Hello. :) I'm eighteen years old, but unfortunately I haven't written fan fiction since I was fifteen or sixteen. I'm usually very much inspired by the events happening in my real life, and sometimes it gets woven into what I write. It amuses me greatly that there are certain things I have somehow predicted in my writing without knowing... I've noticed this while re-reading "Questioning Fate" for the first time in years. I find writing very therapeutic and a great creative outlet for me... however, lately I find myself more likely to draw or paint than write something worth showing others.
I hope you enjoy reading my fan fiction. :)
~ Lainie xox ~
Very well-written story. I don't know what else to say but I really liked your portrayal of the twin's relationship and what may be going on at their house away from Hogwarts. It's really interesting to see your take, since I never really thought of it. Great job. :)
Author's Response: I\'m glad you enjoyed my take. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
As I read this, I started recognizing the song! When I read HBP, I thought Harry had the detention after dinner, which was when the Quidditch match took place. No matter though, it's one of those details that might be wrong in my head... plus, you have an artistic liscence... or writing liscense. Back to the point, I really liked your one-shot! It's very sweet and very romantic. It's one of those behind-the-scenes fan fictions that I've been wanting to read (particularly Ron and Hermione, but Harry and Ginny are awesome too, of course). This was very well written, and I really liked how you portrayed each character very accurately. I mainly decided to check out your fan fiction because of your amazing contribution to the Beta Forums (just being the *wonderful* person you are, always being friendly) and also, to thank you for reading and reviewing my own fan fiction. Thanks! 10/10
This sounds like an interesting start to your interesting plot. The summary caught my attention, and I decided to read it. I hope you don't mind some constructive critism though, as it might help you do even better! I think if you added a bit more detail, it would add to the atmosphere of the story. Instead of just saying that Harry and Ron went somewhere, maybe descibe how they did a bit more. Just a sugguestion. One thing I noticed was the dialogue was a bit too simple and somewhat Americanized. I'm glad you captured the characteristics of each character, but I think you could work on it a bit more. It seems a bit exaggerated in how Harry kept getting into trouble with Snape. I know he does do that often, but maybe not the same ways as he did in your fan fiction to be more realistic. Those are just some suggestions for other fan fictions you might write. Please don't get discouraged, I'm just trying to help you. There is always room for improvement!
Author's Response: I totally agree with you, don't worry. I'm happy with your review, and i'll take your points into consideration! I'm glad you read it. I'm also glad you liked it overall *hopefully*
Wow that's so terribly sad!! =( My heart.. feels broken now... aww poor Ron. This fic was beautifully written though! Awesome job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing!
That was so tear-jerking. Wow, I haven't read a powerful story in a while... and with Harry in it. (I've been drowning myself in R/Hr's lately). Omg, I love Harry (as I write "hairy"...). You also made me laugh for a while too in this fic at something completely random, but that's just me being.. me. It was:
"....soft fragrance floating near him.
“That was you?” he said, incredulous."
There is something else that is very special about this fic. It's like how dementors represents fear and inner demons, while Harry's dream in this fic represented how loved ones never leave. I really really like that. :) Great job.
This story is very very sad.
At first I was going to say that it's a bit out-of-character to hear Harry explaining things that happened (like when he's trying to explain how Hermione told him to make sure Ron doesn't go back for her) but I suppose it's because he never really does that in the book so that we have to re-read the whole situation... The part about Mrs. Weasley not knowing that it was Ron and Hermione sounded kind of forced in a way.. but that's just me being very picky.
I really enjoyed the fic so far, though. You're a very good writer. =)
Collective AWWW.
I love Ron and Hermione. Fluffy stories like this make me extremely happy. Nice job. =)
Awww that was so sad!! :( I'm sorry I cant come up with any constructive critism or anything, all I can say is awesome job! :)
Author's Response: Thanks very much - that\'s quite alright. I\'m just pleased you liked it!
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO.. Too bad I scrolled down and my eyes jumped to the last line before I finished reading it all.. Heart breakingly sad. The tears were definitely there. *Moans about the unfairness of the war*.. You wrote this beautifully, it's going up on my favourites. I want to knwo what happens next but I suppose it's supposed to leave us guessing. Very aesome job though, it was highly reccomended underst "sad fics" in the beta forums.
Author's Response: I know, I\'m so sorry! I\'m also sorry that the surprise was kinda ruined, but I figured that if I put an A/N at the beginning say \'Don\'t scroll down until right at the end!!\' it would 1) Ruin the element of surprise and 2) People would immediately scroll down!! Aw, I know, war and life can be so unfair... Wow, I\'m so pleased this got on your favourites! *Beams!* Wow (again!) - this was recommended on the forums? *Beams some more!* Thanks, I\'ll have to check that out! Yes, I\'m sorry, but this is where it ends - it has to give way for your imagination! Thanks for reviewing!
Now I'm just depressed. Ah. Pah. The whole concept of Harry committing suicide makes me sad. I really feel for Ginny in this one. You've got great description of her emotions and great transitions from memory to memory. I feel as though you could've lead up to the suicide a bit more so that when it hits, the readers will have lots of emotion to spill out. I'm not sure how I'd do something like that, but I suppose what I'm trying to say is give the readers some time to get emotional. That's it.
Very well written and I'm glad that I read it.
Author's Response: Thanks for your kind words, Lainie! I\'m glad that you liked it. I know what you mean about leading to the suicide a bit more so the readers get emotional. I wasn\'t too sure of how to write it, though, so I decided to leave it as a passing detail. But thanks anyway, I\'ll keep that in mind if I ever write another fic involving something like this. :)
Oooh don't leave me in suspense! Nice job so far, keep going!
Author's Response: Teehee - I\'m evil! I\'ve just sent chapter 3 to my beta, so hopefully it will be up fairly soon!
Awww how sweet! I really enjoyed reading this fic. It's interesting, because I never really stepped into Luna's shoes very often. It's also very interesting that you don't think her father was bonkers either, and your story provided a very good explanation of why some people ... can do wacky things. That's so adorble.. and it certainly explains a lot.
As you might know, I'm reading this as an assignment for Flourish & Blotts class (summer school at the beta boards!), and it didn't feel like homework at all.
One tiny little thing though:
"...and lost himself inside the world of books that he did not notice time tick by.
After what seemed like ages to Marvin, Luna appeared by his side.."
You contradicted yourself there.. he didn't notice the time going by.. and then, what seemed like forever? =P
Good job writing this. It was a good read. =)
Author's Response: Lainie, thanks a lot for taking the time to review. It means a lot when I see a reviewer taking time to offer concrit.
Thanks for pointing out that time issue, I\'ll fix it ASAP.
Thanks again for the wonderful review!
Oh my god, dontttt leaveee me hanging like this!! I got so teary while reading about Ron and Hermione sacrificing themselves for Harry, oh my god, it's horrible.... I couldn't read very well because of the tears obsuring my vision! Way to leave us hanging here! I can't wait for the next update... I'm a great fan of yours and I love how this story keeps me hooked and the whole Ron and Hermioneness and Harry and Ginnyness. I love it. More please, but I shall be patient. =D
Author's Response: Next chapter is very close to being done, I want to post tonight if possible. Thanks for reading, Lainie!
Oh dear. Thank goodness the next chapter is waiting to be read. Somehow, I forgot/missed to read this chapter. Your words weaving throughout this series is absolutely perfect... if that even makes sense. I love the flow.. the suspense... and how descriptive you are.
Author's Response: It does make sense, and thanks for the great compliment! It\'s one of my most frequent comments, that I word things in an interesting way. Thanks for reading!!
Very interested to keep reading right now. This is proving to be a really good story. Very good description and the characterization of Hermione is awesome.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I actually struggled with Hermione a bit off and on, so I\'m glad to hear that!!
I think it should be in H/G and R/Hr as well. Wonderful chapter... wonderfully written, that is. I'm really looking forward to finding out how it all ends. It's been a wonderful journey reading this fan fiction by you. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for your vote! I\'m glad you liked the chapter, the ending is coming scarily fast =/
Oh god. :|:|:| I loved this chapter... it was so well-written. Many compliments to you. I really can't wait for more.
Author's Response: This chapter gave me a few headaches, so I\'m glad to hear that! Battle scenes are alot more difficult to write than one would think. Again, thanks for reading, dear!!
The idea of the window in the closet for Fred and George was hilarious!
Awww Ron and Hermione kissing.. I love how you described it from both points of view - now it's not so confusing to me. (Normally, it's battles I don't get.... just my little thing though).
Reading about Ron and Hermione makes me squirm inside - and a good thing. I love your writing style and I'm going to submit this review and read more. :)
Author's Response: Hooray!! Your reviews make me happy =) Glad you liked the window, somehow it seemed so fitting of Fred and George...I hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters I have posted! Hopefully chapter 7 will be up soon!
Aw, don't stop there. It's too exciting to keep the chapter relatively short (I'm only saying because I want more haha). I'm looking forward to the next chapter - and I hope to find out where the others are too.
Hermione and Ron are so sweet. It's so sad that if they die, they've hardly been together romantically.
Author's Response: I know! That\'s what keeps me confident that Jo won\'t kill either of them in the last book, cuz they have to experience the relationship fully. She wouldn\'t bring us this far and then leave us hanging, right? Right?? Hmmm.... Yea, I know it was a short chapter, but it needed to end there. Thanks for reading!!
Heh, I accidently skipped reading this chapter... but it still made sense to me. I'm very much looking forward to reading more. :)
Author's Response: Glad you saw it!