I am old. Older than Jo. Not quite as old as Voldemort.
In fact, I am exactly Marauder-aged. Which might be why I don't read much Marauder-era. Can't compete with Lily....
This girl is extremely brave, extremely principled, and really really needs to know when to apply it...
I've been catching the awkward sentence here and there, but I have been too interested in the story to stop and say anything about them. I think having McGonagall take a Slytherin under her wing is brilliant.
I like the way he deals wtih Narcissa, I like the way you have his actions mirror the portraits. I think his diction slips a little here and there, but that may only be because I am expecting a more formal Snape.
Author's Response: Thank you for keeping with the story! Snape's formality is certainly the most difficult part of writing this. It doesn't help that I'm a very informal lass and when I get excited about a plot, my hands run away with me and I forget about dull details like 'staying in character'.
Nice ending to the chapter...
Why is your OC so prone to speaking her mind? She's brave enough to be a Gryffindor if she is doing that in Slytherin....
Author's Response: Hehe. She is a Gryffindor, in many respects, and this will become apparent. She was more a Slytherin at the age of eleven, though, until something happened to change her attitude. Whilst Harry chose Gryffindor, Nicole chose Slytherin.
Nice ending to the chapter...
Why is your OC so prone to speaking her mind? She's brave enough to be a Gryffindor if she is doing that in Slytherin....
Powerful.
And, um, possibly much better written than the original, but don't tell Steph that.
Very interesting. But I think I like Sirius, despite bad hair in that last movie, much more than Rosalie...
Author's Response: Thea, I'm responding to this a long time later. Actually it's a duplicate review but I thought I'd drop you a line anyway. How are you?
Very interesting. But I think I like Sirius, despite bad hair in that last movie, much more than Rosalie...
Author's Response: Mmm, well don't we all. I can't be the only one hoping he'll jump through the veil to find me...
Thank you for the review, you never know, next year I might be able to write the whole thing. Carolexxx
It's official. Malfoy has murdered sleep.
*A Ron pov outtake to Our Little Secret.*
Does "Very realistic" seem like an odd comment? I can see Ron and Hermoine growing up to be exactly like that.
Author's Response: It's a wonderful comment because that means we think alike! Thank you!
I haven't typed, Athsma, but that was because I already know a fair amount about it and take it quite seriously.
You did two very difficult things here, but the most difficult is taking something which has had a big impact on you personally and bringing that to the story in a way other people who have not had the exact same issues might be able to sympathise with, and do it without excess emotion (beyond that which would aid the story.)
It is very interesting - you've made Ginny, to my ears, sound very much like Molly. Hmmm...perhaps that tells us something about Molly in her youth? And I like the touch of the Malfoy ward being where they are questioned about blood issues and your use of Healer Pye.
Nice job so far!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review;I really appreciate it especially the comments about the condition. I have had trouble disassociating myself from the story, but then again I wanted some of my experience in there. Regarding Molly/Ginny, I do think Molly so often gets characterised as 'just' a mum and thus everyone was really surprised when she launched herself at Bellatrix and successfully dispatched her. I reckon Molly in her youth was just as feisty as Ginny and would probably have given the twins a run for their money. They didn't outwit her that often, after all. Thanks again. Carole xxx
I've wondered myself what sort of id was needed for National Health and assumed wizards wouldn't have it. Poor Ginny, I really can imagine how she feels. I'm glad people are taking her seriously - emergency rooms can require such a wait...
Author's Response: I have to say the emergency room experience was based strongly on my experience. Every time we've had to take my daughter to hospital she's been seen straight away. The endless questions are another very annoying issue though.
Thanks for reviewing. Carole xxx
Why on earth can they never be together? I wouldn't put it past Dumbledore to have foreseen this very thing. Why he can't have her as Adin I understand, but she knows.
Yeah, yeah, noble idiocy... that nasty little streak of Gryffindor he's got that he can't ever get rid of...
So funny - h'es known her so long, he knows her so well, and yet he doesn't know her at all. Is he entirely forgetting that she was cryign for Snape at the first meeting?
Oddly, because I believe you're having him end up with Hermione some how, I am wishing with all my might that he and Harry can finally be friends. He really needs a plain old friend, too.
Really? What sort of a response are you expecting? I've been finding the story interesting, if a little tiny bit on the crass side, but as I thought you had intended that, I let it slide.
Some of your other stories seem to me to have had a little less anger from Severus, and a little more romance, although I could be wrong. Perhaps seeing Severus struggling with being thirty something and seventeen at the same time is an entirely different pleasure for which some are not prepared or which does not interest some people in the same way?
I am enjoying the story. I might have given it a bit more time at the deaths of the younger Death Eaters, but I am not saying it needed that, necessarily, just that it was an option of doing it differently.
Poor Man. I really feel for him. I sort of wish he coudl just stay 17 and get a do-over on the next 20 years of his life.
Amusing, esp. "I'd do it for you..." Let's hope she solves the greasy hair problem.
Why has no one ever just given the man a bottle of dish liquid? I've got hair that greasy and it works on mine. Not exactly advanced potions...
How...informative...
I like that Severus is getting to do Seventh year over again. And I like that he has a cat and nice new clothes. Things are already better for him.
Hah! The story hits its stride...
I'm kind of disappointed if Hermione has figured it out already - I was hoping for a longer Adin/Hermione buildup, but you can't have everything. I love that Luna knew.
I especially like the way Adin and Severus are battling it out. I think he'd have to become another person to believe he could be liked, and I hope he is able to carry it back with him to his adult life. (If he gets to go back to being an adult. )
I also like that he is starting to see the Gryffindors differently as well as himself. Being stuck in with them is clearly better for his mental health than being in the dungeons..