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Safe Haven by NikkiSue

Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: After a conflicting life as the son of a famous and feared Death Eater, Draco Malfoy has turned spy for the Order. After things go awry, his emergency portkey transports him to his Safe House which turns out to be quite the surprise! New bonds are formed and romance is in bloom. This all goes to show that war indeed brings out the best in people — and the worst.
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 08/05/12 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5 - You Have My Attention

Ah, so this is the summer of fifth year. Harry’s starting to let his hatred of Bella show.

Oh yes, Draco’s a great spy. Let’s just refuse the Dark Mark and spit on Voldy’s favorite servant. That won’t draw attention to me at all. I love how smart these characters can be sometimes.

Awww, more adorable bickering. The shower thing was cute. Poor Draco. I’d have expected him to toss a pillow or something.

I’m a little surprised by how Hermione is turning out. She’s usually more mature than the other kids, but she seems worse in this. Her feelings her hurt at everything, even Harry! I think her character could use a little tweaking. But the boys are pretty much flawless.



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 02/02/07 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Building Bridges

Cute. Although, Hermione seemed to recover from the Dark Mark rather quickly.


I liked the line about Lucius being clumsy. I can't imagine it, but I found it rather funny.


Very good chapter. :D



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 08/06/12 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6 - Go Take A Walk, Hermione . . . NOW.

Well, well.

Interesting chapter. Our little Draco is getting a bit protective of his new friends. That’s nice. They’re going to be a force to be reckoned with as a group before long. I love watching these friendships develop.

I’m surprised by the amount of restraint Harry and Draco are showing in this chapter. At this stage in the books, neither of them seemed at all capable of that. The fact that they had Lucius and Bellatrix unaware and did nothing is a bit unbelievable. Very smart, but possibly too smart for pissed off Harry and Draco.

By the way, are Lucius and Bella an item in this story? They seem eerily close in this. You know, long ago I shipped them. Around book five, I think. Before we really got to meet Narcissa. Speaking of which, I’m still mad you.

And I see you’ve decided to bring Ron into the story. Too bad. I was really enjoying the lack of Ron. He’s going to be a total asshat.



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 06/02/07 Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 - Getting Reaquainted

Another chapter of Safe Haven. :D Somehow, I really managed to become addicted to this fic. I love the way you write Draco. He seems so normal and human. There aren’t many fics out there that can portray him that way and still seem realistic. So good for you.


I also love the way you write the kids as a group. It’s so nice to see that they can all come around and become friends. A short time ago, Draco was the enemy—especially to Ron. I don’t see Ron as the forgiving sort, so it’s really refreshing to see him behave in such a mature manner towards Draco.


The part where Hermione was interrupted by Mrs. Weasley in the bathtub was cute as well. I liked how she thought it was Ron who would be inconsiderate enough to interrupt her, but then when she realized that it was his mother, she didn’t even consider it rude. I am really starting to wonder which of these boys you are planning to pair her with during this story.


Mrs. Weasley marvelled silently to herself about how handsome the boy could be when he wasn’t busy terrorizing other people.


I loved this line. It describes Draco so well. I’m sure when he’s with his parents, he’s very sweet, but at Hogwarts we always see him acting like a jerk.


One note on this quote though, marvelled is spelled wrong. It should be marveled.


I have a few other minor nitpicks as well :


He went to his favourite spot by the window in the study and sat next to the window gazing aimlessly out the window.


I would consider revising this sentence. You have used the word window three times and it sounds a bit awkward. Maybe something like: He sat in his favorite spot by the window in the study, gazing aimlessly outside.


She pictured


This sentence ends here. I think you continued the sentence in the next paragraph, so this is probably just a spacing error.


Anyway, I enjoyed the chapter and I am enjoying the story as a whole. Good work, and I’ll be looking forward to the next chapter.


Author's Response: *smacks forehead* OMS, I can\'t believe I missed those... Your reviews are always welcomed, Elle. Thank you for taking time out to be so nice and such. You brightened my day (and my inbox) when I hear what you have to say about my work. You excel in being gentle but to the point. Thank you! *huggles* ~Nicole



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 08/07/12 Title: Chapter 7: Chapter 7 - Building Bridges

Oh God, Hermione. Death Eaters invaded my house, they might be after my parents, and I left Draco and Harry alone with them, but how are you Ron? Anything wrong? I am so laughing right now. This actually reminds me of the DH movie when they Apparate from the wedding and nearly get run over and Hermione’s upset cause they didn’t get to have Harry’s birthday cake. I love Hermione, but she has the worst perspective sometimes.

S’mores and puppy dog eyes. God Draco is adorable. And Ron is an asshat. Excellent characterization of him, by the way.

Author's Response: All right, I am replying to them in a clump if you don't mind. I knew there were characterization issues which kind of fueled my need for a rewrite. You have been finding them and bringing them to my attention. THANK YOU. I just remember writing this thinking how I wish they could all just be friends, hehe! There has to be a way to do that and keep it relatively canon, right?



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 08/09/12 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Finishing Touches

Why do I find these characters so darn cute in this? Really they’re just adorable. Even when they’re being idiots. Ron is still an asshat, but he’s annoying me less than usual so kudos to you.

I don’t have too much to say about this chapter. I enjoyed it. Made me smile a few times.

Honestly, I have no idea what I’ve written in these reviews thus far. I’m glad some of my comments have been helpful, but I really just keeping word open as I read and jotting down my impressions. This isn’t how I generally write reviews, but I know you’re doing a re-write so I’m doing things a little differently. And it’s kind of fun to write random observations. :)



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 03/24/07 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Organized Chaos

Nice, Nicole.


I love the developing friendship between Draco and Ron. I never thought that I would see that and be able to believe it, but you handled it very well.


I also liked Draco's very Malfoy sounding speech to the Grangers. It's cute because no matter how much he may hate it, he will always be a Malfoy.


I really enjoyed this chapter. I think it was one of your best. Keep up the good work.


*huggles*



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 08/14/12 Title: Chapter 9: Chapter 9 - Organized Chaos

The Malfoy charm, eh? Haha. It takes a saint to deal with Draco, and no one should have to deal with both him and Ron. Well, that’s actually not a bad point, but Draco’s been very well behaved, for once.

Draco’s calling Weasley Ron, and Ron’s calling Draco mate? Seriously? I gotta say that happened a little fast.

I’m also not loving Bella’s part here, and no this isn’t Bella. She’s evil. I get it. It’s just awkward. There’s more explanation than there needs to be about blood status. Anyone obsessed enough with HP to be reading fanfiction knows that stuff. And for some reason, her voice seems very childish rather than insane.

I am so anxious to see Draco take Lucius on. Not that I can explain why since I love both characters. I just know what Lucius did in this fic and that really upsets me… P.S. Still kinda mad about that. :p



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 02/22/07 Title: Chapter 8: Chapter 8 - Finishing Touches

Yay, Nikki! They're so cute. I always liked the idea of Draco getting along with trio. You write them together well. Good job.

Author's Response: Whew. I got the e-mail alert about having anew review and I was worried about getting my first flame! Thank you for making my night. I\'m updating as quickly as I can without risking poor quality fiction. I value your imput! ~Nicole



The Impure Pureblood by AlexisTaylor

Rated: Professors •
Summary: A bit of a ghastly tale about when Lucius and Narcissa first became an item. A story that investigates the inside of Pureblood mania.
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 09/17/06 Title: Chapter 1: One Shot

Yay! Your story is back. I always loved this. I was really disappointed when it disappeared from my favorites list. Anyway, this story is really great. It's a very chilling look at the inner workings of pureblood society. Very well done.:D



The Dark Lord's Blog by Schmerg_The_Impaler

Rated: 1st-2nd Years • Past Featured Story
Summary: What does Lord Voldemort do in his spare time? Well, that's an excellent question. Who would have known that the Dark Lord has a blog? (He also has a loyal following of readers, most of whom are Death Eaters and who post their comments.) Voldemort dispenses advice on everything from murder methods to germ protection to Power Rangers to shoes, and gives an account of the life of an evil overlord. But is he posting too much personal information online? And will Harry read it and find out more about the Dark Lord than Voldemort ever intended? Read and see.


WARNING: Extremely OOC behaviour from almost all.


RUNNER-UP in the 2007 Quicksilver Quills Awards for Best Humour fic! Also nominated like 21 times, because apparently my readers are as insane as I am!


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 12/04/06 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter 6: I Sold My Soul on eBay

HA! I absolutly loved it! This was a great ending. At first I thought of Dudley as blondeD, but Harry stealing it never occured to me.


As for Bella, *HUGGLES, HUGGLES, and more HUGGLES* That was wonderful. I loved it. I actually considered that for R.A.B, in a much more serious light though. It would certainly be interesting. Again, *huggles*. Thank you for not making her evil and stupid, in the end. :D


I am now done babbling, but seriously, this was really well done. It kept me laughing through every chapter. :D

Author's Response: Yeah, I actually had a dream that R.A.B. was Rodolphus and Bellatrix, and I just went, \"DUDE. I have to put that in my story!\" I was afraid you\'d go, \"WHAT?! But she can\'t be good! You\'ve killed Her character!



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 10/03/06 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2: A Selected List of Imbeciles

Very nice. Very nice. I absolutly adore this. But I still feel bad for Bella because you pick on her spelling and grammar skills. :(

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment! As for Bella... she has quite an interesting part later in the story. If you\'re a Bella fan, you\'ll either love it or hate it. (And no, it\'s NOT romance.)



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 11/04/06 Title: Chapter 4: Chapter 4: Fan Mail

Oh, how cute. But poor Voldie just keeps getting shot down, and Bella wasn't even there this round to hit on him. :( *misses Bella*

Author's Response: Don\'t worry, Bella will definitely be back later in the story! And there will be more comments in future chapters. Voldy, by the way, was not at all insulted by the letters in this chapter. His ego is too large to be harmed by petty mortal\'s disses. So don\'t you worry about him.



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 09/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Don't Try This At Home

HA! I loved it. This was amazing. I don't read a lot of humor, but I couldn't resist Voldie's blog and I was not disappointed. I loved your e-Crucios, that cracked me up.


And, poor Bella. I'm sure she can spell much better that that.


Anyway, this is going in my favorites, right now. :D

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! I can\'t believe I\'ve been favourited after one day! :o I got the idea for e-Crucios from proboards websites, where you can \'exalt\' or \'smite\' someone. And I thought, if Voldemort had a site, the buttons would be \'rewarded beyond imagination\' and \'e-Crucio.\'



Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 11/17/06 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter 5: The Plot Sickens (Or: Not-Fan Mail)

Only one more chapter! :( That's so sad. I have really enjoyed following this. But I am dying to know who blondeD is. *ponders*

Author's Response: Thank you! You shall see who blondeD is!



Prying Eyes by nysuperstarz

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Ginny is dead. This is a poem in Harry's point of veiw expressing his feelings about Ginny's death.
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 10/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Prying Eye's

Hey Roop!


Poor Harry. I really liked your poem. I think you nailed his feelings pretty good. If he were in that situation he would probably want to be left alone.

Author's Response: Hi Elle, I\'m glad you liked it, and thanks!



Draco's Trick-or-Treat by Schmerg_The_Impaler

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Three-year-old Draco goes trick-or-treating for the first time. His mother takes the opportunity to teach him some lessons and Malfoy family values that she believes will be important to her son later in life. This depiction of Draco is VASTLY different from the version of him that I write in "The Dark Lord's Blog."

Ridiculously short one-shot.


Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 10/29/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter One and Only!

Awww...that was cute, well until he slammed the door in the poor girl's face. But I really liked it. It was a nice bonding experience between Narcissa and Draco.

Author's Response: Why thank you! This is my first one-shot, so I\'m happy that it\'s being treated kindly!



Strangers by crazy_purple_hp_freak

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: A poem about Tom Riddle Snr and Merope Gaunt. He knew her...but did he ever love her?
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 04/02/07 Title: Chapter 1: Strangers

Nice, Suzie. This really captures Tom's feelings well. I like how he realized that something was off and he didn't really know the woman he was with. This is one of the stranger relationships in the fandom and it is always interesting to read about. :D

Author's Response: *giggles* Thanks Elle! I love writing about Tom and Merope - we know so little about what they were like, so it\'s nice to speculate sometimes! Thanks for reviewing! ~Suzie



The Ones Who Cannot Speak by Bane of Severus

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: This poem is meant to convey a feeling of simultaneous realism and resilience about the war and fallen comrades. Please read and review.
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 11/03/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Eerie. I really loved it though. I hate to think of the people dying in the war and then being forgotten, or thought of as weak. This was really well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I don\'t like to think of it either, but it does happen sometimes. Ideally, they would be remembered in the annals of history; however, all too often time fades perspective. This is a theme that I will focus on in some of my future posts: Idealism vs. Realism.



The Ballad of Lucius Malfoy: An Unappealing Appeal by Schmerg_The_Impaler

Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Lucius Malfoy's appealing to the Wizengamot after being caught in the Department of Mysteries, trying to convince them that he's not evil.

Quite silly, really.
Reviewer: Sly Severus Signed
Date: 11/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: Lucius's Excuses-es

Haha! Poor Lucius. That was very cute. Very OOC, but very cute. I enjoyed it. :D

Author's Response: Thank you... and if you think THIS portrayal of Lucius is OOC, I don\'t want to hear what you thought of him in \"The Dark Lord\'s Blog!\"