First of all, I'm so sorry about how long it's taken me to review - I actually thought I'd already reviewed this chapter, but when I checked, I found that I hadn't! So I'm doing it now, along with my (again, late!) review for the next chapter.

I absolutely love the opening of this chapter - how it just leaps straight into it, literally with a bang! I also like the fact that it was a short paragraph as well - just two sentences, as that really brought attention to it nicely. *giggles* I also liked the little line about the Aurors hadn't even needed to go to the scene of the crime!

It's interesting how everyone has reverted to their fear, and aren't able to call Draco by his name, which is a nice way of showing how bad it's got. However, I can't make up my mind on whether I think this would happen or not. But I did adore the dialogue that followed, so it's all good!

I really liked this little insight into Jordan, it was really interesting. I can absolutely see one of Harry's children being like this - especially as Jordan's seen all of the truth. What I thought was excellent here was your vocabulary as Jordan - it really helped us get a good sense of the character, such as "ubiquitous" and "malevolent".

I also liked the little memory to the Sorting, as it is an important event, so it follows that Jordan would remember it. I found it pretty ironic how the Sorting Hat said "but I suppose it's not my place to put you in a house..." as that is the Sorting Hat's job! I personally would have put "it's not even my place" or something of the sort in, I think.

I thought the little paragraph where Haley put on her "newscaster voice" was very cute - I especially loved how she ate the sugar quill at the end. It's those little details which I really love. Apart from, of course, any Emma/Tyroneness - that just pwns all! As does the phrase "high Hippogriff" (although note that 'Hippogriff' should be capitalised - at least according to the Brit version of the books, not too sure of the American - but a little heads up there)!

I found it incredibly sad when Jordan felt that he "didn't really need people anymore". I think that's one of the saddest things in the world. I did like how Jordan has little obsessions though - how he focuses all his interest and efforts into one random thing now and then - that seems very like him.

"'Emma' now, was it?" Hell yeah baby!
What's Occam's Razor? Is that an American thing? I don't think I've ever heard of it!
*dies laughing* I loved

Author's Response: Oh, I always love your reviews! You know, when I\'m beta-ing, I ALWAYS nitpick about capitalization, but when it\'s me, I don\'t even notice! I think everyone knows someone like Jordan.. I like to try to work in little details and habits of people I know, and the best part is, people always want to know where I got the idea, including the people I used! Harharhar.

Occam\'s Razor is the philosophy that all things being equal, the simplest solution tends to be the right one. Too complex an idea is usually not right, and alternately, very complex explanations are usually lies.

Author's Response:

Again another lovely opening paragraph! I have to say, it's a great strength to have, strong starts, as it really entices the reader to carry on for the rest of the chapter if the beginning especially is good.

I liked how Jordan felt about him and Haley growing apart - it must be hard being a twin when they're so different - I really liked how Jordan incorporated his feelings towards his father in his negative feelings to Haley by thinking of her as "Daughter of Potter" - and not himself as Son.

I liked Malfoy's sneering attitude and I thought how he spoke was well in character. However, I can't see Malfoy offering Jordan a head start, "If you like things fair," - to be honest, I don't think Malfoy would care. He's a Slytherin - he doesn't care about fairness, he cares about winning. He hasn't been known to fight fair before, quite the contrary, and I can't see it as a quality he'd pick up over his bitter years. Especially not with Harry's son. However, I really liked this line, "“Why should I listen to you?” Malfoy asked, sounding rather amused at the absurdity of such an idea." in which it was the description that followed the speech that I think made it so well done and in character.

Nitpick here: I'm not entirely sure on the capitalisation of 'dark' in "At last, the Dark wizard looked away." You didn't capitalise dark when Malfoy spoke, saying he was surprised Harry's son would turn to the dark side, so I don't think you should capitalise it anywhere else, unless in a title. As although Malfoy is a dark wizard, as dark isn't the name of his group, it isn't a title, so it shouldn't be capitalised. Like, if Malfoy's followers were called the Dark Ones instead of the Overseers then dark could be capitalised - but they're not, so it shouldn't be. Do you get that? Sorry, it wasn't explained too articulately. Basically, you only capitalise names, such as Harry or New York, you don't capitalise descriptions like dark, light and shallow, so that should follow even if used in a different context.

Also, whilst on the point of 'dark', I'm not sure Malfoy would describe himself as the dark side, as he believes what he's doing is right. Dark is a negative term, and not the best way to gather support and followers, so Malfoy would probably use terms such as the right side, or the winning side, or even the righteous side or something of the sort instead of dark.

All of the description in this chapter was brilliant, really helping the reader get into the scene and giving an incredible atmosphere. Well done! I also really liked the dialogue between Malfoy and Emma - it made me smile, how proud the girls are of their parents, and Malfoy's line of "badly" made me giggle in spite of myself!

And - gosh. I was left pretty dumb-struck after the interaction of Haley and Jordan. I thought that was excellently done, especially Haley turning around the "loyalty before family" line. Although I can't believe Haley did it, could actually have cast the spell against her own brother. The rest of the dialogue between them was good, and needed to be said - although perhaps not over a fight to the death!

I also liked the parallel again of the weakness being not understanding people - far more meaningful than just not being as skilled. I also liked Jordan's explanation - I find that totally believable, as Jordan's always been keen to prove himself as a Gryffindor (and I totally do the same thing, imagine what I'd do in unlikely situations!).

I also did like how the kids all fought for their friends, and didn't run for help - true Gryffindors, to the end (although let's be glad it didn't get to that!). I liked the calm ending of this chapter, such a total contrast to the rest of it, but it really let us know that the tough times are over now. Until next year!

A great close - looking forward to the next chapter, as always, and soon the next part of the trilogy! Great job =)

Author's Response: I have a brother and sister who are twins, and while they\'re quite different, they\'re nothing like Haley and Jordan... still, they give me a lot of ideas!

I saw Malfoy talking about liking things fair in a mocking way-- saying that \'playing things fair\' gets Jordan a more painful death. He was saying he can have a quick death right then or try to escape and have a long painful death after he\'s (invariably) caught. I thought that was showcasing his scorn for Gryffindor values.

I had Draco describing himself as Dark (with horrible punctuation!) because he\'s a wannabe! He really wants to be a Voldemort, but he\'s really, really not, even though a lot of people think he is. That\'s why I made Blaise Zabini say that bit about how he thinks the Overseers are stupid for calling themselves the Dark Side instead of trying to convince people that what they\'re saying is sound.

Thanks very much for another beautiful review!

OMG, HOW COOL IS THAT, JUST AS I WAS FINISHED REVIEWING THE LAST TWO CHAPTERS, THE NEXT ONE GOT ACCEPTED!! That pretty much rocks solid! About as much as the finale itself!

Yet again, great opening! Nice choice to start with the immediate newspaper article instead of insert it half-way through - it was definitely a good way to get all the facts without extensive conversation, so that the rest of the chapter could focus on the aftermath and save the reader from losing interest (not that they would! But just in case! =p ).

I really liked all the little details in this chapter, such as Tyrone putting the photo on a T-shirt and the spinny-chairs. I'm glad that Haley went to see her dad, as it would have been a little unbelievable if they were all completely blaze and unaffected by the happenings of the night before - especially Haley with the Killing Curse. I think one of my favourite things of this chapter was Harry's answer to her, about how big a deal the Unforgivable Curses are, and what a terrible effect it has on people, thus why they're unforgivable. I actually think that this is a point that wasn't stressed enough in the actual books, so I was thrilled to see how you handled it here, very big well done!

I also liked how everyone kept getting cut off as they were about to give details of various battles/big information - we've got the rest of the trilogy to hear about that!

I thought Ivy was very wise in this chapter as well, the advice she gave to Jordan was very sound. I also liked how we got to see yet still so much more of Jordan's character in this chapter, with the little details like how he used to mutter and how he hates people shutting books on him!

My nitpicks for the chapter: "Hippogriff" again should be capitalised, and where Harry said he has a "great family" you didn't leave a space in between. Also, you said in chapter 8 that Jordan was 10 years old when he looked in Harry's Pensieve, and in this chapter you say that he was 8 years old.

As I'm sure you'll have guessed, I adored all the Emma/Tyroneness in this chapter! *squees* I can't wait to see what happens between them in the next book! Also, I really loved how Emma said "Not yet" - it was so perfect! And it made me laugh so much how like Ron Emma was, with "Emma stared at her friend, totally at a loss for words. Instead, she muttered nonsense under her breath, words like ‘totally wrong’ and ‘doesn’t know what she’s talking about’." That reminded me of Ron in fourth year SO much! Especially as Ivy was right!

That whole little segment there really made me grin - especially the last line! A nice little fun piece that kept so nicely in time with their age, and was just very cute - and left us hanging on for the next book!

The ceremony was very nice too, and it was great that Jordan got a chance to clear things up and make a speech - all of his own, as himself, not as Harry's son.

I thought you did a good job at the end, tidying things up for the next book - such as what Harry would be doing, Remus coming back to teach, etc. And the Triwizard Tournament - but only one representative from each school - who's it going to be?! I can't possibly wait to find out - just whisper it to me now!

And I can totally see why Emma was embarrassed - now that Ron's going to have to take her baby pictures down from the office, he'll have to find somewhere else to put them - let's just hope it isn't anywhere near Tyrone!

Aw, what a lovely ending to a wonderful story - you should be very proud, Schmergo! Now: my favourite character, as you know very well, is Emma - closely followed by Tyrone. My least favourite character I have to say is Ivy. I'm sorry! But she is. She just hasn't jumped out at me like some of the other characters have. Anyway, looking forward to the next book, FANTASTIC job on this one! *huggles* Well done!

Author's Response: Hehehe, review magic!

The only thing I did not like in DH was Harry\'s use of unforgiveable curses, because as you can see, the idea of unforgiveable curses made a big impact on me! There\'s a lot more on that theme in the third installment of the trilogy.

It says eight years old? OH DEAR. It\'s very important that he\'s ten... maybe Jordan just forgot how old he was... I have to change that NOW.

Emma is a lot like Ron, I think-- I see so many future-generation stories (including DH\'s epilogue) where Ron and Hermione\'s daughter is a mini-Hermione, but I like Ron more, so I put a lot of him into my character!

Hahaha, can\'t tell you who\'s in the tournament... you\'ll have to seee...the idea of Tyrone getting the pictures made me laugh, though. He\'d be like, \"You were so cute! AND NOW YOU\'RE EVEN BETTER LOOKING!\" Or something. The baby pictures do crop up later, though. (Ron doesn\'t put pictures of Emma after age five on the walls because he doesn\'t want any Auror trainees to make suggestive comments about his daughter.)

I\'m so glad you liked this story, especially since I love your writing! I\'d have to say that of the main characters, the one I like the least is probably Ivy as well, though I do like her. And I\'m glad you like Tyrone, because he has an increasingly larger role in each installment of the trilogy!

You may not remember me, as it’s been such a long time since I’ve been around, let alone reviewed – and I’m really sorry about that – but I actually had a free day for once, and checked my email and decided to catch up on my two favourite fics – this, and of course, the third Potter’s Pentagon. If you do remember me, then hopefully you’ll remember that I was the original Emma/Tyrone shipper, and how much I adore this story!

But anyway – getting back to the review! I really enjoyed seeing Emma in a different environment, and that meaning that we get to see some more of the other characters at home. I loved Emma’s little quip at her mother early on, when Ron ran out the door, because of course you know how much Ron and Hermione’s relationship amuses me – and it’s nice to know that their squabbles are still going strong!

Emma’s point about them striking at full moon is a really good one – that is definitely odd. I’m quite surprised they managed to kill so many werewolves, as we know how dangerous werewolves can be, and if attacked I’m sure they’d put up a really strong fight, even against wands. The whole situation seems really strange...

It was sweet to hear Emma’s sentimental paragraph about Ted, as she doesn’t often admit her emotions so plainly (although I think that the fact that she takes such care not to show them shows far more how strongly she feels than if she had shown them on the outside – if that made any coherent sense at all!), so that was nice to hear her true thoughts and sadness – although very sad, as it shows what a dire situation it was, to have forced that out of her.

I thought it was a really good choice to have the Holly and Jonathon intervention in there to really juxtapose the mood – the direct contrast of their innocence to the situation raised the tension so much, it was really well done.

Very minor Britpick – we use ‘s’s hear, not ‘z’s – so “realized” is “realised.” Also, a bit later on, you use “ ‘till ” – now, I may be wrong, but I think if you’re using the abbreviation of “until” it’s just ‘til with one ‘l’ as until is only spelt with one ‘l’ – as till with two ‘l’s is like a checkout till at the shops. Again, minor little details!

““I’m not going to cry,” Ivy replied in a very small, hard voice. Her expression clearly stated, I might need to save up my tears for later.” Such a sad, sad line! But so powerful, especially coming from Ivy, as she just seems so vulnerable in general, bless her. I did also like the bluntness in Emma’s thoughts right after though – “He’s a goner for sure.” That was also so sad, but in such a different way.

Emma, thinking Ivy cutting out the picture of Ted was desperate? I’d say more hopeful than desperate – would Emma not do the same if it was Ivy or Haley (or Tyrone...!) who’d gone missing under dangerous circumstances, hang on to any piece of hope that they’ll come back safely? I don’t know, I think maybe she’d recognise that.

Ahh, I really loved the second part of this chapter, as I’m sure you can guess! I just found it all very amusing and interesting. Emma’s reasons for why she enjoyed gardening were brilliant – so Emma! I have to say that I totally predicted Tyrone would go round to pick up the toads, as Emma was there on her own – Sod’s Law! (And I did think at the beginning of the chapter – oh, it’s been over two weeks – Tyrone must be home!)

I do have to add that I also love how Tyrone carried his toad craze on from school – I remember that making me laugh in Potter’s Pentagon too!

“Upon turning around, I ascertained two things: first of all, the figure behind me was definitely not a gnome, and second of all, despite this fact, I still wished I could grab him by his head and throw him into a manhole. “Erm, hey…” said Tyrone, buryinghis hands in his pockets in the universal sign language gesture for ‘AWWWWKWARD…’” Some more brilliant lines that both really made me giggle!

It was very sweet how Tyrone blurted out the little things he remembered about Emma; I really do love all the little details like that! And just the fact that they’re reminiscing makes me smile! (WAIT. I just had a thought. You say Potter’s Pentagon is a trilogy? This means we’re not going to see what Emma and Tyrone are like together at school! That’s so not fair!)

“Tyrone help up his hands in mock surrender. “Don’t look at me,” he insisted. “I only moved here a year ago. I’ve barely stolen any of your parents’ stuff yet.”” Ah, how I love Tyrone! That again made me laugh – great line.

Is orange Tyrone’s favourite colour because it reminds him of Emma? Because if it was, that would be awesome! But maybe I just like reading a little too much into simple statements...

One thing that I really love about Emma is that she isn’t one of those soppy girls – she does know that guys she likes have faults, and she recognises them well – whether as a defence mechanism so she doesn’t fall too hard, or just because she’s a good judge of character I don’t know – but it’s a quality I really like in her.

Although to be honest, I really love all of Tyrone’s faults that Emma lists! Pursuing fairy-tales especially I love – especially as his fairy-tale is Emma! Hehe! But it’s great that Emma isn’t me, and doesn’t just fall at his feet!

Hmm – did Wolfgang deliberately add the detail that Tyrone asked Ted to go because he knew it would make Emma dislike him even more if it was true, or did he do it completely innocently? And what really happened with all that?! Ahh, so many questions – I guess you’ll just have to update soon so that they get answered! ;-p

So I guess Emma isn’t going to be sleeping in Tyrone’s T-shirt anytime soon? Damn. Because I bet that was Tyrone’s plan – it wasn’t at all that he couldn’t find anything of his sister’s!

As always, the Pride and Prejudice summaries are very funny, and help me justify not having read the actual book myself, as I get to read Emma’s summaries here! You know I love this fic, and I promise to keep coming back to review when the new chapters come up – which I really can’t wait for! Hope you’re good! Kiara

Author's Response: Whoa, Kiara! It's great to see you again, especially with such a long review! I have to say, it's been way too long since I updated this story. Which is weird, because I just finished writing chapter eleven today. I need to get on that!

Don't lose sight of the werewolf subplot! Believe it or not, it's very important. And I'm dropping some clues in there, too! Luckily, you're very observant. ;-)

I'm so glad you like the little bit of shipping between Emma and Tyrone. I LOVE writing about the interactions between them! But Tyrone's favorite colour has always been orange, from the beginning, haha. I don't think I ever mentioned that in the context of the trilogy, though. They're both so much fun to write about.

Wolfgang... Wolfgang did want Emma to like Tyrone even less. He definitely has a grudge against Tyrone... when it comes to issues dealing with him, he doesn't really have any scruples.

I just read this awesome book the other day called "Pride and Prejudice and Zombies," which is basically P&P, but with added zombie attacks and bloody zombie-slayings interspersed between the balls and outings. I highly recommend it. ^_^

Nice introduction of the actual book into the story - convincingly done, as I did love the part about Emma not really liking reading (as she doesn't really seem like someone who can sit still long enough to read!) and how Hermione always tried to get her to do so.

The “bow-chicka-bow-wow” part did of course make me giggle, but I actually really liked this line as well: “While I couldn’t exactly express my point, I did manage to attract some uncomfortable stares.” I think the tone of it is really dry, and, I don’t know, I just really liked it!

Emma pointing out that she can be more immature than Haley, and her feelings on that fact, were good too - a surprising amount of self-awareness for her, which perhaps shows that she has matured more than she thought? But it is nice to see how like Ron she is!

That is so sad about Ted in the hospital, with that woman who didn’t want him to treat her. It seems a bit like another echo of racism, which is always very sad due to the injustice of it all. Very nice link from there about why Emma wants to be an Auror, and it seems so true to her character - Emma definitely doesn’t seem like someone who could sit down and wait for something to change, I can so see her wanting to go out there and change it herself - the control part that she mentioned made a lot of sense. And, it’s always good to hear reasoning behind characters wanting to be Aurors other than “because that’s what Harry and Ron wanted to do and it’s cool and the only profession out there other than becoming a teacher at Hogwarts!” Yes, my pet peeves list is growing, thank you for asking ;-p (But well done on avoiding most of that list!)

Britpick - it’s blonde with an ‘e’ at the end here. (And how does Emma know anything - let alone that much! - about David Bowie?) Britpick #2 - we generally say “film” over here instead of “movie”, like we’d say, “Oh, do you want to watch a film?” I can’t think of a time when anyone’s ever said, “Oh, do you want to watch a movie?” Yeah, really thinking about it, it’s “film” 99% of the time.

Well, with a name like Anatoly, you’ve got to expect him to be a little odd! I really liked his explanation of “Can’t tell you who they are, though, because I want to seem smooth and mysterious.” - it made me giggle! I also liked Emma’s cynical view of their proposition - and Haley’s ambitions in general, really - as that’s how most people who haven’t been bitten by the bug view it generally. And the chickens line was just great!

““No fancy costumes, no big props, holographic projections for sets because we’re cheap like that and people will think it’s artsy!”” Ok, I can’t help liking Anatoly just for lines like that! Well, to be honest, I’m not sure if I do actually like him, but I do find him amusing!

I know I’m picking out a lot of lines that I liked here, and that’s partly because I was doing my English homework and have to include an overload of quotes from that, but mostly because I just love a lot of the lines in this chapter! “Haley gave me her own version of a reassuring smile, which was a lot less reassuring because I knew her.” That was another excellent one! I think it was pretty ironic too, as I can see a lot of people using that to describe Emma too, somehow!

I love Tyrone. Almost as much as I love Emma. And I love them as a couple as much as I love Emma. And we all know that’s a lot. As they just make such a goddamn cute couple! Hehe! But, anyway, my point here was that Tyrone makes a good point: The Lion King is a great film. (And Emma must think so too - or at least be thinking of Tyrone and her time with him! - to have quoted it!)

““Don’t talk to her,” he said quietly.” Oh, that was such a great line for Tyrone to enter with! The, quiet, ominous sound was fantastic, and it really got me thinking about what exactly he meant by it - whether he was warning Wolfgang about her (as he (allegedly) didn‘t like her), whether he was warning Wolfgang off her (as in jealousy), or...

I think that Tyrone is just too cute to still care about Emma enough to not want her to get fired - like how he was still being nice even after she was being pretty obnoxious to him - but is there something more to his warning than that? I think there is, but I can’t work out if it’s jealousy, that he’s warning her off Wolfgang for some other reason, or that he’s warning her of something else...

*giggles* I liked Emma’s awkwardness on leaving Wolfgang after their not-quite-date-arrangement-thing - the punch on the arm was just so classicly cringey! However, they recovered pretty well with their shouting matches - which I found hilarious!

I really like the subtlety you’ve put in here with Emma and Tyrone - neither of them are obviously jealous of the other, like when Emma saw Clio with Tyrone, she didn’t like it - but not in an obvious way, in a very natural way. Great job on their interaction and views on each other - I think that’s really excellent writing on that front.

Hmm - I’m too much of Tyrone fangirl to take that on board completely without hearing his side - as I feel that would be pretty interesting... But even if that’s all there is to it, I have to say, I completely sympathise with Tyrone. I mean, that would be just too terrible, to lose one parent, and then the one you have left not only “replaces” your mother - but prefers his new step-son to you. That would just kill.

I also really love how Emma feels sorry for Tyrone there - as it’s so understandable! But especially how fourth year stuck in her mind, as it was a big deal for her, what happened with all that there. But I think that that does show how she does have more emotional maturity there - as well as how she does have feelings left for Tyrone, perhaps.

I felt so bad for Emma when Haley said “date” - how completely mortifying, if she wasn’t sure whether it was a date or not! Oh dear. Ok - where Emma thought Haley was flirting with Wolfgang, my immediate thoughts went to that she liked B.C., wanting to know whether he’d mentioned her. It was only reading it through again that I understood what Emma saw.

“with all the quiet subtlety of a brass band“ Brilliant phrase there - absolutely love it! Great imagery, and so fitting for Emma’s subtlety! And, another reference to Tyrone - someone’s got him on the brain! ;-p

And another great line to end their date: “”Hey, what was that for? We hate each other, remember?” I exclaimed, laughing. “Well, see you. Unfortunately. Because I hate you.”” I really do love Emma!

I know I’ve said it before, but I absolutely adore how like Ron Emma is - when she noticed it talking to Haley, it was just so true! I can see Ron having wanted to say that to a lot of guys concerning Hermione at many times!

I really enjoyed Emma’s Pride and Prejudice summary - I haven’t ever read the book, I always mean to, but I never get round to it - but somehow I feel that your summaries may be better than the actual thing, as it’s just so amusing!

Another great chapter - as always, looking forward to the next one!

Author's Response: Wow, this is the longest review I\'ve ever gotten! I showed it to my friend... she got all jealous and stomped out of the library. Maybe you should leave her a review, too... This is why I always look forward to your reviews. It makes me a bit sad to post this BEFORE the third Potter\'s Pentagon, because you miss out on so much character development, especially for Tyrone, and to some extent, Emma and Haley. Did I really keep in the David Bowie part? I wrote that in the margins of my notes... I didn\'t mean to actually type it up and add him in. Because Anatoly looks like David Bowie. Bleeargh.

\r\nAnatoly is quite a common name in Russia, though, isn\'t it? It\'s so cool how you actually pay attention to the small details of this story. And that you spotted that Emma is so much like Ron... I mean, so many people give Ron and Hermione\'s daughter the traits of a mini-Hermione, but... I like Ron better. ^_^ And I\'m personally a lot like my dad and NOTHING like my mum, so maybe I relate to Emma a little bit there.