Wow! This was wonderful! You are a very talented writer. You set the scene for this mysterious glade immediately. You use wonderful descriptive language; the images you project with your writing are some of the clearest and most vivid I've had. I especially liked "The place was quiet. Almost suffocatingly so. It was like being in a sacred place, where talking too loudly constituted a grave and irredeemable spiritual offence." The description of the pale young man - "It could have been said that the young man had a theme going, but his eyes spoiled the whole effect entirely. They were utterly black, and in all ways like the lake: their cold, still depths seeming to stretch out beyond the vast, bleak reaches of eternity itself." was fantastic, and I loved his chain of grass. Harry was spot-on, particularly when he was angry at his pale companion and stuttering. I think this was a fascinating way to give Harry this experience with the pale young man.
This was a beautiful piece, very reflective and moving. I am worried that the grass chain is for someone very close to Harry. Are you planning on writing any more stories with this character? I think they would be wonderful.
Great job, thank you for writing such an original piece. Keep up the good work!! ~Gina :)

Hi Ashley!
Great ending. :) I'm so glad you stuck to what you had planned, and I'm so happy for you for how well it turned out! I think this sums it up:
And they will have this moment,” he paused as he held out the glowing box in his hand, “no matter the outcome. They will not be lost in fear and hate anymore, Arthur. You will bring them love, and that is worth everything.”
And this just really finished it perfectly:
No matter what happened in the hospital, he was bringing them this memory, this golden moment. The night of The Great Battle would haunt them no longer, he was quite certain of that.
With those lines, you brought it full circle and tied it up wonderfully. Hope was the perfect name for this chapter!
So a sequel, hm? That would be lovely, I hope you go for it. You've also dropped a bit of a plot bunny with Mr. Deagol there at the end. ;)
Once again - great job! I really enjoyed reading this great story. It deserved all the kudos it received in the HWPP. It was beautiful and touching and very original.
I also enjoyed chatting with you about it. :)
Keep up the great work - and good luck with the rest of the story! :)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hey Gina! Thanks so much for all your great comments and support with this story. I loved hearing your thoughts and opinions, and I\'m glad you agree with me about the ending. I agree about the title for the chapter! It just felt so perfect. Thanks for reading, dear! ~Ashley

Ashley! That was wonderful! I feel rather sentimental and sniffly right now. :) I loved this line: If anything could pull them out of their nightmarish memories, it was the promise of each other. That really sums up these three people, doesn't it? It was a beautiful line.
I also liked their discussion at the end, about what was getting them through. I was wondering if Ginny had any role to play in Harry's life, and I like how you worked her in. But Hermione's last statement was brilliant. One last golden day. Love It was beautiful! Now bring them out of it, and Arthur too! :)
Great work, I hope you are proud of this story. It is original, beautiful, and emotional. Congratulations on a wonderful chapter!
~Gina :)


Author's Response: Double Post!

Oh! I wish we could edit reviews - I am so sorry I spelled your name wrong! But at leat now I can tell you how much I also like the banner that goes with this story, its beautiful. :)
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Haha, to be honest I didn\'t even notice! And yes, the banner is fantastic! Purplemage did a great job on it.

Brilliant! Each chapter gets better. I particularly loved the wonderful descriptions in this chapter (for example, great second paragraph!) The image of the ribbons of love coming from Harry to destroy Voldemort is once again pure JKR - amazing. Your vision of the final battle is very good, and the way it ends for Harry, Ron and Hermione is heartbreaking. I know that the memory Arthur finds to save them will be equally as moving. Good luck as you continue, I can't wait to read more! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Who says he\'ll end up finding one at all? No, I\'m just kidding, of course he will find one. Writing one good enough to combat the evil I wrote in chapter 3, THAT\'S the hard part! Thanks for your encouraging words! ~Ashley

Hi,
Great job - too bad this is just a one-shot, you've really set up a longer story here that would be really fun to read (and probably write!) I really want to know what happens at the wand shop and how they get out of this. I think you did a great job at the beginning showing Fred and George discovering the swap. You have a good grasp of their character and dialogue and I loved the bit about mirror image twins. Good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I always feel so awkward writing dialogue, so it\'s good to hear it was in their voice. I have no earthly idea how they\'re going to get out of this one :P

Hi there,
This turned out very well! You did a good job with the beginning, setting the tone and establishing your first person point of view. I still want to know more about Darlene, for some reason. I guess its because she did so much talking there at the end. I liked the bit about them changing to go out for dinner in the Muggle word, that was very cute. And of course, you have set up a great sequel for yourself: what happened to Charles Doyle?? This I really want to know! Are you planning on Jemina going into the locked room to find her father? Or will he finally come back out??
Nice job and good luck in the HHWP!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: I set up a sequel on purpose, however I\'m not committing to anything. Last time I promised a sequel, it took me six months to write it.

Hi! Wow, this was such an original story! I love what you did with the locked room of love. Having it choose the people who come work there was a wonderful idea, and the rhymes on the door were fantastic! Did you write those yourself? You also did a great job of introducing your main character, Faylinn. There is obviously a lot of backstory there and you worked it in really well. Declan Hurst also seems like a fun, intriguing character. Are you planning to write more with either of them? I think it would be lovely. You did a really nice job with this story. Good luck in the HHWP! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Faylinn came to me while I was wondering about that room. I think that I\'ll be adding more to this story as I figure out what is actually inside it. The first thing that I actually wrote in this story was the first poem. The rest of the story evolved around it. I\'m really honored that you enjoyed the poems. The second one was hard to write, but I figured I couldn\'t have it be a poem the first time and just words the second time. I would also like to explore more about Declan. I would think that working in the locked room would have a profound effect on some, and he has worked there for years. Keep your eyes open, I\'m sure more will be forthcoming about these characters. I have really taken a liking to them. :)

Hi,
Nice job, I like the idea of body-switching creams (sort of like the canary creams then?). You did a good job giving the twins distinct habits to make the switch clear. I had Ginny figure out the switch too- I wonder how many others did as well? ;)
Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I was thinking of the Canary Creams when I had them working on a disguise candy. :) I thought that Ginny would be one of the first ones to notice they weren\'t acting as they normally do. She seems to be the type to notice. :) I wish you luck with the challenge also! Cyns

This was awesome! :) I loved your use of present tense, for one - I haven't read many stories like that, and you did a great job staying consistent with it. I also liked how you never used the Marauder's names, but their animal forms instead. This gave their characters a new dimension.
I thought the descriptive imagery was fantastic. I particularly liked how you wrote about the moon, creating a character out of an inanimate object.
The final paragraph, when the werewolf transforms back, was wonderful. The contrasts between the sun and moon were perfect, as was the final line.
I really enjoyed reading this different look at the Marauder's. You write with incredible style and depth. Keep up the great work and good luck with your future writing!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:
Present tense is my...thing if you would. I think that in most cases, it allows you to get more inside a character\'s head or the moment more than past tense allows

VV wanted me to them in CAPS like in Narnia to show the difference-Rat, Stag, Wolf and Dog. :P Think I should\'ve?

Thanks, I\'m quite proud of the personification on the moon as well

Thank so much, again. I don\'t plan on stopping anytime soon and thanks for the luck!