Very good. Wonderful imagery. I really liked "The water surprisingly/calm and placid, as though no/ creature dare disturb the surface." It describes the surface of the lake well. Again, wonderful imagery. I loved the last stanza to.
~KitKat


Author's Response: Thank you so much! I\'m glad you enjoyed the imagery. That is what this poem really focuses around. That is one of my favorite stanzas, like all the creatures are either scared or dead. Thanks for reviewing!

capella_black,

Great story! I enjoyed reading it and I have a few things to say.

Thing numbeer 1: I like the idea of Sirius questioning Lily on James's behalf. It seem like something he would do.

Thing number 2: I also like Roger, although I thought it was kind of rude of him to ditch Lily when he saw his friend. It was very abrupt.

Thing number 3: I would like to see more about Lily 's friends. What are they like? Will she tell them about her little crush on Roger?

And finally, Thing number 4: Poor James! The love of his life is on a date with another man, well. . .sort of.

Again, great story. Oh, and update soon please!

~KitKat

Author's Response: 1. Sirius is a good friend. And he think anybody but James is a lowlife idiot who doesn\'t deserve Miss Evans. 2. Yeah, what was up with that?? 3. They\'ll find out at some point. I\'ve sort of been sacrificing their character development to spend more time on the Marauders though, as you\'ll see in upcoming chapters. 4. It\'s rough on him, but he\'s gotta deflate his head a bit before he has a chance. Thanks for reviewing!! I\'ll try to get the next chapter up tonight. It\'s \"Snape\'s Worst Memory\" hehehe...

Awww. . .this was very cute! I loved it!
~KitKat

Author's Response: Thanks!

for that would be bad, b) I just heard my mom tell the person she is talking to on the phone that I am doing my homework and I don't wish to make a liar out of her, and c) my sister is doing her homework and I refuse to let her show me up by being a better student. Therefore (doesn’t that word make this sound so much smarter?), I will finish this quickly. I love this story so far and am looking forward to reading the next chapter almost as much as I am looking forward to the day when my teachers will say, "I don't think you should have any homework tonight because you deserve a night off.” (This will probably never happen, unlike the next chapter). Oh, right, I'm supposed to be finishing quickly so, great story, great chapter, keep up the good work, people really do use the words good and great too much in reviews (at least in my opinion), and teachers are evil and give too much homework.
~KitKat
P.S. Sorry to complain about my homework in your review. I promise not to do it again. I love this story. Okay, I’m going to make myself stop now. GET AWAY FROM THE COMPUTER SELF!

Author's Response: Lol!! I know how you feel... I just joined the procrastinators club on the forum... :D And yes, teachers are evil!! Thanks for the review, though! I\'m glad you like the story so far!

This is so, so funny. I love it! I feel sorry for Owen Hargreaves. The notice from the Berlin newspaper was really good, too! You did a good job of writing Fleur, too. I find that some author's don't do the accent well, but you did a good job.
~KitKat

Author's Response: Thanks for your review! I\'m glad you enjoyed the story. You have to thank my beta for the idea with Fleur\'s accent - my opinion was that after being married to Bill for such a long time, she\'d lose it. Though, as you\'ve seen, my beta convinced me to put it in ;-)

Very funny. You mad me smile again, despite the huge amount of homework that awaits me in the misleadingly innocent looking book bag in the corner of the room. Anyway, I laughed aloud at the bird, plane, superman part and my sister looked at me funny, again. She probably thinks I'm in insane. Oh well. Maybe that will make her afraid to bother me. Probably not. So, back to reviewing your story, congratulations on writing another great chapter. I can't wait to read chapter 3!
~KitKat


Author's Response: Well, despite the imminent threat of homework, lurking, I\'m grateful that you slipped a review in first. ^^ I can\'t wait to /post/ chapter three, either - I\'m insanely excited about what is to come. Yup, so cheers again, and good luck with the homework!

I really like this story. I was not expecting the bucket over the door trick. It surprised me just as much as it did Lily. I liked the first chapter too. Doing magic in front of a muggle seems like it could very well be one of the many idiotic things James Potter most likely did. I'm looking forward to the next chapter!
~KitKat

Author's Response: I\'m so glad you liked it! I wasn\'t sure how the bucket trick would be accepted by readers, because it\'s a little amatuerish, but I figured it\'s only their first year, y\'know, so they couldn\'t have been prank masters yet. :)

I loved it! The scene in the paint store was cute. The detail in the scene was great. I wonder who comes up with all the strange names for paint colors (like "straw", my mother spent two weeks trying to convince me to paint my room "straw"). I really like the way all of the chapter titles have an aunt or uncle's name in them. Is Harry ever going to return? He better come back and make everything right. I cannot wait to read what happens next! Tootles!
~KitKat

Author's Response: Thank you for such a wonderful review! Yeah, when picking out paint for my sister\'s apartment there was no \'peach\' or \'blue\' but all sorts of funny names, so I thought I\'d put a few of them in the story. . . .

I loved it. I couldn't stop smiling when Harry was hugging all of his children and everyone was so happy they were crying. It was such a great scene and I'm so glad Harry is back. Now they just have to kick Dick out and, well, figure everything else out. Oh, have I ever mentioned that I love how you're writing from Harry's daughter's point of view? Because I do. I'm sure this will get me through the holidays. It's a great chapter so I'll be happy to re-read it a few times.
~KitKat

Author's Response: Thank you for such a wonderful review! I think making it from Lily\'s POV adds a fresh perspective to the Harry Potter universe. It\'s still about Harry/Ginny, but not as told by them. I\'m glad you liked this chapter, have a happy Christmas!

Evil cliffhanger. Well, at least Harry's back. Now he can get Dick to leave and get Ginny and the rest of the Weasleys to forgive him and all will be well. Hopefully. Luna is so different! I like that the characters have all changed over the years and that you pointed out those changes. I knew Harry was the stag! Um . . . I wanted to say something else, but I don't remember what it was. Oh well. Tootles!
~KitKat

Author's Response: I know, I know, I really should try and avoid those evil cliffhangers -- I just love them so much! It\'s addicting, I tell you! But what\'s this about the Weasleys forgiving Harry? What about Harry forgiving Ginny. . . . And don\'t worry, I too often forget things. Perfectly healthy I tell you. What were we talking about?