05/04/06
Welcome to my author page!
I am a teacher, musician, reader, and avid Harry Potter fan. I am originally from the Midwest and now live a bit farther south. I am thrilled to be a proud member of RAVENCLAW House and enjoyed being a site moderator for a time as well.
I hope you enjoy the many stories and poems I have written. I am proud of them all and appreciate any feedback you might care to leave (in other words, reviews are love!) I've listed them below with a short description since I know trolling through summaries can be tedious. Thanks for reading!
EDIT: Someday I will categorize my stories by genre. Today is not that day. ;)
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Snow-Hushed by Magical Maeve
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Hogwarts has always been a place of snow and magic, but after the final battle the snow doesn't lie so quietly.
Date: 01/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
That was lovely. I am a rhyme-and-rhythm girl myself, yet found I was mesmerized by the easy flow of this poem. The final question in particular was very striking and powerful. Great job (as always!) ~GIna :)
Author's Response: Thank you. This one was written a litte on the back of the Haiti disaster and something that I heard on the news from a rapper who came from Haiti (how uncool am I that I don't remember his name). It was provoked by the fact that aftermaths, no matter what they follow, always have the same overtones of loss and despair, sometimes not tinged with much hope.
Sub Rosa by DracoGurlFurever
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: When Draco Malfoy reads an article in The Cavendish Examiner about a sighting of a Nundu for the first time in years, he has no idea where the journey will finally lead him.
EDIT: This won First Place in the Gauntlet! Thank you so much to everyone!
Date: 07/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Gauntlet Submission
Oh my - what happens next?? Ah, there are so many unanswered questions! What a great twist at the end. I was thinking that Draco seemed a bit too nice and reformed, but I was ready to believe it - like Harry. But the twist at the end was perfect, totally in character - he was just playing Harry, and we'll never know why! Ah!
I've been meaning to read this for a while and am glad I finally did. It's fascinating to read a Gauntlet story and wonder which bits are the Gauntlet prompts and which are not. I have no idea because you wove everything together so well. I particularly liked how you inserted small flashbacks while Draco was telling his story. And the international aspect of his Nundu adventure was great - so nice to step out of England a bit! :)
Fun story - congrats on winning!! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! :) You're awesome. I'm totally glad you enjoyed the story - and yeah, it was a fine line to walk characterizing Draco as neither TOO nice so that people would say he was OOC or become suspicious but also not give away the end early...and it's nice to see you didn't see the ending coming! Thanks again for the review, dearie. It meant a lot to me :)
Hugs, Apurva.
Aberforth Dumbledore: A Love that Dare not Bleat its Name by Equinox Chick
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Aberforth Dumbledore was once infamous throughout the land for casting Inappropriate Charms on goats. He never responded to the claims, never gave his side of the story and lived with an odd reputation for decades.
But now he wants to set the record straight before Rita Skeeter has a chance to twist things furthur awry.
This is Equinox Chick from Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the Stirring category for the Winter Snows 09 competition on the MNFF Beta Boards.
I am not JK Rowling. Does that honestly surprise anyone!
This story won the 2010 QSQ Best Humour Fic - I'm still in shock.
Thank you to Hannah (coolh5000) for beta'ing this fic.
Date: 02/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Aberforth Dumbledore and the Enchanted Goat
I bet this was fun to write! Were you grinning as you typed? Because I was smiling as I read it. What a great job you've done with Aberforth's character! You've captured his gruffness and yet softened it just enough so we sympathize for him. Your take on the goat charm is perfect-of course that's what happened! I say make it canon, lol! I love that Albus helped him out without laughing. I know that Aberforth did not seem to have a great opinion of his brother in DH, but I'd like to think there was something there.
Great idea to give him the Order of Merlin as a way to bring it all up again. I loved the inclusion of Neville. And you made me hate Rita Skeeter all over again, she's a rotten witch! The ending was very touching. I could see another sentence or paragraph to wrap it up, but the last line works well too.
Great story, good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
PS. So do you think Aberforth ever found another love? :)
Author's Response: I was giggling as I wrote it, or rather when I started it. By the end I was weeping for Aberforth and long-lost Flossy... I mean Florence. I don't think he ever found another love, but I like to think he named all his goats Flossy in memory of that one tumble on the picnic blanket. Yeah, Rita is still as rotton as ever, ans she would want to know all about the goats. Thanks for the review ~Carole~
Date: 02/05/10 Title: Chapter 1: Aberforth Dumbledore and the Enchanted Goat
PS. I also though Aberforth's names were brilliant and wanted to ask you how you came up with them. That was one of the funniest parts! That and the bit about the really strong elderflower wine, lol.
Good inclusion of Fudge. Let's ruin his reputation a bit more, why don't we? ;)
And you are not the only person who liked the Epilogue. I like it too, in spite of all its sugary sappiness and fanfic-cy cliche. ;)
~Gina :)
Author's Response: Umm, the names. Okay well Albus' names are a mixture of family, (Percival), Anglo Saxon (Wulfric) and the Brian is just a name that always amuses me ... so I had Bertram for no reason except I was thinking of Jeeves and Wooster, Fulke because it's Old-English and Kevin because it's a bit of a joke name in UK (sorry all you Kevin Costner fans).
Non Compos Mentis by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
When left to their own devices, teenagers manufacture all sorts of ways of getting in trouble. In this case, the trouble is of a completely different breed—mischief under the influence.
Unbeknownst to the flock of Weasley/Potter adolescents, though, the cider from the press at the Burrow is not quite as fresh as they think. While most of them realize that the beverage was suspect, a certain cousin does not, leading to antics, shenanigans, and embarrassments, all on a whole new level.
Date: 01/29/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
That was *fantastic*! I loved every minute of it. It was not only deliciously fun to read, since we have all either been there ourselves or been there with a friend, but it was exceptionally well-written! Kudos for capturing the older canon characters so well and for instantly bringing life to the next generation. This story was very well-paced, and there were so many subtle hints of character, connections made, and great lines that it was really just about perfectly done. I am very impressed! I hope you do well in the challenge!! ~Gina :)
PS. Is the last line a hint of things to come?? :)
Author's Response:
Yay, I think I just turned a brilliant shade of red that would make Godric Gryffindor jealous. Bless you for that. :D
It was actually inspired by something that happened to me when I was nine. We had a mill festival that celebrated both the local agriculture and the local Native American tribes, and every year, they always sold fresh cider, which was always wonderful and delicious. Well, one year, I bought some, drank the whole quart, and I found that I couldn't walk straight. When I got home, I told my dad, who laughed until he choked on his own air...I guess that was my first 'bender.' Hehe!
And as for things to come...my plot bunnies multiply like, well, bunnies. I have a feeling that the Potter/Weasley kids, at least in my mind, have a lot more trouble to get into before I'm done with them. It was a nice aberration from my normal doom/gloom angsty stuff to write this, and I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Jess
The Labyrinth Mind by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Harry and Lord Voldemort were connected. It tortured Harry to his very core, but he could not shut it down, until ...
Disclaimer; I am not JK Rowling. That doesn't surprise anyone, I'm sure.
Date: 01/30/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Labyrinth Mind
I didn't know you wrote poetry! Very cool! I love poems that rhyme (sorry, I just don't get free verse, lol) so I like this one. And yet it's still sort of free in it's flow and rhythm, which is nice. Actually, is this a loose sonnet form? The opening lines were great, as was the conclusion.Your word choices all contributed to a dark feeling,
Did you want suggestions? I like the idea of remaining vague with a poem like this - that is, maybe not using Voldemort's name directly. For example, you might use 'soul' for the word 'Lord' in the third line, and then when you get to Voldemort's name in the sixth line, use 'the Dark Lord' there instead. The only thing I noticed was in the third to last line: 'her blade cut the rescuer so" - I wasn't sure who 'she' was, since the last female mentioned was Hermione, and I didn't think that was right. I wonder if there is a way to make that clearer?
So what was the challenge? I hope you did well, I liked your poem! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Aww, Gina, I wish you'd read it before I submitted, those are great suggestions. Yes, it's a sonnet and the prompt was a quote about corridors. Corridors always make me think of connections so Harry and Voldemort seemed obvious. The challenge was a triathlon, and we had to write three poems. I came second overall, but my Grease Parody won its section.
Thanks very much for the review. ~Carole~
Florean Fortescue, an Unsung Hero by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: : Remembering the forgotten ice-cream man of Diagon Alley.
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the Stirring prompt of the Winter Snows Challenge at the beta boards
Thanks to Elene (CoolCatElly) for beta-ing this. And Jess (ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor) and Carole(Equinox Chick), where would I be without your help?
Disclaimer: This is not J.K.Rowling. However, this is someone who wishes she was J.K.Rowling.
Date: 02/07/10 Title: Chapter 1: Stirring, 23 December, 2006
Lovely story! What a great idea for the prompt. I really enjoyed reading about Florean and you did a great job connecting him to your OC's story (or the other way around, lol.) I especially liked the end, as it really nails the prompt and sends home the message. Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Wow, thanks for your good wishes, Gina. This is the only one-shot which made me struggle for months, so I'm seriously glad that you found it lovely. The end was something that came to me much later on and I was a bit skeptical of it at first, but really, there was no other way the wizarding world could have paid their homage to him. I have a feeling Harry would be there with his family. :D
Thanks for the review.
Natalie.
Soul Sister by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ted and Andromeda have just eloped. So, they dance.
A songfic featuring Hey, Soul Sister by Train. Written for SBBC December Activity, using Kat's (Mistletoe) prompt.
This prompt came second in the challenge. :D And I am not J.K.Rowling --->DISCLAIMER.
Date: 07/14/10 Title: Chapter 1: Hey, Hey, Hey.
Very nice! I was going to start Becoming Ritta, but when I went to your author's page and saw this I was like - whoa. See, I've been hearing this song on the radio loads this summer and found it really catchy. But until I came to your author's page, I had no idea what it was! Seriously - I almost hummed it to someone today to try and figure it out. So I figure I was destined to read this story. :)
I think I've said this before, but you write in first person really well. With this story you really captured Ted's feelings terrifically. Great job!
The song lyrics fit in with the story really well. The only thing was, knowing this song is so recent (like, hearing it today!) was kind of incongruent with knowing Ted and Andromeda most likely ran off sometime in the 1970s and probably weren't dancing to Train. So it makes me wonder - is there a 1970s song that would work? No idea and it doesn't really matter, since the lyrics still go great with the story regardless.
I'll have to get to Becoming Rita another day, but it's one of the big pieces on my to-read list so I will someday!
*hugs*
~Gina :)
Author's Response: Hello!
What a surprise! I never thought you'd be wandering into this story. :) Oh well, I got the song as a prompt for this challenge at SBBC, and I don't think I'd have ever started writing Ted/Andromeda if it wasn't for it. Yeah, the song seems a bit out of place as those two eloped in the 70's. lol. But I knew their story was perfect for this. :D
And don't worry about BR! lol. I know the length can be off-putting for people. THANKS FOR THE REVIEW!
~Natalie.
Dust in the Wind by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
Dominique Weasley took a summer job at Weasleys Wizarding Wheezes with the hope to stake her first claim of independence. All she really wanted was to be able to pay for her Yule Ball gown on her own, but one fateful day, someone strolled into the shop and turned her world upside down.
Scorpius Malfoy was sweet, confident, and completely gorgeous, but Dominique knew that he was off-limits as her cousin’s ex-boyfriend. The more she tried to push him away, though, the more she questioned her resolve to do the right thing.
This is ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor of Ravenclaw House, and this is my submission for the Fiction Junction ‘I Challenge Thee’ prompt
Date: 02/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dust in the Wind
Lovely story! You captured the prompt perfectly- their potential relationship definitely has that 'forbidden' quality to it. You also described Domonique's feelings really well. I enjoyed her 'voice,' especially the humorous lines. The only thing I wanted more of was Scorpius's story. For some reason, I had this underlying distrust of the Malfoy name that wouldn't go away and I kept thinking he was playing her. Of course, I don't know how you would include that in a story written from Domonique's POV! And you addressed it at the end, which was really sweet. Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response:
In my planned sequel/parallel story, I intend to incorporate both of them and to address more of Dominique's personal insecurities and Scorpius's motives for essentially playing Lily. Neither of them are bad people, but there are some lessons that they both must learn before they can have a happy ending.
Writing from Dominique's POV was the only choice, because it would have seemed odd to write from his POV and her actually accept his invitation and his advances. I needed to show how hard and awkward it was for her to come to terms with her feelings and this new-found interest in someone that she thought she'd never come to care about.
Thanks for reviewing (twice, lol), and I'm so glad you liked it. Take care and happy writing!
Jess
Date: 02/15/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dust in the Wind
Oops, I thought this was for the 'Forbidden Love' prompt in the Great Hall. Teach me to start a story late at night and finish it the next day. Sorry. It would be a great entry for that challenge if you could enter it in both! As for the prompt you were given in Fiction Junction, it fits that one perfectly as well and I think that whoever issued the prompt will be very happy with it. You are a very talented writer! ~Gina :)
Author's Response:
Aww, thank you. I really hadn't expected for this piece to get the kind of response it has, but I've had 6 reviews in about 30 hours, which is, oh, I don't know...fan-FREAKING-tastic!
Because I love these two so much, now, I think I'm going to write a parallel story for the 'First Love' prompt, as I am using my newly completed Albus/Scorpius for the 'Forbidden Love' prompt.
In case you're interested, it was Carole's prompt that I got, even though she had meant to use Roxanne instead of Dominique, but if she had, I don't think it would have turned out so well.
Thanks for reviewing, and you, as always, have made my day.
Jess
My Secret, My Hell, My Burden by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary:
What could possibly be a higher form of madness than falling in love with someone who does not share your feelings? Well, for starters, if that person happens to be your best friend, then that certainly qualifies.
Albus Potter has fallen prey to this quandary, and through a self-exploratory journey, he learns much about what it’s like to love and what it’s like to lose himself.
This placed second in the February Great Hall Month of Love Challenge - First Love.
This fic was nominated for a 2010 Quicksilver Quill Award - Best Same-Sex Pairing.
Date: 02/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Wow. Yay, my first review for this! My goal was to show Al falling in love for the first time while going through a huge identity crisis, which I believe that I did okay. I've never written in first person before for anything substantial, but I knew, for this, it was important to do so. So, the main issues that you had were clearing up why they were outcasts and why Albus was attracted to the neater aspects of Scorpius. Mainly, it was because he was a lot of things that Al knew that he was not, which I tried to illustrate by showing Al's general nonchalance toward appearance and Scorpius's inverse fastidiousness. Thanks for reviewing, and I think I'll cruise on over to 'edit' and add a little bit. :) Jess
You know, I have to confess, I had my doubts about an Albus/Scorpius pairing. I've obviously paired Albus with another man myself, but I guess I'm used to seeing Scorpius paired with Rose or Lily, or in your case, Domonique. As I was reading, there were still places where I doubted. Yet by the end, I was hooked. You paced this story incredibly well. You made me want them to get together - desperately. It was obvious that they have something amazing, something real. And yet it was not meant to be. That was when you really revealed true genius: when Scorpius kissed Albus, but admitted he did not feel the same - oh *sobs!* And when he still held Albus and tucked him in - oh *more sobs!* That was just terrifically heartbreaking. Wow.
So why did I have my doubts? Just a few things. First, there was this line:
We were outcasts together—him because of his family and me because of mine
Although I can extrapolate why Scorpius was outcast, it wasn't clear from the story, so it weakened their immediate bond a bit. You built that up later, but the initial click could use a bit more fleshing out.
Ditto on just why Albus was so enamored of Scorpius. You did a great job of detailing Scorpius's character through Al's eyes, but I didn't always understand why Albus liked his neatness, his table manners, things like that. So at times it was hard to understand the attraction. I think the first person point of view helped that (you certainly could not have accomplished this much angst in third person!) but just a bit from Albus about why he liked Scorpius and not just what he liked would add a touch more depth to his feelings.
That said, I will say again you still built to a hell of an ending. I believed in them at the end, and damn that was sad! Your writing is very natural and easy to read. The voice is well-done and as I said, the pacing was perfect. You are very creative with both your words and your story. Really great job, Jess - good luck in the challenge!!
~Gina :)
Author's Response:
So Young by Hokey
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Oliver Wood never thought a girl could snatch his interest away from Quidditch. But that was before he saw her.
OW/GW Romance
by Hokey of Slytherin
for the Great Hall February Month of Love Challenge, prompt Forbidden Love
Date: 04/27/10 Title: Chapter 2: Now Taken
Very nice buildup! I like how you've set up some tension with Harry, at least on Oliver's part: he's such a gentlemen he immediately recognized and felt a little bad about Harry liking Ginny too. It will be interesting to see how that resolves, as well as how you write Ginny's interest in Oliver (unless this is a one-sided romance, which will be very sad for Oliver!) Good luck as you continue!
~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thankies, Gina! I'm thinking that to be a good captain, one has to be somewhat sensitive and observant to other's feelings. And I like to think of Oliver as someone who would notice these things, and see that this wasn't his game to play... :P
We'll see how Oliver does - I'm going to try to stick to canon as much as possible, but still, I couldn't stand a sad Oliver :P Thanks, Gina, for reading!
Date: 03/03/10 Title: Chapter 1: So Young
Nice job! I think Oliver and Ginny could be a good couple given what we know of their Quidditch careers later on. I'm glad you addressed their age difference here. It will be interesting to see how it turns out for them - does the next chapter jump ahead or continue from here? Good luck as you continue! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Well yes, I thought the same - they really should be a good couple. The only problem is the age difference... in this chapter, that is. ;)
The Sweetest Mistake by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary:
During the trip to Godric's Hollow, Hermione, through the course of events, comes to realize that her friendship with Harry had become so much more to her - but not to him. This pain, this disconcerting feeling, however, had nothing to do with Horcruxes.
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
That was cool! :) As I was reading, I was thinking it was a great exploration of the scene in Godric's Hollow from Hermione's point of view. And then when she started explaining to him what had happened after their escape and she said that line "You've been shouting and moaning and . . . things" the story really hit home and it suddenly seemed so possible that in his fever-induced delirium maybe this happened. Very creative!! And heartbreaking (you seem to have a penchant for heartbreaking, yes?) I think the most emotional line was the one simple "Ginny" from Harry that really hit Hermione. Poor Hermione! There were some other great lines here too, but I think my favorite by far was: "This was a cosmic phenomenon, a destiny of souls meeting on a physical plane in order to ascend to a spiritual one." Brilliant!
More than anything, the movies make me think Harry/Hermione can be a real thing as they seem to have good chemistry onscreen (in my humble opinion, of course.) Now when I go see DH, I'll totally be thinking of your story and this little "missing moment" for Hermione. I will probably even be rooting for Harmony at that moment, and you've done that by writing such a believable scene here. Great job - good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response:
Well, I do declare (in my best Southern belle accent), I believe I'm blushing a bit.
I've known for ages that this was a story that needed to be told. In the books, there are little nuggets like this, especially in DH, and I felt really strongly about this one. I almost wrote this one from Harry's perspective in his delusion, but that would have ruined it; all the books are from his POV, and I've never written Hermione, really. I'm really happy with it.
I've worn a crease in my copy of DH, so much so that when I hold the spine of the paperback in my hand, it automatically opens to this chapter, lol.
Thank you so much for the review. They're slighly crack-like, as you know. :D
Jess
Kissing the Joy as it Flies by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Seamus Finnigan only asked Lavender Brown to the Yule Ball because he was pretty sure Angelina Johnson would say no. They'd have a drink, a dance, and a laugh - that's all. Dean might be after a snog from a girl, but Seamus wasn't bothered.
But then Lavender appeared in the common room, in a swirl of a dress, and he was lost.
This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry in the February Love Challenge - category First Love - over at the Great Hall on MNFF beta boards.
Disclaimer: I am not JK Rowling. Is anyone shocked by that announcement?
I need to thank Natalie (hestiajones) for beta'ing this fic and being generally amazing and VERY supportive whilst I wrote this.
Thanks also to Emma (Amortentia x) for filling me in on Irish boyspeak.
Finally, the title for this story is a tweaked line from Eternity by William Blake.
Date: 02/28/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Aw, what a sweet ending! That was really lovely. I absolutely believe it happened in canon and want to know more about how that last scene came to be with Seamus standing in for Lavender's father. Great job with both characters, it was so refreshing to read about them before the events of the later books. As a Ravenclaw, I should perhaps be offended by the bookish non-participation of my house at the dance, but that would have totally been me sitting there on the side talking it up so I'm not, LOL! Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks Gina. OOOH, the last scene. Well, I left that deliberately vague but I do have three other Lavender fics on the site and whilst this isn't really a prequel to any of them, I do pair her with three different men. I know who my favourite is, though. I'm a bit mean to Ravenclaws, aren't I? Sorry. Thanks again ~Carole~
Flying, Fair Play and the Need for a Firm Hand by Equinox Chick
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Rolanda Hooch thought her first year teaching (when she had to control Bellatrix Black) would always be her worst year. But then she'd hadn't met a messy-haired Gryffindor, his equally cocksure friend, and a red-haired witch with a penchant for revenge.
Sometimes she wished she'd never taken the job at Hogwarts.
This is Equinox Chick of Hufflepuff and this is my entry for the I Challenge Thee Challenge held in Fiction Junction over at the MNFF beta boards.
I accepted a challenge by Karaley Dargen which was
Write about James I. first flying lesson. It does not go well.
Thank you to Lexi (Harry Rulz) for beta'ing this fic for me.
Disclaimer: I'm not JK Rowling. If that honestly surprises you then perhaps you should check into the Priory.
Date: 07/08/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Oh, another great last line! That's precious, LOL! What a cute story. I really enjoyed reading about Rolanda. Her interaction with McGonagall was great and it was loads of fun to see into her thoughts regarding James, Sirius, and the others. Wow, James and Sirius were firecrackers from the beginning! I liked how you connected James's character to his father. Most of all, I liked Lily, especially at the end. Great story! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. I'm glad you liked Lily. I wanted her to be spirited and naughty, rather than a Hermione-like rule abiding girl. Originally this was a story from James Potter's POV, but it really didn't work, so i switched to Rolanda. I like to think Hooch was extremely relieved when Harry turned out to be much calmer than his parents - hee hee. Thanks again ~Carole~
First Sight by Northumbrian
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: Summary: There are many forms of love and many ways in which love can ambush the unwary. First sight can surprise us.
This is Northumbrian of Ravenclaw House writing for the February Month of Love prompt, Surprise Love.
Date: 03/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: First Sight
That was beautiful! You've captured Harry's feelings at the birth of his first son wonderfully. You used his voice well, also - it was all very 'Harry.' I liked Ginny's characterization too, and their interaction was great, even the swearing. ;)
I think my favorite lines had to be:
I fell in love with a schoolgirl. I married an International Quidditch player. Tonight, for the first time in my life I will share my bed with a mother.
That's just briliiant, beautiful, perfect!
The end was very cute, very touching. Really, this was all just lovely. And in my very humble opinion, I still think it fits the prompt of surprise love, because just about everything about having and falling in love with a new baby is a surprise.
Great job!! ~Gina :)
Author's Response:
The swearing was (in my opinion) essential.
The lines you quote were my favourites, too. Thank you.
Neil
Voldemort by James B Stigma
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A poem of the night Voldemort was defeated, written in the style of "Jabberwocky" by Lewis Carroll.
Date: 03/10/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Great job! You showed a strong understanding of the original in crafting this one. Good rhythm, and it flowed nicely as a story. I've done this myself with a bit of Luna and her mythical creatures, so the second to last stanza felt a bit off. I looked up the original and think the second and third lines in that stanza should be reversed to truly parallel it; of course, I don't know if you chose to do that, but wanted to point that out if you didn't. Otherwise, it's a good poem, nice job! I love reading these sorts of things and enjoyed yours very much. ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked it. As for the second to last stanza, that was the most difficult for me. I made it fit with the scene and the poem as best I could, taking a bit of a cue from Peeves (one of my favorite side characters). It's not a perfect fit, I agree... but works well enough for what I was going for. Thanks again. ~JBS
Waiting by the opaleye
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: Hermione waits behind a window. She is waiting for the world to come alive again.
Nominated in the 2010 Quicksilver Quill Awards for Best Canon Romance.
Date: 04/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: Can you hold me in your arms tonight?
That was lovely! I like reading stories about those few days after the battle, and this feels like it could have happened. You did a great job writing from Hermione's point of view, of detailing her emotions about everything that has happened. And you paced it very well, building the tension. The last line was a perfect release without going into the messy details. ;) Nice work! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Hi Gina! Hermione is one of my favourite characters to write so I'm glad you thought I did a good job of her. The ending is one of my favourite bits as well. I like leaving it at that point. I don't think it's necessary to go further since that really isn't what the fic is about hehe. Thanks for the lovely review!
Ain't Love the Sweetest Thing by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: He had been meandering though the distance for ages, unsure of what she would say in the final moment.
Song lyrics taken from U2’s The Sweetest Thing. And I am not J.K.Rowling.
Date: 04/23/10 Title: Chapter 1: And she said Yes.
hat was very sweet! I'm not familiar enough with the song or with songfics in general to comment on that, but I thought that each little bit developed nicely to the end. Of course the resolution was my favorite part - James's speech was perfect, but I'm a sucker for those kinds of speeches. Because *of course* something like that had to be said for them to finally get together! :) I also liked the contrast between him going to her at the beginning and her coming to him at the end, it was a nice, subtle touch. Lily's characterization - that little hint about breaking the rules - was cute and different for her. And the simple ending was perfect for the beginning of their relationship. Nice job, I enjoyed reading your J/L moment! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Ahhh...it's a lovely song! You must listen to it. The mood and music suit these two so well.
I'm so happy you liked Prongs' speech - I just wrote that without thinking whether it would suit him or not. And yes! I knew the ending had to be simplistic. :)
Thanks for the review again!
~Natalie.