07/19/06
I love to write. I also love Harry Potter, so the two blend together beautifully, don't they?
My James/Lily fic, Never Too Late For Love, is up!
And now my chaptered project Al Potter, Chapter 1 is up as well. =)
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Albus Potter and the Flamel File by OHara
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: In 2017, the Wizarding World seems peaceful and safe. Voldemort is long dead and the Death Eaters wiped out or imprisoned.
Albus Potter is eleven and just beginning his first year at Hogwarts. With the help of his big extended family, he navigates the new and exciting world of magic.
But there are challenges on the horizon and the most dangerous is coming from a shadowy group that is hunting something called the Flamel File. . . .
Year One begins.
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 5: In The Forbidden Forest
I liked the car reference, and the Care of Magical Creatures Class was pretty original. I find that you're making the characters older than their years, though- they're eleven, too young to r doing the DA. Harry was 15. They talk older, and do more advanced spells- for example, they don't do color spells until sixth year. Apart from that, I liked this chapter.
Author's Response: Even when I was writing the story, I kind of struggled with writing the characters as eleven, since I wanted a slightly more mature cast to work with. You're right, they probably are a bit too old for their ages.
Date: 06/02/11 Title: Chapter 6: The Life and Legacy of Nicolas Flamel
I saw someone else said they liked the description of Hagrid's hut- same for me, that was good.
The entire chapter I kept thinking "Wow, it's like Harry arguing a point and Hermione and Ron being skeptical as in the sixth book." It's a little repetitive.
I liked how Scorpius came along to Hagrid's hut. Al had said he'd be Scorpius' friend, but he hadn't acted like that before now.
Author's Response: Again, I seriously don't even remember what happened in this chapter, which is pretty bad, since I'm the one who wrote it!
Author's Response: Again, I seriously don't even remember what happened in this chapter, which is pretty bad, since I'm the one who wrote it!
Date: 06/03/11 Title: Chapter 7: The Inferi
Wow, thrilling chapter! I can't believe you ended it in the middle of the battle sequence! I was kinda bored, but all of a sudden- wow, well written. It wasn't an anticlimax, either. Well done. I was especially impressed with Al's ability to clear his mind and fire some spells at the Inferi. Although, Inferi can't wield wands, they are no longer living therefore don't have magic to use. They're kinda just zombies.
I think you're pretty close to spot on in this chapter, though. Harry saying that the country was getting lazy sounds very accurate for this time frame- 20 years without a war, Dark wizards apparently gone, it makes sense for this to happen. I also liked that Harry approved of the DA.
By the way, if Al's in his first year of Hogwarts the year is 2015, almost 2016, not 2017.
I was confused that Scorpius stayed at school. He has a home family and it doesn't make sense that he would remain at school for the holidays. I was sort of hoping Al would invite him to come over, but you haven't done much to get their friendship rolling.
Can't wait to find out what happened in the next chapter!
Author's Response: I knew I wanted a mid-story battle scene to keep the pace going and kick-start the story. I thought using Inferi would be cool, but again, this is another place where the characters' ages restrict me a bit. They can't be out on the front lines fighting, so I have to have them hiding in the back. As for Scorpius, I think that him staying at Hogwarts was a clue to some future plot point (which I have now forgotten, natch). Nice catch on the dates, too; I bet that was a flub.
Date: 06/03/11 Title: Chapter 8: Christmas Day
I couldn't help feeling a bit of anticlimax from the last chapter to this one. The action sequence was kind of short. However, it was a good transition chapter. I'm glad you addressed the issue with the Inferi doing magic. I'm left on tenterhooks wondering what is going on, and I'm hoping you don't expect Al to be handling this.. I know this is sort of his story, but he's only 11 and I think that can be forgotten too easily. That being said, I'm definitely interested and can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: You know, I remember not even much liking this chapter when I was writing it. I would have liked a crazier action scene, but I didn't want to push the boundaries of plausibility too far. This one is definitely light on plot.
Date: 06/03/11 Title: Chapter 9: Gryffindor versus Slytherin
Well, that was pretty good, but i think you have big issues keeping it at their age level. First years can't duel and do spells like that. What's more, they aren't going to try it. It was a little ridiculous, because it was a very close game, and not an embarrassing loss on Slytherin's side. It wasn't even for the House cup, so it shouldn't have evoked such a reaction.
That being said, it was definitely interesting! They're going to the Headmaster, cool. I can't wait to read about it, although it looks like you aren't writing anymore. That's unfortunate. Haha, you'll have a lot of reviews from me next time you log on. I hope they were helpful.
Author's Response:
See, here I am trying to get some action brewing again! I thought this wasn't too wildly unrealistic because even young first years have a few really simple spells that can be used for duelling (remember "The Midnight Duel" in SS, when Ron says Harry and Draco will be able to shoot sparks at each other?). I also thought that it was somewhat plausible that preteens could get pretty angry at each other over the result of a game, even if it wouldn't make sense to more mature kids. I've seen it happen! :)
Anyway, your reviews were indeed VERY helpful and I'm glad to get somebody's detailed opinion on this story! Unfortunately, you're right, I probably will not be continuing it in the future. I've already kind of forgotten where I was going with it, and I just don't have that kind of time on my hands any more. Thanks so much for taking the time to tell me what you thought of it!
Loved and Lost by coolh5000
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •
Summary: Sitting in his History of Magic lesson in mid-June, Sixth-year Teddy Lupin has a sudden feeling of unease. Unable to explain it, he pushes the feeling aside, but can't seem to shake the idea that something has gone seriously wrong. Only later that evening does he finally find out what, and then his world changes forever.
This was written for SPEW 007 with the prompt, 'ache' This is quite an angsty one-shot - you have been warned!
Date: 12/24/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I think you wrote this story well and quite deserve that blue ribbon!
When Moody's Eyeball Popped Out by DragonDi
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Remus tries to make sense of a mission gone wrong by asking Sirius about it. Bad idea. Very, very bad idea.
Date: 06/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
LOL I like, I like =]
Author's Response: Sorry It's taken me so long to respond! I don't know how I missed this!
I'm glad you liked my story--and thank you so much for letting me know you liked it!
The Trials of Severus Snape by KarasAunty
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
PoA era: Severus Snape takes a thoughtful stroll down Diagon Alley at the start of the Christmas holidays, but it soon turns into a quite a harrowing ordeal for our favourite Potions Master... UK English. Contains some dark humour. You have been warned!
Characters: Severus Snape, Fred Weasley, George Weasley, Ginny Weasley, Molly Weasley, Percy Weasley and (very) minor OC's.
Date: 06/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: The Trials of Severus Snape
Ahahaha, this is brilliant! you do Snape excellently, by the way. Very funny, I enjoyed it a lot. I liked how you expressed Snape's thoughts on all the different people in his life. The "Professor...' "Snape.." thing was also epic =D
Author's Response:
Hello thesmart1,
so sorry it's taken so long to reply, but I've been having technical problems with my computer, then trying to access the site (nightmare).
I'm thrilled you liked Snape's internal monologue so much! I'd never written him before, though I'd read a lot of fanfics with him featured. But I'd never read a humorous one from his pov, and the thought of crawling inside his mind and getting his opinions on his peers (and students) was too irrisistible! Of course, adding the Diseasley twins was a must. I imagine they really got up his (enormous) nose in class, what with their pranking and smart mouths!
Thanks very much for R & R-ing,
Kara's Aunty :)
I Will Survive by KarasAunty
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: CoS era: Ron meets Aragog and his charming family when Harry drags him along for a visit - and he is afraid. Very afraid... A hopefully humorous songfic from Ron's PoV, inspired by the Gloria Gaynor song of the same name.
Date: 10/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: I Will Survive
The mental images this brought to mind made me laugh hysterically :D I'm impressed, lol I was singing the lyrics in my head as I read, and they are quite good. Good job!!
Author's Response: Hello the smart1,
brilliant pen-name, btw!
I'm chuffed to bits you like my version of Ms Gaynor's classic tune - or should I say RONs version? For me, his encounter with the Acromuntulae is one of the best parts of CoS, and I simply couldn't resist dedicating a little ode to the spider scene (and especially Ron's reaction to said spiders).
So glad you enjoyed, and thanks for R & R-ing,
Kara's Aunty ;)
Fascinating Facts About Scorpius Malfoy by Kerichi
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
Rose used a blank journal to list practical information about the boy she intended to bring home for holiday and pass off as her boyfriend: Scorpius’ favourite colour, his favourite food. As their pretend relationship became real, the entries became longer and more intimate. And then one day—to her horror—she misplaced the journal.
Date: 01/01/11 Title: Chapter 1: Lessons Learned
Awwe, this was sweet :)
Author's Response: Thank you! Some people may think Slytherin and sweet are contradictions in terms, but when it's the right guy and girl, romance is sweet. :)
An Aversion to Change - Alternate Ending by Misdemeanor1331
Rated: 6th-7th Years •Summary: For those of you who won't be reading the sequel, or for those of you who are but don't like it, or maybe even for those reading the sequel and enjoying it, but interested to see what else I came up with.
Date: 12/21/10 Title: Chapter 1: An Aversion to Change - Alternate Ending
Okay, I don't hate you anymore. Why didn't you use this ending? It would have spared me a lot of rage and tears.
Author's Response: Ah, because this wouldn't have allowed for such a fun sequel! :)
"This Magic Moment" by type-n-shadow
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: [He] walked a little taller that day. We had to tip our hats to him. He was lucky she hadn't beat the crap out of him. We wouldn't have blamed her. What he'd done was sneaky, rotten and low... and cool. Not another one among us would've ever in a million years... even for a million dollars had the guts to put the move on the lifeguard. He did. He had kissed a woman, and he had kissed her long and good. - The Sandlot
Date: 06/16/10 Title: Chapter 1: "While Your Lips are Close to Mine..."
Eh, your urge to get me to write a review was enough. Well! that was funny haha =] I quite liked it. Good job
A Tale of Six Perspectives by hestiajones
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: The whoosh of a speeding Bludger was followed by the scream of a female voice.
Slytherin Chaser Armis Berkley was knocked off her broom, and she fell through the air.
James Potter, Gryffindor Chaser, gripped his broom and sped towards the falling body, even though he knew he’d never reach her in time.
Severus Snape blanched. Berkley always pestered him in the common room, asking him to help her with Charms homework.
Sirius Orion Black jumped up from his seat as the rest of the spectators did. A single obscene curse escaped his lips.
Peter Pettigrew prayed. Dear God, please don’t…no…no…
Lily Evans gasped as an odd monotonous sound rang in her ears.
Remus John Lupin shuddered involuntarily. DUMBLEDORE!
This is hestiajones of Hufflepuff writing for the final in the MWPP class on the Beta Boards. This story has just been nominated for a QSQ in the Best Marauder Era category. :D Thanks!
DISCLAIMER: So not J.K.Rowling.
Date: 01/01/11 Title: Chapter 1: Six Perspectives
That was good! It captured the personalities of all the characters perfectly, except maybe Remus. I thought the ending was quite abrupt, although that's just my reaction. It seemed to me Remus was in the middle of his revelation when you wrapped it up. It was really good, don't get me wrong, but if I had to pick something to nitpick, that would be it.
Author's Response: Ahhh...Remus. See, that's exactly how I feel about his part. I was aware of it while writing it, too, but there is no other way I could have written it. I didn't want to explain Remus' tragedy in detail.
Dust in the Wind by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
Dominique Weasley took a summer job at Weasleys Wizarding Wheezes with the hope to stake her first claim of independence. All she really wanted was to be able to pay for her Yule Ball gown on her own, but one fateful day, someone strolled into the shop and turned her world upside down.
Scorpius Malfoy was sweet, confident, and completely gorgeous, but Dominique knew that he was off-limits as her cousin’s ex-boyfriend. The more she tried to push him away, though, the more she questioned her resolve to do the right thing.
This is ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor of Ravenclaw House, and this is my submission for the Fiction Junction ‘I Challenge Thee’ prompt
Date: 10/11/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dust in the Wind
Amazing. *tear
Author's Response:
Thank you. :D
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Have a lovely day.
~Jess
A Little Late by OkiBlossom
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary: Remus has a one-on-one conversation with Lily on her wedding day. He experiences a moment of realisation. He walks through a sudden epiphany.
For my beautiful, youthful Julia, who held my hand through hell. Words will never be enough.
I am Kuri (Okiblossom) of Ravenclaw, and this is my entry for the February Love Challenge - in the Surprise Love category - in the Great Hall. This is in the MNFF Beta Boards Forum. NOTE: I have no talent that compares to JKR or any other author for that matter.
Liked it? Hated it? Please read and review.
Date: 12/25/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: A Little Late
Aweh, thats so sweet :)
These Games We Play by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary:
Certain rules exist between friends and family, one of which is never dating someone’s ex-boyfriend. However, unfortunately for Dominique Weasley, Scorpius Malfoy has seen fit to test her resolve to not cross that line. Could she bring herself to break that taboo?
Lily Potter was nice, but she just couldn’t hold a candle to her vixen of a cousin, Dominique. Scorpius knew who he wanted, but did he have what it took to go and get her?
This story is written as a parallel to my fic, Dust in the Wind. All events from that story are written in the opposing point of view, plus more of the back story and after story are explored.
Date: 10/13/10 Title: Chapter 1: Dansons
Aweh! *sniffle* I love it! When I discovered this after reading Dust in the Wind it was like a surprise gift! Very good job and did I say I love it :-)
Author's Response:
Why thank you. After I had written Dust in the Wind, my reviewers demanded that I somehow vindicate Scorpius of being a cad and not worthy of Dom. This is how it came out.
Thank you for the review, and have a lovely day. :D
~Jess
Cut by hestiajones
Rated: 3rd-5th Years •Summary: She thought having her hair cut would make a difference. Unfortunately, she was right.
Warning: This story is originally rated 6th-7th year for language and sexual situations. The rating has been changed temporarily only because we're having some technical problem with stories that have higher ratings. So, please click at your own discretion.
Thanks to Carole for her excellent Brit-picking, sentences (heehee), and summary. Thanks also to Gina for agreeing to read through this, for all her suggestions and comments. And finally, to Kara and Lea for their support and encouragement.
DISCLAIMER: This isn’t J.K Rowling. This is a fanfic writer on a mission to submit to every category available on the archives.
Nominated for a QSQ in the Same Sex Pairing category.
Date: 06/09/11 Title: Chapter 1: Cut
Well written!
Author's Response: Thanks! :)
Catharsis by ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Rated: 1st-2nd Years •Summary:
A war had raged; everyone had felt alone and afraid at some point. And when it was over, most people went back to business as usual, but two of those haunted souls found respite from the most unlikely of sources.
After all, who doesn't need a little bit of catharsis?
Date: 12/18/10 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Any pairing with Draco I tend to like but I really like this one. I'm utterly furious you didn't get them together at the end though! *tear* :)
Author's Response:
You know, I really don't think they could have ever worked as a pairing. Certainly, Draco marrying a friend of the wizard world's saviour would have bought his family a lot of good will, but I don't think the Malfoys would have ever allowed him to 'stoop that low'. Not that I think Katie's low, since she's one of my favourite characters, but that she fought on the other side woiuld really stick in their craw.
Thanks for the review, and I'm glad you liked it. :D
~Jess