04/28/12
I love Harry Potter fan fiction, because it allows my imagination to run free!
I probably could be doing something more productive, but since I love to read and write, and hope to be an author one day, this doesn't seem like a whole waste of time!!!!
I love this site so much. It really let's me challenge my mind and see things in a whole new light.
Go fan fiction!!!!!
EDIT: I am a poetry nut! So watch out for all my poetry and you can even check some of my poetry out on Poetry Anyone? in the Beta Forums, if you are able to get an account. :) Also watch out if you write poetry, too! I am sure to review it, and possibly leave behind a critique!
Since I write so much poetry, I thought I would make a list of my actual stories that are on the archives:
Completed:
If I Die Young
His Last Descendant
In the Realms of Jealousy
The Autumn Air
A Darker Nightmare
Vanishing Point
The Ghosts that Follow
The Baby-Sitter
Kill It Before It Dies
The Sight of Her
A Christmas Meal of Snow
The Man of Hogsmeade
Set in Silver Stone
Unfaithful
Pills and Potions
The Purity of the Turf
Pearls Mean Tears
The Ties That Bind
The Full House
Delayed Arrival
Hot Off the Press
No Ghost is Safe
Qui Mortui Sunt (Those Who Are Dead)
Deadman's Party
The Suitcase Menagerie
A Conference About Spiders
WIP:
Murder in the Moonlight
Here are all my poems (in order of update):
Poetry
Her Hand
His Only Friend
Mad World
Refusal
Negotiation With Death
An Unexpected Turn
The Coffin Brawl
Wasted Space
One Sweet Night
Life in Technicolor
The Bice Day
Dark Side
The Day the Music Died
Shades of Grey
The Endless Road
The Foulest Creature
The Lone Sentry
If No One Will Listen
Soiled
Just a Diary
Frozen
An Empty Photograph
Moonlight
Death's Horizon
The Canvas Life
The Sun Sets in Paradise
Grand Adage
The Banished Howl
Hear Me
Celestina's Songbook: Summer Lovin'
The Certain Dark
The Cursed Ruin
A Greying View
Silent Ash
Left Behind
Save You
With Silent Wounds
The Snow Globe
A Wintry Lust
Hogsmeade Lights
The Calming
The Possibility
Today I Do Not Want To Be...
Walls
A Brief Star
Beautiful Disaster
Where is Your Heart
Fix You
The Black Rose
A Failing Mission
The Darkest Realm
Godric's Hollow
Halo
Unspeakable
Hidden Mysteries
Salire
The Seasons Change
Petrified Desire
In Anguish
Paradeisos
In Final Minutes
The Wrong Child
For the Man on the Street
Something Better
Faust Arp
The Silver Doe/The Silver Stag
Fallen Leaves
Red is the color of death
Living Shroud
Little Bruno and the Evil Elf
Eternal Ice
For the Hero
Magical
The Frost in Melancholy
It's Christmas Time in Diagon Alley
It Came Upon A Charm So Clear
A Ravenclaw's Blue Christmas
FrÄ“odÅm
Corpses of the Shadow and the Night
You Just Wink (First Impressions)
His
In Agony
Killing Me Softly
Separation
Absentia
Don't Let Me Go
Pax Tecum (Peace Be With You)
Casualties
Blind Weakness
The Show Must Go On
A Coming War?
At the Battlefront
No One Can Ever Know
Do you think of me the same?
Into the Forest
A Lesson with Biscuits
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 1
Sacrificium
A Restless Wait
Dawn (Go Away)
The Weird Sisters - B-Sides and Rarities, Vol. 2
Betty
BTSK
on this side of heaven
Colorblind
Through the Mines
The Sparrow and the Wolf
The Necromancer's Army
Given the Chance
Gelu Fatum
Vincent
Oh Henry
Of Substance
The Cave
Gelido Dormitabis (An Icy Slumber)
All Hallow's Eve
Communi Damnum (Shared Loss)
Phoenix Est Lamentationes
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The Youngest Death Eaters: Year II by DestinyMoonStar
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary:
The second year has begun:
After a summer without a word from Voldemort the trio began their year at ease for the most part anyway. With a flying car crash, and an incompetent professor, they believe this year will be a dull one. How wrong are they?
The Chamber of Secrets has been opened.
The houses become even more split than ever before. The famous Harry Potter is being blamed because he can talk to snakes, but the other students do not know there are two other Parselmouths in Hogwarts. The Moon Twins can hear and understand the omen whispers and they search for the culprit. Will their secrets and old habits of working alone lead them to lose all the trust they have earned? Or will the trio bond together like never before and solve the sinister mystery, before it’s too late?
Date: 05/23/13 Title: Chapter 20: Chapter 18: Old Wrongs Made Right
Way to end it with an evil cliff hanger... :)
Ah, I absolutely enjoyed this story. And I just love Snape. And I just love how you snuck in facts about Lily there and Destiny still doesn't know that the real reason he hates Harry is because of all that. Teehee! I wonder how she will react when she finds out...
Anyways, this was fabulous! I look forward to more!
Date: 05/20/13 Title: Chapter 12: Chapter 11: Tongue Of A Snake
Okay, I just loved this chapter! I was laughing so hard! I'm enjoying the little relationships, and on top of that, I just love how you worked in Harry being a Parselmouth. I have always loved that scene- I can't imagine what Snape was thinking at that moment, but now I have an idea of what other kids were thinking. Teehee! :) Love love love it.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I love reading people's feedback. Hope to hear more from you. :)
Did You Hear The One About The Dark Lord ..? by Cannae be Kenobi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Ron proves his comedic mettle to a sceptical Fred. Completely AU silliness. Rated for very mild language.
Date: 06/21/12 Title: Chapter 1: Did You Hear The One About ..?
Wow. I didn't realiZe the Wizarding world had so many light jokes about the Dark Lord! Why would you joke about him? I'd be really scared too...
But I still laughed! And I enjoyed the twins humor. :)
Letters of Loyalty by mahogany_wand
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Regulus Black was loved by his family. The perfect son, and what an honor it was for him to fulfill The Dark Lord's request! But Regulus also loved his family, so how far would he go to uphold their honor? And when will their honor go too far?
Date: 09/20/12 Title: Chapter 1: Letters of Loyalty
First, I would like to say that I adored this poem! It was very beautiful and rhythmic and slightly despairing. I commend you for gliding into the hazy realms of poetry!
The letter, wax seal
broken
The news, such honor
taken
A friend, forever
gone
His Andromeda, the
swan.
I really enjoyed the subtle rhyme presented in this stanza, and really liked the metaphor presented. I am drawn in by the letter being opened, and your simplistic language lays it out quite nicely. I do have a qualm about punctuation. I myself feel like punctuation isn't necessary in poetry, but I will echo y colleagues in saying that if you use some punctuation, it is probably best to use it all the time in the poem. So, i would either add in punctuation, or else get rid of it, and place breaks in lines where punctuation would be used.
she had found love and
left her home and
ran away and
didn’t look back and
sent a last note and
changed his mind.
Note on capitalization: what is your purpose for switching it up in each stanza? I rather like it without capitalization for the whole piece. Again, I like the simplicity of your word choice, because it allows it to speak for itself and emote an emotion closer to something I recognize. :)
The pain, too much to
bear.
Lost religion, perhaps a
prayer?
Or an idea, a plan, a
plot…
His past loyalty but
forgot.
"Lost religion" makes me shiver. Yet, I want just a tad bit more in this stanza to show what he is going through emotionally. Does he lose himself in sleep or drink? Or does he remove himself from the world, become a recluse? Adding one more detail would make it that much stronger!
he went back and
took the prize and
lost his balance and
sank, deeper, deeper, and
the bubbles stopped and
he closed his eyes.
Very nice imagery with the bubbles. It can take on so many meanings, and I think the ambiguity of it lends the reader to be able to feel as broken or lost as he was, kind of like that there is no set meaning for life.
The letter, wax seal
broken.
Her cousin’s life,
taken
A friend, forever
departed
Her Regulus, she felt
fainthearted
Oh wow! The fact that you repeat the motif of the letter is haunting, because it makes the letter itself a villain, the bringer of bad news, and kind of suggests that "news" is impassive and uncaring. I hope to never receive such a letter...
she cried as he had cried and
sent a note to his mum and
pondered lost religion and
said a prayer for his soul and
almost looked back and
wished she hadn’t changed his mind.
The other stanzas all have shorter lines, and then these are longer. That's fine, but I felt like perhaps another stanza could have been as similar to really make this piece feel like part of the whole. That being said, I still enjoyed the message at the end, and felt so bad for the main character. I am a little lost as to who the characters are, but it may just be me. I did like that you repeated the lost religion and the contrast with prayer.
If I could give you any pointers, it would be that sometimes, vagueness is okay, but I as a reader, while I loved the effect of the poem and the imagery, did not quite understand who it was about. Try to make it a bit more clear- not much is needed to do so, but if you added another characteristic to help, it would. I realize there are names- Andromeda and Regulus, but I'm not sure I understand the relationship going on, or if they are in anyway connected...
I still enjoyed the poem, though! Remember the bit on punctuation and capitalization.
I am very happy to have this opportunity to leave a review for a fellow writer! :) Have a fantastic day!!!!!
~Nagini Riddle
The Longbottom Way by Cannae be Kenobi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Draco Malfoy pushes Neville Longbottom a step too far. AU.
Date: 06/21/12 Title: Chapter 1: The Longbottom Way
Neville! Oh how I love that he is in his rightful place of Gryffindor. :) beautifully done, and I think that Neville would actually do this (based off of what he did in the seventh book).
You Are by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
Alone, disgusting, adrift between life and death...
This is Tom Riddle's penance for his lack of remorse.
Date: 05/31/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Do I want to leave a thought? Hmm...
Alright, you win. I don't consider this too moody, but then again my favorite characters are Tom and Severus, so perhaps I just lean to moody and depressing things... :D
Great job!
Author's Response:
Well, maybe the poem isn't as moody as I thought, but it was more a reference to my personal mood when I write it. I was in a crap disposition over something that wasn't remotely important (is it ever anything relevant?), and then I wrote this.
I always found it the height of irony that Voldemort was always thwarted by the simplest things. Well, not simple, but things he considered unworthy of his attention. A baby. A sixteen year old boy and his old house elf. A specky orphan. A simple Disarming Spell. And it brought him the one thing he sought so hard to escape. It felt like a great idea for a poem to me, so here we are.
Thanks for reviewing, and for visiting a poem I really like but doesn't get much love. I appreciate it, and take care!
~Jess
Date: 06/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: Allegiance is . . . .
A new dark lord??????????!!!!!!!!!!?????!!!!! :o *lifts an eyebrow in shock* Lucius is twisted! Didn't he see what happened the last time? No way would Draco stand for Scorpio to become evil! Not after all that occurred before.
Anyways, great poem! It's nice to see what allegiance means to different people. :)
Author's Response: Lucius has his fantasies, but that's all they'll ever be. Hope he loves his grandson enough to offset the disappointment.
Listen by Ars Letalis
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Luna isn't a pretty girl who plays Quidditch. She's just a quirky little thing who loves the color orange and hearing stories; luckily, she's a very good listener. One-shot, LL/FW, character death.
Date: 07/16/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Oh, this was so beautiful! I love Luna now! Flamboyant orange!!!!! Sorry, I'm trying hard to not be sad and mournful. You have captured emotion so well, and your characterizations were perfect, to the "t"!!!!! :) But of course, it was so sad and melancholic. The way Luna dealt with it was just so eloquent and beautiful. Wonderful job! I hope you can continue to write beautiful stories like this one.
Author's Response: Thank you for the kind words. :) This may sound weird, but I'm always glad when I write something that saddens people--it means I've done something right!
Commencement by hestiajones
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: There is a boy in this orphanage, and something is not quite right about him. Written as a birthday present for lily_evans34/Rachel, who is lovely, talented and wonderfully funny. :) I hope you have a great day. Nominated for a QSQ in the Dark/Angsty category. Thanks to Kara and Carole for their help! This story would still be full of holes if it weren't for you two. DISCLAIMER: J.K.Rowling is not me. :p
Date: 05/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
How was this morbid? Man, Riddle is my favorite character (if you couldn't already deduce that from my user name) and you captured his character exquisitely. I sometimes wish I knew Tom, and these little stories about him just make me happy. Of course, if Tom hadn't been evil, I don't know what I would have thought of him... I don't necessarily see him as evil, though. More like neglected and really needing some affection from others who understand him (but don't try to force their views on him). If he had someone like that in his life, he might have turned out better...
Author's Response: Was this NOT? :D I'm surprised you like Riddle so much; I wouldn't have expected it since you don't seem to like my darker fics :) But yeah, I find him a fascinating subject of study. I'm not too sure how well he'd have turned out if he had been given another upbringing, though I'd like to believe he'd have grown up differently. Thank you for reading and leaving such a lovely trail of reviews.
Professor Horrible's Sing-Along Journal by Kerichi
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary:
Severus Snape is Professor Horrible, inspired by Dr. Horrible's Sing-Along Blog.
Date: 06/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: My Potions
This was really cool! It had a great steady beat, and it was about one of my favorite characters!!!!!! The last stanza is truly inspiring: with my potions I will change the world, with my potions I will change. Sigh!!!!!!! What a great perspective to have. :)
Author's Response: He did change the world, even if it wasn't the way he'd dreamed. Thank you!
An April Goodbye by PoeticallyIrritating
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: It’s April Fools’ Day. Lily Evans wants nothing more than to escape, but she's caught off guard by someone she'd prefer to forget.
This is PoeticallyIrritating of Ravenclaw writing for the 2011 Aprils Fools' Day Challenge in the Great Hall, Prompt 3(A).
Date: 05/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: An April Goodbye
Awwwwwwwwwwwwww! I love Sev!!!!!!! Why did he and lily have to split up? Stupid Death eaters!!! Anyways, I really liked this short story. :D it was fun to read and really entertaining. Nice work. Keep it up!
The Battle of Hogwarts, May 2nd by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A poem chronicling the famous Battle of Hogwarts. Many thanks to Jezza and Cazza for their suggestions. This poem placed third in the Battle Challenge at Poetry Anyone?
Date: 05/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I happen to read this on Memorial weekend! I think that pretty much says it all, an how can I follow up your poem with my harsh, terse comments? They just don't do your story justice!
But you captured the battle so well, and I especially like the last two lines, where it says that we still live on, continuing to push forward, even though we've had heavy losses. It's a great message for everyone to have. :)
Author's Response: Thank you, once again for reading and reviewing. Ah, what a day to read this poem on! I'm honoured you liked the message. :)
it might not be, but still by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Before Remus leaves for the Battle, what goes on in his mind? Winner of the Copycat Challenge; written after the style of e e cumming's it may not always be so;and i say.
Date: 05/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
What a beautiful tribute to the protector, Remus, though we know that Tonks came to the battle and died anyway. He was trying to protect his family! The fact he had a family makes me so happy, and hopeful for my future. I may not see a battle like this one, but I hope I can be like Remus and protect my family from other dangers in the world...
Author's Response: That is a nice thought. I hope the same for myself too! :) Thanks for reading and reviewing. (BTW, have you signed up at the Beta Forums?)
Not Alone by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
Hermione never left Harry's side...
...But that doesn't mean she never thought about it.
Date: 10/27/12 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Wow!!! Wow! And a third wow! *speechless*
You managed to make this a story and poem at the same time, a feat that I find rather difficult. It flowed so well, and I could feel the guilt pouring from Hermione. Goodness, Jess, you are an amazing poet! Where do you get it? :P
~Nagini Riddle
P.S. Have a happy Halloween, and don't try to leave anyone alone... *spooky music*
Author's Response:
Helloooo, my prolific poem reviewer!
Hermione's plight in the tent is one of the most tender and potent genres of character study in the Potterverse, yet so little is made of that time. Julia explores it well in The Lost Weeks, and this humble contribution to the pool pales in comparison, but I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Thank you for visiting, and I shall make sure neither Harry nor Hermione are left alone. Muahahahahaha!
~Jess
The Lost Weeks by the opaleye
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Hermione sits and thinks of the boy who left and why she did not follow.
Tied in first place for the 2011 Quicksilver Quill Award in Best Poetry.
Date: 07/01/12 Title: Chapter 1: Her thoughts linger on those silent weeks.
My goodness! I absolutely loved this poem! When I have time later, I will definitely write a critique for it. This poem will be the second poem going into my favorites! The prose was so beautiful! I loved the repetition of her waiting, and also of the images of the leaves! What a magnificent writing style you have! Perhaps yog can tutor me in the art of poetry? :)
~Nagini Riddle
Author's Response: Thank you :) I would be happy to help you with your poetry!
Last Moments (Ends With You) by Eleanor Lupin
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A lament for two lovers who died side by side in the most horrific war in wizarding history.
Date: 11/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: Last Moments (Ends With You)
The title made me cry- which really got me, since I hadn't even started reading it yet! I'm rather jealous of your titles.
Anyways, then I realized from the summary that this must be about Remus and Tonks, so I again cried because that scene in the book was really terrible.
And then I actually read the poem- and I don't know how to put into words how it affected me. Goodness, I can't even critique it because it was so beautiful! Your first poem on MNFF??? You have a gift for poetry, then. :)
Eleanor, I am going to badger you to write more poems, because all the ones I've read are just so gorgeous! Please!!!! I am eager to read more of your poetry. :)
Okay, I suppose that is all. Like I said, this poem was magnificent, and I can't find fault, especially when it touches on such a tragic subject. ~Nagini Riddle
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, I can't believe I didn't see this! Thank you for the lovely review - I've been writing a bit of poetry lately so I plan to post some soon. :)
~Nora
Mind by Lovemagic
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: The vital Battle of Hogwarts is abruptly put to an end by an intruder and an incident. Opening his eyes, Lord Voldemort finds his identity has been obliterated; he is now young Tom Riddle. He and the intruder Bella Reagan, someone he knew so long ago, must find a way to live, survive—but not quite underground.
After much frenzy, the Ministry states that the Dark Lord is gone and continues rounding up many confused, chaotic Death Eaters. Minerva McGonagall, the Headmistress, requires Hogwarts students to repeat their previous year so as to receive competent magical education. So when Harry recognizes Tom Riddle, he believes Lord Voldemort has infiltrated Hogwarts and leads an urgent investigation to find the truth of things.
Tom and Reagan are under scrutiny of the Trio and the professors even as several notorious Death Eaters elude capture and more old acquaintances, by happenstance, are found again. Security must be built by any means, and the opposition’s threats held at bay. There are few people any one can trust.
But it is as if they are looking through a veil, thinking through a veil. There’s a truth in the undercurrent of this unnatural flow of life in the Light, one that can’t seem to get past anyone’s mind. After all, the Light plays tricks, too.
Disclaimer: I am not J.K. Rowling.
Date: 04/29/12 Title: Chapter 1: Intruder
Very interesting start. My curiosity has been piqued and I want to keep reading to see where this goes. Good job!
Date: 04/29/12 Title: Chapter 2: Tricks and Reasoning
Again, quite interesting. I'm very curious to see how this turns out! Although I do wonder why he didn't show himself to someone who would have recognized him as both Tom riddle and voldemort. I'm sure that there were still loyal death eaters of his that knew him as both...
Can't wait to see what happens next!
Date: 04/29/12 Title: Chapter 3: Pursuit
Well, I think that you should try to give Riddle more of an edge. He seems too compliant and willing to let Bella control him, so perhaps that needs some more explanation. However, you have a good writing style, and I think if you keep working at it, this story will evolve into a masterpiece. :)
A Typical Day in the Weasley House by PInk_Witch
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The Weasley house is always interesting. Enjoy a few select moments from Molly's day.
Date: 11/23/12 Title: Chapter 1: A Typical Day in the Weasley House
This was very sweet! I rather enjoyed the simplicity of it. Go Weasleys! The only thing that I thought could be changed was the stanza that mentioned Molly was alone again and wanted school to begin. I think here would be a good place to add some details about Molly feeling overwhelmed by so many kids, but still, she loves them. Also, the way it was worded seemed odd. If Molly is alone, wouldn't she want her kids to be with her so she doesn't feel alone? I realize this isn't what you meant, so you just need to make it a little clearer. Other than that, this was a fun poem to read! It's nice to see that not all poems are dark and dreary. (I only say that because mine are sort of dark and dreary...) Great job! :) ~Nagini Riddle