11/24/04
wow, after 6 long years, I'm finally back. working on a new piece. the story is almost finished. I think you'll fall in love.
looking back at my old stories, I think, "what the bloody hell did I write?"
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Date: 02/28/05 Title: None
You captured that...in words that don't even exist. It was wonderful. Many kids can relate themselves with the relationship between Remus and his mother. Your vocabulary usage is positively outstanding. I wish my vocabulary ranged that far! I'm very keen on description and words being used too much, and I didn't see on bit of over usage. I'm big on a balance between description and dialogue, and though there isn't much dialogue, a story like this with little diialogue fits the mood nicely. Once again, excellent job.
Date: 03/17/05 Title: None
This is one amazing piece. It pulled me straight in, and even though it's a one-shot OC, it seems like we've known this character for...ever. Along with Mask, I, too, love the line "Breathe in, breathe out. Repeat as desired." It's a line from the book written by suiciders for similar people. And it is so true, that everyone has thought about suicide at least once. Thinking, would someone actually miss them; would someone notice they were gone. Then you incorporated the moon, and her questioning to why it comes back. I love how you combined the moon in with her thoughts; giving the moon life. It's just an excellent one-shot, and I enjoyed it very much. Brilliant!
Author's Response: Is it a line from a book? I came up with that on my own :0. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for reviewing!
Date: 04/29/05 Title: None
Another awesome chapter. I read this earlier this morning when I was half asleep, but I didn't have time to review it so I read it again and I just like it even more. It's kind of strange seeing Hermione act like such a...girl, searching through the letter for any hidden hints of Harry liking her. A little humorous. The description of Harry going through shock when he realised he was at Grimmauld Place was excellent. I know I would freak out if I was in a dead relative's house that I cared deeply about--actually I have. And when Harry woke up and Lupin was searching for "Padfoot", what was that? Pet peeve: people leave you hanging. But yet, it just builds up the suspense and a great story always has this. And finally, I like the multiple scene changes. Makes it seem like a movie. I just wish it were a little longer, and there could be a little more description. A story can never have enough description. So you know what now? You’re going to have to update soon, because I’m patiently waiting for this “action”. And where is Draco? I miss him dearly…okay perhaps I don’t, but I still would like to know what he’s been doing. Keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I am so glad you liked this chapter. Sorry about the cliffhanger with Remus, I thought that he should have some emotions too. Draco is coming in next chapter, so I know you will like that. Also there is going to be some action. I will post soon!
Date: 04/08/05 Title: None
Nice beginning! It's different to read a story with not as much diverse words (no offence to other writers). I tend to not be the brightest when it comes to vocabulary, and this was a nice change to read. Sort of an...older children's to young adult story. I also like the bits of humour placed into it: Harry rolling his eyes in disbelief towards Ron, who says he's beginning his summer reading; Draco throwing the darts at Hogwarts students he despises; Mrs. Weasley's self. It was all great. There was a couple things in question though. Just a few grammatical errors, and not that I didn't enjoy it, but the bit with Draco is a little blunt. It just sort of sticks out. Perhaps you could elaborate some more on that short scene, for example, what was the day like by him or the room's atmosphere. What did it look like? I think the only thing that could've made this chapter even better was a little more description. You have a nice, peaceful beginning, and now I'm off to read chapter 2.
Author's Response: I am so glad you like it. I also tried not to too many complex words because I also do not know some meanings. For the Draco scene, I really just wanted it to be short. No elaborate descriptions or anything. I just wanted to let people in a little on what he was doing over the summer. In my third chapter I am using a lot more description. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: 04/08/05 Title: None
This chapter was short, but sweet. Nothing absolutely wrong with that! I'm getting more into the shifting of scenes and which character the reader is zoned in on. It reminds me of the film 'Love Actually'. So many characters, yet as the story progresses, each one is linked together in some way of importance. Again, like every other story, there were a few things that didn't make sense and sort of made me laugh. First off, in the beginning Harry writes Hermione a letter. He says he can't speak of his whereabouts, but then he says 'Mrs. Weasley'. Now, if he were afraid of Hedwig being intercepted by a Death Eater or something else, I'm sure he/she would know who Mrs. Weasley is. It sort of contradicts itself. Second, I noticed a part in the letter from Harry ("The image just keeps Repeating and Replaying...") 'repeating' and 'replaying' are capitalised. I'm sure it was just an error, but I wasn't sure. And finally, I noticed little annoying grammatical errors. I don't know why it bothers me, it just does--even when I do it myself, too! Though more about the story itself, I like at the end where Ginny rejects Draco. I mean, has he gone bonkers? What turned him to fancy her in the first place? He got his 'just desserts'. Though I don't like this little scheme he's planning. Lovely chapter in all, and I hope to see an update soon! Well done.
Author's Response: Again I am trying to go for shorter chapters, but they start getting longer as I move forward. I have never seen Love Actually, so I did not base it on that, but if you like it, it is good! I made a mistake about Mrs. Weasley. Thanks for catching that. I will change it ASAP. About the Repeating and Replaying. All I have to say is that it wasn't an error. If you re-read the letter carefully, you might figure a minor thing out. Draco likes Ginny because people tend to just like people. Sometimes you can't pick and choose. :) I will update as soon as one of my betas finishes correcting my 2nd Draft of Chapter 3.
Date: 04/12/05 Title: None
That was quite clever! I would have never suspected it, and it makes complete sense too. There was one thing I wasn't sure about, though. The ministry keeps a record of wizards and witches who are Animagus and what they change in to. Wouldn't McGonagall change in to her normal grey tabby? Or does she have special permission to change in to a different coloured cat? That was the only thing about the whole scheme I wasn't sure about. I have another question: are Harry and Ginny currently dating or no? Because when Ginny sent the rejection letter, she told Draco she was already with someone. Did she say that because she's keeping the lane open for Harry? And lastly, I enjoyed this chapter greatly all around, but I would've liked to have seen Draco apart of it. What's he doing during this time? Anything productive? I guess I'll have to wait and find out. Great description on the outside morning. I can just visualise it--which is the point. Kudos! I'll be waiting for chapter 4. Nice job!
Author's Response: I am glad everyone thinks its clever! I thought I would add a little twist... McGonagall isn't changing to a different cat, it is because her hair changed that the fur changed. Ginny is not dating Harry or doesn't really have feelings for him. She is going out with Dean... (As it said at the end of book 5). I know everyone LOVES Draco... I might put him in Chapter 4, but that is unlikely because his BIG moment is in Chapter 5. Even though it isn't written, I know that is where the 'action' starts. Thanks for the wonderful review!
Date: 03/26/05 Title: None
I had to put down the food I was eating while I read this, because it was so grotesque! I loved it! You captured the grungy look and feeling of Azkaban so nicely, I almost wish it was a real place I could check out. As I read this, I really felt I was there, and I was going through the same aches and pains this character is going through. There was just one line I had to read twice, "Ill fate forced me to choose the cloak..." Did you mean to say "I'll" or "All". I'm pretty sure it's "All", but I don't know if anyone else pointed it out, just letting you know. I also enjoyed the use of uncommon words, like "scour". It's so weird that I actually read that in your story, really. It was either yesterday or Thursday when I learned what it meant. Ironic? But I cannot wait for the next chapter of this, because this is something so different from what I've read so far. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, RW. I really enjoy reviews like this one because they give me some specifics about what readers are enjoying in my story, and what I can still work on. The question you had about "Ill fate": I meant to use the word ill meaning bad or unlucky. Not sure if that helps; or makes the sentence any better or worse. But, atleast you know what I was angling for there. Thanks again for the review.
Strange Meeting by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Harry finds himself in a strange place with an altered Ginny for company. And what are those words that he can hear on the wind?
Date: 03/26/05 Title: Chapter 1: Strange Meeting
*wipes away tear* I loved this so much. I've been having odd occurrences lately. I literally just thought to myself that I would love to read a story where Harry dies, and he doesn't actually know he's dead. And BAM! I read your story. I enjoyed this so much. The deep emotion and heartache of what someone truly wants is so vivid in this story, it's just amazing. I am personally fearful of death, but as I read this I thought, I don't really have so much to be afraid of really. However, no one knows what the other side is like, I'm honestly not so much afraid. The bit of humour at the end is charming. The comical dialogue only enhanced the story's whimsy feeling. However, I'm not so much fond of Harry/Hermione, it's sort of implied but never confirmed. Love is widely based, and, to me, you're telling us to take Hermione's love for Harry in any way we'd like. This is such an excellent story, something new and exciting, and I hope this story wins!
Author's Response: Gosh, I'm late responding to this review. *looks at date guiltily* i loved that you used the word whimsy because this is exactly how I felt when writing this. It was whimsical to take this little journey because I just had to focus on something that was very surreal. I'm so glad it had some small part in making you think about death slightly differently, I think in some ways that was the point of the whole story. It connects to what Dumbledore said about death being the next great adventure.
Date: 04/29/05 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: The End of an Age
Wow...I am blown away. You did that so innocently and perfectly. Taking a serious subject like that and changing to be no choice. That is bloody excellent. I hope you write more about how Ginny felt afterwards or how his and Ginny's friendship changed. I just love you portrayed it. There wasn’t much dialogue, but that was perfectly all right. Some stories are better with just description. And Sara being jealous about Harry waking up screaming “Ginny!” is so typical, I would do the same, but being me, I would still be suspicious even after all the years passed. The last praise I have to say is I’m so glad you brought Hedwig into this. I knew with Harry being a wizard, one of his kids had to receive a letter. But who’s the other letter from? *ponders* It’s obvious I have to wait to find out, but you left a perfect cliff hanger. I found nothing wrong with this chapter. I found it perfect. The description was perfect; the dialogue only made it better. I’m itching to read what happens next. Awesome chapter! Update as soon as you can.
Author's Response: You're the first person to mention the second letter... hee hee. To tell you the truth I didn't think of it as being all that mysterious, but I guess it is. I think you'll like what the answer is... coming in the next chapter. As for the jealousy, in her experience, Harry has given Sara no cause to doubt his love. Of course, I wouldn't have stopped badgering him until he told me everything... but I'm a nag that way ;) Thank-you for the compliments, I'm glad this chapter didn't scare you off!
Date: 04/06/05 Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: A Peaceful Life
My imagination just flailed when I read this. I pictured someplace my dad once took me to see and it matched perfectly, and the more I imagined this prologue at the river, the more the story pulled me in. I love the precise description of…everything really. You have quite a knack for the sketch of a character’s surrounding and that’s what intrigues me—though at times I have a little trouble with that. There’s just one thing that (I thought) could’ve made this prologue better. I felt it could be a little bit longer. Just something more about the characters we aren’t familiar with. I can tell this is going to be an excellent piece, and I’m going to frequently looking back at this one. Update soon and nice job!
Author's Response: I'm glad my warnings of NC and GI didn't scare you away! I'm also happy to hear that you liked the description. Lack of description is one of my major foibles and I had to work really hard to get all the details down. This story centers around the 2 OC's, Harry's wife and daughter, so you'll definately get to hear more about them. Thanks for the review!
Date: 04/22/05 Title: None
This is such a gripping first chapter. I definitely want to know what happens next. Cliff hangers are the best things, but one must not get carried away with it...not that you did, but some stories do. I love your description of the atmosphere around the characters. I agree that Hermione is IC along with Ron, because I can see him being more upset and possibly stunned at what she did, but Harry would probably be very shocked. What I thought quickened the pace a bit too much was they were first in the Great Hall, but then Hermione went up to her dormitory. Wouldn't you say "to Gryffindor Tower, and up to her to her dormitory"? Just a wonder in my head. We all wonder what that little voice is in the back of our mind. Portraying evil thoughts in someone who doesn't usually think that way worked perfectly. I think this story is going to turn out great, and I really hope you update soon. Be proud, it rocks.
Author's Response: Ok thank you so much. I am glad you like it.
Date: 05/03/05 Title: None
Well you already know how I feel about this story, but I thought I'd get your reviews started, and people will soon begin to follow. I love the balance of description and dialogue; there are only a few grammatical errors, but nothing major. A few of the things I enjoyed reading in this beginning is the flowing entrance the reader gets. He is casually brought into continued story of Harry’s life, and it seems like the readers never left the tale. I liked the side humour story between Hermione and the twins with their pranks. It settles the tone to nonchalant. The lastly thing I enjoyed (because I do this at times, too) is the short introduction after asterisks. It informs the reader the current affair going on and then the story continues. Nice job. Your story has great potential.
The Hardest Goodbye by iloveRHr
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Thoughts and memories about the greatest thing that either of them ever had.
Date: 12/09/05 Title: Chapter 1: The First and Last
I could go on and be critical, because a writer doesn't always want to hear "this is so good!" but I'm tired. lol I do think this could've been a littler longer, but the characterisation was spectacular. Kudos to you! -RW
The Dark Lord's Blog by Schmerg_The_Impaler
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: What does Lord Voldemort do in his spare time? Well, that's an excellent question. Who would have known that the Dark Lord has a blog? (He also has a loyal following of readers, most of whom are Death Eaters and who post their comments.) Voldemort dispenses advice on everything from murder methods to germ protection to Power Rangers to shoes, and gives an account of the life of an evil overlord. But is he posting too much personal information online? And will Harry read it and find out more about the Dark Lord than Voldemort ever intended? Read and see.
WARNING: Extremely OOC behaviour from almost all.
RUNNER-UP in the 2007 Quicksilver Quills Awards for Best Humour fic! Also nominated like 21 times, because apparently my readers are as insane as I am!
Date: 07/14/07 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: I Sold My Soul on eBay
Wow...one of the most...interesting...and informal stories I've read yet. I liked it. If I ever think of a storyline, do you mind if I write a sequel to this? We could write it together. Let me know.
-RW
Author's Response: Hmmm, well, thanks, but I already have a sequel up that I\'m working on myself... I\'d love to read some funny Voldemort-centric stories by you, though! I bet they\'d be great! (Love the username.)
Date: 07/14/07 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: I Sold My Soul on eBay
Wow...one of the most...interesting...and informal stories I've read yet. I liked it. If I ever think of a storyline, do you mind if I write a sequel to this? We could write it together. Let me know.
-RW
Author's Response: Double posts are fun.
Double posts are fun.
Standing in the Rain by MarauderWannabe
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: An old love is rekindled with a letter that wasn't mean to be sent........
NEWS: Sequel in the works, obviously AU. Entitled Walking Through The Storm. Coming Summer '08!
Date: 07/14/07 Title: Chapter 1: P.S. I Love You
This should definitely be longer, because I am so wrapped up in it, I don't want it to end! haha Nice job so far.
-RW
Date: 07/14/07 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: Realizations
-swoongs- It's so adorable, it makes me sick! haha In a good way! So you're writing more then?
-RW