked last chapter's cliffhanger. If I were evil, I would have ended this one on a cliffhanger, too, but I couldn't ;)

I thought it was Regulus ever since James and Lily went to the Slytherin common room, but in the last chapter I thought it was the girl! You did a great job with the hints in this story. None of the hints were really big, and they're nice and subtle; nothing was set in stone. It was great.

I read parts in this chapter so quickly; I've never read faster than when I read when James was talking to Grace. You dragged everything out perfectly. It was long so I was dying to see who killed Jill, but it wasn't too long and I didn't really want to skip ahead. You wrote that scene perfectly.

And I was so...captivated by that scene that I didn't even skip ahead. I always skip ahead, but it never crossed my mind to skip ahead to see who the killer was. That's another reason why that scene was amazing.

I love Grace's characterization there. She feels sorry about what she did and she's trying to get James to see it that way. I love reading that in any story. She is written beautifully while she is talking to James.

"It was Regulus," Grace whispered. "Regulus Black killed Jill."

When I read that, this is what went through my head: 1) 'I KNEW IT WAS HIM!' 2) Oh. My. Gosh. I actually said 'I knew it' out loud. To me, I think that having it come right before the memory is part of what made it so powerful. The other part is how Grace said it. She got braver and finally came out with it. I love how you wrote her doing that. :)

*raises hand* I must confess that I almost skipped the memory. I skipped over it and I read the first sentence of the next part, but it felt like I was committing a crime so I went back up and read it. I think you put the memory in a great spot. As much as I wished I could get on with the story, it was nice to take a break and collect my thoughts while finding out what happened to them. I felt so bad for James when I read that he didn't really think about his uncle. The guilt must be terrible for him; I know I'd feel terrible.

Regulus's eyes flickered to Grace, and his lips tightened imperceptibly. James might not know Regulus, but he knew Sirius, and he knew what that tightening meant; he knew how to read the face of a Black brother. Regulus might be a killer, but he still loved somebody, still loved Grace.

I love that paragraph. I always love a similarity between Regulus and Sirius, and I've never read this one before. It's good to know that something - or someone - can have something over Regulus.

"I haven't the faintest idea what you mean," Rosier replied, tossing the coin into the air and then deftly catching it.

When I read this part I had a feeling that the coin would come in to play later in the story. I love the way you used this later in the story.

I'm so happy that you have Lily under the Imperious Curse. No one ever uses that in fanfiction. Rosier, in my opinion, was right -- it is the best Unforgivable Curse. Okay, I'm not happy that the curse is used on Lily, but it's what makes the chapter interesting. James can't fight Rosier like he wants to because he has control over Lily. It was a lot of fun to read Lily under the curse.

I smiled when Sirius came in. No matter what the situation is, Sirius can always make me smile. And I love where he comes in at. It seems right.

Regulus smiled. "Regulus," he said smoothly, "knows where his loyalty lies."

Do you mean Rosier there?

"I don't regret killing Weiss. It was what I had to do. It was what was asked and expected of me. I'm not ashamed of choosing to follow my beliefs." He paused, and James stood waiting, waiting for some hint that there was still a spot of humanity left in Regulus Black. "But I didn't mean for anyone else to get involved. I didn't want Danes to die. I didn't want Grace to get hurt.

At the end of that paragraph you need a " at the end. (I forget what they're called at the moment.)

And also, that is one of my favorite paragraphs because it sums up Regulus pretty well for only being a paragraph. I love it because Regulus became a Death Eater because he wanted to, not because someone wanted him to. It also shows that he has a compassionate side and he cares about someone other than himself, unlike lots of people like him are portrayed.

That brings me to everyone’s characterization.

I've already told you how much I like Grace's. She isn't overly... sad or overly emotional, which could happen very easily in her situation.

Rosier is probably my favorite character in this chapter, which is saying something because Regulus is my favorite character in the whole series. Rosier is just so...evil. I love how he taunts James with what he does to Lily. He truly - in a way - is a smart person. He knows how to work people in his favor. He is so much fun to read.

And then there's Regulus. I already mentioned some stuff, so I won't get in to that. "I lied," said Regulus, not looking his brother in the eye. I could be taking this the wrong way, but I'm guessing that people are on their way, or, if not that, he at least is still on his side. Also, at this part here: The last thing clear thing he saw was Sirius struggling with his brother as the other boy tried — and succeeded — to hold him back. Regulus either is keeping him there for his own safety, or so that Rosier can carry out his plan. I'm leaning towards the first one because I don't think that Rosier would tell Regulus all of his plan. That would be very unwise. Even though Rosier told Regulus some stuff, I'm sure that he doesn't trust Regulus with everything. I don't believe that Regulus will particularly help his brother or anyone else, but I believe that he was telling the truth that he doesn't want anyone else to get involved.

I think James remained very, very in character throughout this chapter. He would do anything to help Lily, but he made it clear that he would never join Voldemort. That shows how strong he is. In that situation I would do something completely different; I'd join Voldemort, but fake it and hope that works. But James stays strong with his beliefs. I love that about him. I think JKR would have written him like that.

I love this chapter so much, in case you haven't noticed. ;) Everyone's characterization is amazing and the plot is wonderful as well. Just one question: Why was Sirius there alone? I thought that Sirius was with Remus, and that they would have went there together. But maybe Sirius was alone and that's why he's the only one there with James. I'm not sure.

I can't believe I didn't say anything about the ending! I love it, especially Rosier. He's rather arrogant with how he goes about stuff before the portkey goes off and after they're near Voldemort. I love it.


Standing above him, his red eyes staring at James appraisingly, was someone James had never met or even seen but whom he knew, without a doubt, to be the man called Lord Voldemort.

I love how you write that. It is worded very well. I love how you use a lot of words without having too many. It's amazing. That last sentence is a prime example. There was a lot of detail and some stuff that isn't necessary to the sentence, and that's what makes it great. Not to mention it stays true to James. And it's a great last sentence that leaves me wanting more.

Once again, you leave us with a great cliff-hanger. I know I'm dying to find out what happens next, and I'm sure that tons of other people are too.

Amazing job on everything in this chapter! (Especially with Rosier and Regulus!)

Author's Response: Ooh, such an epic review -- thank you so much! I'm glad you caught the hints that it was Regulus but that it wasn't TOO obvious :) And I was really afraid the conversation with James and Grace would be frustrating and seem dragged out, so it's a relief to know you think it was well paced and that you liked how Grace was portrayed. It does surprise me that the Imperius Curse isn't used more, because despite how awful it is, it really has a lot of potential in fic, I think, if used well. Oh, and I'm so happy you liked all the characterizations! Rosier is a Darth Vader kind of evil -- the kind you love to hate. As for Regulus, well, his role isn't done yet. Thanks for pointing out the typos! I always miss a few! As for why Sirius was there alone -- that will be explained in the next chapter, I promise. I'll definitely try to update soon -- I know that was a crazy cliffhanger. Thanks again for the amazing, detailed review!

I really love this chapter. It was so funny. I couldn't stop llaughing when they were talking about their school. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: im glad you liked it and i will try 2 update asap!

I really like this chapter. It was very funny.

Author's Response: Thanks 4 the review! I'm glad u liked it! :D

I really like this chapter. It was so funny. It was really great. I can't wait for the next one.

Author's Response: Thanks 4 the review!

I really like this chapter. It's cool how you made Severus in this. You described things really well, too. I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope it's as good as this one was, because it was really good.

Author's Response: I hope for that as well and I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for the review! :)

I like this story. I can't wait to see what they are trying to do.

It would be amazing to have another chapter ot story with this. It was really good. I like how you make him kind of mean but not as mean as Draco. I think you did a really good job on that.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm glad you liked Scorpius' character. - Cassie