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Date: 09/08/06 Title: None
Excellent sentence structure, but... where's the plot?
Grrr! Fear the harshness!
That Night at Number 12 by Loz
Rated: •Summary: It's safe to say Severus does not get along well with Mundungus, and things are even worse after this encounter at 12 Grimmauld Place. The Order is out, and Severus is alone with Dung. This story was inspired by discussion in the famed and not forgotten "All About Snivellus Snape" threads on Mugglenet's Official Forums - CoSForums.
Date: 09/08/06 Title: Chapter 1: That Night at Number 12
This is well written, but it's weak in plot.
Grrr! Fear the harshness!
The Poetry of Severus Snape by Zetera
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: A poem which contains revelations of a painful past and present. Short and sweet.
Date: 09/05/06 Title: Chapter 1: The Poetry of Severus Snape
Good syntax, excellent end rhyme. Overall a great work.
Author's Response: Thanks a million, I\'m really glad you enjoyed it from a literary standpoint.
Lacrima Serpentis by Insecurity
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: This story is set in the dystopian society of Wizarding England under the control of Voldemort. Fifteen years after leaving Hogwarts, Harry Potter is in hiding; he fears the words of the Prophecy and has lost the will to fight. This story tells the tale of an adult Hermione who sacrifices everything: her family, her moral beliefs and eventually her dignity, in order to save the Wizarding world. She becomes a Death Eater under the recommendation of someone she barely trusts. She struggles to find the courage and strength, but with every choice she makes she gets deeper and deeper into danger.
Chapter 33 is finally up. Thank you for your support and patience..
Date: 06/23/06 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Do not fear the comma! Fear the harshness!
Grrr!
Author's Response: Congratulations - this is the most random review I have ever received!
Date: 06/24/06 Title: Chapter 22: Chapter 22
Ah, those strange canon shippers and their strange ways. I always handwrite; Its not easy to lug around a computer, and I never know where inspiration will strike me, so I carry around bits of paper like a dork. Well, I am a dork, so it fits. ;)
I always thought that Colin would give up the location, but only after much torture. He seemed a character determined to prove his worth. I won't say it's entirely a bad thing though, for all I know Colin isn't actually "Colin", or if he gave it away on purpose, or what. This tale keeps me guessing.
Date: 06/24/06 Title: Chapter 15: Chapter 15
*cough* good *cough*
;)
Author's Response: *giggles* Glad you\'re still reading it.
The Unseemly Proposal by sparx
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •
Summary: The reign of Voldermort comes to an end, and with it ends the prestige and power Lucius Malfoy once had in the Wizarding World. In order to regain the respect of his fellow wizards and to make them believe that he has turned over a new leaf (which he actually hasn't) and has graciously accepted muggles and Mudbloods, Lucius asks Hermione, a Mudblood, to marry his son, Draco, a pure-blood. Obviously, they both refuse, but Lucius isn't going to give up easily. After all, he wants his status back. He still has a few tricks up his sleeve and is determined to play match-maker. What happens next is a series of events that serve only to bring Hermione and Draco closer, both literally and figuratively speaking. Read to find out how this one unseemly proposal causes absolute chaos in their lives! THIS STORY IS NOT HBP and DH COMPATIBLE! Hey all! Check out my personal info for the expected date of the next update. =)
Date: 09/17/06 Title: Chapter 32: Chapter 32- Closer
I just wanted to submit the possibility that Sparx has died in RL. Not to get anyone down... but to work on this story for over a year and suddenly not update for months is out of her character. If she did not have internet access, I would think she would at least get on a friend's or library's computer and give us a head's up, as opposed to leaving us all hanging like this.
Best hopes,
dnd_lady
Date: 10/16/06 Title: The Unseemly Proposal
I thought you'd been hit by a bus or something. :D I'm glad you're OK! Welcome back!
Revelation I:I by Ada Kensington
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: While on the hunt for the Ravenclaw Horcrux, in a secluded glade in the Forbidden Forest, Harry Potter has a chat with Death.
Date: 10/16/06 Title: Chapter 1: Revelation I:I
The imagery, symbolism, and fluidity of the sentences were excellent. I would like to second Pandafan81; Harry up n' leaving seemed off-kilter.
Author's Response: I must confess that\'s more to do with my laziness than anything else... Perhaps if I\'d have given it some thought and hadn\'t written the whole thing in a few hours, then I may have come to the same (better) conclusion. *sigh*
Complicity by RagingStorm71117
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: AU afterthe release of HBP, one-shot ONLY. Given the choice between right and easy, Tonks chooses right... and saves Harry from a horrible fate.
Date: 09/19/06 Title: Chapter 1: Complicity
It seems OOC for the Order to not trust Dumbledore -- not to let him speak, to disrespect him in their tone of voice, threatening him, etc. And why would Neville and Hermione need to be there when Tonks reported the abuse?
Grrr! Fear the harshness! ;)
Author's Response: Well it would certainly have been OOC - if they hadn\'t discovered that Harry was being abused and Dumbledore was the one who placed him in that house. But they did.... so it wasn\'t. As for Neville and Hermione - they didn\'t need to be there. They chose to go to add their own names to the report. The others chose to stay with Harry.
I shall fear no harshness. :P
Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Cheers,
~*~LIZ
Revenge by NickiGrint
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: I look into the confused mind of a young Tom Riddle. Please read and review.
Date: 11/06/06 Title: Chapter 1: Revenge
Very interesting!
There were many unnecessary words that could have been cut out and improved the overall flow of the lyrics. Such as, "but there is" in the second stanza, "and" in the third, the second "things" and "suprisingly" in the fifth, and "just" in the last stanza.
Grr! Fear the harshness!
And happy writing. :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I\'ll fix these. Hope you liked it.
One Hour by SimplyMe
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: ‘She told me I could have anything. I asked her for one hour. One entire hour where she would be completely mine. I only hope no one will ever find out, not even her.’