I liked it. A request: can we have more about classes than meal?
Author's Response: ok. but it's challenging because of i don't know quite what year i'm making this-cuz if i do the 6th year then i'll have to watch out w/ what classes i choose, because OWL's determine what you take. but i will try.
PS- i know the story hasn't been updated in like 7 weeks, but A-i need to edit the wednesday chap in order for it to be posted and B-i'm so rediculously busy w/ school and speech team. but i will get the next one up ASAP.
Well.. Neat format, perfect Harry portrait.. I liked the note on DADA class(The Prof. watching Harry). That made a good remark. Umm.. I think Ron was a bit OOC. In general, yea, it's a good story.
I'm amazed by the improvement! This is the best of the other two -- note I haven't read Thursday. Ron's note was hilarious. Glad to read Hermione's wednesday, filled with whole class schedule. Poor Hermione.. She cannot have a peaceful life on the lead of our, fans', pens; Nor will Jo Rowling let her by the way.
Author's Response: thanks! i'm glad you liked it! this entry took a lot of work, especially editing so it's good to know it's appreciated. im glad you liked the classes, so now it can be hopefully a nice even balance between food and classes. please everyone.this is my first review for this entry so thanks, keep em coming my friends!!!
I loved this story! Melin's sleep, pensive visions, Regulus' plot.. They are all wonderful. I call it Bitter Chocolate :D .
Fans usually dwells on James' mischief manager side, but you pointed his fatherhood. that's my favorite part of your poem.
It's a fine piece of work. And just a suggestion: write about Sirius in Azkaban. It'll REALLY work in your style.
Author's Response: Ooh, -likes that idea-
I liked the desciribtions of the characters. I couldn't recognise who was Hermione's married friends untill I read the end of the story. No need to take it as a concern, I liked that side of your story. Good plot, esspecially for a one-shot.
First, a reviwer's note: I was searching something on the site and eventhough this fict wasn't what I was looking for, I got hooked on your summary. (You-know-why:))
Now, here comes my review: I liked the style you used to develop your character. Emotions are realistic. Moreover, you didn't spread the topic -- since it's very easy to loose yourself in DE things and war -- and stayed in the plot. Because I read some stories that are not really giving what they promissed in their summary. However, I think, things happen very quickly after the scream. Sentences are like in rush to arrive the conclusion -- Hufflepuff speech. But don't take that as very problem, since the person who writes these lines isn't very talented on writing English ;-D.
Author's Response: Thank you. I love the plot myself and thought that it was a little quick at the end, but it helps move the story along so I don't drag on. And bore you... Anyway, thank you so much for reviewing.
Your Syltherin POV is well-written. Keep it. My eyes will be on your next chapter ;-D. By the way, I don't think that Snape could tell the whole school about Lupin. Dumbledore should've warned him.
Sorry, I forgot to give a rating. Here my judge: 5 stars
One of the best stories I have ever read here. Desciribtions are fabulous; Snape is well-drawn. To me, writing Snape in romance is a risky play.. I'm amazed.. I've been seeing your main fict, Daughter of Light, and intended to read but then give up, because I'm not available for longtime screen reading; After reading this I'll start. Two days per chapter maybe, but I'll read them.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Fuzzyink! I agree, Snape and romance is dodgy ground... but he insisted upoun it. LOL Hope you like HPDL as much as you did this one.
Neat format.. It just fits with Voldemort. Why did you keep it that short? I know, writing about him is difficult, but you coped with it well. It would be wonderful if you wrote deeper on emotions. I'm adding this to faves and waiting for longer works.
Nevile and Snape had made good partners here, and this partnership got even stronger with the news Mr.Malfoy brought them:)) It's very wise to let Snape mourn for poor Potter. Cows with bells, flowers.. I liked your 'stay in character' humour. Of course we owe this story to the potion trick. I really wonder, was it a Truth Potion or Babbling Beverage;)
I haven't given out a laughter, reading this story, but it made me smile widely, and the joke about his virginity cheered up a friend who is having bad time lately.
“Tragedy, really, what happened.” -- 10 pts.
It's hilarious. I'm looking forward to next chapter. All was really good and I gave out a loud laughter when I read the last one. I wasn't prepared to hear from 'Cat - Lover'. 10/10
Author's Response: Yay!! Glad I made you laugh out loud!! Thanks for the 10!!
Which one was the best? hmm.. I cannot choose one to another. Snape's letter was a bit OOC, I think. He won't repeat the word 'please' that much. But, of course, it's humor... so,that's all right, you're not in trouble ;) 'Misinterpreted' guy is Bloody Baron, isn't it? I just wanted to make sure. (10/10)
Author's Response: Yeah, sorry about Snape, I promise he'll be totally in character in Chapter 5. Maybe he'd just had a bit too much firewhiskey, and was all, 'where is my life going?!'?! I've got to say, you guys are really good guessers!!(so, yes! it was from the bloody baron!) Thanks for the 10!!
It's been my favorite chapter of the story. *lol*
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
I admit I was close to cry reading your story.
I needed a few days passed on to write a review.
It worths the time spent on, both writing it and reading...
The action is marvellous... I liked the fact Hermione's father is involved
in fighting and her mother... It's very original for a Muggle to try 'fake magic'.
I thought it's baby Hermione's magic powers that rebound Bellatrix's curse, but your touch to
'love' is... so wonderful. Isn't it all that HP series about? But it was Longbottoms that made my eyes wet. Mr 'Inner Eye' saw
Ron's future role, right? What about Hermione? Did he see hers too? I give you a 10/10.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's very, very nice to hear that someone took the time to read it (it was a bit long for a one-shot, I know) and enjoyed it so much.
I've always thought that Hermione's parents deserve a little attention. Even if they are Muggle dentists, a girl as honorable and brilliant as Hermione must have come from excellent parents. I wanted to show a combination of pure love, raw courage and simple cleverness that could be a match for even powerful magic.
And I'm so glad you loved the Longbottoms :) It made me happy to write them.
As for Tirsus Trelawney's prophecy, he didn't actually SEE Ron's involvement or Hermione's: all he saw was that he killed them both, and Voldemort prevailed. He didn't know the reason, but yes, it was simply that no matter how great Harry Potter would someday become, without his two most loyal friends he could never succeed. Trelawney and Lestrange only focused on the Weasleys at first because they underestimated the Grangers.
Thanks again for the review! I've got to run right now, but I'll read your story as soon as I get a chance.