To all of us, the thought of Hermione killing someone is too absurd to consider. But what would she do in a situation like this? I think you have the exact right idea here. Congratulations.

I think this story was very well written, and I thoroughly enjoyed it. You have all the details and the characterization spot on.

I'm not quite sure whether an "Oblivious" as simple as that would have done the job. We know that's a memory wiping spell, I'm not doubting that. However, what I don't know is whether or not it would be as simple as that. Say something wrong and then simply say the word and their memory goes away? Why doesn't that happen more often then? Something just seems fuzzy there. Just something to consider.

I liked this story. It was realistic and a joy to read. Very nicely done. Thank you.

*Norberta*

Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you for the review! I'm glad you enjoyed it and appreciate your kind words, especially about characterization. I think this is exactly how Hermione might have reacted in this situation, so I'm glad someone agrees with me, lol. As for the Obliviate spell - hm, good point. I think that it doesn't happen more often because people realize it's morally wrong to just wipe a person's memory like that for no good reason. We don't know the mechanics of the spell exactly, so there might be more to it, but we do know that the Ministry uses it to cover up magic if a Muggle witnesses something they shouldn't, like a dragon or something. And Hermione uses them in DH as well (although I think she probably used something different on her parents.) So it's done to erase specific memories, which is why I thought it would be interesting to use it here as Hermione covers her tracks. She's done it before, after all. Sort of a scary thought, isn't it? That someone could make you forget something at any point and you wouldn't remember you had forgotten something? But I digress. Thanks for the review, I really appreciate it! :)

*sniffs* I just typed you this really long, energetic review, and then my stupid *smashes something* lousy *smashes something else* computer *throws it on the floor* lost internet connection! *wails*

Anyhow, I'll try to retype this as correctly as possible . . . here goes . . . .

You know how I feel about this story? Well, I don't know how to explain it, but I kind of get this kaleidoscopic explosion of feelings! That's it! No, really. It's true.

1. I feel . . . . slightly annoyed. Not by you, but by that song. You know it used to be cool. But after I heard it about 78 times, I started to get annoyed by it.

2. BUT I was a little bit happy because I would have enjoyed this less if you wouldn't have put that song in there. It almost . . . makes me want to listen to it! Really! That's pretty powerful writing there.

3. This story makes you feel warm and spongy (wow don't you love my weird adjectives?) and it's not too gross or anything and it has a slightly modern feel. I LOVE IT.

Thank you for giving me something to spend my time on, Natalie. I love your writing.

And I took the Sorting Quiz. Wonder what house I'll be in?

-Megan

Author's Response: OOOH! I really hope you get placed in Hufflepuff! I am one, and we have been beating the crap out of the other houses in the House Cup area for quite a long time. Hahahaha!



*hopes none of my friends in the other houses see this response* Thank you for reviewing this particular story! It's one of my favourites and I am so sad that it didn't get as popular as I'd expected it to be. :( I know over-playing songs can cause them to grate on your nerves, so I avoid doing that. Haha!



"Spongy" is a nice adjective. I shall use it in one of my fanfics. :D:D Listen, Megan, I really adore your reviews. They have been cheering me up for a few days now. I really appreciate it. Thanks a gazillion!



~Natalie.

Tehe, this was funny ...

What I really liked about this story was that it was funny but it did have a plot. And sometimes funny fics are just a lame series of jokes and this was not.

1.) You handled the humour well. One could go on and on about how "Oh Voldemort wouldn't say that" or "That wasn't quite logical" but of course, that's the whole point of this story. And sometimes, it's actually refreshing to read a story that is OOC just because you're not thinking in your head "Okay, this is wrong, this is wrong ..." It was actually quite joyful to read, and the humour was well crafted.

2) You actually have some good plot here. There is actually a plot, and I managed to find some poetic devices used here. Did you intentionally make the theme that "Once Voldemort takes over, the Slytherins will want to be in Gryffindor?" or "Voldemort's plans don't always work?" Or something along the lines of that such chaos would come that the Slytherins would want to be Gryffindors, so the world would be bent out of proportion?

I loved it. Fantastic!

-Megan

This poem was nicely written. I thoroughly enjoyed it. It was very nicely done.

I like the part when it says "with mum and dad and godfather and friend." I think this shows that, as heroic and brave as Harry was, he really couldn't do it alone. He needed the support of those he loved and I'm glad you brought that out.

"A flash of green fulfilled his destiny" is a great way to end the poem. Though we all know what happens next, it makes you remember what happens next because, in a matter of speaking, it leaves you hanging. And I think that is the best wording I could possibly think of for that particular concept. Fantastic.

If there was one thing I could do to make this better, it would be to tell you to add more detail. This such a powerful and emotional moment that every last detail makes a difference. I think that for this moment in the story, you'd want to feel like you're really there as much as you possible could. But of course, I love the way you have it.

This was a very good poem and I enjoyed reading it. I could never write anything nearly this good. Congratulations on the QSQ nomination, by the way.

*Norberta*

Author's Response:

What a lovely review! I like getting reviews for things that have been up for a while...it's like Christmas come early, lol.

I'm glad you liked the poem. It was written for a challenge, so it had to be sonnet form. I feel that, with the allotted syllables and lines that this particular structure allows, I got about everything out of it that I could. Truthfully, had I written this as a drabble or a one-shot, there would have been more detail, but this was as much as I could cram into this small amount of words.

Overall, i am pretty sure that this poem is lightning in a bottle for me in terms of quality, so I'm glad you got a chance to enjoy it, because good poetry from me isn't very common, lol.

Thank for your review. I hope to bump into you again.

~Jess

Natalie!

I love this poem! Eeep! It is so beautifully written and I wish so so so bad I could write like this! Man!

It really captures the whole situation like . . perfect! I'd give it an 10/10. I really, really like this poem!

It's original and fun, and the details and imagery are spot on.

CONGRATULATIONS!!!

-Megan

P.S. Yeah, in my last review I signed it Norberta. Sort of a pen name for a pen name, but now I'm just putting my name. Who cares. ;) Goood job!

Author's Response: Hey Megan!



YAY! We can finally call each other by our names. ;)
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I like this poem, too. That's conceited of me, but it was the first time I wrote in some form other than free verse, and everything just fell into place. I am so happy you liked it enough to leave a review.
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Actually, you've been a real sweetheart really. Your reviews make me smile. :D
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~Natalie.

Justice,

This was a really nice chapter. As I beta'd the eighth one, I feel I must be familiar with the others.

I really like the way that the relationship is working here. Hermione feels pity, and Snape needs somebody to love. Very cute. ;)

Well, I like how you ease into the relationship. This was a very small moment, yet you managed to describe it in many words. That's a real skill.

I look forward to Chapter 2! I'll probably get to that tomorrow.

-Megan

OOOOH!!!! Again, you have worrying spot on. I love Hermione's train of thoughts. Exactly...perfect!!!

And I like how at the end you do the whole thing in Snape's semi POV.

Excited to read the next chapter!!

-Megan

I liked this chapter. McGonagall and Hermione bonding is nice. I always thought McGonagall would act motherly.

-Megan

i already know who's coming *snickers* tehehe i feel so special!!

Oh, Bine, I am so happy that I got to review this story. It was lovely, truly, and I have never read anything like it.

I loved how you divided this story into sections. And the section showed not only Walburga and Orion but the entire Black family, almost. I loved reading such a well-rounded story on such an interesting family. And I'm so happy I got to read this story because I never got the chance to read a story about the Black family before. I always thought that they would be confusing and boring, but this was quite the opposite! I thought the characters were very in character, and I thought that it was so interesting to hear about Sirius's mother and father. I just loved this story!!

-Megan

Author's Response: Thank you! I myself love the Black family, always have and always will. Like J.K. herself said, "there are many stories between the lines." I personally think that even though Sirius describes his parents as cold, I doubt they would always have been like that. With "nobility" comes pressure to do well, and I believe none of the Blacks were excempt from that. And if you like to read more about the Black family, I may suggest you check out my "Shining Through Blackness", as it deals with Isla Black, the first known member of the Black family to having been blasted off the family tree that J.K. made available to us fans.