Hey, I'm Lilypudding AKA LongbottomsLady... I just started writing fanfic a few months ago, but I've been writing all my life!
I'm really sorry I had to delete "A Summer to Remember." I fell of the face of fanfiction Earth for nearly three months and once I rejoined, I had forgotton my plans for chapter two. I solemly swear never to attempt another chaptered story again and I am sticking to one shots. I am sorry for the pain it has caused any of my readers. The regret I put into deleting it is unmeasurable.
Series Status:
The World's A Stage for Lily and James: I'm updating that periodically; however, I'm only going to add a new story when natrual inspiration strikes. I'm thinking about songs from several shows, like RENT, Into the Woods, Guys and Dolls and maybe even Fiddler on the Roof.
IMPORTANT UPDATE: "I'll Cover You," a songfic to the song from RENT, is in a beta's hands as I type this. I'm hoping the nature of this song in the musical won't turn people off, as this fic completely focuses on Lily and James's wedding and has nothing to do with the homosexual relationship of Angel and Collins. "I'll Cover You" is a romantic song, and can fit many couples regardless of sexuality.
Stories Status:
Perfect for Each Other: Completed
How Did It Happen: One shot
Defying Gravity: One shot
A Mother's Love: One shot
Somewhere: One shot
Such Sweet Sorrow: One shot poem
Your Eyes: One shot poem
A Summer To Remember: WIP chaptered L/J
COMING SOON: I'll Cover You- One-shot L/J.
ABOUT ME:
I'm just a HP fan who is obsessed with musical theatre and dogs. I enjoy performing, even though I'm not very good at it, and my love of theatre is second only to my love of writing. I generally try to be a constructive reviewer - don't be insulted if I leave a long and not-so-positive review on your story, as I sometimes will, because my intent is to help. While I usually give long and guiding reviews on barely-reviewed stories, I'm not above the occasional "Great story!" review.
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Well, I hoped you enjoy reading my bio and you enjoy my stories!
Please update soon cuz u're story rox! Sorry this is so short but I am being yelled at 2 get off the comp, anyway keep up the good work
This poem is definitely an impacting poem. It's a big tearjerker. The constant use of rhyme and steady rhythm really gives this poem a good beat. Furthermore, your words really gave me a cause to celebrate. You are really an amazing poet. I only noticed one small mistake - how could a girl with jet black hair and green eyes look like a Weasley through and through? I liked that play on "Dumbledore's man, through and through" though. You really brought new meaning to my favorite quote from HBP. Your poem was really different, a good story told well in poetry. Great job!
I really liked this story. I'm a huge sucker of Broadway musicals, and always freak out when I see songfics based on Broadway musical songs. This story did not dissapoint me, either. I have a few things, though, that you may want to correct.
First and foremost, I want to ask you if you've ever read a songfic before. If you have, you will notice the song lyrics are in italics or are otherwise distinguished from the rest of the story. In case you are unsure, you put words in italics by surrounding them with the tags {} and {} only, without the brackets (I was afraid if I didn't bracket the tags, the review would become italicized.) Second of all, I don't get how the term "Beauty and the beast" refers to Harry and Ginny. While Harry isn't the nicest person at the time of his life, he's certainly no beast. Also, don't the song lyrics refer to physical characteristics? I understand where you are coming from, and know the song lyrics can be taken different ways, but I think some disscussion on how you can interpret the song lyrics is very important here.
Secondly, I think that the ending of the story is too cliche and storybook. You have a great romance story, and a great fic before it, but you end it in such a rushed way. I write one-shots a lot, and I understand the trouble of getting an entire story into one chapter which you don't want to be really long. However, you gave the fic a storybook ending that made it seem like you didn't care very much. Think about the ending of the musical (or even the Disney movie) Beauty and the Beast. Now, I haven't seen either in a while, but I do remember the ending wasn't very happy. Sometimes the best stories to read don't have happy endings. While it is hard to add such a low note such as Harry dying, Voldemort winning or something opposite of the ending you put to a story that can be viewed as cute, fluffy and romantic, your story isn't as fluffy as it seems. The too-happy ending makes the story seem almost fake. Harry and Ginny's romance really isn't a very happy one at all, and it's important that you adknowledge that.
Other than those few things, I really liked this story. Even if you don't edit your story, I think its important you remember those things for future stories. While I don't expect a sequel to this story, I'm looking foward to reading more stories, especially Broadway songfics, by you in the present.
I really liked this story. I'm a huge sucker of Broadway musicals, and always freak out when I see songfics based on Broadway musical songs. This story did not dissapoint me, either. I have a few things, though, that you may want to correct.
First and foremost, I want to ask you if you've ever read a songfic before. If you have, you will notice the song lyrics are in italics or are otherwise distinguished from the rest of the story. In case you are unsure, you put words in italics by surrounding them with the tags {} and {} only, without the brackets (I was afraid if I didn't bracket the tags, the review would become italicized.) Second of all, I don't get how the term "Beauty and the beast" refers to Harry and Ginny. While Harry isn't the nicest person at the time of his life, he's certainly no beast. Also, don't the song lyrics refer to physical characteristics? I understand where you are coming from, and know the song lyrics can be taken different ways, but I think some disscussion on how you can interpret the song lyrics is very important here.
Secondly, I think that the ending of the story is too cliche and storybook. You have a great romance story, and a great fic before it, but you end it in such a rushed way. I write one-shots a lot, and I understand the trouble of getting an entire story into one chapter which you don't want to be really long. However, you gave the fic a storybook ending that made it seem like you didn't care very much. Think about the ending of the musical (or even the Disney movie) Beauty and the Beast. Now, I haven't seen either in a while, but I do remember the ending wasn't very happy. Sometimes the best stories to read don't have happy endings. While it is hard to add such a low note such as Harry dying, Voldemort winning or something opposite of the ending you put to a story that can be viewed as cute, fluffy and romantic, your story isn't as fluffy as it seems. The too-happy ending makes the story seem almost fake. Harry and Ginny's romance really isn't a very happy one at all, and it's important that you adknowledge that.
Other than those few things, I really liked this story. Even if you don't edit your story, I think its important you remember those things for future stories. While I don't expect a sequel to this story, I'm looking foward to reading more stories, especially Broadway songfics, by you in the present.
I'm really sorry for the repeat review, I can't get it to delete! Also, the tags didn't come out, but they're the little carrot thingie i little carrot thingie and to end the italics, little carrot thingie slash i little carrot thingie. (I'm sorry if that doesn't help, when I say little carrot thingie I mean this: < and >)
I usually never read Harry/Cho stories, but I'm incrediably glad I've decided to read this. I think you portrayed the Chang family extremely accurately. Also, you really made me feel empathy to Cho when she came home after Cedric's death. The fact that Mr. and Mrs. Chang didn't know of Cedric's death until after Cho came home really showed how closed up Hogwarts was from the rest of the world, and almost was a hidden foreshadowing of the tyranny in the wizarding world to come. I think this story is really intriguing. I really don't read or ship Harry/Cho, and I still don't know why I clicked on this fic in the beggining, but I'm really glad I did. You get a 10/10 from me.
James had an older brother... I'm gonna guess Greg turned out to be a death eater but he does seem kinda Percy-like. I'm just wondering, where's Regulus. And lastly, why do all Marauder-era fics start at the train? Its becoming kinda cliche, this isn't just to you but to everyone- god maybe the marauders+ lily didnt meet on the train? hello anyone whos reading this and planning a marauder fic where they meet on the train have you ever considered starting in a more different way. whoa i got a little overexited... so sorry your story is anything but cliche though its great.
Hmm... this story is pretty good, it's definitely got potential, but it definitely needs a lot of work. First of all, in the summary you refer to Lily as a "he" several times. I think you meant to say "James", and if you put James, the summary would be spotless, but for now it just looks sort of wierd. As for the story, it definitely had potential but I was sort of confused. Sometimes, I couldn't tell whose point of view it was in. For example, in the first paragraph you rocket from describing Lily, to James trying his hardest, then back to Lily. I had to read that a few times before really understanding. I really don't think you should refer to Peter as an a-hole, even though it's probably true. Whose point of view is this in? Remember, Peter was a Marauder. Obviously, he was well-liked enough to hang out with James, Sirius and Remus for seven years. Who was saying that about him? His friends were too loyal to say that, and Lily probably wouldn't use such wording. There were a lot of grammerical mistakes, especially involving the quotes. "Him that close seems too close for comfort," was a very awkward pharase. I understand you were striving to be different, but it didn't work. I didn't like the wording at all. Otherwise, though this story has potential. I really like the idea. I also like how the Marauders talked about McLaggin, that was funny. I think you probably need a good beta to help you sort through this story. Is this your first story? I think you're a great author and have a lot of potential. Read through your story again and see what you can improve. I really hope this review wasn't too harsh, and I hope you do the best. I can't wait to see the next chapter!
I was told by a friend to read this and I really like it, but at the part when Ron starts throwing up, I doubt little Miranda would ask, "Marmee, is he ill?" She's fifteen months old! I know she's Hermione's daughter and probably inheireted Hermione's brains, but honestly, how many babies do you know who know what the word "ill" means and can use it in a sentence properly? I'm sorry, that stuck out as being really awkward. But aside from that, 10/10, definitely! Great job! I really like this so far!
Great job! I think you need to add the HBP cannon a little more subtly but other than that, excellent! Keep up the good work!
Aww, I can't believe you updated! I am so happy! I fell of the face of the fanfiction world for several months, and seeing that you updated made me so incrediably happy! I really idenified with Sieri in this one, especially about liking someone with a significant other who fails to notice that they are so wrong for each other. *sighs* Boys... Anyway, I was getting off topic here but the point is, this is a great story and even though it no longer applies to canon, its still a wonderful fic and in my opinion, the best one ever written. Great job, as always!
I'd just like to add to my other two reviews that making me cry is good. I cried for several days after, you know, the ending of HBP and its my fave book ever! I'm very anxious waiting for an update, though! I know you have written about a zillion other great fics, but this one really has some die-hard fans. Like me!
Author's Response: Ahah! Well, that's good to hear. Yes, HBP = pure luff. Everywhere. I'll try to update...I really will...I had the chapter planned out, too, and it DIED, but it does me good to know I have die-hard fans. *hug*
i loved u're story and but couldnt figure out who the myserious beater was. i checked the review 2 c who it was and thought out it couldnt be the creeveys' dad cuz they r muggleborn. thats why colin was attacked. however, if u've seen the GOF movie yet, u could make him nigel's dad (dont ask)
still your fic is amazingly good and like all your others, made me cry several times
why arent there guys like remus at my school?
Author's Response: *headdesk* Thank God for someone who pays attention to the canon. I'm so ridiculous. I'm glad you pointed that out! I never liked Chamber of Secrets, I forgot to check up on that fact. Hmm, it could be Nigel's daddy, though. I liked Nigel, he was a cutie. I'm sorry it made you cry. :( And I agree. WHERE ARE ALL THE REMUSES, DANGIT?! lol. Thanks verrah much for reviewing!
Wow I'm a Remus/Tonks shipper and have read all your R/T but cuz Tonks probably wasnt even born then, I am officially a Remus/Seriri shipper. Its so sad, though about going to the Shrieking Shack and all. Just curious, are you one of those famous Snape is a Vampire believer? Sorry, aint gonna happen
Still one of my fave stories of all time though.
Author's Response: Haha! I think this is the first time anyone has ever said they ship one of my original pairings. That makes me feel absurdly special. *beam* I thought the Shrieking Shack scene was all right. A little vindictive, though. I hate doing stuff like that to Remus. And no, I don't think Snape is a vampire, don't worry about that! I just thought it was a nice ploy to sidetrack Seiri from the real issue at hand -- i.e., Remus is a werewolf. I'm not one for vampire-Snape myself. Thanks for the fab review!
Wow, I really really like this fic! Its short yet sweet, and just absolutely wonderful! The only thing I'm curious about is why would Lily be punished if the man sitting next to her spilled his drink over her? Shouldn't it have been Lily not getting in trouble because she spilled her soda into the business-man's lap? Besides from that, I loved it! Great job! Keep up the good work!
This seems to be a really good story so far. I really like how you characterized the young Vernon Dursley ("B positive"!- that made me crack up hysterically) The only real error I saw was the fact that you didn't capitilize "Muggle." I don't often read long chaptered stories (I rarely get to second chapters) but I'm looking foward to reading the rest of your story. ~Lilypudding~
omg i love this story so much. absolutely hilarious, even Neville/Parvati. I would just like edit the whole thing and add Lav-Lav to it, if you have time, thats my only post-HBP suggestion... bring on the sequel!
Author's Response: Nooooo sequel...haha, writing this was confusing enough, and I don't want to completely kill myself - glad you liked it though!
Funny... I love this whole thing! I don't like how at the A/n at the end of the first song you use chatspeak, but other that that, amazing! Absolutely hilarious! I can just imagine Sirius singing... my computer screen would break! Funny!
Wow, definitely 10/10! I loved how totally random it was- I did not see that Severus Snapee thing coming! I was rolling on the ground, laughing. I made my sister read it, and she hates humor fics, and she just loved it. What a great story!
Author's Response: Glad you loved my random ending! Yay for laziness!
definitely 10/10. *sniff* i wouldnt mind that as sorta like an alternate ending to HBP- how lupin and tonks got together was kinda lame, unless u considered the circumstances- u know, dumbledores's death and everything. have u ever considered making up your own characters and writing a story sorta like this, or a novel, or even a play? you would be really good at the real deal, you're amazing at fanfic.
Author's Response: It wasn't so much how Lupin and Tonks got together that bugged me -- I actually rather liked that -- but the lack of story behind them. I was like, "WHAT --? HOW --?!" And then the lack of action. We want snoggage, darnit! Haha. Hmm, I've never considered turning this particular storyline into anything original. I do write original fiction, quite a lot (I aim to be a novelist), but to use this...hmm. I like it! Thanks for the input!