I am no longer an active member/moderator of MNFF. I will pop up now and then since I do plan to finish DTB but as far as new stories go, this is it for me. Thank you.
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Hermione reached up almost involuntarily and traced the silver band branded on Draco’s arm. “That’s Dumbledore’s mark,” she said softly.
“Just a moment, Mr. Malfoy, my gargoyle has caught fire.” His eyes were twinkling.
This is so like Dumbledore to say. That's great! I love your characterization of the old Wizard, himself.
I'm intrigued by that silver band on Draco's arm. It seems that you began the story in the future, and then flashbacked into the past. Very good job of doing that. I know that I have a hard time doing transitions, but you're quite talented at them. Very good.
Your first chapter is so action packed, I can just image the rest of the story. I can't wait to read the other chapters.
Great job!
~mugglemathdork/Knight of the Turnip Table
First, I love your story! I've read it a couple of times since my time on MNFF (about a year) and when I did ship Harry/Ginny it was absolutely one of my most favorites ones to read. I never reviewed before this time, though.
Now that I can't stand Harry/Ginny or Ron/Hermione (you've got fanfiction to thank for that,) I can honestly say that this story still is one of my most favorites. And that is saying something - trust me! (Avid Dramione shipper >.>)
No, you can't convert me back - but this story still makes me *squee*
As for the story itself, and more specifically this chapter, I have to give you props for your superb characterization of Harry and Ginny, not only as separate characters but together as a couple.
I loved how you wrote humour into a non-humours situation; and the frustration from both sides was evident and clear.
It was brilliant the way you wrote Ginny's nervousness and Harry's enthusiasm; their first fight as a married couple is quite hilarious yet heart-breaking at the same time.
You did a great job! It was well-written, great characterization, and just wonderful!
Give yourself a pat on the back!
~Ritta/mgle_teacher/mugglemathdork
WOW OVER 1000 READS!!!
They say love is the most magical thing in the world. They say it lasts until death due you part. But what if it didn't? What if it lasted forever? For Hermione her one and only love, Draco, dies. Her daughter Tammy and herself try to pull themselves together at the news of his death. But it’s hard. They can’t forget someone so special. He had held their family together, now he was gone and they were falling apart. She knew he was gone forever and nothing could change that… little did she know that he was just her last breath away?
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Everytime she sees a shooting star she says ‘Look mum, daddy is coming back down. Let’s go look for him.’
“Me? I‘m brilliant. Couldn‘t be better. I‘ve been playing hide and bloody seek with the ministry all year. Brilliant!” You muttered sardonically.
- “Good good. Glad to know that they are still… er… seeking you Draco.” I giggled.
- “Yes, yes it is. Now listen, I didn’t come here to have a little chitchat. As a matter of fact it is an important affair.”
- “Really? And what ‘important affair’ would you have with me?”
“You - you really think that? You still wallow in the past? You think I came here - risked my life for a dare!? If you do then say goodbye Hermione. Say goodbye to the person who risked his life to come and tell you how he felt.”
awww...you made me cry! how dare you?!
it was totally heartwrenching...I loved it!
awww...you made me cry! how dare you?!
it was totally heartwrenching...I loved it!
wow...really intriguing...
I liked this!
I've never read the "Halloween 1981" story from the POV of Voldemort - very interesting.
I must congratulate you on your imagery, it is very good and descriptive. It definitely captures my imagination and attention.
You definitely captured the personality of Tom Riddle/Voldemort with your fic here - it shows through in his irritation of Wormtail, and the slight sarcastic remarks that make the story dark, yet humorous at all the right moments. Great work!
I can't even point out anything wrong with the story. You did so good!
mugglemathdork ~ Knight of the Turnip Table
Author's Response: Thank you, mugglemathdork. I chose Voldemort\'s view because the challenge that I originally wrote this for said the night must be told from either Voldemort, Dumbledore, or Sirius, and I chose the Dark Lord himself. He\'s always interested me, and I also find him far easier to write than, say, Harry.
I love descriptions and images, and I\'m glad to hear that you didn\'t think I went overboard with them or anything -- I sometimes fear I\'m in danger of that.
Again, thank you so much for the review, and I\'m glad you liked the story.
~Megan
When Harry’s quest for the horcruxes turns desperate, he leaves the security of his homeland to seek out the advice of an ancient and most unusual Council – one whose allegiance is only to themselves but whose knowledge is so vast it may be his only chance. What Harry discovers there will change everything. Soon, he comes to see that this is all so much bigger than just he and Dark Lord – his role, though pivotal, is terribly minute compared to the challenges the Wizarding World must now face.
Meanwhile, across the Atlantic Ocean, a young witch uncovers the truth about her bloodline. But only when catastrophic events begin to unfold, does she realise her importance in the greater scheme of things...
It is a tale of epic proportions: bringing in the truth behind Slytherin's betrayal, and the choices the Founders had to make to ensure the longevity of their world. Enemies must unite, lines must be crossed, and children must forgo their innocence. And behind it all, fly the Spirits of the Storm, waiting, watching, scheming. Welcome to the greatest epic war the Wizarding World has ever seen.
Chapter 11 is posted.
I love how you wrote Ron and Hermione quarreling, yet quietly suffering for the love they hold for each other through their time of separation.
Ron is very much in character, and I love how he's grown up into the Gryffindor that I've always hoped was there. Yet, you also keep Hermione true to her nature and she seems to have grown up immensely over time.
I don't necessarily ship Ron/Hermione, but this chapter is so well-written. I really liked the ending - very descriptive, warm, and fuzzy. It shows how much they've both grown, and there's really no need to quarrel or apologize for two people in love like them.
You did a great job with the subtleties of Ron and Hermione's romance. I.e: Ron giving Hermione a gold watch which had once belonged to his grandfather, and it was really creative how you mentioned the watch at the beginning. It captures the readers attention and makes us recognize that this watch was mentioned for a reason. Great foreshadowing!
wow...that was so twisted. It's almost like that ending for that soap opera (Dallas) where the guy/girl dreamt it all! lol.
Author's Response: Haha, I have never heard of that soap opera, but it would have been interesting to watch. \"Twisted\"... I like that description! Thank you.
lol i like that twist at the end...makes you ponder...are you writing a sequel? it woudl be cute. lol.
It's funny how you have these two behaving like children...lol.
I can't wait to read the rest of the story! I hope you update soon
Well...I've never written a fanfic before but as an avid read and a teacher...I can tell you that you're story is just flying by! Not that it's bad...but I suggest you build it up...build background, characters, etc. I mean the story is good so far...but I just thought I'd review now before I forget. =]
Author's Response: I think there's some background in more chapters, which isn't the best background in the world but I did do my best. I have a tendency to just write the first thing that comes into my head when inspiration strikes so it can be difficult for people to understand but I hope I've done ok on this fic. Thanks for reviewing there are about 28 chapters and an epilogue I think so it does go on for a while longer...I also wrote a short one shot sequel but I don't know if people will be fed up of the story by the end lol Thanks for your feedback :)
This piece is a seventh year, One-shot concerning Hermione and Draco that will either puzzle you, or intrigue you. I might warn you of slight AU, it depends on your take on this piece. We already know that this couple wouldn't exist in canon anyway, so please bare with. This was my very first HG/DM pairing and I did my best to avoid any...cliche's with this complex couple. And really, let my know your opinions. Criticism, flames, well hopefully not, or kind words are deeply appreciated.
Hi Caren!
I reviewed your story once, before I became your beta for Mind, Body, and Soul but it was a one-liner. Therefore, here I am again, giving you a good and proper review like this story deserves.
First, I particularly liked that in the entire one-shot you don't have either one of them talking at all. You use some dialog but only for Professor Sprout giving directions about the project, and for Malfoy sneering at Granger at the beginning. But the rest of the story flows pretty smoothly without the dialog.
It's quite impressing that you managed to write so much with so little, in my opinion.
Second, I was particularly fascinated how you explore both of their feelings of confusion towards each other by making an analogy to a puzzle. It's almost corny but they're puzzle pieces that fit each other. Lol.
The ending was the best part: And she was okay with not knowing all the answers. She was okay with not knowing the answers to Draco Malfoy.
*squee*
Third, your writing about them devouring each other with their eyesight is just splendid.
I did catch a couple of small mistakes here and there. And I hate that you left it hanging, but that's what makes it one of my favorites and just a pleasure to read over and over. XD
You did a great job showcasing Draco/Hermione. =]
~Ritta/mugglemathdork/mgle_teacher/your ol' beta.
I liked it!
Author's Response: Haha, thanks a lot. :)
Again...interesting.
Can't wait to see where you take this story.
Author's Response: You won\'t have to hopefully; I\'ve already finished the 6th chapter and I\'ll put it up in a bit. Thanks for reviewing.
I like the beginning already...
Author's Response: I\'m glad. I\'m going back to edit it now so you\'ll have to read all over again!
Ok so Draco can hear other people.
That's interesting...
Ok so Draco can hear other people.
That's interesting...
Author's Response: Yeah he can hear all thats going on around him only he thinks it\'s in his head.
what?! it's over?! what happens?! OMG you're so evil! *sigh*
good job!
Author's Response: Yep, over and done with *wipes away tear* But there is a sequel, so please, please, please go read it!
Well written - it intrigued me enough to keep reading. And I love that you started off where HBP ended. Oh, and the descriptions were so good -- detail is everything when story telling...
Author's Response: Thank you my dear!
"to the well organized mind, death is but the next greatest adventure…" -- oh...only a couple of sentences into your story and already I've found phrases that I would love to quote and paste onto my "words of wisdom" page for my students...bravo!!! You do have a way with words my friend.
Author's Response: Yay! You have just made my day...week/...summer!!