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My stories:
On Broken Wings
A Charlie/Hermione romance.
At the End Comes the Beginning
A poem about the journey to the Afterlife.
Our Legacy
A four founders tale.
Broken
Will Alice ever recover her sanity?
Myth and Mystery
Alice is swept into a hair-raising adventure.
Flight, Fright, and Fight
Narcissa must learn to fight for her identity.
Beautiful! What a Christmas treasure.
Pax.
You deserved 1st place for this story. Thank you for giving fan fiction readers who appreciate quality a truly excellent escape into Remus-land. Hats off for Oblivious.
The chapters you said were the hardest to write are my favorites! The last dialogue between Remus and Kane is a piece of work that any author fan-fic author would be proud of. Bravo!
There is so much more I would say, but it would be repetitive. You are a master among mere mortals! :-)
Pax.
You are a very good writer, and I think you wrote a very good story. I'm sorry to hear about the hacking incident, that was really a nasty thing to do. I am a firm believer in adoption because I'm adopted myself and have a beautiful loving family. But just because I think abortion isn't right dosn't make it ok to do something ugly like that. I guess what I'm trying to say is please don't think that all people who don't consider abortion an option are haters. Anyway, the story really touched me-- I loved the epilogue especially because it showed them, wounds healed, sharing a lovely life together. The humor, sorrow, and emotions of the characters made this fic a fun, moving read. You have talent-- run with it!
Helloooo! ....and thanks for the fun story. I loved the detail-y little bits like Fannywhacke's jowls and Snape's transfigured trophies. Spot on and highly enjoyable. Please write more stories in this style!
Huggles,
~Fauna
Ohhhh, please update! You are horrible with the cliffies sparx. I need to feed on this fic!
Pax.
Yay! Yay! Yay! You updated! You're awesome!
I'm so glad your keeping up with this story, thank you. It is the best humor fic, bar none, that I've come across on this site.
I liked this chapter, but it did seem like more of a transition chapter then anything else. Don't get me wrong, that doesn't have to be a bad thing, but I hope you've got some of your outrageous humor up your sleeve for the coming dance (another way-cool food fight maybe? just kidding.) There were a few funny lines in this chapter, but it wasn't as packed with laughs as usual.
I still love your stuff, keep it coming yo! This is one faithful reader who is still going nowhere, nohow, noway. Your story ROCKS!
Pax.
Oh my gosh, this was such an awesome fiction! I laughed so hard I got stitches! I was just randomly browsing the titles list (starting with Z and going to A) and this one caught my eye—very catchy, funny-right-off-the-bat kind of title, I might add— so I started reading. Wow. It was hysterically funny, no… legendarily funny, no… heck, I don’t know, but dang, it was funny! I kept getting this goofy happy grin whenever I got to the bottom of a page and saw there was still a little next button (I almost cried when I really did finish the last chapter you have posted.)
Now, to list off the reasons why I thought the fiction was so funny. 1.) You have an awesome imagination (stuff like the names Aviary and Owlery, Nina the broom packed next to the wand and getting a personality, I could keep going but I’ll just put a little ‘etc.’ and move on to #2) 2.) Your characters are super. Many humor fics don’t manage to make their characters, well, characters. You did. Everyone has a serious side, which improves the story immensely because it makes the funny parts twice as good. I love these guys so much already! Marti and Zinny are my favorites (I hope things start looking up for poor Zinny soon.) 3.) You make dear old Hogwarts feel just like it should. I admit I’m still having trouble adjusting to the trio and co being teachers; doesn’t seem to fit exactly because I never really thought about it that way. No problem though. 4.) The food fights!!! Yay! I love food fights. I’ve been in my fair share of ‘em. I’m dating a guy who doused another friend of mine in milk after she doused him in pepsi shortly after launching whipping cream at a third friend… ahhh…*floats off into a nostalgic dream* 5.) You rock because you wrote such a good story. 6.) You’re totally cool because you make me laugh till I cry. 7.)… I think I’m getting side-tracked…
Ok, now that I’ve gushed like a melting glacier I’d like to offer a little bit of CC. Since you’ve chosen to pretty much write in first person and switch between characters (which, BTW, is probably my number 8 reason why I love this fic—so original) try to avoid leaving your reader in the dark about whose thoughts we’re seeing. There is a temptation to use this tactic for effect, but it usually just annoys the reader. Ex.: during the seen where Marti is practicing her violin in the paddock it took forever to figure out who had followed her. I had finally convinced myself it was Zinny before we found out it was Andran. (I know I’m being picky…) Along the same lines, you might want to go back and look at the scene in chapter 1 when Andran shares the train compartment with Marti. There is a very confusing exchange of dialogue between them. I read it like three times but I still can’t figure out what is going on. Anyway, I love your style, but just be careful since there are so many more occasions to confuse your readers when you write in first person and switch between characters.
Sorry about the huge review. Hope it doesn’t scare you (I get the impression you’re not that type, but I thought I’d just apologize in advance just in case.) Please, please, please keep updating this story as fast as is humanly possible. No pressure… exactly. Well, maybe a tiny bit. I can’t wait to see what comes next! This story is definitely going in my favorites and I’m off now to see if you’ve written anything else. Cheers!
Pax from your friendly neighborhood animal-lover.
First of all, wonderful start! I’m looking forward to seeing where this story will go. The first chapter had zip and verve. I liked the fact that Hermione’s Achilles heel here was the library. Nicely ironic. Are we going to find out why she was out after hours in the Restricted Section? What is the nature of the room she stumbled into accidentally? Sounds intriguing.
Chapter two was a bit rough around the edges, as you mentioned in the authors note. It still had nice punch, and kept the reader interested. I liked the little touches (such as Tom’s ‘dentist-poster-boy-teeth’ and the ‘familiar blond ferret.’) One thing I noticed is that Professor Dumbledore calls her ‘Ms. Granger’ before she has corrected the misconception that her name is ‘Gran-.’ Two lines later he calls her as ‘Miss Gran-.’ Was that intentional?
I was a little more then surprised when Dumbledore appointed her head girl. It didn’t make any sense. She dropped out of the blue today and might be gone tomorrow for all he knows, right? Or does he actually know who she is? It seems like he knows something mysterious that nobody else does, but what is it? I’m dying to know.
Anyway, I like your story. Bravo! Please keep updating.
Pax.
LOL
That was awesome. Lemon iced strawberry cake, singed tail feathers, and Snape's secret love for his 'jet-back' persona--- superb! More, more, more, please! I like your comedy, and your serious stuff is great too. How about another long and lovely Snape-y fic? Pretty-please with all the fantabulous trimmings? I promise to r&r faithfully if you do. :-)
~Fauna
p.s. review coming for Squidbait soon.
Still reading, and thrilled that you are back!!!
Great chapter, although I am confused by some of the transitions. That's probably because I haven't read this in so long. I'll have to go back and brush up on the details.
I've loved this story (and your others too) from the beginning. Its great to have you back, Ny!
Any chance this will be updated soon? I't been ages, Ny.
As I've said before this story is fantastic. But you did choose such a place to stop updating! I realize RL can come between you and your writing, but I can't help being selfish...
Unless you start updating soon we just might have to get the villagers together and head for the town square.
*hugs*
~Fauna
The 'featured story' list is a wonderful thing. I read your story in one sitting. I am deeply impressed by your work. Your imagination has taken AU to a completely different level. There can really be only one word to describe it-- cool, way cool. I love how you mix the familiar and the unexpected. Nothing short of brilliant. Everyone's characters have been affected by the circumstances they have grown up in. Harry is so different, yet so hauntingly familiar. (btw, does he still have the saving-people-thing?) This story is so innovative!
I'm currently dying to know what Tom Riddle's role is. The ultimate bad guy of the original series is not the head honcho this time around, but is he still pretty much evil personified? Ok, ok, I know, I'll have to wait for your story. I'm just horribly curious.
The plot of this story is so wonderfully intricate. You have a dozen side stories going, but they are all fascinating. Bravo on the juggling skills.
It has been ages since you have updated. Any chance of getting more of this awesome story up soon? Pretty, pretty please?
Pax.
Author's Response: I\'m so happy that you found my fic and that you enjoyed it. You have picked it up at an opportune moment as I am writing and have 2.5 chatpers done. One at beta and two still changing around on my harddrive.
Riddle gets a good bit of play and explanation in chapter 17, the chapter after next. He has a good 3 pages of him with Salazar and then speculating to himself. His role should be significantly clearer after chapter 17.
Juggling is my specialty!
Update is immenent!
Thanks for the lovely review. :)
This chapter was excellent. It did not feel the least bit hollow to me, in fact I was rather surprised when I saw your comment at the end. I thought you outdid yourself this time around. It is very hard to transition from one part of the story to another. Bravo.
I don't want to lose sight of George and Fred. That is my only personal comment over all.
I eagerly await the next update. Thank you for this latest long one!
Pax.
Author's Response: Well, I hope you enjoyed the check in with Fred and George in the latest chapter. Many thanks for the review! :)
Thank goodness you are back! I've really missed your phenomenal story.
This chapter really captured the spirit you mentioned in your author's note-- reunions/prequel to more reunions. I thought it had just the right pace, contained interesting new events, and had the one or two essential touches of humor that round out a chapter (I'm thinking about Remus and Nyt in the cupboard.)
The 'excerpt' at the beginning of the chapter is very intriguing. Turpin's nominal heir could add a very interesting twist to the story if/when he or she makes an appearance.
I can't wait to see where you are going with the many and intricate threads of this story. So far I have been deeply impressed by your ability to tell a superb, fascinating AU story... but even more impressive is that you have included every single character in your story. You've tackled a simply massive challenge! That many characters... that many plot lines... that many places/things to keep track of... golly, I don't know how you manage. But you do, and you do it really well.
Bravo once more, and best of luck writing those tough chapters. This reader really appreciates your hard work.
~Fauna
Author's Response: Many thanks :)
That was phenomenal. Bravo to the tenth power! We waited a long time for this chapter, but it was such a good one I can almost find it in my heart to forgive you (just kidding.) Please don't rush your work, but please update frequently if you can. I love this story. It is, without a doubt, one of my three favorites on this site-- and I've read quite a few. AU is hard to find... good AU is almost impossible. Every chapter you have written is incredible.
I really want to know what is happening to Lupin, James & Lily, etc. The only thing I find a wee bit difficult when reading your story is the wide number of threads one must keep track of. Quick updates really help here...
Bravo again!
Pax.
Author's Response: Thanks for the kind review :) And the next chapter is already at beta. So :D
Quote from HBP:
"Draco, Draco, you are not a killer... Killing is not nearly as easy as the innocent believe..."-- Dumbledore
I do not think that Draco has killed anyone yet, although we have yet to see what book 7 holds in store for him. Dumbledore thinks Draco is 'innocent' of murder, and although Dumbledore is not infallible is am inclined to agree with him on this one. This is just my interpretation of the text, and you are, of course, entitled to your own. This is, after all, fan fiction, and it can even be AU if you choose. But, all that aside, I think this one-shot was well written, and showed Draco in an interesting light. Your writing style is very restrained, and by that I mean you truly master the art of saying everything in a few well-chosen words. Reading fan fiction means reading stories that range from wordy and verbose to boringly plain and colorless. Your work is a perfect mean between the two.
Bravo!
Pax.
Bravo! Too short, but otherwise I liked this chapter. Please keep updating. Your story is thoughtful and well written-- and those come few and far between.
Pax and Happy Christmas!
Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review. I\'m glad you are enjoying the story.
Well done! You have a great start here. I read a lot of RL/NT fics and all but a few seem nearly exactly the same. Your story stands out. You have a signature author style. Most authors would be terrified of making Tonks snore (not very glamorous) but you put it in. Touches like that make characters human and unique. Please keep it up. Awesome work for a first fic! (Or are you posted anywhere else?)
Happy Christmas!
Pax.
Oh good job! I really enjoyed this. You write really well, and don't let anyone tell you otherwise. I love tender little moments between R/H or H/G, and you made this romantic without being sappy. The serious aspects of their friendship come through and that pulls it all together. Their love has real basis, its not a stupid lust-fest. Keep writting. Pax.
Bravo, bravo, bravo! I am enjoying this story so much. You write beautifully, and have an original touch. Please keep updating this story frequently.
I have a few 'polishing' suggestions, for lack of a better term. Look back to the chapter when Tonks sees Remus as a transformed werewolfe. You wrote that Sirius put an imperturbable charm on the door and after that point you switch back and forth between this meaning that the people outside can/cannot hear Lupin's growls, ect. Example; Sirius hears his howls of pain, Tonks hears him breathing/smashing furniture... then you say that Tonks is creeped out because she can see Lupin snarling at her but can't hear him doing it. See what I mean? Also there is a place where Lupin is thinking about Tonks and you say, "he wondered idly he wondered how many opponents had underestimated her." Might want to take out the extra 'he wondered.' There are a few more little things like that you might want to check for, but I can't seem to remember any more right now (after all it's three o'clock in the morning... good fan fiction is not a remedy for insomnia, hehe!)
I loved this story, thanks again and again for the entertainment. Plot work, character development, the play of emotions-- all excellent. Please keep writing this one, or I might need to hunt you down and cast the irreversible hex of the hesitant author on you. I don't know if having your fingers stuck to a keyboard is pleasant...
Pax.
Author's Response: Ah, dang it! The problem with getting impatient and posting your own work before a beta sees it is pretty obvious...grr. Okay, thanks, and I\'ll fix the extra \"he wondered\". I\'ll also take a look at and figure out the sound/sight difficulties. Thank you again for your comments. They really do help me keep going!