“It is our choices, Harry, that show what we truly are, far more than our abilities.” -- Dumbledore
Oh how I've missed Dramione!! You're making me love this ship even more than D/G! This was so funny, and sweet at the same time. This line:
“Is this seat taken?” Satan asked from behind her newspaper.
made me crack up. Along with many others. This was such a clever idea; I've never read anything like it. It was so sweet when she was disappointed he wasn't there those last couple of times :]
Author's Response: Thanks, I\'m pleased to hear you like this so much!
Okay, this review is definitely not going to be as long as the others, which are practically one-shots themselves!
I just noticed this on the featured stories list tonight, after seeing that mine is no longer there! (: This is one of those fics that sort of just leaves me speechless, but I felt I must leave a review and tell you that I love how this fic is simple yet deep, with very strong elements of emotion and wisdom. It's unique, which is refreshing. Nice job. I can see why it's featured!
His knuckles were becoming white. Draco tried not to look down the cliff as he held on for dear life. He was hanging by the edge of his fingers now, his muscles vibrating with the effort of holding on. Searching for somewhere to fasten his footing and maybe crawl back up, his foot slipped as small stones glided down the vertical cliff, and he was left dangling, holding on by his wish to live. He could hear the sea crushing unceremoniously against the rocks bellow. They crashed imperviously with the stone, inviting him to their midst.
“I can’t reach you; you’re too far away...” she spoke softly.
5th story in a series of Hermione/Draco one-shots (Check out my author page for more information)
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Brilliant! :D
Author's Response: Thanks!
Oh my gosh. Tears! Tears in my eyes... and an abundance of goosebumps. I've seriously never read anything like this!
Your style is amazing... the description in this fic portrays every feeling and evokes such emotion that I feel my heart ache for Ginny. It is so beautiful, how you wrote it all... you never actually said 'Harry died' or 'Draco held her hand', but it was clear what you were talking about, and when you introduced Draco the symboloism and description was even better than spelling it out.
You put it together perfectly. This was just long enough to portray how Ginny was feeling and catch my interest, but short enough so that it doesn't drag on and ruin the intensity of her emotions. It was simple, yet the words were intricately woven together to create a stunning masterpiece.
Unbelievable. There is so much more I love about this fic, but cannot find the right words to say. Beautiful. Poetic. Powerful. Awesome job. This is going on my favorites for sure!! I will definitely look into your other fics and/or keep an eye out for more.
- hearyoume
Author's Response: *blushes like mad* Wow. That\'s all I can honestly say at the moment. Thank you so much. I\'m so glad that you enjoyed this. I\'ve been trying my hand at Draco/Ginny lately, because I\'ve recently become fascinated with the pairing. I\'m mostly a H/G shipper, but the angst and emotion that is evident between D/G is unbelievable. I felt I had to explore it. :) Again, thank you for your lovely review. I hope to hear from you again in future stories!
Wow! I actually have to agree with the review below mine... I don't ever read slash. I don't have a problem with it, but it just isn't for me. So when I read what this was about I was a little uneasy, but I am really glad that I gave it a chance. It was realistic, and it's so innocent that I really can't help but like it. I definitely took a chance here and read a fic that I'd normally avoid, and I'm really impressed. This fic is sort of the epitome of "short and sweet". Awesome job!
Author's Response: :D Thank you! I\'m really glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing. :)
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I'm sorry to hear that you broke your finger! I hope it gets better quickly. (:
Anyway. Loved Molly's POV. In fact, I love everyone's POV in this story. You're such a talented writer, and the way you're handling this fan fiction is amazing. I can't wait to read the rest of this, and I'm definitely going to be keeping an eye out for more stories by you!
Agh. I love it. As usual :D
Author's Response: Thank you so very much!
Um, wow! I love your writing style, and your choice of words is perfect. It's so articulate, and I was completely captivated from beginning to end.
On to chapter two...
Blood magic, like when Voldemort used Harry's blood for his resurrection? Interesting...
The imagery is amazing. And I'm such a baby, I got teary-eyed in the beginning, but good job making me cry already (lol).
I'm so sucked into this that I can't stop reading...
Author's Response: The idea behind it is sort of similar -- that\'s one of the magical themes I\'m planning on doing a great deal with.
(The more I write of this story, the longer it seems it is going to be...)
Hm, let me make sure I understand. Rodolphus and Bellatrix believe Voldemort may be alive, so they're going to try to track him down. But first, they want to find the Secret Keeper who betrayed the Potters, hoping to find some clues? And Bellatrix, Rudolphus, and the Malfoys all know that Sirius wasn't the one who betrayed James and Lily, but don't know for certain who did. However, the logical choice would be Pettigrew, but he's supposed to be dead. So Bellatrix and Rudolphus are in search of Sirius to learn about Pettigrew and/or Voldemort's whereabouts?
Haha, I'm sorry :/ My brain is somewhat slow today due to lack of sleep, but I just wanted to see if I had everything straight... it was very good, by the way. I laughed when Moody told Remus about Bellatrix and Rudolphus getting shot... *Next*
Oh my gosh! Moody is amazing; I've always had a lot of respect for him, and I believe he'd do the same things.
I also love your portrayal of Lucius - I can see him caring for his wife and son, yet being selfish and cunning enough to do whatever it takes to uphold the family name. He's very, very smooth.
Then there's Sirius, and I think you're doing a wonderful job writing him as well. His emotions are just so like the Sirius in the books, and nothing whatsoever is remotely OOC to me. The same, of course, goes for Remus, whom I also adore.
It's also extremely heart-breaking to watch the effect that all of these tragic events have on everyone. Remus is having such a difficult time, yet Moody is so good at keeping his cool despite everything that's going on... And overall, it just puts things into perspective, and sort of made me realize how much pain and heartbreak that everyone (the Order, Sirius, Remus...) had to endure.
Oh, and Phineas Nigellus? Awesome :D His lecture to Sirius was perfect. I love how he's just oozing with sarcasm and scorn for Gryffindor's desire to be brave and honorable. I especially loved his (sarcastic) closing remark about how running out and getting caught would certainly avenge his friends and care for their son. It reminds me of his lecture to Harry in the OOtP.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I will admit that I like Lucius a bit more now than I did when I started to write him. I\'m having a great deal of fun with this whole story, but he and Phineas are particularly fun to write.
Wow, the French was impressive! (: I love how the shop names and conversations were in French - it kept it realistic and I didn't forget he was in Paris.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was just glad that I remembered that much of it, honestly.
I have a confession to make - when I first started reading this fic, I had no idea it was Remus/Sirius. In fact, if I had, I probably wouldn't have read it. Slash doesn't bother me, necessarily, but I've never really enjoyed it.
However, I love everything about this story - even the Remus/Sirius element. Even though I was pretty surprised when I found out this was a slash fic (how I missed it, I don't know, lol) this story was too good to stop reading, so I decided to give it a shot. And this chapter finally had a tiny bit of romance, but I really liked it!
Anyway, I think I've left enough of these for you to know that I love your writing style and characterization. Can't wait for Chapter 10 (:
Author's Response: Glad to know that didn\'t put you off!! (and am slightly gloating).
ch ten is on the way, and as always, thanks so much!
You have such talent! These one-shots are all so different but written so incredibly well. You can write suspense or humor or romance or angst or whatever so well :D
I'm pretty much addicted to these. On to #7!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you, hearyoume! I\'m really flattered. I\'m glad you think I write all genres well. I do like to try to be versatile in my writing. Looking forward to your review to #7, then!
Oh my god! I have goosebumps. That was a really, really good way to start.
There were few mistakes, which I'll point out to you so you can make this even better:
"...a boy in the diary named Tom, controlled her." You don't need the comma after Tom.
"...Comments Lucius Malfoy, 38, who’s son, Draco is in the grade above Weasley." The C in comments shouldn't be capitalized, and 'who's' should be 'whose'.
"... He-Who-Must-Not-/be-Named’s reign..." Well, obviously. The /b should be B.
"...curled up in a ball, muttering to her self." Herself is one word.
"...causing part of it to crumble almost crushing Weasley." There needs to be a comma after crumble.
"...life sentence with out parole..." Without is one word.
"Every one she trusted had turned their backs on her." Everyone is one word.
Okay! That's all. As I said, these mistakes were very minor. I just wanted to let you know so you can correct them, because this is a great fic.
I'm on to read the next chapter, unless it's not posted yet, in which case I'll be anxiously awaiting its validation. Even though you only wrote a few sentences about Sirius, your portrayal of his personality/attitude completely fit what I'd imagine it to be, so I can't wait to see how you write him later.
Awesome job!
Very good! The only error I saw was that Bellatrix's last name is actually written 'Lestrange', but that is really no big deal. I thought it was interesting, and although I was suspicious of Ron and Hermione it was a surprise when they turned into Bellatrix and Draco. Don't worry about this being too rushed - detail is always nice to have, but this made for a good beginning. It was fast-paced but I thought it worked well to draw people in immediately and make them want to read more. I'll try to keep up with this fic! Good job, especially for your first fic. I must say, my first one was quite appalling. I'm anxious for more! (:
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate your review! I\'ve worked really hard on chapter two, so I hope you like it! Thanks again!
Heh heh... and so the plot thickens. Pretty good, I'll be keeping an eye out for the next chapter (:
Aren't those old, long-forgotten stories that we dig up months later the best? Lol.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I\'ll be posting chapter 2 soon!
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I\'ll be posting chapter 2 soon!
Cute! I never would have thought... Katie Bell and Harry Potter? But it really is a nice ship, the more I think about it.
I love how there really *was* something in the water, lol. It made me giggle at the end - it's so Fred & George :D
The tone was light and humorous and made the whole fic very enjoyable. I liked it a lot :] I really need to read some more of your stories...