Oh gosh, this was fabulous! True to character AND cute without being sickening! And so funny! After having just gone through a nasty break-up, this somehow makes me feel good about relationships again.
I somehow have the feeling that the huge smile on my face is a dead giveaway to any of my coworkers that I am not doing what I'm supposed to be doing!
Thank you so much for sharing!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it and it could make you feel a little better about relationships again! And your co-workers are just jealous that they're not reading fanfiction, too! ;)

First, thank you for sharing an entertaining story with us! I can certainly see this happening.
Two points, though:
1.) I find it hard to believe that Hermione is the only Muggleborn witch to have attempted magic before reaching Hogwarts. In fact, I would think that Muggleborns would be PARTICULARLY prone to it, as the entire issue likely seems very exciting, and they are unlikely to know about the Statute of Secrecy.
2.) There was one rather serious typo: "and you certainly are going to be sent to prison,” Mrs. Jans said in a frightened..." I believe you might want to add a not in there - "you certainly are not".

Overall, a good story!

Author's Response: Yeah! Time for rebutal! Let's see...first, just because a little kid has a wand doesn't mean they know how to use. And J.K. has mentioned that Hermione is one of the most powerful witches in her generations. Maybe successful wandwork before actual education is quite rare. And I also agree that Hermione was unlikely the first case of this, but more likely that Hermione is just the first case of such a sitution during the time the two Ministry officials have been employed. It's more a rhetoric thing than anything. As to the typo, I will fix that right away!

Absolutely fascinating! I can't imagine this will always be an easy one to write, and I applaud you for taking on such a task! Your characters already show promising development, and the setting feels well-fleshed. I do hope you keep up with this.
Reading it, I couldn't help but think of the His Dark Materials by Philip Pullman. There is a lot of ground to expand this story into.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really appreciate it. I am working on chapter two, and I have plan on having ten chapters upon completion (with a possible epilogue). I was very influenced by His Dark Materials when I wrote this! Those are some of my favorite books, and they're very thought provoking.

Bravo, bravo! So beautifully written, so well built-up! I think I might have cheered some when he threw the door to the church open.

Author's Response: Totally! I definitely felt the moment as well :)

Not a bad chapter. I like your characterization, and your writing is smooth.
Now, I don't know a ton about babies, but I have covered developmental psychology, and some things about your little newborn seem off. For one, newborn babies can't focus on anything more than a little bit in front of their face, and laughter is a bit beyond them, I believe. Also, babies' eyes start out blue and then slowly change to their adult color over a few months. You can probably find a short summary of what happens at each stage - newborn, two months, six months, etc - on google if you're interested. :)

Author's Response: Yeah, I used a few different sites to get an idea about the development, but I wanted to showcase that he was not a normal child since he is a young wizard. Some of the things that Xavier does is a little behind his age, but according to the sites I saw, not too outrageous.

Besides, from reading Harry Potter, I got the impression that wizards and witches develop differently. For example, when Dumbledore went to tell Tom Riddle about Hogwarts, the head of the orphanage told Dumbledore that Tom was odd even as a baby. How he hardly cried and everything. For that reason, later on in my story I make a point to explain my idea that the reason Xavier seems to do something that he shouldn't be able to do at his age is because he is aided by magic.

In truth though, I didn't know it took months for the eyes to change. Though, I still like the idea that Xavier's changed so quickly, but I thank you for teaching me something new. :)

I hope you like the story enough to keep reading. And, keep the comments coming, I love feedback.

I love your writing! I can't wait to see how this ends. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm sorry to make you wait, but hopefully you won't think it's too long.

While I'm certainly interested enough to continue reading, I'm not sure about where this is going. It is very angsty so far, with the martyred main characters and "everyone hates us" premise. I'm going to keep at it though, because it's at least interesting to read something different from the usual.

Author's Response: First off, thanks for the review. I know it can be angsty, but that's generally my style. :/ It is a bit ... different, but I"m glad you think it's out of the norm. Things will look up for a bit in the story, and I promise you it will have a (somewhat) happy ending. :) (Once I write it ....) Thanks again for the review!

Ellie

For how short it is, you pack a surprising amount of character into this. I'm not a fan of Michael Corner, but I'll freely admit that the moment I saw what song this was based on, I immediately put on the song and started reading. It was worth it. Thanks for a great read.
And can I just say that in over 10 years of that being one of my favorite songs off of Nine Lives, I never realized the words were "wrong turn"? Hahaha! Your fic is even educational.
Cheers!

Author's Response: You are so kind :) Thanks a lot for taking the time to review - and I'm glad my fic was educational as well (I'm horrible at recognizing lyrics in songs and probably wouldn't have known 'wrong turn' either had I not sneakily looked up the lyrics). xx Ariana

I had to keep telling myself not to be grossed out, but this was actually really good. I'm glad that you persevered with it! I kind of want a sequel where Rose comes to her senses and gets with Albus (I love Albus's character, by the way - so fully developed in such a short time, and so sympathetic), but I wouldn't want to read it unless they got together at the end. I would feel too bad for Albus! I guess that goes to show that you really made me care about your characters. I am also curious about Rose. I feel like we are able to understand Albus fairly well, thanks to the narration following him, but Rose is still largely a mystery. I'd love to see what makes her tick. Cheers!

Author's Response: Hello :) Thank you for the review, and for being honest about things. It is a potentially squicky pairing, but I've always had this idea in my head, especially with the song, so I had to give it a go. I was contemplating throwing in the towel at one point (Albus wasn't cooperating with me), so it's nice to know that you enjoyed it and that my persevation paid off :)

Haha, I doubt Rose would get with Albus. She would probably sleep with him again, but she's not in love with him -- she loves Scorpius too much, sadly, lol. And YAY to developing Albus's character -- I did have some issues with him, like I said.

Rose is more of a central character (as is Scorpius) in my chaptered story, Blood and Roses, though that's a prequel to this story, and it's much more about Scorpius than it is about Rose, so you might like it. Depends. At any rate, I'm glad you enjoyed this story -- like I said, it gave me a lot of grief, so it's lovely to know you liked it. Thank you very much!

~Soraya~

I like it! But is it meant to cut off so abruptly?

Author's Response: No, sorry. I did a minor edit and managed to introduce an html error which deleted the end of the story. Oops! It's fixed now. Thanks for letting me know. -N-