Well done. Very emotional. It all most made me cry. I loved it. I have always believed that there had to be some good in Tom. I think the way you portrayed him was very realistic. I loved how you put so much detail into your descriptions. I can see why you like this story so much. Well done!

-Jenn

Author's Response: Ah, thank you very, very much! It\'s great to know that you enjoyed it so much :) Well, you obviously know that I believe that, too ;) This story is special for me. I do hope that the next things I write will outdo this one though; it\'ll let me know I\'ve improved. Thanks for reviewing :D

I absolutly loved the ending! Very suspensful. Hermione seems a bit OOC though, and it's a tad bit cliché for her to be so emotional over Ron. Overall though, great chapter! I can't wait to read more. :)

Author's Response: I was hoping the ending would grab the readers\' attention :D There\'ll be more about that in the next chapter... OOC? Hmpff... that\'s what I was afraid of. Yet, I can\'t say I totally agree with you. I\'ve always been reticent of that scene, but somehow, I do imagine Hermione feeling that for Ron, although only, and I underline \'only\', when she is alone. Why? Because she hasn\'t come to terms with those feelings yet. However, I\'ll take your opinion into account for future chapters! I rewrote the third chapter for the same reason, although that was some time ago :) Thank you for reviewing, and hopefully, you\'ll be seeing next chapter really soon!

Hey! Nice job so far, aside from a few minor grammar mistakes and a non-British spelling (it's "realised" not "realized.). I liked your descriptions and the overall mood of the chapter. Well, on to the next! (By the way, strange review Zacko.)

Author's Response: Hi, Jenn :D I\'m quite glad to see you here ;) Oh, yes. I\'m always lame when it comes to \'\'s\'\' and \'\'z\'\' for british spelling :/ I hope you enjoyed it! (and yes, it is a strange review, heh)

Hey Phil, it's Jenn :). I just read chapter one again and I still like it just as much as when I beta-ed for it. I'm working on chapter 4, and I can't wait to see chapter 3 up!

-Jenn

lol, The Mrs. Weasley thing was my fault. I told her that it might be slightly OOC for Mrs. Weasley to act that way. After all, Harry is like a son to her too, right? Sorry.

Author's Response: Don\'t worry, I think you made it better. I do think that the way I had it was slightly OOC, but I do think that I should have kept it in there, just cleared it up some or something.

Sorry Scmerg, it will probably be disappointing for you to see that you have 2 new reviews and come to see that it's just this nonsense.

Justin time, that was cold. It is not your job to tell her whether or not it's acceptable to review her own story. There is nothing wrong with it. What IS frowned upon by the site is making rude remarks such as that one. Next time, if you are going to review someone's story, make sure you've actaully read the story and have something to say about it. Thanks.

Author's Response: It\'s okay. It was stupid of me to post the review!

I think you did a good job capturing Ginny’s emotions throughout the fic. They were powerful and deep, and I can definitely see Ginny thinking these things about Harry. However, there are a few things that need improvement.

There were a few grammar and punctuation mistakes, and I would suggest finding a beta on the forums or at PI. They help greatly. I also think that you should work on your descriptions a bit, perhaps put in a bit more detail.

Here is something that I found in the first paragraph. [I]“Everyone else sees you the same way and like you.”[/I] It think it would sound better if it were something like this: [I]Everyone else sees you the same way, and yet they still like you.”[/I] But that’s just my opinion.

The one line of the second paragraph is: [I]But not like me. Not how I do.[/I] I think it would sound better if it were: [I]But not like me. Not the way I do.[/I]

These are just a few. There were also some formatting errors.

I think that you have potential as an author, though. The story was interesting to read and caught my attention. I think you should write more Harry Ginny romances, because I’m interested to see what you can to with their relationship. You are good at characterization and tapping into the thoughts and emotions of characters. I also liked the ending.

[I] I hate it how you don’t understand it. I hate it how you don’t understand me. But, most of all, I hate how I’ve tried, tried to kid myself. Tried to pretend. But I can’t hide it anymore.

I hate you because I can’t.[/I]

This was a great way to wrap up the story because it reveals a lot about what Ginny was thinking throughout the fic. Nicely done.

Author's Response: Wow...... I didn\'t realize I made that many mistakes so thank you very much for the corrections. Now that I\'ve re-read the story it sounds better with your suggestions than the original. I\'m definetly working on more H/G romances but right now I\'m trying to get some R/Hr ones on the site. Thank you for the kind critisizm

Hi Lindsey! Sorry it took a while to post this review. I've been rather lazy of late, to be honest.

Nice job on the story. I enjoyed reading it. Ron and Hermione were very well-characterised and I think their jobs suit them well. However, one thing I noticed was an overuse of commas. Just something to watch out for in the future. There were also a few dialogue errors. Still, I think you did a good job.

One other thing I would like to see in your writing is a bit more detail. I would have liked to see Ron and Hermione while they were trading in their possessions to buy Christmas presents for each other and how they felt about it. Also a bit more insight into their emotions through the rest of the story as well and perhaps a bit more description.

Nice job on the story and I'm looking foward to reading more from you! :)

~Jenn

Author's Response: *giggles* Hi Jenn! *waves* Okay, I understand about the dialogue. I\'ll look back on it too, eventually, because I\'m being lazy too. It\'s the Christmas holidays for me until...er-Wednesday. *groans* I\'ll hopefully go back and fix some things by then. Thanks for your help and your lovely review, buddy!! ~Lindsey :)

Very well done. I enjoyed this story quite a bit. Your writing style is simply marvelous. Your descriptions are chilling and the story was very believable and well thought out. I would like to know more about these Deathly Hallows. It almost makes me wish it was a chaptered fic.

One thing that I did notice throughout the story is a few dialogue errors. For example:

“I promise.” she said casually, not taking an eye off her sister sitting across from her.

should be:

“I promise,” she said casually, not taking an eye off her sister sitting across from her.



“That’s better. Come in.” her sister said promptly, ushering her in.

should be:

“That’s better. Come in,” her sister said promptly, ushering her in.


and


“No,!” yelled Cassandra.

Should be:

“No!” yelled Cassandra.


Other than that, it really was a marvelous story. It had me intrigued and eager to keep reading. You did a splendid job!

Author's Response: *blushes* I\'m really flattered. The idea for the Deathly Hallows came while I was watching this Johnny Depp movie called Sleepy Hollow. I thought of something really dark and scary and I came up with the idea for a forest.

Oh, how sad! Wonderful job. Very powerful and emotional! It summerizes very well the tragedy of Dumbledores death and his character flaw of trusting people too easily. The last two lines excellent and nearly brought me to tears. Lovely!