Hello. :) I'm eighteen years old, but unfortunately I haven't written fan fiction since I was fifteen or sixteen. I'm usually very much inspired by the events happening in my real life, and sometimes it gets woven into what I write. It amuses me greatly that there are certain things I have somehow predicted in my writing without knowing... I've noticed this while re-reading "Questioning Fate" for the first time in years. I find writing very therapeutic and a great creative outlet for me... however, lately I find myself more likely to draw or paint than write something worth showing others.
I hope you enjoy reading my fan fiction. :)
~ Lainie xox ~
I've noticed that your spelling of "disclaimor" is wrong.. according to my dictionary at least. "Disclaimer"? Just a minor thing that I wanted to point out because I find nothing else I can help you with ... you're very talented at this.
“What’s mine is yours,” he whispered softly.
Cue: Collective "AWWWW"
I'm really excited about where this is heading too. This is proving to be an awesome read.
Author's Response: Hahaha, man how did I miss that? My spell check (for one reason or another) thinks that \"disclaimor\" is a word and never caught it. Thanks for pointing that out!! Thanks for the compliment! It really means alot, and the collective aww statement made me lol =D
Awww, now I have to wait for another chapter..
The last paragraph was amazing. I love Ron and Hermione things, and you write them very nicely.
The story is really developing from here and I really can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Again, thanks and I love your reviews =) Chapter seven has been in queue for quite some time, so I\'m hoping it will post any time now.
Awww, now I have to wait for another chapter..
The last paragraph was amazing. I love Ron and Hermione things, and you write them very nicely.
The story is really developing from here and I really can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Double post!
Awww, now I have to wait for another chapter..
The last paragraph was amazing. I love Ron and Hermione things, and you write them very nicely.
The story is really developing from here and I really can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Triple post!!!!
I'm an obsessive R/Hr shipper as well! So far you have a really breathtaking start. Lots of things have been happening, and I like the way you flashback as the characters are trying to figure out what has happened - it keeps me on edge, piecing everything together. I find it slightly confusing that sometimes the story goes back and forth from time to time - it's a little hard to keep track and backtrack (but I can see how there isn't another way to do this).
I really like all the Ron and Hermione bits and pieces here and there - very cute and charming. Makes me wish I had a romance like that. = P
I don't know what to suggest yet, but keep up the awesome writing! :) A good read so far.
Author's Response: Hi Lainie! I suppose it might be difficult to follow the different parts. Since I know the story, I guess I take that a little for granted! It gets a little easier as you move along, I think, because the events aren\'t quite as scattered. Thanks for reading!
I absolutely adore your ending. It is perfect. The wording, the mood and atmosphere you created. I love how your title goes with every chapter, and how you used it in your ending. Sometimes I'd find a great story but I find it hard to remember the title because it doesn't fit neatly with story.. I like how yours does.
I have to say that I was a bit confused with the beginning. I thought Hermione died, and then I started wondering why Ron wasn't feeling grief normally associated with a "love"... but that cleared up towards the end when he went to his father. Perhaps it was more of my lack of understanding that's at fault.
I wish I could capture all the emotions I was going through when I was reading this story. Suspense, heartbreak, fear... raw emotion. It reminded me how much I love fantasy and how much I love Ron and Hermione. The intensity of this story aided their love very well... and it made me feel for them so very much and crave for the same kind of emotion in my life.
Thank you very much for writing this fic. I would love to see more Ron and Hermione because with you, it's not cliched - and that seems to be very hard to do with R/Hr these days (it's so popular!). I haven't been reading fan fiction in a while because you haven't been updating, but I don't blame you. I have so much schoolwork and things to do in real life that I also feel like time is a blessing... I've also been losing hope in my writing lately.. but hopefully within time I'll get back. You've inspired me.
Good luck with future fics! I'm really looking forward to them... and I'll be sure to read this fic over again to absorb everything (for my memory) when I have more time. :)
Wow, my formatting messed up as well. For me, somehow lots of space came between each paragraph.. I was so annoyed having it rejected and having to re-submit it. It's finally up now though.
I really enjoyed this chapter. You write Ron and Hermione so well, and I still absolutely love that bird attack thing. I really can't wait to find out more about everyone else and where they are! Keep up the awesome work. :)
Author's Response: Every time you edit your chapter, an extra space is added between the paragraphs. I didn\'t think mine had done it, but I suppose it must have =) Thanks for reading! Working diligently to update all my stories as we speak.
"Goyle looked somewhat abashed, his face folding up in what might have been considered sorrow, or perhaps he only had to sneeze, and started to take the cup away." I had to laugh at this, I could picture it vividly in my mind and it was such a comical picture of the classic "Goyle-being-stupid" moment.
Wow, I have to say that's the first thing that crossed my mind when I finished reading this fic! It's amazing, what you come up with... I've never thought so much about Draco in my life, and this proves that you know his character extremely well!
You had excellent description that created vivid images in my mind, and kept me hooked all the way through! I wish you good luck in the challenge, and I think you will do well. Go Hufflepuff! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the compliments. I liked the Goyle being stupid moment too, I needed something to keep it light and happy :-) I love Draco, so if I could make at least one person reconsider their judgement it would make me happy! Thanks again and badgers for the cup!
Here is the story of Edward John Hoe, ex-Seeker of the English Quidditch team.
As a boy, I was an idiot. I am dropping my ego in saying this, because it is true. I was an idiot because I almost got taken in by Shirley. Shirley is the woman who almost ruined my life. But I didn’t let her. I won our pathetic little contest in the end.
That was an amazing entry to the contest! I think the judges (or whoever) will really like it. I haven't read any of the other submissions, but this sounds really hard to compete against.
You have extremely good use of vocabulary... lots of really good description appealing to the senses. Awesome job.
I think that lengthy author's note is needed. Not that your writing is confusing... writing it in first person is really effective to get to know how he thinks, and the note clarifies it for people (like me) who are intrigued by why he was acting the way he was. :)
I'm guessing you know a lot of about psychology... it's interesting.
Amazing job. He says he's not good at telling stories, but he is. Good luck with the contest (I was planning to write something, but mine isn't good enough after reading this.)
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you like this story! But please do enter! I always say that if you think your work is good, it is. Have confidence! I\'m certain there are scores of out-of-this-world stories in the queue, but I still wanted to enter for my house... anyway, thanks again! :)
It was your summary that really drew me in. I've seen your banner around on the forums, and it looked really good as well. :) But the summary, wow, I just had to find out what was going to happen. The storyline is shocking, and I'm very impressed with how you made it beleiveable even though it is an alternate universe fic.
I have to say that the starting was really the best part. Each time I heard of a death it made me sad, and I can feel the emotion come out from within me. The whole introduction carried the rest of the story well.
Just to be picky, I'm going mention that since Harry is half-blood, and Ginny is pure, wouldn't Jacob be three-quarter blood? I'm not quite sure how that works, though.
You've come up with a really interesting concept and it'd be even more interesting if you followed it through and maybe created a longer story to it. What would happen with Jacob as the "chosen one" and will history just keep repeating itself? Those are just ideas.
I really enjoyed reading your fic though, even though I am being critical. I hope thats very obvious from this review. =)
Author's Response: I\'m glad you enjoyed it! Yes, my wonderful banner for this story was made by kitkat2010. She\'s awesome!
Yes! I\'m so glad that it was believable! That\'s what I was going for. And about the blood thing, that was my biggest problem as well. I asked around the forum for a few days and they said that Jacob would just be considered Half-blood. And I was glad because that worked better for my story anyway.
No, it\'s fine! I like critical reviews.
"I black figure descended on her from the darkness, moving as though it had been startled by her arrival."
I think you meant "A black figure".
This fic is not like other that I've read before. I'm very impressed with the story you came up with from what you know about Severus - and it explains a lot. The description you used (especially in the beginning) was very good, and I really liked the flow of this fic as it kept me on edge.
This was extremely well-written. I'm really glad that I got to read this -- I'm really enjoying your fics in general too. =) Nice job.
Author's Response: Even after proof-reading 30 times, I STILL missed something!! Thanks for pointing that out and for reading!!
Aawwww. That was good! I haven't read anything humourous in a while, and yours was just great.
One nitpicky thing though.. wasn't it due at midnight on Friday.. so well, it depends on how you define it I guess. And depends on how teachers seriously mean "at midnight". Hah.
Very good read indeed. I loved your easy description, great characterization (especially of Ron), and how everything looks like you did it quite effortlessly. =)
Author's Response: Ah I was trying my hardest to show how ridiculous Snape was to expect an essay at midnight :)
I find Ron the easiest to characterize. Glad to know I can do so relatively well!
I am so happy this finally got accepted! Great job Manda, I'm so proud of you - you never even thought of giving up!! You know what I thought about this fic - it's a really good idea, and really interesting to read about what you think is going to happen in the end of the series. Keep up the awesome work!