AHHH! Poor Bella. *sniff* That was really good. I could cry right now, of course I absolutly love Bella. That was so cruel. My poor Bella. :'(


Okay, I'm done ranting now. Your story was really great though. It was very well written. The dripping added to it nicely. Congrats!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! This is my very first attempt at the Dark/Angsty category, so I\'m glad to get that reaction out of you. Not that I like making people cry or anything, but... you know what I mean.

So the story is started. I couldn't resist looking.


It's a nice beginning. I like the introduction to Lucius. Was he using the Crucio curse on Jen, by the way? And one thing that confused me, Anna thought there was a family resemblence between Jen and Lucius, but there really shouldn't be.


Anyway, nice beginning. I'm looking forward to seeing where you decide to take this.

And the suspense builds. I never expected that Draco would be given the impression that Jenny wasn’t really his sister. That could really spruce things up. But how will she find out who she is, if Draco doesn’t know? Interesting, interesting.


I love what you decided to do with Narcissa. I think this is far more canon than the way you were originally leaning. To me, it’s very clear that Narcissa loves Draco, and I can’t imagine her feeling any differently about any other child of hers. You have portrayed her as a loving mother, who lives in fear of her husband. I think that could fit with canon, and it fits perfectly with your story. So again, I think you made a good call with your characterization of Narcissa.


I really do love this fic. It always leaves me with so many questions. I want to know who Jenny’s father is. Does he know about her? And why was Jenny ever brought to Malfoy Manor? I can’t imagine that Lucius would ever want her there. Did he not know that she wasn’t his daughter in the beginning? Anyway, that’s my favorite thing about this story, it always has me thinking and guessing.


The way you write Draco is interesting as well. I can’t really tell how he feels about his mother, but he really doesn’t seem that fond of his father. In the books, I have always had the impression that Draco loved and looked up to his father, but that could have been act. It’s really hard to tell what goes on inside his head. However, I like the softer version of him that you’re writing.


I also want to comment on the flow of this chapter. It was really amazing. Everything felt perfect as I read it. I was hooked from the first sentence all the way through to the end. It’s clear that you are passionate about this story, and that’s what makes a story great.


You have done a really good job on this fic, so far, and I look forward to seeing your future chapters.


Author's Response: Thank you for all the great compliments. It makes me so happy that someone enjoys my story so much.

Whoa! Very powerful.


Poor Andy, is not having a very good Gauntlet run, I'm afraid I had Bella kill her as well. The poor dear. I must admit our set up was even somewhat similar, although I didn't do it til the end of the story. Very interesting. I am anxious to see who you had at the end, although I do have a guess...


Anyway, this was very well done. It gave me chills.

Author's Response: I\'ll try to read your story soon. It seemed natural that Andy may have died because we don\'t see her or hear her mentioned throughout the series.

Author's Response: Sly Severus\'s story is amazing. If you\'ve never sympathized with Bella, you might want to read it. It\'s different than mine, true, because the focus of the fics is different. I took a different view of Narcissa\'s testing than S.S. did of Bella\'s testing, but the story is still very effective. The final test in hers, and the main focus, was Bella\'s transformation to a Death Eater. That\'s not the case with Narcissa\'s testing with the Dark Lord because the final focus is on how Narcissa is snubbed from being allowed into the inner circle which her husband and sister are privalleged to belong.

*is tramatized*


TF! My Bella! *cries*


Wow. I really don't know what to say. This is so far off from anything I have ever written or thought about Bella or Androemda, or even Voldy. There were just too many chances coming from him.


Okay, despite the fact everything I have said so far was negative this was actually really well done. You just have to take into account my little (extermely large and somewhat unhealthy) obsession with Bella. The story flowed really well and you could really relate to Bella as she began to lose her grip with reality. It was absolutly well written. And you really hit emotion in me when I read it, but that also might have something to do with the above mentioned obsession.


Sorry, for the very strange review. I'm still traumatized but *huggles anyway*

Eerie.


Well, I'll have to say this isn't what I thought of when I read about the challenge. It's really original and I really enjoyed it. I liked how you had students calling Voldy "lord" before he even left school.


This was really good. An interesting take on the challenge.

Author's Response: It wasn\'t what I thought of originally when I read the challenge either. :) First I was planning to do a lighter piece that was more in the \'spirit of the holidays\' about Severus. But then I had the inspiration to do something totally different and, well, you can see the result. Glad you enjoyed, thanks for reviewing!

Hehe! Very cute. You write Sirius very well. Of course, we all know that you write Severus excellently, but I'll say it anyway.


I found this very amusing and it demonstrated their maturity levels towards each other perfectly. Well done, as always. :D

Author's Response: Everyone has someone who makes him regress, right? And here it\'s mutual. I\'m glad it amused you! Happy holidays!

*Giggles*


The most interesting take on Frosty the Snowman I have ever read. This was really cute.

Author's Response: Thank you! It\'s very different from what I normally write, but it was really fun to do. :)

I have never read anything like this before. Actually, I have never thought much about what Harry's life was like before Hogwarts. This is a really interesting concept. I also liked how it could play out so true to real life. There are so many children out there who don't get the care they deserve and so many people who do nothing about it. This story was truly amazing.

Author's Response: I\'ve thought quite a lot about Harry\'s life before Hogwarts, although it took me a while to get round to writing this. It really didn\'t seem to add up that no one noticed. I\'m especially glad you think it worked out true to life =) Thank you for the lovely review.

Haha! This was really cute. Good luck with the challenge. :D

Author's Response: thanks so much!